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Real name: sandra
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Summary:

Edward, Emmett, and Alice are siblings.  Bella, Rosalie, and Jasper are siblings.  Edward and Bella meet in Vegas.  They get drunk, get married, and have a one night stand.  Edward is a total player and a tortured soul who doesn’t want any part of this.  What happens when there are certain repercussions from this one night…like something that takes nine months to happen…and Edward wants nothing to do with Bella or the life they created?  Will he ever come around and stop his womanizing ways to allow himself to truly be happy?


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Angela, Bella, Billy, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Harry, Jacob, James, Jasper, Jessica, Lauren, Leah, Mike, Rosalie, Sam, Seth, Tanya
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Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: No Word count: 2965
[Report This] Published: March 18, 2009 Updated: April 02, 2009


Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: April 02, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Edward, you fucking douchbag!  You worthless piece of shit!  You bastard!  These are thoughts that were running thru my mind as I read the Dear Becca note.  And then we had another Bella POV and I felt so bad for her.  So the thoughts that are running through my mind now are .... Edward, you fucking douchebag!  You worthless piece of shit!  You Bastard!  And in all honesty it doesn't stop there but you get the picture.

I love how this has started.  I'm looking forward to the story.  I'm r-e-a-l curious as to how you are going to fix it.

Sandra

 
Summary:

Bella and Edward have been best friends since high school. One drunken night changes their relationship forever and two friends find there was a lot more hiding below the surface.

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Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, James, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 9 Completed: No Word count: 24470
[Report This] Published: March 18, 2009 Updated: August 11, 2009


Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: May 14, 2009 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 - If It Kills Me

We're ready to read about their fun too!

Jasper made me laugh or should I say Alice did.  When he got to Edward's armed with photos and music it was pretty obvious that Edward did not stand a chance.   This is why I love Alice sooooooo much!

Hard as this is for Bella she did not push him away when he followed her home.  I was moved that she turned into him to cry and loved that he took her home.   Wish he could have held her but I guess that's what got them into trouble in the first place.

Looking forward to what is in store as they begin to discover just exactly what it is they have.

Sandra

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: March 24, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Oh Holy Night ... yes there is no going back once it is done.  Edward seems to be in better control but will Bella be able to accept this?  I'm anxious to find out about the morning after.

Sandra



Author's Response:

Ah the morning after... there really is no turning back after that. :

Sue

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: April 02, 2009 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Oh Sue, what have you done?  lol.  I loved it.  I have a real soft spot for the E/B have known one another forever/are best friends stories.   This one is different in that they have the shock factor going on and her leaving like the wind after he tells her she was a decent fuck.  You and I both know that is not what is going on in his mind but Bella doesn't know.  Nor does Edward have a clue what she was originally thinking.  And Emmett was there?  When did he get home?  And why did he come home early?  Where's Rosalie?   Too many questions!  Far too much curiosity!

Sandra



Author's Response:

Sandra, I have done an evil thing. So many questions, most of them get covered in the next chapter. I'm glad you're enjoying it so far i looooooove the feedback!

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: May 03, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Okay.  Will Bella give her friends not-be-named names to?  Where will she run to hide this time? 

Edward fucked up really bad?  How will he ever fix this?  I really want him to fix it.  But he is not totally at fault this time.  Sure he said what he did but it was spurred by her original comment. 

I'm ever so curious as to how this will be fixed.

Sandra

 
Summary:

Emmett McCarty is tired of the same old meat market. When he meets Rosalie Hale, beautiful but difficult, he feels both attraction and repulsion. Can he put aside his own pride to get to know the real Rosalie? Part of a series entitled "In the Days of Auld Lang Syne."


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Irina, Jacob, Jasper, Rosalie, Tanya
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 4 Completed: No Word count: 17890
[Report This] Published: March 20, 2009 Updated: May 20, 2009


Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: March 22, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Hideous and Sexy

Welcome to Twilighted!  I read the first story to this series several days ago and can't begin to tell you how very happy I was to find the second one tonight. 

The story idea in itself is wonderful but your humor is great.  The line "Better safe than sore tomorrow."  took me a few seconds and I am still laughing!  

Emmett is such a great guy.  How often do you meet a great looking guy that volunteers to read at a library with a costume.  And pulling the guy off the girl in the corner ... what a knight.   I look forward to Roaslie's reaction when she learns the truth. 

Once again, welcome.  I hope you'll be happy here with this wonderful group of writers and readers.

Sandra

 
Overtime by Dreamrider Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 2250]
Summary:

Bella Swan is a writer for a Women's Magazine in Florida, a magazine that she writes the self help column for...Something she really wants to escape. The good news, she is escaping self help, the bad news, she's covering the lives of women behind sports stars...In Denver.

Here she meets three amazing women; the girlfriend, fiance, and wife to two players and the coach of the team, but what will happen when the team superstar, Edward, takes an interest in Bella?

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Warnings: It's NC-17, so basically... Smut, Language.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 33 Completed: Yes Word count: 129668
[Report This] Published: March 23, 2009 Updated: January 18, 2011


Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: April 09, 2009 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 5 - Far From Home

Poor Edward!  And Bella, how is she going to take this?  This should be fun.

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: August 29, 2010 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 27 - A Disaster of a Night (V)

Always a wrench in the works.  That damn James is like a boil that won't go away.  I do hope that Edward will heed Rosalie's advice.  And Bella?  I cringe a little at the thought that she could hurt in all of this.

Sandra

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: April 08, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue - Unwanted Opportunity

I have no room for another story but I've passed this one too many times and for some reason it calls to me.  But any first chapter that ends with Bella telling Jessica to "Go Fuck Yourself" can be put off no longer.  Looking forward to more.

Sandra

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: April 08, 2009 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 1 - A Not-So-Hot Start

OME that was hilarious.  I'm laughing so hard I can't tell you what the rest of the rest of the chapter is about.  I sure hope I didn't miss any importan facts.  Yeah I remember the portfolios so I guess that's good enough, huh?

Sandra

True Story - My sister came to visit.  A vibration was eminating from her purse.  Her 15 year old son handed her the purse and said, "Gosh mom, the vibration on your phone is strong."  So she unzips her purse, reaches in and stops the vibration and zips it back up.  Her son says "Aren't you going to answer it?".   With a straight face she tells him not now.  He goes off to play videos.  She looks at me and says "Oh, lord that could have been bad".   The look of upspoke horror and amusement was all it took to let me know what it was.  But that shit's funny I don't care who you are.   

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: April 08, 2009 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 2 - New Home

Their initial meeting was so innocent.  When they meet tomorrow will it be comfortable or no?  Only one way to find out, right?

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: April 08, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 3 - At the Rink

The realization that they play hockey is staring to sink in.  I do not know the rules but I love to watch hockey.  The freedom of the skates as you fly, yeah.  I've began ice skating at the age of 3. 

Poor Bella.  Her embarrassment, that poor girl.  Had that been Tanya I'd have laughed a lot.  Other than that I thought their meeting went quite well.  Bella sucked it up and went about her business and did real well in setting up the initial premise of the articles she'd be writing  It is pretty obvious that she and Alice will become friends.  

Edward's thoughts made me chuckle.  He seems a bit discombobalated at the girl that is Bella and I do look forward to more.

 

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: April 09, 2009 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 4 - Family Barbeque

The mutual attraction is obvious and I find their attempt to fight it somewhat amusing.  I do love that Edward has been a true gentleman.  So let the game begin, huh?

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: April 11, 2009 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 6 - Far From Normal

IDK, two weeks, ubdeniable chemistry...I really don't think it moved too fast.  I really, really liked that they are going to "try" to keep it to themselves.  I use the word try because I'm not convinced that is going to work, LOL.  However you are the writer and I'll believe whatever you give us.

I like this Edward and Bella.  Bella is focused and knows the reality of her world.  On the other hand everything Edward said made perfectly good sense. The draw they feel toward one another is palpable and I am glad they are not going to fight it.  Loved that Edward shared the childhood memory with Bella.

When I first read the Jessica thing I'm think Nooooooooooooooooooooo.  Imagine my sigh of relief when it was agreed that Angela would do the interview.  So when Jessica was with the white house guy please tell me cigars were not involved.

The one thing that peaks my curiosity at this point is how Bella, or even Edward, it going to react when a girl from his past comes in to play.  Should be very interesting!

Sandra

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: September 18, 2010 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 28 - Playoff Hockey

The moments they spent in the outdoors were so sweet.  All I can say is Bella has more constraint than I do as I would have shouted out yes to the world the moment he asked.   But then again that would not be her way.  

I checked out a few Don Cherry videos.  I guess if one is going to rant like a clown one should dress the part.  Then of course I had to watch a few game videos.  Oh how I miss having a professional team nearby!  Such an exciting game to watch.

 

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: September 18, 2010 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 28 - Playoff Hockey

The moments they spent in the outdoors were so sweet.  All I can say is Bella has more constraint than I do as I would have shouted out yes to the world the moment he asked.   But then again that would not be her way.  

I checked out a few Don Cherry videos.  I guess if one is going to rant like a clown one should dress the part.  Then of course I had to watch a few game videos.  Oh how I miss having a professional team nearby!  Such an exciting game to watch.

 

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: April 19, 2009 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 7 - Going Home

Bella and Edward can't seem to catch a break!  But you have to admire their spunk - they do keep on trying!

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: April 22, 2009 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 8 - Home Ice advantage?

Throw him in the box!  or Go ahead and punch him and throw yourself in the box!  I miss hockey and all the fun things to ell out.

So one would think Tanya is going to cause a bit of a stir.  I'm curious as to how this will affect the growing relationship between Edward and Bella.

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: April 27, 2009 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 9 - The Art of Blackmail

So what is everyone's favorite sleazy smut slut up to?  Perhaps trying to cover up lesbian tendancies?  Make a boyfriend jealous?  Further her career, yeah like this would be necessary?  This should be fun.

I love that it is not going to affect the developing relationships between Edward and Bella.  But I can't help but wonder where that is headed.

Looking forward to more!

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: May 17, 2009 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 11 - Confessions

Sooooo everyone in the family now knows about Bella and Edward.  This is good!  So now if they can get to the bottom of the Tanya story!

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: May 25, 2009 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 12 - Drama

oooooh things are heating up in many ways!

It appears that Jacob may have taken an interest in Bella.  And I wonder what is the story with James and Alice?  And will he take an interest in Bella as well?

In the beginning I was concerned that Angela would let Bella know that she will do the story on Tanya no ifs ands or buts.  I was certainly happy that it did not turn out that way.  But, but I do wonder about the repurcussion of sending Tanya to Florida for the story.

We understand real life and it must come first.  Just update as you can and know that we will all be here waiting for you to come back!

Sandra

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: January 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 22 - Home Again? (v)

So sad for our young lovers.  I like how you added letters from the readers and the news conference.  But that Jessica was just a little to smirky about the whole thing.  Are she and Tanya in cahoots or something? 

Much as I hate for Bella to give up her career I am so ready for her to leave Miami and go to Denver.  Perhaps a magazine somewhere else could pick her up.  Or better yet she could become a free lance journalist. 

Until next time....

Sandra

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: July 11, 2009 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 13 - Rivalry

I've been away for awhile and just catching up myself.

I've been waiting for an arena altercation.  So I'm reading and yelling at the screen, "Throw him in the Box" and "Punch him and throw yourself in the box".  Yes indeed I do love to attend hockey games but alas and alack we do not have a team here.

Six to Eight weeks is not too bad and we will no doubt hear from James again.  I do wonder about Tanya though.  I just can't imagine that she is done wreaking havoc for our couple.

I love how the family has embraced Bella and are so happy to have her in Edwards life.

Sandra

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: July 11, 2009 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 14 - Recovery?

I like this chapter.  I thought you dealt with the realism of her career very well.  As a matter of fact I've like the strong work ethic of his Bella throughout the story.  The makeup time was good.  But uh-oh what is this?  Trouble on the horizon?   hav a feeling things are goig to get quite interesting.

Sandra

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: July 26, 2009 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 15 - Planning

It is so sweet that Rosalie asked Bella to be in the wedding.  And I won't lie I am pretty excited for the Jasper/Alice proposal.

Ah yes, the E/B drama!  Into everyone's life a little rain must fall.  Just think how wonderful it will be when they make up.

 




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