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Penname: Daylen [Contact]
Real name: Daniel
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Member Since: March 01, 2009
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Mid-30s guy with an addiction for fan fiction presently, and a slew of unfinished writing in my file cabinet and computer that I never seem to manage to complete full stories. Plots and bits and pieces, sure, but start-to-finish stories still elude me.


Aside from that I'm always over-thinking things, have a science background but love my fiction books... and I guess I'm a twi-guy being here as much as I am lately :S (I own the series and The Host as well). Also a fan of David Eddings and Clive Cussler.


Just starting an Education degree that'll eventually send me out to Middle and Secondary schools to teach math and science (mostly biology, probably).


Oh and my friends just gave me an Edward doll from the Barbie range (he sparkles! lol they didn't realise it at the time either) My Twi-diction is kind of a running joke for them, but their nice enough about it :)


 


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Reviews by Daylen
 
Summary: Feature

 

While hunting one afternoon, Emmett, Jasper and Carlisle stumble upon what appears to be a corpse.  When they learn it's a severely broken vampire, they take him home to do what they can to help.  But of course, fate has plans for this man.  Canon Couples.  AU.  DARK Themes.


Categories: AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 32 Completed: Yes Word count: 158872
[Report This] Published: February 26, 2009 Updated: October 31, 2011


Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: May 14, 2009 Title: Chapter 16: The Dance

aww Edward & Bella slow dancing to music only they can hear hehe :)

A shame it's about to go pear shaped on them :S

Looking forward to finding out what the Volturi are up to...



Author's Response:

Tis a shame.. we'll see what happens :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 07, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: The Exam

It's reading well so far - and I definitely want to hear more :)

Looking forward to hearing more about Bella's efforts to get the tortured soul to open up.

 



Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing ;)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 09, 2009 Title: Chapter 5: The Next Day

it's such an interesting variation - can't wait to read more :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 12, 2009 Title: Chapter 6: The Pillow

I'm enjoying the development of the story and looking forward to more - good luck on your finals and have fun on the vacation :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 19, 2009 Title: Chapter 7: The Venom

sigh... not to de-value the depth of the plot or anything right now because I am definitely following this story with interest, but it's a shame "Edward" wasn't in a condition to really enjoy a spongebath from Bella :)

Looking forward to the unfolding story :)



Author's Response:

LoL, I feel your pain.

 

Maybe one day Bella will revisit this????

 

Thanks for reviewing,

- Michelle

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 24, 2009 Title: Chapter 8: The Trial

science grad here and it's making sense enough for the purposes of a story - I wouldn't worry about any errors... Star Trek etc is rife with them and it's never slowed them down ;)

Just waiting for our vamp to try some kind of real communication at some point



Author's Response:

Meh, if I'm going to go out there and bring science in, I try to make sure I have it as right as I'm capable of having it...

and.. He's getting there!

He's getting there...

Thanks for reviewing :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 29, 2009 Title: Chapter 9: The Antidote

umm something of a confusing transition there at the end?? You went from Bella comforting the vampire just after he'd swallowed the second antidote to some kind of confrontation where she's trying to keep between him and possible danger... and he's suddenly active...

It was a good chapter through most of it - just felt a little stilted in that last part - guess I'll wait and see what happens next and how it was supposed to "fit" :)



Author's Response:

Heh. Heh. Hehh.. yeah, it was a choppy transition. I'll address it next chapter; I'm sorry that it detracted from the rest of it for you;

Thanks for reviewing, glad that you enjoyed (most) of this chapter :)

 - Michelle

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: April 03, 2009 Title: Chapter 10: The Bedroom

oh I'm happy that basementward is more bedward now finally... looking forward to when he finally manages to speak... among other things ;)

Always end up feeling more sorry for Jasper out of the group, because of the gamut of emotions he keeps having to deal with from everyone.

Seriously, it's no wonder he's the guy who slips the most... I would want to kill more than a few people if I literally had to feel their daily emotions along with them :S



Author's Response:

I'm glad it worked out for oyou!

YEah, Jasper has a rough time with this, certainly. 

Someone once said it accounts for his facial expressions in the movie. To that I LOLed and agreed ;)

Thanks for reviewing

- Michelle

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: April 09, 2009 Title: Chapter 11: The Sunset

hmm if the vamp (he's not really confirmed as "Edward" yet lol) has been as maltreated as we're being led to imagine, I'd expect clothing was probably a luxury he learned to live without considering what else was happening (just assuming)

His snuggling at the end was beautiful and warm :)



Author's Response:

That's a very fair assumption, which is one of the reasons I noted for him not caring about clothes in the end notes :)

But he's clothed now, so we'll see how that goes!

Thanks for reviewing

- Michelle

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: April 14, 2009 Title: Chapter 12: The Bath

awww it's "Edward's" turn to beg Bella not to leave him :)

he'd best get to stepping too... he's got homecoming soon lol

it's good to see he's managing to recover somewhat

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: April 21, 2009 Title: Chapter 13: The Balcony

whoa - so Edward's potentially been in a cage or otherwise held captive for 90 odd years?! That's going to be one hell of a therapy bill :S

I kind of wonder now if there's likely to be a connection between what's happened to Edward and what happened to Alice leading up to her own transformation etc... the difference being she managed to escape the whole "fate" somehow.



Author's Response:

The potential is there, that is certain.

Very interesting theory! I like when people throw out things that I don't hear often!

Thanks for reviewing!

- Michelle

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: April 28, 2009 Title: Chapter 14: The Weekend

awww that chapter was choc-full of sweet moments really, even with the laptop-panic, Bella's internal thoughts as she worked through the effect it was having was insightful.

Kind of glad to see James is already out of the loop hehe though I wonder if there's going to be some kind of earlier Edward connection - we're still unaware of how Edward got to where he was when the Cullen's found him, and if there's really a secret lab that close to Forks, how's it not been noticed with all the supernatural residents around the place? :) Many more chapters to look forward to the revelations from, I guess!



Author's Response:

It was fluff! FLUFF! How nuts is that! :)

And it's true -- there's really no way he travelled there on his own, right? Interesting, indeed :)

Thanks for reviewing :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: May 05, 2009 Title: Chapter 15: The River

weeellll.... it is very surprising that he's never seen another vamp - is he fully lab created or was he bitten and then found or something?

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: May 27, 2009 Title: Chapter 17: The Party

So Bella's 'fessed up to herself... Alice 'knows' and it just remains for Edward to connect the dots on his own recovery and feelings and the two of them to go public :)

Alice's internal monologue was hilarious especially when she's trying to school her thoughts - kind of makes me wish for an EPOV on that sequence as well... although I don't know if it'd necessarily be possible for him to make that much sense internally right now.

Without Bella's quiet support, I'm guessing his mind tends to get a little unruly when he's alone.

So what happens the morning after, I wonder?

As far as the human experiments go, I've actually been wondering if the humans somehow created Edward from venom stores? It's been a while, and I don't know that I'll go back over every chapter but I don't recall a reference to the usual bite mark... although it's normally assumed, with human labs involved I thought maybe Edward wasn't the 'first'... and perhaps Alice's history is connected for that matter?

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: June 09, 2009 Title: Chapter 18: The Jump

woohoo Edward got to RUN! It's good to see that he's allowing Alice to chip away at him now :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: June 20, 2009 Title: Chapter 19: The Visit

That was a crazy-busy chapter! I guess we should all be relieved that Jane's not able to kill (as far as we know) with that ability of hers considering how trigger-happy she is with it :S

I'm releived that the visit didn't go as bad as I was "preparing" myself for :)

(ie Edward getting taken away)

Bella's arrival back to the Cullen's was the sort of thing romance movies are made for - although I feel kind of cheated of the actual "swing the girl and kiss" moment with the two of them getting drenched :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: June 30, 2009 Title: Chapter 20: The Reunion

squee! they kissed!

I'm almost surprised that Alice didn't bombard Bella immediately with questions, but I guess she was being nice and waiting for Bella's scream first hehe

sigh... you dragged out the movement so much I wanted to reach into the story world and mash their heads together sooner rather than later - nice work! :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: July 20, 2009 Title: Chapter 21: The Truth

It was kind of an odd chapter with a few half-stuttered conversations... I wonder what this Edward thinks of Bella becoming a vampire? Hopefully he won't be as against it as the canon one was? Perhaps he's even looking forward to it? :)

Hope it's not too long to the next update :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: October 31, 2009 Title: Chapter 21: The Truth

Loved it - so much crammed in and still so many other reactions to see play out!!

Looking forward to where B&E and the Cullens go next, also wondering if the long pale hair ends up being James and he actually ends up being something of a good guy for a change?

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: October 31, 2009 Title: Chapter 22: The Bracelet

wow intense and great to see Edward open up to Bella like that. As well as Bella's realisation of her future, and the whole sequence of Edward dealing with Bella's blood and allowing Carlisle to treat her :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: February 28, 2010 Title: Chapter 23: The Vision

It's great to see a new chapter after so long, hope life is treating you well though amongst all that? :)

Looks like the anxiety level just got raised a notch for everyone concerned, even people like Charlie, who's not even sure what he's worried about just yet hehe

Alice's arrival at Bella's, coupled with the dark visions, are more than a little worrying. I would've expected her to show up with a thick coat or something to cover Bella during the run, even if having the car down the street wasn't viable.

Looking forward to more, when life lets you type :)

 
Summary:

Bella takes a vacation to Hilton Head Island in South Carolina to meet Alice's new boyfriend, Jasper. Rosalie and Emmett come along, too, just in case Bella didn't feel like enough of a fifth wheel. With Jasper's roommate out of town, Bella has his nice big bed all to herself. Until Edward comes home in the middle of the night...

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Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Jacob, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: Always Human , SMUT - Best of the Best - Edward and Bella
Chapters: 36 Completed: Yes Word count: 163211
[Report This] Published: March 01, 2009 Updated: December 21, 2011


Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: April 09, 2009 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 What Got Left Behind (V)

sigh it's one thing to try using the soul mate excuse - but Sam was stringing both girls along at the same time, engaged to one, married to the other - he KNEW just like Bella told him - he should've 'fessed up a long time before Emily blew up over it

I do feel sorry for Bella though... no Pleasureward to keep her company tonight :(

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: May 25, 2009 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13 Just a Few Bones (V)

wow so it's meet the parents along with the meet the not the parents but should've been the parents lol

Looking forward to the proposal... and Bella's ongoing freakout with Edward hehe

 

 
Summary:

Edward Cullen, graduate student and Biology instructor, has a wild night with a beautiful stranger, and becomes obsessed.  Bella Swan, his student, has a crush on her teacher...  Things aren't always what they seem,and people look different in the light of day.


NC-17 for lemons, mature themes.  Canon pairings ... kinda.


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Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Aro, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, James, Jane, Jasper, Jessica, Lauren, Laurent, Mike, Rosalie, Victoria
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 21 Completed: No Word count: 75384
[Report This] Published: March 03, 2009 Updated: June 27, 2009


Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 27, 2009 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9. Bad Girlfriend

oh... I do hope that Jane isn't cruel to Bella - let her be a somewhat nice character this time around even if it makes her OOC lol

 

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: April 17, 2009 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13. Desire and Deceit

oh no he didn't! gods I hope Bella sets Edward straight quick as can be :S

 




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