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Overtime by Dreamrider Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 2250]
Summary:

Bella Swan is a writer for a Women's Magazine in Florida, a magazine that she writes the self help column for...Something she really wants to escape. The good news, she is escaping self help, the bad news, she's covering the lives of women behind sports stars...In Denver.

Here she meets three amazing women; the girlfriend, fiance, and wife to two players and the coach of the team, but what will happen when the team superstar, Edward, takes an interest in Bella?

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Warnings: It's NC-17, so basically... Smut, Language.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 33 Completed: Yes Word count: 129668
[Report This] Published: March 23, 2009 Updated: January 18, 2011


Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: April 27, 2009 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 9 - The Art of Blackmail

So what is everyone's favorite sleazy smut slut up to?  Perhaps trying to cover up lesbian tendancies?  Make a boyfriend jealous?  Further her career, yeah like this would be necessary?  This should be fun.

I love that it is not going to affect the developing relationships between Edward and Bella.  But I can't help but wonder where that is headed.

Looking forward to more!

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: May 17, 2009 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 11 - Confessions

Sooooo everyone in the family now knows about Bella and Edward.  This is good!  So now if they can get to the bottom of the Tanya story!

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: May 25, 2009 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 12 - Drama

oooooh things are heating up in many ways!

It appears that Jacob may have taken an interest in Bella.  And I wonder what is the story with James and Alice?  And will he take an interest in Bella as well?

In the beginning I was concerned that Angela would let Bella know that she will do the story on Tanya no ifs ands or buts.  I was certainly happy that it did not turn out that way.  But, but I do wonder about the repurcussion of sending Tanya to Florida for the story.

We understand real life and it must come first.  Just update as you can and know that we will all be here waiting for you to come back!

Sandra

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: January 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 22 - Home Again? (v)

So sad for our young lovers.  I like how you added letters from the readers and the news conference.  But that Jessica was just a little to smirky about the whole thing.  Are she and Tanya in cahoots or something? 

Much as I hate for Bella to give up her career I am so ready for her to leave Miami and go to Denver.  Perhaps a magazine somewhere else could pick her up.  Or better yet she could become a free lance journalist. 

Until next time....

Sandra

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: July 11, 2009 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 13 - Rivalry

I've been away for awhile and just catching up myself.

I've been waiting for an arena altercation.  So I'm reading and yelling at the screen, "Throw him in the Box" and "Punch him and throw yourself in the box".  Yes indeed I do love to attend hockey games but alas and alack we do not have a team here.

Six to Eight weeks is not too bad and we will no doubt hear from James again.  I do wonder about Tanya though.  I just can't imagine that she is done wreaking havoc for our couple.

I love how the family has embraced Bella and are so happy to have her in Edwards life.

Sandra

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: July 11, 2009 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 14 - Recovery?

I like this chapter.  I thought you dealt with the realism of her career very well.  As a matter of fact I've like the strong work ethic of his Bella throughout the story.  The makeup time was good.  But uh-oh what is this?  Trouble on the horizon?   hav a feeling things are goig to get quite interesting.

Sandra

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: July 26, 2009 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 15 - Planning

It is so sweet that Rosalie asked Bella to be in the wedding.  And I won't lie I am pretty excited for the Jasper/Alice proposal.

Ah yes, the E/B drama!  Into everyone's life a little rain must fall.  Just think how wonderful it will be when they make up.

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: August 24, 2009 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 16 - Almost Time

Our couple seems to have a snag of sorts.  I like the realistic approach that Edward is not happy about the injury therefore moodier with those around him.  Bella was lucky to have Rose to talk to.  At let me tell you, I laughed when Rose asked Emmett to talk to Edward and she'd make it worth his while.  I am still laughing that he couldn't talk to Edward quick enough.

Sandra 

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: October 28, 2009 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 19 - Morning

I was so happy to find three updates while I was gone.  I was a little worried at first with the mention of their differences and the angst that may come but the wedding and reception and Christmas morning were a nice "save" and helped create a beautiful buffer to anything that could possibly go wrong.  Each chapter was an HEA on its own and when reading the 3 together...well I will certainly have pleasant dreams...Thank You Very Much!

Sandra

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: November 08, 2009 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 20 - Back on the Ice (V)

Edward in the shower with me, I mean Bella, is always necessary. 

And I agree it was a filler chapter but I did like that Bella had a chance to talk with "the girls".  Sometimes it just helps to voice ones concerns and who to better talk to than girlfriends.  Also liked the E/B skatetime.  It was sweet and fun, although I get the feeling that Bella may beg to differ about the fun part.

Sandra

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: July 05, 2010 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 26 - Road to the Playoffs (V)

I'll tell you what I think.  I think James is a sleazy bastard.  But I also know what goes around comes around and that man is in for one hell of a karma experience.  Perhaps it's about time for him to lose a couple of teeth.

So all the keeping apart and hiding did not work out very well for our couple.  Bella certainly does not deserve the ugly things that James said about her.  At the same time I was impressed that Edward was able to keep his temper in check.

Sandra

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: December 03, 2009 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 21 - A Night to Remember (V)

Hate You?  Never!

We had such a good time at the party, huh?  Got to put Tanya in her place.  Got a great New Years kiss.  I'd like to know how you pulled that off without the camera?!  I sure got a good laugh when Tanya's bid won the picture.  Bella's response was great. 

But the morning after.  Well hell if someone doesn't always rain on the parade.  We knew that sooner or later it had to come so now we it's time to hunkerdown and watch it play out.

Sandra

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: February 15, 2010 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 23 - Reunion (V)

Go Esme!  Perhaps Bella will be leaving with the Cullen clan after all. 

The reuniting of Edward/Bella went quite well.  I sure hope he has a chance to rest up to win the game.  Or maybe I should say I hope he does not become to relaxed to win the game.

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: March 22, 2010 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 24 - Back in the Game (V)

Uneventful?  Nah.  We see how Bella has grown.  But more importantly we see her interaction with the family as they welcome her back into the fold or home if you prefer.  And not just with the Cullens but within the team too as evidenced by Amy bring the baby in to see her.  And I love the way Bella was able to talk to Angela and in turn Angela was able to see for herself how Bella is a part of this family.  It was so perfect.

How ironic you would update today.  I was thinking about Overtime just last night.   Have you noticed how many ff's have popped up recently about hockey?  I am loving them all.

Sandra



Author's Response:

I really have not noticed how many have popped up...I've been busy, I'll have to check them out. The olympics may have sparked that perhaps? Then again, even if it isn't the Olympics, I won't complain at any interest that my favorite sport is generating.

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: May 13, 2010 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 25 - All Star Battle (V)

James is such a weasel. I don't trust him and dread what he will come up with but trutu be known I love the drama that he will deliver and the fact that E/B will rise above it.  

The was a little concern on my part as Bella was zoning out.  Between Edward and Alice she seemed to settle down a bit.

I am loving this story.

Sandra

 

 

 

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: November 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 29 - Old Enemy, New Battle (V)

Hate you?  Never!  Just really excited to find out where she went! And really, really excited for the Avalanch to win.  Looking forward to more.

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: January 05, 2011 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 30 - Nothing Left to Hide (V)

I love how everything blew up in James' face.  It is sad that Bella would lose her job but just think of all the doors opening to her.  I have a feeling she could get any job she wants.  Eh, who would want to work though when they are the girlfriend of Edward Cullen.  By that I mean who would have time for anything else?

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: January 05, 2011 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 31 - A Center Ice Finale (V)

I have loved this story since day one.  Everything about it held my attention.  Real life has kept me from following any story on a regular basis but Overtime updates were always there when I needed one the most, it's as if you knew.

I loved the way you wrote the characters and the strong sense of family and team.  The Avalanche were so real.  I loved them as much as I love the San Antonio Spurs and that is saying a lot.  And the win.  Girl, nothing compares to the final victory.  Unless of course it is a marriage proposal ... or a birth.

Sandra

 

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: January 19, 2011 Title: Chapter 33: Epilogue (V)

What a perfect story.  Thank you so much for sharing it with us.

Sandra

 
Summary:

Bella moved to Southern California with her longtime boyfriend Edward, hoping that their relationship would become stronger. Sadly after being with him for a little over three years, Edward has broken up with Bella and moved on. Now Bella has to figure out who she was and who she will become with the help of her friends and a mystery man.

 

Rated for language.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 17 Completed: No Word count: 33872
[Report This] Published: March 24, 2009 Updated: April 27, 2015


Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: April 07, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Reality

Ooooooh, I think it is safe to say it is crystal clear!  He leaves her and now he wants to talk to her because she understands him?  I'm with Bella on this one...it just doesn't work that way.  And yet it happens. 

Very interesting start to your story if indeed that is Edward and Bella.  I don't know that I've ever read a story that he leaves her for someone else.  I'm ever so curious as to where this is going and hope to read more soon.

Sandra



Author's Response:

I wish that i could tell you exactly where this is going but, i think it's too much fun that i can have you make up theories :) hopefully the next chapter will somewhat help... Thanks for the review!

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: May 04, 2009 Title: Chapter 2: Moving On

Oooooh Edward  what have you done to our Bella.  I was so happy she stood up to him and pretty much told him to fuck off.

So Bella goes on line and chats?  Will she meet someone she knows only she doesn't know she knows him?

I love that this Bella did not just fall back into the arms of the man that threw her to the curb - even if it is Edward.  I hope she can stay strong.



Author's Response:

First of all... Thanks for your review :)

and to answer some of your questions, yes, Bella does go online and chat but she feels that trying to find someone online is not real enough for her, read on and you'll soon find out who the mystery man is... muahahaha

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: July 05, 2015 Title: Chapter 7: Another Night

What s guy, showing up at 3 am to tell her he misses how she folds clothes and picks up after him.  DG, he needs to add a little something else to his game if he wants to win the girl back.  lol.  

The get to know you phase and first kiss B/J share is very sweet.  Like James, I was glad Edward saw it.  However, there may have been a little backfire there if he was out to impress Bella by exchanging words with Edward. I don't know that B/E can ever become what they were but I do look forward to how Edward is going to possibly win her back.  Then again I think most of us have that one person we could let back in.  :)

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: June 10, 2015 Title: Chapter 6: Little Moments

I sure hope James is a genuinely good guy.  I suppose I should trust Laurent and the girls.  In any event it should be fun to watch what this relationship unfold.

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: June 07, 2015 Title: Chapter 5: Getting by With a Little Help...

Coffee with the girls was fun.  Lovin your Laurent!  Jame's call was quite cute but there was that moent when he covers the mouthpiece that set off a flag.  (You know you've read too much ff when, right?!!)  On the other hand our new friend Laurent was not concerned so who am I to grasp at straws.  It should prove interesting to hear what he has to say once he meets James in person.

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: June 07, 2015 Title: Chapter 3: Girl Fight

Can't help but admire her new and improved moxie.  So if Victoria is "the othe woman" and Bella has met James when V comes up to her this could be bad for Bella.  Then again it could prove interesting if James and Victoria end up together leaving Edward on the outside looking in.  I was also amused by Edward's reaction to seeing Bella as she tried to blow him off.  Miss DG I am really curious as to how this could all play out.  :)

*****

WoW!  I began LSH when you started writing it.  Real Life blew me out of the water and I had to stop following all WIPS.  I had no idea you had continued to write until I ran across it yesterday. <3  Now to catch up.  :)

 




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