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Penname: Daylen [Contact]
Real name: Daniel
Status: Member
Member Since: March 01, 2009
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Mid-30s guy with an addiction for fan fiction presently, and a slew of unfinished writing in my file cabinet and computer that I never seem to manage to complete full stories. Plots and bits and pieces, sure, but start-to-finish stories still elude me.


Aside from that I'm always over-thinking things, have a science background but love my fiction books... and I guess I'm a twi-guy being here as much as I am lately :S (I own the series and The Host as well). Also a fan of David Eddings and Clive Cussler.


Just starting an Education degree that'll eventually send me out to Middle and Secondary schools to teach math and science (mostly biology, probably).


Oh and my friends just gave me an Edward doll from the Barbie range (he sparkles! lol they didn't realise it at the time either) My Twi-diction is kind of a running joke for them, but their nice enough about it :)


 


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Reviews by Daylen
 
Summary: Feature

 

Bella begins working for the elusive and distant Edward Cullen who she discovers is hiding behind an elaborate charade to maintain his secret lifestyle. Bella is determined to find out the mysteries of Edward Cullen but with what results? AU. Mystery/Humor/Angst


Categories: AU Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 31 Completed: No Word count: 173201
[Report This] Published: February 22, 2009 Updated: December 27, 2009


Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: May 14, 2009 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

ahh Peepward makes his appearance lol

He surely can't use the 'maybe I'm the bad guy' routine this time around... he's at least attempting to be the 'balance' or something - not really the monster, nor the hero (at worst) :)

 
Summary:

Found unconscious after four years of being held captive by two nomadic vampires, Bella is rescued by three members of the Cullen family. When she awakens, the family is apalled to find how deeply she's withdrawn into the roll of an abused pet. In time, she begins to trust and find comfort again but the Cullen's worry if she will ever regain her full humanity.


Categories: AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, James, Jasper, Rosalie, Victoria
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 6 Completed: No Word count: 33925
[Report This] Published: February 23, 2009 Updated: June 04, 2009


Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: April 13, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Edward's going to really have his hands full trying to understand this Bella. Looking forward to seeing how this progresses.

 

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: April 19, 2009 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

ahhh Edward... he really does tend to go all to pieces when he can't simply read a person's thoughts and has to rely upon body language and other cues :S

Can only imagine the joint yoga lessons! :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: June 04, 2009 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

Teddybear Emmett for the win! :)

Really wanting more but real life does have to come first :)

 
Stages by bellabeth222 Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 425]
Summary:

As a college senior, Edward can't wait to graduate.  He's made some great friends but that's all.  That is until he starts paying attention to the girl down the hall, Bella.  Something terrible happened to her and he finds himself watching over her and the downward spiral that is becoming her life.  Can he help her?  Can he save her when she can't even see she needs saving.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, James, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 15 Completed: No Word count: 56056
[Report This] Published: February 23, 2009 Updated: October 31, 2009


Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: May 12, 2009 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

yay for Edward! and for Bella, too, in hopes that this at least gives her the trust she needs in him, if not to talk just yet, but at least look to him for support until she's ready.

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: May 19, 2009 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

An intense chapter and Edward's continuing a good start with the support and his reply to Bella's confession.

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: June 08, 2009 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

wonder whether there was a book and/or Bella was just not quite ready to face Edward again after the evening they'd had :)

Good to see Alice and Edward reconcile and Alice carefully reminding Edward to think about his feelings and Bella's as he tries to help her.

 



Author's Response:

If you are interested, I have a companion fic posted on Fanfiction.net called Stages: Bella's Journal.  It gives some insight into Bella's mind, but beware.  It is written in pure journal format and could be hard to follow if you haven't read Stages.  I also post to the journal after stages.  It helps with the continuity.

 

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: June 16, 2009 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

I was really starting to worry that Bella might've gone into seclusion somewhere, but I'm glad that Edward chased after her this time... they'll hopefully be more unified from this point forward and help each other deal with the events to come :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: September 01, 2009 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

uh oh... I'm more than a little worried that Bella's about to have, or already had/having another encounter with James. For all the progress that was being made, no good will come of this night from the looks of it :S (though I hope I'm wrong)

 

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: September 25, 2009 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

woohoo thanks for the new chapter! I'm so very relieved that Edward not only restrained himself from knocking anyone's heads, but managed to get his point across to Bella. that he cares deeply for her, and perhaps she can allow herself to feel loved one day  (at least I HOPE that's how she's seen it)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: November 02, 2009 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

woohoo - so happy for B&E! Whilst it's still going to be a difficult road ahead, it's good that they're going to be trying to get through it together now :)

 
Summary:

Edward is adopted by the Cullens after living a nightmare.  He meets Bella, and she tries to fight his inner monster.  AH


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Edward Masen, Sr., Elizabeth Masen, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 27 Completed: Yes Word count: 104014
[Report This] Published: February 23, 2009 Updated: April 06, 2009


Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 18, 2009 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

nice moment there with the "dream-Bella" :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 18, 2009 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

this chapter was great - deep and meaningful moments in with the fluff makes it a good connector to the story :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 20, 2009 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

I didn't find it as "too slow" it was just a nice change of pace from the last few chapters. The mysterious watcher kept it all linked with the rest of your story's drama :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 21, 2009 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

Whilst it's always annoying as hell to see characters follow through on these kind of things in stories, they are plot devices that allow you to develop the story in the first place so it's understandable in that sense.

The reality of similar situations often has the same progression unfortunately, although Edward would have been the right sort of character to break the cycle.

I'll look forward to the "happily ever after" for Edward and Bella and the rest :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 22, 2009 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

I think this is where we say "OME?!" and start hoping Edward either fights back or Alice pulls her almost-psychic-gather-the-troops move... or a combination of both.

I keep having the story replay in my head while I wait for the updates!

Talk about edge of the seat suspense :P

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 24, 2009 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22

wow - just wow - tears in the eyes in the last half there :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 26, 2009 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23

sad to read it's nearly the end... but it's been a lovely journey

Looking forward to the conclusion



Author's Response:

Thank you so much.  I'm really glad you enjoyed the journey.

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 28, 2009 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24

this has been a clever story and it's happy-sad to see it ending for now :)

As far as your possible Edward-Mike confrontation - I think your Edward would try to do something that finishes with Mike waking up to himself... I agree that he wouldn't try to go for a knock-down brawl because his whole life has been aimed at avoiding those conflicts; but handling a situation that teaches a lesson, one that actually makes an impact for the better - that's more your Ed's style.

Not really too sure how you'd do that though... maybe something around the sporting events. I do think that Bella would have a key role to play - perhaps to keep Mike from escalating whatever the confrontation is.

Anyway, it's been a great story and I'm glad you chose to share it with us! :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 29, 2009 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25

such a sweet ending - thanks for sharing the story with us :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: April 01, 2009 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26: The Alternate Ending

wow... tear-jerking and not quite a HEA ending but still very poignant

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: April 06, 2009 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27: Alternate Ending pt. 2

I enoyed the happy ending much better - I think as a brighter escape from "real life" sorts of things - but I can also appreciate the effort of the alternate ending and it certainly made the tears flow for a bit before I could type this.

I did think that with the class counsellor scene, or maybe with the kids at lunch afterwards, there was an opportunity for Bella perhaps to voice that Edward was "fearless" as her description. It was probably too corny a thing to reference the story title, but it just felt like the statement was missing from that sequence to me :S

Looking forward to the sequel/POVs that you're planning.

 

 
Readjusted by muggleinlove Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 986]
Summary:

Bella is a single mom who was jaded by her exhusband, Mike. She is struggling to put her life back on track when she meets Edward. Edward is a hot shot corporate lawyer who has sworn off love and kids. What happens when the two meet at a club?

 

Twilighted Supervisory Beta:  qjmom

Twilighted Validation Beta:  Twilightzoner


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 31 Completed: Yes Word count: 92990
[Report This] Published: February 23, 2009 Updated: July 13, 2009


Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: July 01, 2009 Title: Chapter 27: Meeting the InLaws

hrm that parental meeting went a little better than I expected to be honest.

Can't wait for the birthday party though!

I hope Charlie and Edward don't get too out of control in the presence of Mike :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: July 05, 2009 Title: Chapter 28: Matt's Birthday Party

aww Spiderman-Matt :)
so glad to see the end of Mike, more or less. I guess this will make Chicago more appealing, and make Mike's absence easier to disguise from Matt?
can't believe the story's nearly done :(

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: July 14, 2009 Title: Chapter 30: A New Beginning

hehe Matt's reaction to Edward's question was priceless "Do I have to wear this again?" hahahahah

 




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