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Summary:

Bellas been burnt in her past, so to get over it she pours herself into her work as a chef.  Shes gotten her own show and Edward, the worst cook, is set to be her cohost.  Bella's not looking for love, but she just cant resist the heat Edward has caused in her kitchen.

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Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 17 Completed: No Word count: 65394
[Report This] Published: February 24, 2009 Updated: May 06, 2009


Reviewer: karentwilighted Signed
Date: March 19, 2009 Title: Chapter 10: Confess

I am glad she told him. And Edward's so understanding, rubbing her back, comforting her; most people would freak hearing another guys name in her sleep when things are so new. Poor Bella though - what a dirt bag. The stealing the job and even the fake relationship wern't nearly as bad as the casual admiting of it - 'of course I was using you while fucking you literally and metaphorically' . . . yikes



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for the review. I'm happy you liked it.  It was hard writing that chapter because I knew how bad it had to be to make Bella so broken, for so long.

 
Reviewer: karentwilighted Signed
Date: April 05, 2009 Title: Chapter 11: Late

Sexy, clueless (at least in the kitchen), sweet Edward. What could be better?



Author's Response:

Thank you for the review! :)

 
Summary: Feature

 

While hunting one afternoon, Emmett, Jasper and Carlisle stumble upon what appears to be a corpse.  When they learn it's a severely broken vampire, they take him home to do what they can to help.  But of course, fate has plans for this man.  Canon Couples.  AU.  DARK Themes.


Categories: AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 32 Completed: Yes Word count: 158872
[Report This] Published: February 26, 2009 Updated: October 31, 2011


Reviewer: karentwilighted Signed
Date: March 28, 2009 Title: Chapter 9: The Antidote

Fine - review, review, review . . . now 10 pleeeeease! You can't leave it there. Mean, mean, meanie.

This story is beautiful. I just wish I'd found it a few more chapters in - it's so hard to wait for more. He is slowly trusting her, calming for her. I wish he would speak or aknowledge that he understands her; but even without that, she is there for him completely.

So where are all the Cullens while he is being captured? They were al upstairs and would be waiting to see if the new drug would work. Plus I doubt they'd all leave Bella alone in the house with him even if he seemed to present no danger to her.  Bella believe he leaps at his captors to try to save himself, but I think he may also be trying to protect her - the one person who has shown him compassion.



Author's Response:

Haha, sorry :p

All good questions.. which will be addressed in ch.10! I think it'd lose something if I gave it away ;)

And he definitely might be trying to protect her. Well, not so much that, but... the antidote itself wouldn't give him any energy -- it's just interesting that he found a wave of it now :)

Thanks for reviewing!

- Michelle

 
Reviewer: karentwilighted Signed
Date: April 02, 2009 Title: Chapter 10: The Bedroom

I'm very happy bsementward is getting healthy. Can't wait for him to talk, even if it's just to Bella (and in a way that would be more special). Lovely bond you have going with these two - even if all he shows is by calming around her, it's still more than he gives anyone else.



Author's Response:

I'm sort of nervous about writing him talking! I love the untalking, feralward! It'll be so hard to make him talk now that I've written all these chapters where all he does is growl.  Sigh.

Thanks for the review!

- Michelle

 
Reviewer: karentwilighted Signed
Date: April 08, 2009 Title: Chapter 11: The Sunset

A/N: The Vamp was naked for this long for a lot of reasons, they include, but are not limited to:


Would clothing be uncomfortable (if he’s been unclothed for so long, would the weight/feel be something he doesn’t appreciate?)


How would they get him dressed? (in this chapter bella needed some cooperation from him, so before he fed when he was still completely feral, it’d be near impossible)


Would he remove the clothes? (I tend to think that he would)


Would they hurt his wounds? (Maybe yes, maybe no, but it’s something to think about)


Would he even care that he’s naked (if he’s running on instinct) – this is the biggie – for us, and for the Cullens, it’s probably uncomfortable for him to be naked. For him, I think it’s the last thing on his mind.


Yes, yes all very good serious reasons to keep him naked. But honestly, if this is going to turn out to be Edward, why in the world would anyone clothe him?


Seriously though I like that he's healing, getting better, starting to trust more. your pacing is slow but I think it's honest and right for the story; he would suddenly befriend them all. Things would be slow but he is changing.


And I know it may not be the right analogy but there are instances of wild animals growing up with people and they never harm them because they learn to trust them. I think this is similar; she has taken care of him and made him feel safe since he was too weak to defend himself. Even if his blood lust returns when he's stronger I think his first instict will be to keep her safe.


 



Author's Response:

I hear that! Keep him naked, what the hale is bella thinking?

A LOT of people are comparing him to dogs/wild animals.

While I'm not 100% sure how I feel about the comparison, there are some clear parallels :)

 
Reviewer: karentwilighted Signed
Date: April 14, 2009 Title: Chapter 12: The Bath

Definitelyhappy he's getting better. Who's gonna say no to him filling out and looking good? Crawling in her lap? And happy fun bath time (ok maybe not that happy fun but I can imagine him wet and naked in the bath however I want and you can't stop me)

And he spoke. Broke my heart. Bella's too I'm sure. To have hi finally put himself out there ask her to stay, try to hold her wrist and yet have her have to leave anyway - heartbreaking. Double damn for Charlie deciding she needs a curfew now; he finally put himself out there.

Has it been explained how she's friends with Alice and knows they are vamps and I missed it? Or has it not been explained yet?



Author's Response:

There's a pretty solid hint in ch.11, but it hasn't been fully explained yet :) aka "the night when fantasy and reality merged.." yanno :)

A few people have actually expressed their sadness over his health! I knew there'd be a few in the crowd, which is why I amended my end note, and they have spoken! :D I love them anyway, but they won't get their own vampire anytime soon :)

And it's totally happy! Naked in the bath, all snugglin and shivering, how is that anything but pure fluff?   It's not, I say! Fluff away. We actually had a good sized discussion about whether to fluff it up a little more, but alas, I leave fluff to your imagination :D

And I agree - Charlie sucks.. but then again, yeah. i see where he's coming from :) I do believe it's Wednesday evening at this point, so just thursday night left before the weekend.  My disclaimer is that it's 2 am and I might be off a day, it might only be tuesday.  snort.

Thanks for reviewing!

- Michelle

 
Reviewer: karentwilighted Signed
Date: April 21, 2009 Title: Chapter 13: The Balcony

Not suprised it's Edward. How many gorgeous, bronze haired god-like men can exist in the (even imaginary) world? Us poor females can only handle the idea of just so much.

Lov that he's slowly opening up, starting to talk, holding Bella. Love that you incorporated the dying of the flu and remembering his parents. If he's been caged since he was changed no wonder he's a mess.

I have confidence Bella can nurse him back to emotional health. I'm wondering if there's any significance in homecoming beyond the lie to Charlie. Is she going to go over to the Cullens smelling like other boys from dancing and have Edward upset? Just wondering if ther's something there.



Author's Response:

Yeah, I'm thinking homecoming isn't a HUGE plot point either way.

Thanks so much for the review!

- Michelle

 
Reviewer: karentwilighted Signed
Date: April 28, 2009 Title: Chapter 14: The Weekend

Are you glad he's healing or not was always an easy question for me. I'm totally pro- happy healthy Edward. On the hand, shirtless or clothes is a bit more difficult. I'm glad he's getting better and taking steps to get dressed is a sign of healing. Then again, who doesn't want to see him shirtless?

Great chapter. He's coming out of his chapter and even hung on with both Alice and Emmett in the room. Poor guy - 90 years in captivity, I'd be terrified and untrusting as well. I'm not suprised he lost his memories; people in trmatic experiences can anyway. And his was the trauma of changing into  vamp with no one talking him though it, waking up in a cage and hearing people and who knows what horrors being performed for 90 years. It wouldn't really give him time to reflect on his human life so it would stay in his memory, now would it?



Author's Response:

Haha, clothes is a very tricky subject, no? x) We're all such damn pervs when it comes down to it!

Thanks so much for reviewing again hon!

 
Reviewer: karentwilighted Signed
Date: May 05, 2009 Title: Chapter 15: The River

Loved it. He's coming out of his shell in such a realistic way. Yes I'm impatient, but any faster wouldn't seem right. So was he kept by shapeshifters? werewolves? have you added a whole new category like witches? hmmm

 
Reviewer: karentwilighted Signed
Date: June 29, 2009 Title: Chapter 20: The Reunion

So I'm not a giddy squeel kind of woman, but wow - that was definitely amazing, lovely, stupendous, wondeful. I love that he was brave enough to wait for her outside. I love that he opened up to her (I'm hoping she can tell the Cullens that Aro's thoughts match his words without betraying Edward). And I love the kiss. Of course I love the kiss. But most of all I think I love his smile at the end and admitting he needs her too.

 
Summary:

Bella takes a vacation to Hilton Head Island in South Carolina to meet Alice's new boyfriend, Jasper. Rosalie and Emmett come along, too, just in case Bella didn't feel like enough of a fifth wheel. With Jasper's roommate out of town, Bella has his nice big bed all to herself. Until Edward comes home in the middle of the night...

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Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Jacob, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: Always Human , SMUT - Best of the Best - Edward and Bella
Chapters: 36 Completed: Yes Word count: 163211
[Report This] Published: March 01, 2009 Updated: December 21, 2011


Reviewer: karentwilighted Signed
Date: March 17, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 A Deity at the Beach (V)

I have to say I'm glad she was going to turn Jake down for a date and found him boring on his walking tour. Plus noticing little difference like Edward being able to read people was Jake was oblivious. Edward, while we haven't seen much of him, seems considerate and sweet. And Bella needs an Edward-pick-me-up. Who doesn't?

 
Reviewer: karentwilighted Signed
Date: March 19, 2009 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 S.T.37

Lovely - as akward as the pain of sunburn, beard scruffing, uncomrotable from the night before situtuation was, you made it lovely. He explain that he wanted her rather than letting it go. I love that he shot down every argument and told her she'd have to be the one to admit she wanted to stop. He's a gentleman but wasn't going to say he didn't want her when he did but would have stopped. Putting himself outt here with the organsm cure? Yum. Hey orgasms release endorphins and those make you feel better and take away pain so it's a great offer (and who would turn down an orgasm offer from a gorgeous Edward?).

I think they're very sweet together and hope you find a way to work it out between them. Edward wants a new job . . . Seattle, for instance?

 
Reviewer: karentwilighted Signed
Date: March 26, 2009 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 Piggly-Wiggly (V)

Wish she hadn't gotten all grouchy with him after telling him about Sam. And there has to be more to that story . . . wow.

I love the girls getting after her for info (girls are so much more talking that guys - the cave man nod conveys a lot for them) and I love, love the finger waggling ending.



Author's Response:

I know, but she was embarrassed and afraid of what he would think. That's enough to make anyone grouchy and defensive. There is more to the story of Sam and it will all come out in due time.

I don't think most men realize how much women talk about that stuff--Edward got a little ego boost, though!

Thanks for reviewing!

Paige

 
Reviewer: karentwilighted Signed
Date: April 05, 2009 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 Sweet Tea & the Southern Inquisition (V)

Yes, yes, sex good and all that. But how many men could step up and do the 'don't regret me' speech? That was what it's all about right there. There has to be a way to get him to the other side of the country - soon. And to keep them in contact until then. I don't think you had them move to fast; sometime people just click and everything works and sometimes you just fall fast. And gorgeous, sweet Edward with a southern drawl? How could you not jump and hope he catches you?

I loved his family. Chaos, fun. I'd love to have seen Bella and his mom in the kitchen.

 
Reviewer: karentwilighted Signed
Date: April 09, 2009 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 What Got Left Behind (V)

Sam? Can't believe Emmett didn't kill him with his bare hands. Can't believe Bella didn't use come kitchen knives on him. Wow, I mean that's incredibly harsh.

Yup Bella's frustrated. I would be too. There is a whole lotta good to remember about edward. And every time he called me sugar (in that sexy southern drawl). And his hot breath in my ear, telling me to cum, that he wanted to make me feel good… yeah I'd be frustrated leaving that behind too. I think they need to chat on the phone so she can hear him talk . . . and then he should come visit.

 
Reviewer: karentwilighted Signed
Date: April 16, 2009 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9 Bella in Her Element (V)

Edward can call me sugar in that sweet, sweet accent any time he likes. Having already decided just to have some fun with him in Hilton Head I don't understand the hot and cold now. He's there. He's hot. He's sweet. He's considerate. Just do him.

In the long term, once she stops overthinking things, there have to be some jobs for him in Seattle.

 
Reviewer: karentwilighted Signed
Date: May 07, 2009 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11 Swate Tay, Plays (V)

I hope Edward doesn't face an wrath at all from Bella. Sam deserved to be hit. I'm usually a huge believer in non-violence but hey it's fiction and if anyone dserved it, it's him. I love that Emmett was jealous Edward got to hit him - so Emmett. When Rose started mentioning orgasms, I was pretty sure it would be Edward getting hit!

Great chapter. I wish Edward would tell her about the interview just cause I can see her freaking out about having something kept from her. I love that Emmett thought of him though. As much as he may not want his sister dating again, he thinks enough of Edward to remember he likes the company (likes may be an understatement "It’s creepy, hero-worship-level fandom, man.") and mention him. It would be the perfect solution.

 

 
Reviewer: karentwilighted Signed
Date: June 26, 2009 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15 Fallout (V)

She's gonna fuck up a good thing. I hate to see him hurt since he's done nothing but be good to her, but I am glad he put his foot down. He hadn't done anything wrong and she's taking all her insecurities out on him with no explanation, no talking. And having your bbf's boyfriend call your guy? What is this, 5th grade?

I would honestly hope  it would be Emmett to set her straight. Alice is too obvious but her big brother is al protective of her. So him saying that Edward was a good guy and not to take her trust issues from Sam out on him would help. Cause, while I don't see her talking, I can see them guessing what's wrong with her. And if she ever gets aroudn to admitting she flipped because a woman talked to him I would hope they'd yell some sense into her.

 
Reviewer: karentwilighted Signed
Date: July 04, 2009 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16 Get What You Need (V)

He really doesn’t know much about committed relationships if her thinks having coffee with the ex is a good idea, does he? :D

Completelly and totally disagree. Lots of adults have friendships with ex's. I'm not big into the whole jealousy is hot thing. I think some jealousy is normal but I also think it's a sign of not trusting the other person. In the just dating stage, it might be weird to go see an ex. But honestly in the committed stage you should be past that and trust the other person. Otherwise perhaps you aren't really that committed.

I think he is trying, putting himself out there, being honest with her. Yes she was very hurt by Sam and now has trust issues. He should take that into account. But she is running hot and cold. If she just said she couldn't do this or that it was just casual because she'd been too hurt it would be one thing, but she goes for it and then pulls back yanking him around.

 
Reviewer: karentwilighted Signed
Date: September 18, 2009 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22 Demon Scotch and Brotherhood

I am so glad that even in their drunken state (which honestly no tattoo shop with ink you drunk) they realized how it would look with each other's names on their backs. That was my first thought when he said it.

I'm glad she's finally sticking up for herself against James. She needs to talk honestly with Edward about the promotion opportunity or completely dismiss the idea. But if it's on her mind at all, she needs to talk to him. Shitty timing though.

 
The Sweetest Thing by magpye Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 211]
Summary:

Bella is quickly on her way to being a married woman, but what happens when she questions her commitment? AU, AH, OOC.

Nominated for The Indie Twific Awards - Best Alternate Universe Human WIP.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 11 Completed: No Word count: 62947
[Report This] Published: March 02, 2009 Updated: October 28, 2009


Reviewer: karentwilighted Signed
Date: August 31, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: Things We Normally Do

Go Edward. Took strength to stand back fro someone he was so attracted to and do the right thigng but he did it. Not just for himself but for her. Oh and go Edward with the kissing too. Bella on the other hand... not that impressed with her so far in this.

 
Summary:

After Edward left, the Volturi came to visit the Cullens at Aro's request. They are shocked to find them gone and Bella fully aware of their world. What will happen once the Cullens find out Bella has been taken? Before Jacob. B/E

 

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Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: Bella
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 18 Completed: No Word count: 60849
[Report This] Published: March 03, 2009 Updated: August 18, 2009


Reviewer: karentwilighted Signed
Date: June 06, 2009 Title: Chapter 9: The Meeting

I love Emmett like this. So often people portray him as unintelligent, goofy and bumbling. I love protective, strong Emmett.

 
Summary:

 

Moonlight Cove Private School is a boarding school in the small town of Forks, WA.  The school is full of the rich, spoiled teenagers of some the country’s wealthiest families.  The return of the Cullen family to the school after an extended family trip coincides with the start of a new student, Isabella “Bella” Swan. 

Bella stumbles onto Edward Cullen playing the piano in an empty room her first night at Moonlight Cove.  It becomes a nightly thing for her to sit near the classroom and listen to him play but she never goes into the classroom.  Soon, she starts leaving music for him to play on the piano.  He sets out to find the person behind the sheet music being left for him.  He just knows that the person who seems to know exactly what to leave for him each night is the one for him.  Little does he know that she is right outside the door every night, listening and waiting.

Bella and Edward

 


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 15 Completed: No Word count: 29505
[Report This] Published: March 03, 2009 Updated: June 11, 2009


Reviewer: karentwilighted Signed
Date: April 15, 2009 Title: Chapter 9: Falling

Hopefully she'll see the gifts and the playing of her favorite pieces as signs of affection and not get angry that he hadn't told her who he was before this. Take it as flattering rather than sneaky. He should have explained the way he would have if he was chosing to tell her rather than this. He should explain that he enjoys playing for her, that he discovered it was her and didn't want to ruin it by telling her too soon, that he was looking for the right time to tell her, that he did it because he cares.

 
Reviewer: karentwilighted Signed
Date: April 21, 2009 Title: Chapter 10: From Good to Bad

Poor Edward. I mean, obviously poor Bella, but we'll get to more of what's happening to her later. For now we're with poor Edward who is worried and must be panicking.

 
Summary:

Bella joins a dating service hoping to find the man of her dreams.  What she finds is more than she could ever have imagined.   *One Shot*


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes Word count: 7841
[Report This] Published: March 06, 2009 Updated: March 06, 2009


Reviewer: karentwilighted Signed
Date: March 07, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: One Shot

Absolutely love it. You crammed so much into a one-shot. Lovely. So much background on these two. And I love that Edward isn't the usual always-been-gorgeous cocky ass. Being a former pimply band geek would help ground him. Plus him lusting after Bella instead of the other way around. Very sweet, very hot, I like.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much!  It means so much that you took the time to review.

Due to all of the pressure to continue and the great reviews, I just might continue, if I can find time to do both projects.  I am working on my own project with my own characters, but if I can fit this in, I will try my best.

 




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