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It's Our Time by superstarrh Rated: PG-13 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 225]
Summary: Bella is working in a coffee house in Seattle and Edward is the musician who entertains the crowd. What will happen when they cross paths.
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Carmen, Edward, Eleazar, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Rosalie, Tanya
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 20 Completed: Yes Word count: 48196
[Report This] Published: September 11, 2008 Updated: October 18, 2008


Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: October 16, 2008 Title: Chapter 18: Cupid

You are fast!  Read your updates ... Glad she called Tanya.  I'm so happy that Edward isn't giving up and that thier friends are trying to help as well. 

Now I'm counting on you to get the two of them back together! 



Author's Response: All is right with the world again.  THank you so much for the great review, I hope you like the next chapter and keep an eye out for the last one, coming very soon.

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: October 17, 2008 Title: Chapter 19: Cocoon

Jump for joy!  Now I am really looking forward to that last chapter! 

 



Author's Response:

It's about time right.  Hope you enjoyed the last chapter.  Thanks again for the great review.

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: October 18, 2008 Title: Chapter 20: Do You Remember

Oh, superstarrh, I just read the final chapter.  I can't help but let a tear or two fall -- not for sadness but for the perfect happily ever after! 

I am so impressed that this is your first story and can't thak you enough for sharing it with us.



Author's Response: Thank you so much, I'm glad that you enjoyed it so much.  I wanted to make them happy and to show that it all worked out in the end.  Thank you for all the great compliments throughout the story, it really helped to motivate me to keep going, I was truly worried in the beginning there but I had a great time.  thanks.

 
Greed by wish_girl Rated: PG-13 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 23]
Summary: The second chapter of Breaking Dawn, Long Night, in Edward's POV and his second thoughts on waiting until marriage. I'm not very good at these summaries, so please read and review!
Categories: Breaking Dawn Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes Word count: 4341
[Report This] Published: September 12, 2008 Updated: September 12, 2008


Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: October 03, 2008 Title: Chapter 1: Greed

So Beautiful!

 
Freed by CallistoLexx Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 14]
Summary: All Human AU, BPOV, sequel to Trapped. Bella Surprises Edward at home.
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes Word count: 6446
[Report This] Published: September 14, 2008 Updated: September 20, 2008


Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: September 20, 2008 Title: Chapter 1: Freed

Very Hot -

Author's Response: Thank you very much.

 
Summary:

Bella is a witness in peril. Emmett Cullen is the deputy assigned to protect her. When the witness protection program proves unsafe, Emmett has Bella pose as his brother Edward's fiancée. ExB. AU/AH.

 

 

Hiding in Plain Sight

 


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward, Emmett
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 23 Completed: No Word count: 138506
[Report This] Published: September 14, 2008 Updated: June 14, 2012


Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: January 01, 2009 Title: Chapter 14: May 17 - May 18, 2008

Oh, limona, this is probably my favorite chapter so far.  I take back every mean/cold/clinical remark I have said in reference to Edward. 

I loved the whole Truth or Dare game.   The questions were fun and I really wanted her to re-ask the Tanya question, I wanted to hear that answer as well!  Most of all I loved that you let us in to his head, the part that wants to protect Bella ... to keep her safe.  He could have so easily taken advantage of her and chose not to and for that he stands very tall in my eyes.  Maybe I am wrong, but I got the feeling that  Emmett did not have a whole lot to do with that ... but rather Edward wants to do right by Bella.

Your Emmett certainly has the personality traits of a government employee in his line of work.  He's very honest, very blunt, very loyal and protective, all the cards and facts on the table, no surprises, no flowers, no sugar coating .... the person you want on your side if you are on Bella's side of the fence, Heaven help you if you are on the other side.  Do you know my brother-in-law?

I am so impressed with this chapter and can't thank you enough for sharing it with us!   

Sandra



Author's Response:

Sandra,

So glad to hear you enjoyed this chapter. She didn't re-ask the Tanya question because she didn't want him to re-ask the Volturi question. It was like an unspoken agreement.

Emmett was not the reason Edward held back. If Emmett was the only thing stopping Edward, Edward would have at least dodged when Emmett took a swing at him a few chapters back. And, I am glad you like Emmett. I like him too. He and Edward are stark contrasts to each other... but they both mean well.

 

Best,

Christina

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: September 21, 2008 Title: Chapter 3: March 22, 2008

Wow!  Just found this and already I love it!  Edward is so cold and distant and I look forward to watching him lighten up.  This story is going to be great!

Author's Response: Thanks!

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: September 25, 2008 Title: Chapter 4: March 22, 2008, part 2

Those two are going to fall in love ... he's already looking at her differently.  I'm wondering how much Esme expects.

Author's Response: Esme is ready for a wedding. Or you mean you wonder how much Esme suspects? I don't think she suspects anything at this point. Edward always kind of did his own thing.

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: October 08, 2008 Title: Chapter 5: March 24-27, 2008

Ix-nay on the the dulled attraction, Edward!  You are going to miss her "more than you'll ever know"!  The more I read of this story the more I LOVE it!  I'm looking forward to the day with Esme and Carlise and to the charity gala. 

Oh, limona, I don't want to be selfish but I do hope you are able to update soon ..... until then I will be waiting patiently.



Author's Response: It will go up in a few days. Thanks so much for reviewing :)

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: October 12, 2008 Title: Chapter 6: March 28, 2008 - April 2, 2008

I thought perhaps Bella and Edward were getting closer?  Kissing Tanya? .....Ew!  I was certainly happy when he rescued her from Laurent.  Will Edward call her at all while he is away?  Will Bella continue to get closer to Jake?  These new developments seem to separate them that much more. 

This is a wonderful story!  



Author's Response: Argh. I hate that I can't really answer anything you asked. But your questions all resolve in the next few chapters. Thanks so much for reviewing.

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: October 16, 2008 Title: Chapter 7: April 7 - April 11, 2008

Oh, limona, what is going to happen now?   I can understand why Bella would want a friend but why did she have to tell Jake everything?  Is she not putting the Cullen family in jeapardy for hiding her?  I know that Edward is cold and distant in this story but he doesn't deserve this.  If Jacob feels scorned is he going to blow the cover?  Is Alice justified in calling Edward (I have a brother it would be hard not to!)?  How will Edward take the news?  Questions - questions!  

This story is wonderful!  And I am still pulling for Bella to win Edwards heart!



Author's Response: Lots is going to happen now. That's the short answer. Stay tuned for chapter 8. :)

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: October 18, 2008 Title: Chapter 8: April 13 - April 14, 2008

What the hell is the idea behind an Emmett sized cliffie, the promise of a teaser and a tentative posting date for next weekend after a very suggestive, teasing chapter?  Oh, limona, this was sheer brilliance or pure evil! 

I choked on my diet coke when I read- '"Bella.  It needs to be open  gently."'... '"As he drew up the cork, he paused before drawing it all the way out."'  This whole wine episode was a rather masterful innuendo and I couldn't help but laugh at the brilliance.

The sexual tension that is building between E/B is being transferred to your readers through means of teasers and well chosen words.  

Ah ha, I knew it!  I knew that somewhere along the lines that his cold, clinical demeaner would begin to dissolve.  He doesn't want Jake to have Bella because he wants her for himself!   "Mine" is just a matter of time!

And one more thing, just a thought actually - Bella has to try to make this right by Alice .... but what about Esme?  I am protective as a sister but it is nothing compared to my protective nature as a mother... Of course I do know that this is ff and of very little importance!

I've liked this story from the start but it is so much fun to read that it is fast becoming a favorite! 

So until next weekend I will be waiting patiently!



Author's Response:

Did you really think that was a cliffie? I thought I did good this time, not leaving people as upset as they were after chapter 7.

Glad you liked the wine scene. It was my personal favorite moment of the chapter.

No, Edward doesn't want Jake to have her. Or anyone else either, apparently, since Bella gave him an out and he said No. 

As a mom myself, the Esme thing did not escape me, but A) Edward is more concerned about what his sister thinks than what his mom thinks, and B) if Bella wins over Alice, Alice can do damage control with Esme. Also, I don't think Edward believes Bella can succeed anyway, so it is a moot point to him.

Thanks for reviewing! 

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: October 24, 2008 Title: Chapter 9: April 15 - April 18, 2008

Aaaaaaack!  I'm sorry for being so greedy but I wasn't ready for the chapter to be over yet!  And I'm really embarrassed because it was a long chapter.

Love this Rose!  I am so happy that she is helping Bella.

So is Edward seeing Tanya while he is out late?  Sure he has opened his home to Bella and I can understand that it was poor judgement on Bella's part to have Jake in the house yada, yada but, but he's not being fair to her.  He's being cold and clinical not very nice. His staying out late and leaving her by herself is cruel.  If it were me I think I'd be happier in a jail.  It's hard to believe that someone that can do so much for charities and has so little respect for the human soul.  There's a part of me that wants to grab him by the tie and ask him what his problem is.  

Now that Alice and Bella are on the mend will it take ahile for Edward to start coming home at night?  What has happened to Edward that he is so controlling.  Of course Alice is a bit on the spoiled side too.  

Sorry to be all over the place with this review.  I really do enjoy this story.  I just want Edward to be nicer!



Author's Response:

Someone else told me the chapter was too short. I'm glad you saw that it wasn't short at all.

I can't say what Edward was doing, but he gets all of chapter 10 to tell us about it.

Would you really be happier in jail? At least Bella has books and privacy and space to relax in Edward's house.

Thanks for reviewing! And yes, almost everyone wants him to be nicer. I hear that a lot. :) 

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: November 08, 2008 Title: Chapter 10: April 17 - 19, 2008

Oh, limona, how can one not love this story!  Your Edward is breaking down.  In the beginning I saw him as cold and distant and little by little he is warming up. 

The fact that Alice is upset with both Edward and Bella is pretty funny.  Finding that her ever perfect brother is not so perfect in her eyes was somewhat amusing.  Spending time with Rosalie and Emmett and the girls is wonderful.  Little  by little I can see Bella working her way into the heart of the Cullen family. 

I really like how you're slowly bringing Edward and Bella together.  Just enough tension to make it interesting but not so much that I'm screaming at the computer.

 But have I missed something?  Edward is keeping a list of the Volturi?  How does he know them?  Are they watching him?  Certainly they do no suspect?  Oh, and Jake, will he be rehired next chapter?  I can see where that whole incident could cause problems.  If Edward knows about the Volturi and they are watching him they know he has fired Jacob.  Maybe they question Jacob?  Jacob could be giving them information unknowingly?  Especially if he thinks Bella is unsafe with Edward?   Maybe I need to check out the forum!

I had a rather eerie thought while reading - the Volturi find out that Edward is hiding Bella - He begins to transfer money into other accounts - they fake their deaths - they sail off into the sunset never to be seen or heard from again.  No, I'm sure I am watching to many movies again!

In any event, take care of yourself.  In the meantime I will be waiting patiently for the next update. 



Author's Response:

No, no, not a list of Volturi. The names of the Volturi standing trial are not a secret. Edward was researching what businesses they were connected to, to try and get a feel for who might be directly connected to them. The Volturi own a large chunk of the country, after all. Maybe I wasn't clear. It's hard in someone's POV, because they don't need to be clear with themselves about something that is obvious to them. I will try to make a clearer picture when they next come up, since several people are concerned about this.

The Volturi are not watching Edward. They would have no reason to. Jacob is not being interrogated by the Volturi in his absence from the story.

As for your ideas about Bella and Edward faking their deaths and living on some island in the South Pacific... I have spent a lot of time and energy building Edward's extended family. It would be a great big bummer for all involved if Bella and Edward could never go home!

Thanks, as ever, for your thoughtful review. 

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: November 08, 2008 Title: Chapter 1: February 29, 2008

in response to your respone ~ thanks for clearing that up about the Volturi list.  When I reread I saw that I read waaaaaaay to much into it. 

Thanx again for this wonderful story!

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: November 19, 2008 Title: Chapter 11: April 19 - April 26, 2008

Oh, limona, I have chills after reading that chapter. Thank you for allowing the whole thing to play out ... a cliffie would have been just plain wrong!   

So now where do they go?  Will the dynamic change after such an intimate moment?   Will he want to be more gentle with her now?  Can he be more relaxed and less clinical with her now?  Will they begin to spend more quality time together?   I guess what I want to know is will they begin to fall in love now?

Thanx for giving us a double chapter.  It was as beautiful and as it was pivitol.

 



Author's Response:

Yes, a cliffie would have been wrong, that's why there was a double chapter. :)

Can't answer your questions now, but the story will in time. 

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: November 29, 2008 Title: Chapter 12: April 27 - May 5, 2008

I am happy that Edward is teaching Bella how to swim because it , means they're spending more time together.   But I'm not getting the whole first time together thing ... I guess I wanted it to mean more than it did.  I wish we could have felt more intimacy the next morning....not an imprinting kind of love but something more.  And please know that I am not finding fault as it is obvious that this story is very well thought out and there is a method to your madness and all will be revealed in due time........

When I read your teaser I knew that Emmett was going to be pissed with his brother and I was right!

Maybe Edward is feeling a little something that he is not owning up to in not wanting to let Bella out of his sight while she is being moved around for witness protection business. 

Hot tub or no this is and I am somewhat certain will continue to be one of my all time favorites!  I am so intrigued with this wonderful story.

Sandra

 

 



Author's Response:

Sandra, thanks so much for your thoughtful review.

We really only got a brief peek at Edward because I needed to move the rest of the plot forward. I am going to try and give us more Edward next chapter. The swimming is big... it is Edward reaching out to Bella. I do think the sex was big-- you will see them spending a lot more time together and doing more things together.

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: December 19, 2008 Title: Chapter 13: May 4 - May 15, 2008

Really like that Bella is spending more time witjh Edward and enjoying it.  Also like that she is spending time with Esme.

As always I am hungry for more!  But that's okay ... enjoy your holidays.  May they be filled with nothing but the best for you and yours!

Sandra



Author's Response:

Thanks so much for your sweet review. Happy holidays!

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: January 01, 2009 Title: Chapter 14: May 17 - May 18, 2008

*addition to review!

By do right by her I mean that he saw her when she was so very scared and he has been able to bring her out and help her feel a little more secure. 

I really wish I could be more articulate.  Just know that little by little I am really coming to appreciate the goodness within Edward. 

Thanks again  ~  Sandra

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: January 18, 2009 Title: Chapter 15: May 18 - May 20, 2008

Oh limona, loved spending time with Alice and Bella.  I'm still smirking that Alice will spend time with Bella and Edward while Jasper is out of town.  This truly is a wonderful story!

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: February 15, 2009 Title: Chapter 16: June 3 - June 6, 2008

Oh limona, how could one not love this story?  The building feelings between Bella and Edward is written beautifully.  I can't help but smile that inevitable has been set in motion and even Emmett is going to be able to stop it.    



Author's Response:

Thanks, mscope. :)

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: June 08, 2009 Title: Chapter 17: June 7 - June 13, 2008

mscope waves to limona whilst jumping up and down - I'm here!  Reading anything you write! 

I love the changes we are seeing in Edward.  Bella is really under his skin now and I do not believe he will ever be able to let her go!  Love that she trusts him so intensely and he is there for her.

And Bella.  Cheez Louise.  I still don't now how you are ever going to get her out of this, witness protection or not.  Naturally I have every faith in you to do so.  The suspense is one of the things that I enjoy so much about this story.

Welcome back limona!

Sandra



Author's Response:

Sandra-- thanks so much for being a longtime follower. I really appreciate your support!

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: July 14, 2009 Title: Chapter 18: June 14 - June 20, 2008

Oh limona, it never matters to me how long it takes to get a new chapter ... it simply matters that we get them.

I actually had tears in my eyes when Edward held the baby.  I am sooooo sappy like that and it was written so very beautifully.

Now this Jenks guy has me just a little bit worried.  Good guy?  Bad guy?  I really, really want him to be a good guy.

Can Esme get any more loveable than she was in this chapter?  I mean giving Bella pointers and everything is this chapter.  I found myself giggling a time or two. 

Yeah, yeah I know lots of other great stuff happened...the dance, the date, the convo with Jake...but thoughts of all that kinda flew out the window.

When Edward and Bella declared their love.  They were a couple of horn dogs in the beginning but when he said he loved her at the end ... well i may be typing this with some kind of silly girl crush grin as my heart flutters.

EXCELLENT CHAPTER!

Sandra

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: January 10, 2010 Title: Chapter 19: June 20 - June 24, 2008

Limona ~

Sometimes I forget how truly wonderful a story is. 

Edwards admission of love to Bella really brought out the girly giggles from me.  And I was so happy to see him relaxed with Emmett.  I gave a sigh of relief with the whole looking ahead strategy that he is working on.  

The whole thing was excellent.  Thank you for coming back and finishing this.

Sandra



Author's Response:

Thank you for sticking with this story.

 
Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: February 01, 2010 Title: Chapter 20: August 1 - September 4, 2008

Why did Mr. Jenks give me the willies when he was questioning Rose.  And what kind of questions did he ask?   If he is Volturi trained he knows what he is looking for.

Edward is going to take her being gone very hard.  She has so thoroughly become a part of the family that they will all take it hard.   But the saddest thing is she is out there on her own with no one to help her.

 




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