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Penname: mscope [Contact]
Real name: sandra
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Member Since: May 18, 2008

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Edward Cullen made Bella Swan’s life a living hell from age ten to twelve. Finally fed up with the torment and teasing, she moved to Phoenix. Now she’s seventeen, beautiful, and has a new sense of confidence. When her mother sends her back to Forks for her senior year, she is determined to shake things up.

NC-17 for sexuality, underage drinking, and language. OOC, just to be safe. Some canon pairings, some absolutely the opposite.

Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Angela, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, James, Jasper, Jessica, Laurent, Mike, Rosalie
Series: None
Chapters: 20 Completed: No Word count: 55461
[Report This] Published: October 28, 2008 Updated: August 22, 2009

Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: December 17, 2008 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8: Bikini Strings and Testing

I'm sorry I can't stop laughing at your Edward!  What a dumb fuck!  I've actually known guys like that.  I really do look forward to his "redemption".   This story is so much fun to read.

Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: January 20, 2009 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11: Laughing Games and Melodrama

Loved this chapter!  Loved Bellas words to describe Maria.  Loved Edwards reaction.  Loved Jaspers diplomacy and tact and kindness.  All that goodness is going to comeback and bite him in the ass!

Looking forward to the next chapter, patiently of course.  Always worth the wait!


Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: February 11, 2009 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12: Lamb Chop and Dilemmas

whoa, I did not see that happening.  not yet anyway.

Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: February 21, 2009 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13: Ultimatums and Tears

Oh wow, Jasper really blew it!  Thank you for not putting her with James.  Just being friends with him is ok.  Hmmmm, who will pickup the pieces?

Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: March 09, 2009 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15: Edward and Drunk!Bella

You know, we were told in advance that there would be a cliffie with this chapter but, dammit, did you have to be evil!  Loved it!  Loved the cliffie, hell loved the whole chapter.  I was very happy that he finally apologized and so glad that Bella and Edward are seemingly going to be civil to one another.


Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: March 19, 2009 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16: Covering and Junk Food

Well, Sarah, if you are going to hell for writing smut you'll be taking a lot of readers to hell with you!  I just wonder you tied the poor distraught dear down and forced her to read it.  

Edward handled Jasper's visit quite well.  But seeing Lauren at the store.....hmmm.....will he put 2 and 2 together?  I look forward to how this will play out.  And thanx for the end of chapter teaser.


Summary: Edward reveling in the joy he has in his new life with Bella and Renesmee. EPOV.
Categories: Breaking Dawn Characters: Bella, Edward, Renesmee
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes Word count: 1014
[Report This] Published: October 29, 2008 Updated: November 14, 2008

Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: December 25, 2008 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

How very beautiful!


When Bella is seventeen she is brutally attacked for weeks. She escapes and is saved by Edward Cullen. Six years later, adjusting to normal life is difficult for her. Edward enters her life, shaking things up.

 Thanks to pixieyow for the banner.

Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Jacob, James, Jasper, Laurent, Rosalie, Tanya
Series: None
Chapters: 26 Completed: Yes Word count: 67075
[Report This] Published: October 29, 2008 Updated: January 31, 2009

Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: November 02, 2008 Title: Chapter 4: Even Actresses Fail Sometimes

So I can't help but wonder if this reconnection was a fluke or it maybe Alice and JAsper arranged it?  Of course it doesn't really matter.  I look forward to the next chapter very much!

Secret by Twilighter620 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 223]

As crime tarnishes the image of Seattle, Edward Masen lives as the disillusioned, hot-shot, Lieutenant of the Seattle Police Department's S.W.A.T. team. He soon realizes his fascination with the Seattle Weekly Journal's investigative reporter Isabella Woods - but all is not as it seems with Ms. Woods and her identity. Will Edward be able to change his ways and finally fall in love in a city that's tumbling to pieces?

Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Series: None
Chapters: 22 Completed: No Word count: 111243
[Report This] Published: October 30, 2008 Updated: May 27, 2009

Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: November 16, 2008 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 5

Dear Twilighter ~

     I just finished reading this story, I went to ff to grab the last chapter, and wow, this is great.  The plot, the characters are new to me in that I have not seen this in a Twilight fan fic before and I am so excited for something new.

    The Bella (Isabella)/Charlie relationship is so heartwarming.  Being a daddy's girl myself I can understand and identify that Charlie would want his daughter with the one person that he feels can keep her safe.  Your Bella is confident and that is always fun to read.  But most of all, of course, is the how the Bella/Edward relationship is beginning to unfold.

     You've done a great job in introducing the characters to us.  The family history in chapter 1 was very insightful.  Will we see any more of Edward's natural father....will he be a part of this Fiori gang?  Esme and Carlisle always belong together!   Jasper as Edward's stepbrother is great and his pending marriage to Alice is fun.  I'm interested to see how that is going to play into the story ..... I can't help it, the wheels are already turning!  The little bit about Alice's mom, the MILF, made me laff. ::raises eyebrows::  Maybe she'll meet Charlie?  And what Twilight fanfic is complete without Rosalie/Emmett.  Her tragic past and their pairing is perfect.   And I like what you've shown of your Jake.  I'm Team Edward all the way but sometimes the story has to start in a different direction it is the final HEA that matters!

     Oooooh, and according to the thread we'll meet Tanya?  Hmmmmm.  This has peeked my curiosity with Vanessa.  Your Edward sees himself as quite the ladies man but he wants to commit so .....?  Hmmmm, what direction?  I found it interesting that "Valence" described Bella as having Angelina Jolie lips - honest injun without fail I always picture Tanya to look like Angelina - yeah, go figure!  I think it has to do with the whole Jennifer - Brad - Angelina thing.

     Valence is an interesting character.  I'm not sure I fully trust him.  Maybe my  mind is just  working overtime on the story which is a sure sign that I really like it!

     Random questions and thoughts - I see you've written a 3 chapter one shot.  I'm waiting to read it, will you tell us when it comes into the story?  I did listen to your song choices.  I feel they give the reader a better insight to the story oherwise the author would not post them!  I'm sorry you had a poor comment about the lemon question...there is always a rotten egg in the bunch.  And my last comment...I saw on your profile that you are in Florida...we spent 10 years in the Panhandle.  Great State!  I almost forgot - when I read a story I really like I can't stop the theories from forming - do you want to hear them, would you rather I keep them to myself, share them on the threads or share them with you here in the reviews?  

Your newest Reader ~  Ms. Cope


Author's Response:

Oh gosh where do I begin? lol

I'm glad you appreciate Bella's relationship with Charlie. A lot of people weren't as enthusiastic about it and it actually frustrated me. I love Bella and Charlie's dynamic and the nature of their relationship. I'm a Daddy's girl as well so I was able to put in a lot of my relationship with my father into the relationship between Charlie and Bella.

Oh Edward's biological father will definitely be brought up soon. There's too much drama in that relationship to pass it up. I'm all about the dramatics and the extremities in this story if you hadn't noticed, haha ;) I don't think Charlie and Mrs. Brandon will meet. There would never be a setting for them to meet. I'm glad you like my Jacob as well. I'm completely Team Edward but that doesn't mean Jacob's a bad guy or any less of a good suit for Bella. He's just not Edward (unfortunately for him).

Another little note, I'm sorry if I gave the wrong impression. Tanya won't be appearing. I don't think that she'll make an apperance at all in Secret. I haven't really made a decision on that. I guess you'll find out when I do. It's another blonde.

I find it highly interesting that you noticed Valence's character. I can't give anything away so I'll just leave it at that. I'm interested to see what you think of him as the story progresses.

The one-shot is actually only one chapter. The other 2 chapters are author's notes. The one-shot was an entry in Jayeliwood's Sexy Eddie contest so I had to update occasionally about the contest. The one-shot is the full B/E-lemon chapter. The prologue here on Twilighted is just a snippet of that one-shot. I don't mind either way if you read it before it happens or not. I know some readers are opting to wait. I'm glad you've listened to the songs. I spent about at least 3 hours working on a soundtrack for the story so I appreciate that you've taken the time to listen to them. I think they benefit the readers. It heightens the experience.

I live in Central Florida. I've actually never been to the Panhandle. I was supposed to head up there and attend FSU (I'm a die-hard Seminole) but I decided to stick around town at a local community college until I decided what exactly I'd like to do. And, ironically enough, I've figured out it's writing =)

I don't mind the theories at all. Keep em coming ;) But you should definitely come on over to the thread!

Barcelona by elizabeth18 Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 15]
MISSING MOMENT FROM "HINDSIGHT" One night can change everything. 
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella
Series: Missing Moments
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes Word count: 6603
[Report This] Published: October 31, 2008 Updated: November 01, 2008

Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: November 02, 2008 Title: Chapter 1: Barcelona

Glad that you did the Barcelona trip for us.  They thought things would never be the same.  I was very saddened that Edward thought of it as a mistake and she was very happy.  Altho he thought of it as a mistake for a different reason than she was thinking.  It's no wonder things go from bad to worse with those two.  I look forward to the story update.  Hopefully they will begin to fix what stands in thier way of happiness.

Author's Response: Thanks!

Harem by CallistoLexx Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 9]
Summary: It's Halloween and Alice is throwing a party, where Edward and Bella want nothing more than to get away.  AU/AH, sequel to Trapped & Freed.
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Jasper, Rosalie, Tanya
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes Word count: 6732
[Report This] Published: October 31, 2008 Updated: October 31, 2008

Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: November 02, 2008 Title: Chapter 1: Harem

Wow ~  Beautifully written~  The last lines beautiful!

Author's Response: Aw, thank you.  :)  I'm glad you liked it.


Edward is a lonely homesteading cowboy in northern Nevada, Bella is a mail order bride full of secrets.   What happens when Edward discovers her lies?  Can he forgive her? Can she measure up?

Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Angela, Bella, Ben, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Jessica, Lauren, Mike, Tanya, Tyler
Series: None
Chapters: 27 Completed: Yes Word count: 85364
[Report This] Published: November 01, 2008 Updated: December 09, 2008

Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: August 26, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This story has been on my to read list for a very long.  I have decided to change that!

Bella is so very down trodden.  That vile Mike Newton, if Edward ever gets his hands on him I hope he suffers...severely.

What can I say?  I love your Mrs. Cope!  How scandalous or controversial her profession would be considered in todays times yet so common at the time.  Anyway, she seems so motherly and caring of the girls that come to her.

At home on the ranch with Edward one gets a sense of the open land.  What moves me is the fact that he sought gold when he left on his journey and when that did not happen he chose to redefine what he wanted and stayed creating a different dream.  He had to be pretty convincing to encourage Carlisle and Esme to join him in his new life. 

Jasper and Alice, Rose, Emmett.  A little chuckle escapte with the introduction of each.  They may not be human but I love their characteristics. 

So he has his aunt and uncle.  His animals.  His homestead.  His house.  Now he needs a wife to make the house a home. 

I am smiling.  Nany, nany, nany I do not have to wait for an update.


Author's Response:

I'm glad you've started in on the story, and yes, you are very lucky that you don't have to wait for updates! Thanks so much for reviewing, I look forward to hearing more of your thoughts on upcoming chapters!

Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: August 26, 2009 Title: Chapter 2: Correspondence and Preparation

If you could see me you'd see a silly smile.  I mean how can one not be overjoyed with the obvious happiness of Bella and Edward.  Each have made their own preparations and each quite giddy actually.

Once again Mrs. Cope has stolen my heart with her genuine care of Bella.  Her motherly instincts are endearing and I am sure that Bella will remember her fondly.   The visit with Angela went quite well.  I can't help but wonder if we will see her again.  Perhaps there is a certain Ben Cheney in Nevada looking for a wife? 

Edwards mention to Carlisle about his impulsive decision went far better than I would have imagined.  It seemed the news put everyone in great spirits.  Edwards preparation for Bella's arrival elicited many feelings within me.  It warmed my heart that he would air the blankets and rework the bed and buy new pillows for her arrival.  And don't get me started that he would have already made preparations with the parson.  Yeah, silly grin on my face.

As Bella and Edward learn about one another in their letters one can almost feel the growing connection between them and they haven't even met. 

My only worry for them is what Mike did to Bella.  Will she tell Edward about this?  Or worse yet, will she be with child? 

My heart stutters as I wait to read the next chapter.  It will be a while though because I must go to the grocerty store.


Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: August 26, 2009 Title: Chapter 3: Is She Here Yet?/Am I There YET?

The more I read the more I love it! They haven't even met and I have happy tears.  Your story is really playing havoc with my emotions.  And the animals!  giggle.  They are too cute.  The personalities are spot on.  PETA would be proud.

I am a bit concerned for Bella's dreams. 

Edward is so cute in this chapter thinking of his cabin as their home and wanting it to be a happy home. The daisy is so close to my heart.  Looking forward to his first reaction.

Why did I wait so long to start this story?


Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: August 26, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: At Last We Meet

Lifetime duties keep getting in the way! 

So he knows and so do we.  Just 18?  Why not only is she a mail order bride, she is a child bride as well!  And she doesn't cook!  But my favorite part is it all came out in the wash and he wanted her anyway.  Oh me of little faith!  

So tomorrow will begin the true test of life in the west for Bella.  Not that they have met and are married I feel the real story is beginning.

I am curious to find out what age Bella was when she lost her parents.  We know Edward was 12.  I hate the thought that she has been on her own that long.


Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: August 26, 2009 Title: Chapter 5: Meet the Family

I can't believe I am so drawn to the animals! Emmett, Jasper, Alice all seem to like Bella just fine.  That Rose is gonna take some time!  Jessie = Jessica?  I don't know about the other 2.  They do not seem to be overly fond of Bella either. 

Only Bella could fall back on a cow patty.  Makes one wonder is Rose did not know what she was doing.

Bella's talk of leaving had my eyebrow up in a flash.  Thankfully Edward talked her into staying this time.  It is my observance that having had Bella in his, their, home for less than 24 hours has made such a difference in his life.  I don't know that he could go back to the way it was before she came.  How difficult it must have been for him to have been so isolated before she came.  He is lucky she is there before the true isolation of winter sets in.


Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: August 27, 2009 Title: Chapter 6: Going Visiting

I can see a piano for Edward but it seems too expensive.  For Bella I am not so sure.  Something to make her chores easier.  And the poor dear needs some kind of balm or rendered cream for her hands.  Perhaps Esme will show her how to make it.

So Bella has met Esme and Carlisle.  Life will be easier for her with Esme in her life.  Girls need girlfriends.  We don't do well without them! 

The tender moments between Edward and Bella in this chapter were heartwarming.  Edward's patience and love for Bella are evidenced in everything he says and does for her.  I'm so impressed with the way the story is going.


Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: August 27, 2009 Title: Chapter 7: Amends

Rose reminds me a lot of my sister's cow, Clara.  So Rose and Bella have reached and understanding.  Don't you know Bella is happy about that.  Now she needs to have a talk with the three old biddies and ask if they'd like to come to Sunday dinner.

Apparently Edward and Bella have taken things slow enough!  I love that he combed her hair.   He is so very gentle with her it is hard not to get wrapped up in their tender feelings of love.


Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: August 27, 2009 Title: Chapter 8: To Town


This is one time I am really glad I do not have to wait for an update.  Besides you strike me as an HEA kinda girl.

Loved that they shared more of their personal stories on the ride into town.  Shopping was quite a bit of fun.  And don't you know Edward was happy to introduce his wife to Tyler and Bonnie.   I couldn't help but grin at Tyler when he told her that Edward saw her ad at his store.  It was almost as if I felt like he introduced them.

The Christmas presents are revealed.  Each is going to be so happy.


Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: August 27, 2009 Title: Chapter 9: Aftermath

"Thank you for helping her, may I ask the name of my wife’s savior?"

"The name’s Cheney, Sheriff Ben Cheney." I extended my hand and he shook it firmly, "Edward Masen, and my wife Bella. Thank you again."


Okay, why do you think I squeed, rather loudly I might add, when I read the above.  Well there may have been a little bit of a dance going on as well.  Perhaps Angela is coming to town? ::raises eyebrow::

Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: August 27, 2009 Title: Chapter 10: Projects

Yeah, I found my self with the desire to make a pound cake too!  But it is too late. 

Define foreshadowing?  I am beginning to wonder if Bella is not pregnant?  But she does not have other symptoms.  Hmmmm. 

One more chapter before I go to bed.


Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: August 27, 2009 Title: Chapter 11: More than a Gift

They truly had a Merry Christmas!  Perhaps we will hear more music?

And about this foreshadowing?  The three guys from town aren't going to come out and pay the Masen's a visit are they?  Or the animals are not going to be struck with a disease like hoof and mouth are they?  I really, really don't want anything to happen to Emmett. 

And speakng of the livestock....the 3 fowl weather friends seem to be nicer latel.  Did Bella have a talk with them too?  Or did the mere mention of "come to dinner" make that decide to be nicer?  Did I tell you my son has a friend that had a chicken that he named dinner?  Had being the operative word here.


Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: August 28, 2009 Title: Chapter 12: A Day with Friends

Mel, I absolutely adore the animal moments.  I feel is though I have stepped into Disney movie complete with a cheesey grin and birds singing.  The ribbon for Rose was extra special.  I do believe Bella is right in saying a new Emmett or Rose will arrive in the future.

Now about Jake.  I have a feeling that he is going to do something very special to protect Bella?  Yes?  No?



Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: August 28, 2009 Title: Chapter 13: Visitors and Lessons

What a beautiful chapter!

Edwards love letter to Bella is enough to make one's heart flutter.  And do you have any idea how, once again I might add, very excited and happy I was to see Angela?  What a pleasant surprise for Bella.  Now for Angela to meet Esme!

"He placed both hands on the sides of my cheeks and tilted my face toward his. He looked on me with so much love and devotion I nearly melted into a puddle, but he held me fast and gently lowered his lips to mine, searing the knowledge of his commitment into my soul."

You have no idea how much passages like that touch me!

Bella is learning to shoot!!!  How can one not admire her spunk? 

So will Jake protect her from a wild animal or maybe even Mike Newton.  hmmm.


Reviewer: mscope Signed
Date: August 29, 2009 Title: Chapter 14: Happy Trails

Bella is gonna have some explaining to do about Jake and I have a feeling Edward will be none to happy about it.  I still Jake will prove to be very useful.  Kind of reminds me of Wolf in The Clan of the Cave Bear Series.

So Bella has learned to mount and dismount a horse.  Lucky for her Alice likes her.  I do not think she'd be so lucky otherwise!




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