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Penname: Daylen [Contact]
Real name: Daniel
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Member Since: March 01, 2009
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Mid-30s guy with an addiction for fan fiction presently, and a slew of unfinished writing in my file cabinet and computer that I never seem to manage to complete full stories. Plots and bits and pieces, sure, but start-to-finish stories still elude me.


Aside from that I'm always over-thinking things, have a science background but love my fiction books... and I guess I'm a twi-guy being here as much as I am lately :S (I own the series and The Host as well). Also a fan of David Eddings and Clive Cussler.


Just starting an Education degree that'll eventually send me out to Middle and Secondary schools to teach math and science (mostly biology, probably).


Oh and my friends just gave me an Edward doll from the Barbie range (he sparkles! lol they didn't realise it at the time either) My Twi-diction is kind of a running joke for them, but their nice enough about it :)


 


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Scheme of Fate by thebugroom Rated: PG-13 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 696]
Summary:

Bella Swan moved to Forks, Washington after being brutally attacked and turned into a vampire in Phoenix. She's desperately trying to put her life back together when she finds out that she's not the only vampire in Forks. Will the Cullen Family and Edward in particular be able to show there that being a vampire isn't so bad after all?

 

QUOTE:

Edward's family wouldn't care if we took off together. He wasn't a child. He was old enough to be Charlie's grandfather and well knew how to handle himself even if I was simply a seventeen-year-old girl. Edward also had more money at hand than I was even aware of; I always tried not to think about just how rich the Cullens were.

We could literally disappear for months or years on end, checking in with the rest of the Cullen's periodically and they wouldn't think anything of it other than that they might miss us. We could, quite literally, travel the world.

 

Forum: http://www.twilighted.net/forum/viewtopic.php?f=33&t=8798


Categories: Twilight, AU Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 22 Completed: Yes Word count: 97975
[Report This] Published: January 03, 2010 Updated: May 20, 2010


Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: January 21, 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 - Pixie Interference

hehehe love Alice :)

 



Author's Response: I love Alice too, she's one of my favorites and she definitely takes care of Bella here.

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: January 28, 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 - Kidnapped

oh I'm looking forward to Bella being able to get to know Esme in particular! From how she's been going so far, I think Esme could have a larger role in making Bella feel comfortable with both her life and the Cullens, than Alice or Edward could ever manage.

The calm motherly nature that Esme will be able to give to Bella will help her make sense of her new life, where Edward's brooding is still going to give her whiplash, and Alice's energy is something that will help offset her own darkness.

Anyways, looking forward to seeing where you take them all :)



Author's Response: She gets over Edward's whiplash pretty quickly. He doesn't go back and forth so much with this. But I agree, we need more Esme! In fact, this helped me realize that I don't have enough Esme and I need to go back and put some more in. :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: February 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 - Bella's Story

gee with a Change like that, it's really no wonder Bella's been so nervous about the Cullens, on top of the odds being against her numbers-wise :S

Looking forward to everyone's reactions to the story now - hoping Edward doesn't make any faces that leads Bella to believing he hates/distrusts her!!

 



Author's Response: Really! How could she not think that they're going to tear her into tiny pieces and laugh the whole time? I think she makes more sense to Edward now. That always makes a difference.

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: February 13, 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 - Accustomed to the Babysitter?

aww Bella and Edward sound so cute in their current dodging of getting too personal whilst pretending to get too personal ;)

Looking forward to when they finally realise the pretend isn't so pretend anymore :)



Author's Response: I think they have the sweetest relationship. Bella is still so overwhelmed that I'm not sure she really knows what's going on. So sweet.

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: February 16, 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 - The First Night

I'm happily surprised that Edward confessed to so much of his feelings and curiosities already :)

Hopefully Bella doesn't take too long to accept it... although she has had quite a bit going on in a short space of time... and even if vampire brains can track more than humans, sorting through the emotions is still complex and time-consuming. It must be, since even the canon-vamps take so long to act on those more "human" emotions than their instinctive predatory ones. Part of having to separate the person from the beast, and then make sense of it all on top of that, I guess?

Looking forward to more B&E time :) [although certainly not opposed to the rest of the family hehe]

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: February 21, 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9 - Center of Attention

hmm so B&E will be sitting in the car listening to music and "talking" perhaps? ;)



Author's Response: You bet. Sitting in the car. Listening to music. Talking. Making Mike jealous. Wait -- isn't that Edward's favorite thing to do, torment Mike?

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 04, 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11 - The Treaty

The wolves are about to be surprised with Bella's presence and control, I think.



Author's Response: Or just be irritated they have another vampire to keep track of. ;)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 13, 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12 - Not Just Tribal Elders

That went about as well as could be expected, I guess.

I can see a potential issue when/if nomads start killing nearby and the wolves will assume it's Bella (for the worse)

Hopefully I'm wrong about how bad it could get :)

Loved seeing the fun Bella and Edward can have when they let themselves relax in each others company... it helped temper the seriousness of the meeting with the wolves.

Looking forward to more of B&E though :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 28, 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13 - Stubbornness & Encouragement

It may have been short, but it was also kind of sweet, seeing Bella start to feel welcome at the Cullens' and particularly in Edward's arms :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: April 10, 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14 - Sunny Days and Arm Wrestling

ahh so B&E will be going public - Charlie's reaction should be very interesting :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: May 02, 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15 - Calm Before The Storm

Jacob's about to join the Pack, and Edward's a part of Bella's "public" life now. I wonder if anyone else in the family will recognise the scents on Bella's old human clothes?

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: May 17, 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17 -- The Plan

ohh things are building up - though im still kind of thinking that Bella is going to be the one to "convince" James that he's outclassed finally :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: May 21, 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18 - Flight and Deception

Alice almost appears too in the dark on Bella's plans...

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: May 21, 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19 - The Final Battle

hehe I love that Bella's just won a fight against a very sadistic vampire, and she's more worried about Alice's ongoing efforts to put her in dresses :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: May 21, 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20 - Return To Washington

all i have to say is "hehehehehehehehehehehe" (maybe with an evil chuckle undertone ;)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: May 21, 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21 - Interrupted

ahh Jacob was refreshingly understanding and amusing.... Bella's tongue-poking was very "newborn" of her though :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: May 21, 2010 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22 - Homecoming

aww it's over (for now) loved the ride - Charlie looking at his gun was great. Bella standing up for what she wanted was even better :)

Looking forward to seeing if the muse strikes and we get Epi's or sequels :)

 
Summary:

Bella and Edward are both broken by his abrupt departure following her birthday. In an attempt to heal her pain, Bella turns to pen and knife for release, until a nomad vampire crosses her path and new possibilities bloom. Meanwhile, Edward deals with his self-inflicted torment through music, which brings him closer to his family. But the tides of sorrow are too strong, and he must learn to accept fate or drown.

Bella-singer, Edward-singer/piano, writing notes and blood, Jasper-guitar, Alice-violin/percussions

 


Categories: New Moon Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Carmen, Edward, Eleazar, Emmett, Esme, Garrett, Irina, Jasper, Kate, Rosalie, Tanya
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 23 Completed: No Word count: 157862
[Report This] Published: January 04, 2010 Updated: July 12, 2010


Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: May 16, 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Perception Part I

Bella looked to be having a lot of fun, at least until the heavy sadness hit her... and she actually cried... i'm curious to see if that's a change to the vampires for you, or just Bella?

Not that she didn't have good reason for it! I wonder which one of the Cullens spotted her backstage? or "suspects" they did since she was somewhat concealed and they believe she's gone? hehe



Author's Response:

Remember back to chapter nine, when Edward cried as well when he wrote "Something I can never have." There is a connection to the two events of vampire's crying. It will be explained soon though. =)

Ah! You caught the Cullen! or rather... A Cullen. =) Nice catch.

Thanks for the review hun. Hopefully it won't be long.

~Nae

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: May 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Refinement

hmm a lot happening in that chapter, but mostly I find I'm curious about the other new band that's just interested in playing the music... I wonder if it's Edward & co? And how long before the respective parties become accustomed to the human blood scent to possibly latch onto each others' even if they don't immediately realise the connections?

 



Author's Response:

Interesting questions, and all of which get answered in a handful more chapters. Promise! But good eye on catching the details!

Thanks for reading and reviewing, it means a lot to me!

~Nae

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: May 24, 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Reverie

whoa intense... Edward's got some serious work ahead of him to convince Bella he wants to stick around for her... I'm feeling bad for Jasper the most though, he's the one that's been accepted/forgiven already, has the best "new" relationship with Bella, and yet he's the one currently getting the worst end of the stick.

Strangely, I can only see that making their new friendship even stronger because he literally has felt the same as Bella. And she knows it.

 



Author's Response:

She does know it. Very good point. =)

As for Jasper... I agree. He is getting the short end of the stick, but I think he would be willing to sacrifice whatever he had to, to see them back together. Bella is slowly becoming an important person to Jasper, and Edward has always been important to him. He's their big brother, and he wants to see them happy. =)

Thanks for the review hun!

You rock.

~Nae

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: June 22, 2010 Title: Chapter 22: Harmony

Excellent to see them making up - they've still got a ways to go, but at least they're more comfortable being WITH each other now :)

I wonder if Bella's shield wobbled at all, or if Jasper's been knocked over by the intense feelings that would surely have been coming out of that room?



Author's Response:

Interesting question! When Bella is hurting emotionally because of Edward, her shield fades in strength.. but at the end of this chapter, she was anything BUT hurt by Edward, so her shield was rather strong. Jasper would still feel it, and I'm sure it would feel similar to a sense of being high on love for him, which just radiates to the rest of the family. =) Hope that answers your question. I'll definitely be going more in depth about her talent in the upcoming chapters.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!
~Nae

 
Soldier X by gleena Rated: R starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 67]
Summary:

Soldier X w/Pentagon

Soldier X.  Major Isabella Swan, army psychologist, is swiftly climbing the ladder of success when a confidential letter and a clandestine meeting change everything.  Her newest patient proves to be the most challenging question in her new life.

 

Thanks to edward-bella-harry-ginny for the banner and the fantastic beta efforts.

 

Thanks also to myimm0rtal, Twilighted validation beta.


Categories: Twilight, AU Characters: Bella
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 12 Completed: No Word count: 56187
[Report This] Published: January 09, 2010 Updated: August 05, 2010


Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: July 11, 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11: Half-Truths

geez... Bella's going to end up with an ulcer and prematurely gray hair :S hehe

all the more reason for Edward to Change her sooner rather than later? ;)



Author's Response:

Well, you're getting a *little* ahead of the story. ;)  Eventually I'm going to have to put in a more relaxing chapter somewhere.

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: May 24, 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9: Dressing Down

heheh some close calls there, but had to laugh at Emmett taking the three of them to task for their conduct :)

Oh and Edward's boyish curiosity and playfulness at times there!



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review!  Can you think of someone less appropriate for disciplining someone than Emmett?  It's gotta be difficult for the poor guy.

And...I tried to imagine what it would be like for a vampire to get hit by the bomb blast.  It must be the closest they could get to a roller coaster, right?

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: June 19, 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10: Annoyed

so many twists and turns, making for some very interesting developments so far; looking forward to more!

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: August 06, 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12: Film Noir

So Bella has a hint now of just how long Edward's been around - and without ageing. It was kind of funny to see her reactions to Edward's "dazzling" even if she doesn't seem to have quite added it all up yet.

Will Ben and Angela be hitting it off when they cross paths, I wonder?

 



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review!  I've been working on exactly what explanations she would devise given her scientific training.  She would definitely *not* think vampire, If she did, she'd have to commit herself for treatment.

My AU transplanted Mike, Jessica, Tyler, and Angela to DC -- I felt bad for Angela and Ben being separated.  Maybe this will make up for the lost time?

 




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