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Penname: Daylen [Contact]
Real name: Daniel
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Mid-30s guy with an addiction for fan fiction presently, and a slew of unfinished writing in my file cabinet and computer that I never seem to manage to complete full stories. Plots and bits and pieces, sure, but start-to-finish stories still elude me.


Aside from that I'm always over-thinking things, have a science background but love my fiction books... and I guess I'm a twi-guy being here as much as I am lately :S (I own the series and The Host as well). Also a fan of David Eddings and Clive Cussler.


Just starting an Education degree that'll eventually send me out to Middle and Secondary schools to teach math and science (mostly biology, probably).


Oh and my friends just gave me an Edward doll from the Barbie range (he sparkles! lol they didn't realise it at the time either) My Twi-diction is kind of a running joke for them, but their nice enough about it :)


 


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Reviews by Daylen
 
Summary:

What if the vampire family that embraced Bella was not the Cullen's but the Denali's. After a series of tragic events, Bella is led to Denali. Despite the unpleasantness that leads to her joining their family, she eagerly accepts all the love and sense of sisterhood the Denali's offer her. Bella finds herself happier than she's ever been. But how long will that happiness last? What happens when the Cullen's come to meet the newest addition to the Denali coven?

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AU/ OOC

 

 


Categories: AU Characters: Bella
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Series: None
Chapters: 36 Completed: Yes Word count: 94495
[Report This] Published: February 17, 2010 Updated: June 27, 2010


Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 09, 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

quite remarkable, and amusing to have Bella so very fast AND be so clean after her first hunt!



Author's Response:

Yes I'm trying to make a somewhat different Bella. Thanks for the review!

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

damn - and here I expected Phil to be pairing up with Kate :S

Should be interesting to see what Bella's noticed and what she means when she says "Please"...

 



Author's Response:

lol thanks for the review!

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

well it's a relief to see Bella so accepting so far.

Looking forward to how she handles her first hunt :)



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review!

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 13, 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

Good to see Bella settling in so well, it was very cute to see her so excited about the eye colour and sparkling hehe

I am wondering how Tanya & Bella are going to deal with the Edward-shaped elephant (assuming it becomes one?) :)



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review!

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 13, 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

hehe I kind of enjoyed the way Alice, Jasper and Edward were all freaked a little bit by the lack of thoughts, Visions and emotions  :)



Author's Response:

lol thanks!

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 13, 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

ahh poor Bella... such a tricky time ahead it would seem

 



Author's Response:

I'm afraid it is. Thanks for the review!

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 14, 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

hmm kind of interesting to see Bella being the one giving off the "hate-vibe" for a change... for all of Bella's worrying that she's not going to be able to conceal her interest, I'm thinking Tanya will "notice" Edward's direction before she notices Bella's. So much angst waiting in the wings! :)



Author's Response:

You have made a good observation, now let's see how it plays out! Thanks for the review!

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 15, 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

hahah love Bella & Emmett's interactions; I can see a LOT of fun in their bets with each other - perhaps even rivalling the Em&Jasper craziness of bets?

I do think it's just going to make Edward even more forlornly in-love with Bella over time though - all that fun and laughter is going to taunt him as much as her human blood would've done originally :)



Author's Response:

Yes Bella and Emmett will have much fun together. You'll get a glimpse of Edward's feelings in the next chapter! Thanks for the review!

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 15, 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

That was a lot of fun!!

Edward's really going through the wringer in his head... with Bella's shield in-play, I wonder if Jasper's actually caught any of the emotions flying around?

 



Author's Response:

Poor Edward...Thanks for the review!

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 18, 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

I'm actually kind of feeling sorry for Edward... just a little bit ;)



Author's Response:

Aw Lol! Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 18, 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

hmm that was something of a surprise, Esme being the first to figure it out. AND getting Edward to figure it out as well...

 



Author's Response:

Yep, thanks for the review!

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 20, 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

hehehe I know I was feeling sorry for Edward last chapter, but this time I'm chuckling at him having his little hissy fit.

Just hope he's not messing things up for Alice though!!! :P

 



Author's Response:

Lol he can be such a little boy! Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 21, 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

ohhh it almost looked like Bella was going to give in! Love that she's keeping Edward on his toes, going straight up :)

Should be interesting to see the directions they go in next, and how the two families handle it!



Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 23, 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

errr I believe "Ruh roh!" is the phrase??

 



Author's Response:

LOL you got it!!!!

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 28, 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

hmmm... still not quite comfortable with the way Edward is crowding Bella... it's like he's forcing the feelings and his expectations upon her. He's barely acknowledging the impact his previous relationship with Tanya is really having on the situation and apparently ignoring Bella's wishes for space, time and some understanding. Pretty obnoxious, really.

Edward may be able to parcel off his behaviour of the past, but Bella's loving and loyal nature will have her supporting Tanya through the mess... Edward's advances just make the whole ordeal more painful :P

Looking forward to some revealing conversations and arguements it would see in the future hehe :)



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review!

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: April 02, 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

heheh Friends, right, let's see how that goes!!

I'm not quite a believer of the "When Harry Met Sally" that men and women cannot be friends, but it's certainly near-impossible when such intense feelings are involved :)



Author's Response:

Very true! Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: April 05, 2010 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22

hmm looks like things are coming to a head.

I wonder if Alice was really that confused or just "saw" her argument as being the best path to get B&E together?

And is Kate talking about Edward or just generally, I wonder?



Author's Response:

No Alice didn't "see" anything because she can't when it comes to Bella. Alice doesn't even know anything about how B and E feel about each other. Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: April 06, 2010 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23

err "Ruh Roh!" would be the response to that!

Bella's going to be really upset now... I wonder how much she'll feel for herself, and how much she'll transfer to being Edward's fault?

Will she be returning home for that matter, or trying to run away and hide for a bit?



Author's Response:

All very good questions that will be answered in the next chapter! Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: April 09, 2010 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24

I wonder if Edward's premonition has tipped Tanya off finally?

I'm sad for poor Dominic, and the impact his death has had on Bella, but I'm happy that it's finally forced B&E to connect properly :)

Should be interesting to see the talk though, even if she's starting to suspect something, Tanya's likely to struggle with her feelings on the matter :S

 



Author's Response:

We'll get to hear from the Denalis in the next chapter. Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: April 10, 2010 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25

hmm I'm wondering how the rest of the Cullens reacted to B&E confessing their feelings for each other. Tanya's looking like she'll need some time alone-ish to get used to the idea, but Kate and Irina appear to be supportive :)

Will Alice be so happy to greet Bella as a sister, given the confusion so far?



Author's Response:

We won't the Cullen reactions for a couple more chapters. Alice and Bella will talk again but I won't say what will happen. Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: April 18, 2010 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27

oh... collective sigh of relief that Tanya & Bella have mended a bridge there. I wonder how it'd go if Edward ended up travelling to Russia though?

It's an interesting choice - Tanya could end up hassling B&E if they go along, just the way we all know Emmett will if they go with the Cullens ;)

 



Author's Response:

Lol I think Irina would hassle them more like Emmett would. Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: May 02, 2010 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29

haahaha it's so funny that Tanya's messing with everyone's heads after the initial drama. It may not be intentional, but it's still humorous :)



Author's Response:

Lol Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: May 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30

whoa I think Tanya and John are going to give Bella & Edward a run for "newly in love couples action" money ;)

 



Author's Response:

Lol they just might! thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: May 27, 2010 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32

hrm so John's Change took a little longer, which makes me wonder about what his abilities might be when he settles down a bit, perhaps the wolf-gene got an interesting "kick" from the venom??

Had to chuckle at Bella's throw down with John though, that was so cool hehe :)



Author's Response:

John won't have any special abilites sorry. There will be a tiny explanation as to why he thinks his change took longer though. Yea Bella wasn't taking shit that day. Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: June 19, 2010 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33

ohh trouble!! though I can't help still laughing at Edward's counting the 75 times he called Bella! I can see that argument biting him someday way in the future ;)

but for now, the pack is coming, and things are looking tense :S

 




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