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Penname: Daylen [Contact]
Real name: Daniel
Status: Member
Member Since: March 01, 2009
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Mid-30s guy with an addiction for fan fiction presently, and a slew of unfinished writing in my file cabinet and computer that I never seem to manage to complete full stories. Plots and bits and pieces, sure, but start-to-finish stories still elude me.


Aside from that I'm always over-thinking things, have a science background but love my fiction books... and I guess I'm a twi-guy being here as much as I am lately :S (I own the series and The Host as well). Also a fan of David Eddings and Clive Cussler.


Just starting an Education degree that'll eventually send me out to Middle and Secondary schools to teach math and science (mostly biology, probably).


Oh and my friends just gave me an Edward doll from the Barbie range (he sparkles! lol they didn't realise it at the time either) My Twi-diction is kind of a running joke for them, but their nice enough about it :)


 


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Reviews by Daylen
 
Crescent Moon by Brandinm05 Rated: PG-13 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 218]
Summary:

What if Jacob and the Quileute werewolves never showed up in the meadow that day to save Bella? What if Bella became a vampire and Edward wasn't the one to do it? Bella is turned and forced out of Forks, up North to the Denali clan. New bonds are formed while old ones are nearly broken.  Read as Bella adjusts to her new life, and possibly, a new mate.  Special lovely thanks to M1187 for my fanstical banner :)

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Playlist for story can be found at:

http://www.youtube.com/view_play_list?p=9BFE9317988CD122


Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 15 Completed: Yes Word count: 46381
[Report This] Published: November 29, 2009 Updated: July 04, 2010


Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: December 30, 2009 Title: Chapter 6: Voices

It was good to see Alice, albeit so very briefly, and I'm looking forward to the reunion of the family and Bella.

I liked the Denali's reactions, and hope Irina and Tanya don't take too long to come around.

I still hold out the hope of a wary friendship continuing with Jacob too, but I guess we'll see ;)



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review :)  My beta thought it might be a good idea to throw in a little visit from Alice, as she would see Bella's change.  But I couldn't have her stick around for too long- don't want Jasper having withdrawal :)  I did my best with the Denali's reactions- although, I think you might be interested to see what happens with Irina and Tanya.  I have to admit, Jacob stole my heart from the very beginning- it wouldn't be much of a story with a little Jakey action, now would it!  Please, continue reading and reviewing!

xoxo

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: January 15, 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Andare

ack omg! Well I'm glad the Cullens are on their way!

Hopefully either Jacob or a Cullen or Denali shows up to help with Victoria - assuming that Bella "needs" the help to take her down :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: February 21, 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Requiem

Jacob and Edward both timed their respective arrivals well :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: February 27, 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Rose

That went better than I dared hope for at this stage. It's nice to see Sam willing to talk things out and keeping his emotions in check.

I can imagine Bella will still be quite tense/emotional when she gets back to Edward and the others, and it'll be interesting to see if Edward can support her without getting angry at the Pack or Jacob etc for making Bella upset. Particularly since he did far worse only recently. The best thing he can do right now, is be right there for and with Bella - no more running off on his own agenda.

Hopefully Jake and Bella get a chance to work on their old friendship too.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review :)  And I agree- Eddie's gonna have to be there for Bella, she'll need his support... As for Jake and Bella, no worries-- they get their chance... sort of...

 

 

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 15, 2010 Title: Chapter 11: All Of Me

well they finally got that question out there! I'm glad that Edward wasn't "too" badly overreacting to Bella's fight-training.

 



Author's Response:

Haha, I take it that you were expecting it??  It wouldn't be a Bella/Edward vampire story without a happy married ending, right? ha!  And with Bella training:  Edward can't over-react too much.  I mean, Bella DID go through her change alone, and survived with Laurent, AND found the Denali clan all by her wittle self.  Bella is a big girl now.  I think he's realizing that.  :)  Please keep reading and reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: May 05, 2010 Title: Chapter 12: String Quartet, Op.1:II. Adagio

whoa the proverbials about to hit the fan :)

 



Author's Response:

hehe, that is it :)  The big scary fight scene it next! I hope you enjoy it! :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: May 17, 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Adagio G Minor

I'm not so happy about losing Kate or any of the wolves, but also aware that there was a hell of a battle there, so casualties on the "good guys" side were inevitable...

I always enjoy Marcus getting the chance to redress some of his infinite pain against Aro ;)

 



Author's Response:

well hell, man.... The good guys took down the entire Volturi guard, ha!  Props to them, eh?  I honestly felt awful about the wolves.... Brady was too young to kill off, but in my mind, he was young and naive to have jumped infront of such a powerful vampire, plus he did it to save Bella.  So, he died an honorable death I think. Also happy to see that you liked how Marcus got his sweet revenge, muah ah ah ah :) 

Sadly enough, this story is finally coming to a close. :(  You've been an amazing reviewer, thanks for sticking with me to the end!

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: June 19, 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Oltremare

I'm still sad about the losses, but at least it's not all in vain with the changes that are happening around the Volturi now... and perhaps Marcus will be free enough to find some happiness for himself finally too :)



Author's Response:

Hmmmmm I do suppose that it up for the reader to think to themself.... The likelyhood of me writing a story from Marcus's perspective, ha-- who knows.  I truly hope that with the others gone, Marcus would be free to live his life (or end it, if he chose) and be happy.  I feel the same for the Cullen's and the Denalis. 

 

Thanks for the review!

 
Unexpectedly by edieswan Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 561]
Summary:

He's 32, married and completely broken. She's 17 and a closet recluse. When Bella Swan finally breaks out of her isolation by getting a weekend job in a bakery and serves the broken man, they unexpectedly form a taboo yet beautiful relationship. ExB


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 17 Completed: No Word count: 69976
[Report This] Published: November 29, 2009 Updated: March 02, 2011


Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: September 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 14: The Birthday

hmm so Charlie knows, and has possibly been investigating Edward... it also sounds like maybe Rosalie was in disguise outside the supermarket?

Charlie's distance is a worry on top of any information he has on Edward - that really doesn't excuse him from Bella's birthday wishes or the week leading up to it.

Wonder how any potential move of Bella's is going to go? Even though she's now 18, she's still the daughter of a police chief who will quite possibly stop at nothing to prevent her going anywhere with Edward.

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: May 12, 2010 Title: Chapter 12: The Decision

oh... just when there couldn't be any more tangles for these guys, they fall into a few more :)

 

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: February 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 8: The Confession

I'm glad that they're both taking this carefully - I think they both need it.

 

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: July 04, 2010 Title: Chapter 13: The Rude Awakening

ohh Irina's going to be a tough one to crack... I wonder what her reaction would be to knowing what happened with Emmett and Rose? Or does she already know and still see Edward as the bad guy?

As for Charlie... I'm just hoping he doesn't go for the gun.. hopefully he goes for the talk first... he seemed to be working up to an understanding of Bella's emotions before they went to bed, though I worry that he's going to leap to the wrong conclusions right now and assume that Edward's abusing his "power" over Bella?? :p

guess we'll see what happens next?

 

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: February 21, 2010 Title: Chapter 9: The Graduation

aww he showed up!! Nicely done there, though I'm annoyed more at Mike and Jessica for their little roles in raising Bella's stress level :P scrolling through other people's phones is the height of rudeness.

Looking forward to what happens next, now that Bella's out of high school :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 04, 2010 Title: Chapter 10: The Return

Some close calls there. Glad to see the truck show up, but even happier to see B&E confess a few things to each other; slowly building up their friendship/relationship :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: April 26, 2010 Title: Chapter 11: The Kiss

well they're closer despite the taboo-nature of their desires for now - I like the way they seem to be opening up verbally to each other, talking over each step more or less.

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: March 06, 2011 Title: Chapter 17: The Danger

in the words of Scooby... "ruh roh"

Edward's going to be even more paranoid about protecting Bella now :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: September 04, 2010 Title: Chapter 15: The Exile

hmm so it seems Charlie is "trying" to understand enough to at least let Bella have her "goodbye", as long as it IS one? And Bella's preparing herself to actually do just that; Edward's got a lot to sort out still before he can really say he want's Bella for her own "self" it would appear.

So much to see happen still! :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: September 15, 2010 Title: Chapter 16: The Connection

B&E finally got to really BE with each other - though it still feels off since they were kind of rushed for time - it was nice to see them still trying to make it meaningful to each other though :)

 
None Shall Be Spared by stef_ Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 80]
Summary:

This is Twilight with a twist. Bella is the vampire, Edward is the human. This story will borrow some plotline from the book, but will be mostly AU.
Intrigue, seduction, murder, the Volturi...it cant get any better than that. Cannon Pairings. Varying POVs


Categories: Twilight, AU Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 11 Completed: No Word count: 27662
[Report This] Published: December 04, 2009 Updated: January 14, 2012


Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: December 26, 2009 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

hahahaah aside from being concerned for Edward's safety there, I was chuckling away at his deduction of Bella's true nature!

Looking forward to more :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: April 09, 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

things appear to be building up pretty quickly - even though it's dangerous, it's always kind of amusing when Alice gets caught out with her visions.

 
Summary:

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NonVampire. The Cullens are returning from a camping trip and discover a car accident that makes Bella an orphan. Bella becomes a member of Cullens, learning what it means to be a real family, learning each Cullen's adoption story and what love really is. The story includes stories of each Cullens adoption and love story so it's not just Bella/Edward its all the Cullen pairings.


Categories: Pre-Twilight Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Completed: No Word count: 7682
[Report This] Published: December 07, 2009 Updated: March 08, 2010


Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: February 14, 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 - Discovery

interesting if sad beginning.

I wonder how Bella felt when she realised Edward stayed with her? :)

 
Summary:

Bella never jumped, Edward never returned - but Victoria did. Not even the intervention of the wolf-pack can stop her from attacking Bella. Now entering her first year of college, Bella has some major decisions to make about her life.

 

The Ugly Ducking


Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: Alice, Aro, Bella, Edward, Jane
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 13 Completed: No Word count: 43094
[Report This] Published: December 13, 2009 Updated: October 29, 2013


Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: April 14, 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6: Decisions

ahh Jacob... so good to see that he and Bella (and the Pack, as well) have managed such an interesting and fun friendship since her Change.

Wonder who the website author is? And what their reaction will be to Bella since they'll presumably be able to figure out what she is now? :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: October 29, 2013 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12: Lessons

What a cliffie! Really enjoying Felix so far as well :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: July 11, 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7: Interludes

ahh Matt... so funny... wonder what his reaction is going to be like when he inevitably discovers the truth? He seems to be on the right track? :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: December 16, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Beginnings

interesting beginning... looking forward to more :)

 

 




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