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Penname: Daylen [Contact]
Real name: Daniel
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Member Since: March 01, 2009
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Mid-30s guy with an addiction for fan fiction presently, and a slew of unfinished writing in my file cabinet and computer that I never seem to manage to complete full stories. Plots and bits and pieces, sure, but start-to-finish stories still elude me.


Aside from that I'm always over-thinking things, have a science background but love my fiction books... and I guess I'm a twi-guy being here as much as I am lately :S (I own the series and The Host as well). Also a fan of David Eddings and Clive Cussler.


Just starting an Education degree that'll eventually send me out to Middle and Secondary schools to teach math and science (mostly biology, probably).


Oh and my friends just gave me an Edward doll from the Barbie range (he sparkles! lol they didn't realise it at the time either) My Twi-diction is kind of a running joke for them, but their nice enough about it :)


 


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Reviews by Daylen
 
Unexpectedly by edieswan Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 561]
Summary:

He's 32, married and completely broken. She's 17 and a closet recluse. When Bella Swan finally breaks out of her isolation by getting a weekend job in a bakery and serves the broken man, they unexpectedly form a taboo yet beautiful relationship. ExB


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 17 Completed: No Word count: 69976
[Report This] Published: November 29, 2009 Updated: March 02, 2011


Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: April 26, 2010 Title: Chapter 11: The Kiss

well they're closer despite the taboo-nature of their desires for now - I like the way they seem to be opening up verbally to each other, talking over each step more or less.

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 05, 2011 Title: Chapter 17: The Danger

in the words of Scooby... "ruh roh"

Edward's going to be even more paranoid about protecting Bella now :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: September 04, 2010 Title: Chapter 15: The Exile

hmm so it seems Charlie is "trying" to understand enough to at least let Bella have her "goodbye", as long as it IS one? And Bella's preparing herself to actually do just that; Edward's got a lot to sort out still before he can really say he want's Bella for her own "self" it would appear.

So much to see happen still! :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: September 15, 2010 Title: Chapter 16: The Connection

B&E finally got to really BE with each other - though it still feels off since they were kind of rushed for time - it was nice to see them still trying to make it meaningful to each other though :)

 
None Shall Be Spared by stef_ Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 70]
Summary:

This is Twilight with a twist. Bella is the vampire, Edward is the human. This story will borrow some plotline from the book, but will be mostly AU.
Intrigue, seduction, murder, the Volturi...it cant get any better than that. Cannon Pairings. Varying POVs


Categories: Twilight, AU Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 11 Completed: No Word count: 27662
[Report This] Published: December 03, 2009 Updated: January 13, 2012


Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: December 26, 2009 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

hahahaah aside from being concerned for Edward's safety there, I was chuckling away at his deduction of Bella's true nature!

Looking forward to more :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: April 09, 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

things appear to be building up pretty quickly - even though it's dangerous, it's always kind of amusing when Alice gets caught out with her visions.

 
Summary:

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NonVampire. The Cullens are returning from a camping trip and discover a car accident that makes Bella an orphan. Bella becomes a member of Cullens, learning what it means to be a real family, learning each Cullen's adoption story and what love really is. The story includes stories of each Cullens adoption and love story so it's not just Bella/Edward its all the Cullen pairings.


Categories: Pre-Twilight Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Completed: No Word count: 7682
[Report This] Published: December 07, 2009 Updated: March 08, 2010


Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: February 14, 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 - Discovery

interesting if sad beginning.

I wonder how Bella felt when she realised Edward stayed with her? :)

 
Summary:

Bella never jumped, Edward never returned - but Victoria did. Not even the intervention of the wolf-pack can stop her from attacking Bella. Now entering her first year of college, Bella has some major decisions to make about her life.

 

The Ugly Ducking


Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: Alice, Aro, Bella, Edward, Jane
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 10 Completed: No Word count: 31999
[Report This] Published: December 13, 2009 Updated: October 21, 2011


Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: April 14, 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6: Decisions

ahh Jacob... so good to see that he and Bella (and the Pack, as well) have managed such an interesting and fun friendship since her Change.

Wonder who the website author is? And what their reaction will be to Bella since they'll presumably be able to figure out what she is now? :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: July 11, 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7: Interludes

ahh Matt... so funny... wonder what his reaction is going to be like when he inevitably discovers the truth? He seems to be on the right track? :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: December 16, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Beginnings

interesting beginning... looking forward to more :)

 

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: February 19, 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3: Conversations

hmm I'm happy to see Bella's maintained a friendship with the wolves through all of this - though I'll admit that whole "raised by wolves" phrase just cracks me up everytime I think about it :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: February 23, 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: Discoveries

That was a nice touch, using the painting to spark Bella's investigations. As for the Foundation information being "nothing" - there's a PO Box - which implies someone attends to the mail at some point.

hmmm and I'm so far drawing a blank on what Bella's found on Aro - a blog maybe? that would be humorous :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: November 16, 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8: Meetings

I had little chuckle at "Edwin" after all the times I've read Charlie and others mispronouncing Edward's name :)

Sounds like Bella's got a bit of research and perhaps something to worry about on behalf of Edwin too?

 

 
Summary:

It’s been months since Bella Swan showed up on the doorsteps of the Cullen home resembling little more than a broken doll. It’s taken her a long time to get to this point in her life; the point where she feels safe at night, where she feels loved and accepted. But her demons aren’t far beneath the surface. What will she do when life throws yet another challenge in her path and those demons come back to haunt her in the flesh? AH, AU, OOC.


Categories: AU Characters: Bella
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 28 Completed: No Word count: 87723
[Report This] Published: December 15, 2009 Updated: December 19, 2010


Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 30, 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Trying

aww enjoyed "take-charge" Bella :)



Author's Response:

:) I'm glad you liked her little moment!

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Here's your teaser:

EPOV
I started to laugh, not expecting Angela to start cracking jokes, “You’re something else, aren’t you?”
“And you’re not as mean as you’d like people to think, are you?” she countered with a smile.
I shrugged, “I plead the fifth.”
She laughed outright then and covered her mouth with her hand. I realized in that moment that Angela Weber was really rather beautiful in an unassuming way. Her eyes, lit up with mirth, were sparkling and vivid, her smile beautiful, her laugh feminine but not annoying.
How had I never noticed this before?

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: January 19, 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Opening Up

Aside from the sadness of Bella's story so far, I broke out laughing at the thought of the look on the guys' faces after Bella's last line there :)



Author's Response:

I'm so glad you like it so far and that you actually "lol"'d. Here's a peek at the next chapter:

I got up out of my bed and threw a shirt on before opening the door to my room and padding the few short feet to Bella’s door.
I listened for a second, wondering if she had fallen back asleep. Then I heard her cry out louder and knew that she hadn’t. I was just about to open the door when I heard her tumble from the bed and her feet running towards the door. It flew open and there stood Bella, her hair looking like a nest, her t-shirt twisted around her body and her eyes wild. She took me in, standing there with my mouth open, and flung herself at my chest.
My arms came around her instinctively and I could feel her shaking. I pressed my lips to her hair and rubbed soft circles into her back, feeling the dampness of her shirt.
“Shhh, it’s okay Bella, it’s okay now,” I whispered softly, trying to encourage her to release her death grip on my chest. I was seriously starting to reconsider teasing her about her abilities to hurt Emmett. She had a hold on me that rivalled a vice grip.
“Shhh...it’s okay now,”

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: January 28, 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Nightmares

Nice chapter - though I'm guessing Edward's going to be arguing with himself over the night's events.

It was good, though painfully sad, to hear a bit of Bella's back story, it's certainly clear to see why the boys will do anything to protect her. Not that they wouldn't do the same for the rest of the family, but that they're... extra vigilant, perhaps?

 



Author's Response:

You hit the nail on the head darlin! Edward's gonna be rattling around in his own head for a while, it should prove to be entertaining ;)

You'll hear more of Bella's story in the next couple of chapters, things that the boys suspect but don't quite know yet. Before that though, we're gonna have some fun. Here's a sneak peek at it:

“Hey, Bella, you and your brothers should come out with us Friday night. We’re going to this new club in Port Angeles, there’s been a lot of hype about it,” Jessica’s slightly shrill voice broke into my internal monologue.
“Um, well,” Bella looked up at Jasper, who was directly across from her, before glancing at me.
Did I want to go to a club?
Fuck no.
“Sure Jess!”
Fucking Emmett!
He grinned at her as she, of course, smiled brilliantly back, “We’d love a chance to explore the area a bit more.”
I sighed and caught Jasper’s eye. He grinned behind his hand. I knew he was as thrilled about this as I was. To say that listening to bad music while it pumped out of extremely large speakers in a small room full of sweaty bodies was not my favourite pass time would be an understatement.

 

Thanks for your review!!

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: February 09, 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Klutz Gene

hmm Jas could be in trouble with more than just Bella's reaction if she figures it out.

It's good to see Bella letting go for a little while and being able to have some fun with the night - hope it doesn't messed up for her :P



Author's Response:

Haha, yeah Jazz has a lot on his plate right about now! You`ll have to wait and see how the night turns out for Bella cause I don`t want to spoil anything for you! Here`s your teaser!

“C’mon you Neanderthal! Move those hips!” she laughed and, letting go of my hands, grabbed my hips instead. I could feel the warmth of her palms spread over my skin as she forced movement out of my body.
“Okay, okay! I’ve got the hint Bells!” I laughed and began moving on my own. My movements were rather awkward, kind of the way Bella had looked previously when she was dancing with the oaf. He had been invading her personal space then; here Bella’s personal space had been blended with mine. I was totally okay with that.
I stepped closer to her and placed my hands on her waist as we began to move in sync to the song. I couldn’t help but focus on the softness of the body I was touching. I could feel the muscle and bone moving under her skin, feel the warmth radiating from her body, hear the breaths she was taking. She twisted and turned her body as the song continued but I kept at least one of my hands on her at all times. Bella kept a safe distance between our bodies, never letting herself get too close to be inappropriate, for which I was simultaneously thankful and bitter about.

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: February 16, 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Your Touch

Interesting, if somewhat scary to see Bella zone out so much. I'd like to hope that it's not really James, but what're the chances of that given the fiction? ;)

 



Author's Response:

Ah, what are the chances, indeed? You'll just have to wait and see! :D As for Bella, you'll get a better understanding of why she reacted the way she did in the next chapter!

In the mean time, here's your teaser!

He rubbed his hair with the towel for a few more seconds, trying to get the dampness out, before tossing it onto the bathroom counter without a care. He flipped off the switch for the light in his bathroom and softly padded over to the bed. He bent down as if he were going to get into the bed but then paused.
“Would you prefer it if I wear a t-shirt?” he asked me softly.
I couldn’t see his face because my eyes had not yet adjusted to the darkness of his room but I could hear the trepidation in his voice.
“No,” I whispered back, “I just need you to hold me.”

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Abandoned

awww Bella gave Emmett a wedgie! Our little girl is really breaking out :)



Author's Response:

Hehe, yeah, Bella's learning to dish it out! You can't blame Emmett though...French toast is amazing after all :)

Here's your tiiiiiiiiiiny teaser from the next chap, I couldn't find a bigger chunk that didn't give away too much!

BPOV
I watched him come closer and closer until I could taste the mint of his gum on my breath as we stared each other down. His eyes grey, mine brown. Was this really happening?
“Kiss me Jasper,” I whispered.

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: April 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Tension

haha I kind of feel bad for Edward - he's so worried about Bella's problems and how to deal with his own feelings he's not allowing himself to enjoy the moment, to REALLY notice Angela, for one thing ;)



Author's Response:

lol I know, a lot of people feel sorry for Edward. Actually, my beta made me promise to get Edward laid before the story is finished! Hahaha!

Thanks for taking the time to review! I appreciate it! Here's your teaser:

JPOV
I sat up suddenly and grabbed my hair, tugging on it sharply because I was frustrated.
Yes, of course Bella knew that she could trust me. Of course she did. Right?
But what was it about her past that she was so hesitant to tell me about?
Was it because I had never sat her down and told her my whole story?
Was there something—something besides the fact that James beat her—that she was hiding?

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: May 19, 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Discussions

hmm so I wonder if we'll be finding Rosalie before anything majorly bad (aside from Jasper's leaving) has happened to her?

kind of funny to see B&J talking things over - they've often seemed the two more thoughtful characters, I can see them talking over every little step they take in the relationship. Even if it sometimes happens after they've barreled through hehe :)



Author's Response:

Yeah, they didn't exactly think through that last romp did they? Then again, who really does when the moment strikes, eh? As for Rosalie... well I can't tell you just yet, but I will say that it won't be happening in the next chapter....


EPOV
“I know what we can do! I’ve been thinking about doing it for ages,” Emmett said, a glint in his eye.
“Are we going to get in shit for this?” I asked warily.
“Nah. Mom will love it.”

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: May 27, 2010 Title: Chapter 19: The Banshee

hehehe the thought of Emmett and Edward routed by a little kitty cat is hilarious... looking forward to more of that; when they're not worrying about James finding Bella :S



Author's Response:

Haha, I'm thinking that an outtake with some more of Emmett and the cat is in order, thoughts?

I'm glad you liked the chapter :) Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Here's your teaser:

BPOV
Later I would have no idea how long we stood there, probably making quite the scene, as Jasper attempted to sooth and I trembled steadily. Later I would barely remember Edward and Emmett coming out of the pharmacy and telling us that there had been no sign of a man fitting James’ description in the pharmacy and that none of the staff had recognized such a description either. Later I would only remember the feeling of the panic swelling up through my stomach, making me feel nauseous, and clawing at my throat as it suffocated me. Later I would only remember Jasper’s arms and his sweet scent.

Cinnamon. Old Spice. Leather.

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: June 15, 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Holding Hands

hmm there's just so many 'compromising' positions Bella & Jasper can find themselves in if he's teaching her self-defence... though I think I'm more amused by the prospect of Bella shoving Emmett around inside the house until Esme busts them and tells Emmett off. Because it couldn't possibly be sweet innocent Bella's fault? ;)



Author's Response:

YOu have no idea how close you are to the mark! ;)

Sorry it's taken me so long to respond! I had to write something new before I could tease you! Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Here's your teaser:

“He’s not teaching me to fight, Em, he’s teaching me to defend myself,” I told him, stirring the sauce so that the cheese mixed seamlessly with the tomato base.
“Same difference,” Emmett said, reaching a hand towards the sauce.
“Emmett McCarty Cullen,” I said, my voice a warning, “Don’t you dare put your finger in my sauce.”
He looked up and grinned devilishly, his eyes glinted with the challenge, “Oh? What are you going to do about it, little sister?”
I turned towards him with a smirk, “Are you stupid enough to want to find out?”
Emmett’s grin widened. He moved faster than you would expect, given his bulk, but I hadn’t been training with Jasper for nothing. I reached out, just as fast, and grabbed his finger before it went anywhere near my bubbling sauce.
“Consider this your warning,” I said, still smirking, fully hoping he’d push me.

He did.

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: June 30, 2010 Title: Chapter 22: The Champion

hehe I know being able to defend yourself is a serious thing, and it's good that Jasper hasn't ignored Bella's need for it, but it was still amusing to see Bella "The Champion" over Emmett... and of Jasper, in more ways than one ;)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: July 10, 2010 Title: Chapter 23: A Night To Remember

somehow i don't think Jasper's going to have a problem with Bella being "in control" more often hehe ;)



Author's Response:

Haha, no, I don't think so either. We'll be seeing more of it, I promise you! ;) In the mean time...

A longer than usual tease to make up for the lack of a tease last week:
EPOV
“I want to talk to you and your brother, Emmett,” Lauren said, sliding up to the locker next to mine and leaning on it as if she did this daily. I tried not to sigh outloud. I didn’t want to deal with her first thing in the morning.

“About what?”

“Something very important...”she trailed off, causing me to look up.

She had a carefully constructed mask on her face. With her lips pursed slightly and a little frown on her brow one might think that she was deep in thought, and concerned about whatever was going through her brain. I knew better; Lauren Mallory had no brain, for starters, she was in my Data Management class so I could attest to that. Secondly, the mask was too perfect and that put me on my guard.

“If it’s so important then why not tell me now?” I demanded, suddenly rounding on her, “Why wait? Unless it’s not ‘very important’ but merely another one of your ploys to get attention from anything with a dick between its legs.”

Okay, I had to admit. That was harsh. But I figured that pissing her off was the fastest way to bring things to a head here. I didn’t want to play games; she either had something to say and would spit it out when she was screaming her head off at me or she would trot off and lick her wounds.

“Excuse me!?” she hissed, her eyes narrowing into near slits.

Oh yeah, I’d pissed her off.

 




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