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Summary:

Bella is a witness in peril. Emmett Cullen is the deputy assigned to protect her. When the witness protection program proves unsafe, Emmett has Bella pose as his brother Edward's fiancée. ExB. AU/AH.

 

 

Hiding in Plain Sight

 


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward, Emmett
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 23 Completed: No Word count: 138506
[Report This] Published: September 14, 2008 Updated: June 14, 2012


Reviewer: sb7 Signed
Date: June 08, 2009 Title: Chapter 17: June 7 - June 13, 2008

I am definitely still reading, and still loving the story.  I hope the next chapter is less than two months away, because stopping it there is cruel!!!!!!  Great chapter though!  I'm looking forward to finding out more about what Bella knows about the Volturi.



Author's Response:

Thank you for letting me know you're still reading. The next chapter is definitely less than two months away, as I hope to finish the story by the end of September. :)

 
The List by Laura Cullen Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 13646]
Summary:

Four weeks before her wedding to Edward, Bella is frustrated. She knows there's little-to-no chance of getting him to bend his rules and boundaries now, but there's no harm in fantasizing about what could happen later. So she begins compiling a list of things that she and Edward can do together once they're happily married. She's surprised to find she might be able to cross some things off earlier than she thought...

Story contains mature themes and is not intended for younger readers.

Thanks to Mandi, aka m81170, for the great banner!


Categories: Post-Eclipse Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 28 Completed: Yes Word count: 187877
[Report This] Published: December 28, 2008 Updated: March 18, 2010


Reviewer: sb7 Signed
Date: May 13, 2009 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21: The Wedding

I thought it was a very well described wedding, very beautiful.  Their first night together as husband and wife was very romantic, not too angsty, and I like how you made undressing the majority of the foreplay.  They took it slow and sweet, not rough and smutty :)

 
Summary: Feature

 

While hunting one afternoon, Emmett, Jasper and Carlisle stumble upon what appears to be a corpse.  When they learn it's a severely broken vampire, they take him home to do what they can to help.  But of course, fate has plans for this man.  Canon Couples.  AU.  DARK Themes.


Categories: AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 32 Completed: Yes Word count: 158872
[Report This] Published: February 26, 2009 Updated: October 31, 2011


Reviewer: sb7 Signed
Date: June 30, 2009 Title: Chapter 20: The Reunion

I like talkative Edward :)  His version of the events going on mentally between he and Jane and Aro gave a very nice new dimension to the version in the previous chapter.  You always get the impression, with Aro, that he's fake with Carlisle.

I'm glad Bella didn't fling herself at Edward, and her mental deliberations were pretty accurate, "I totally should...well, maybe not....yeah but why not....stop being greedy...but maybe he wants it..."  And then she got what she (clearly Edward too) wanted.  I think I like it most because of the line "I need you, too." It's not "love" but it's getting there :)

Oh yeah, and I like how he was feeling Bella out now that he knows how dangerous it's been for her to get so close to him.

 
Reviewer: sb7 Signed
Date: May 13, 2009 Title: Chapter 16: The Dance

I assume no matter where any of the Cullens are in the house, Edward knows what they're thinking.  So as soon as Alice has a vision, Edward knows, and as soon as Carlisle thinks of a concern, Edward knows.  And if Emmett pictured Bella making out with Edward as her "goodbye" for the evening, Edward would be privy to that image.   So, no one has to tell him anything.

Why does it seem Edward is dwelling on his captors when this new Volturi info has been dropped on him?  Shouldn't he be worried about this new dangerous threat?  Especially since he's so unfamiliar with the vampire world?  I'm assuming his captors and the Volturi are not related.

I also get the impression from the way Edward interacts with Bella; affectionate touches, amused looks, hugs w/ swaying, that he's drawing from experiences with girls as a human teenager.  His humanity seems to be pretty well intact for having been turned into a vampire so long ago, and spending all that time NOT being molded by a father-figure, but being abused.

Another great chapter -- one of these updates I should try to put into words why I like your writing so much.  The best part is that I don't get tripped up on strange word choices or weird descriptions.  I can just focus on the story :)

 

 
Reviewer: sb7 Signed
Date: April 14, 2009 Title: Chapter 12: The Bath

I'm totally into this story, it's one of my favorites of my favorites :)  His recovery process is taking excrutiatingly long, but I assume it matches the horrendous life he's had to suffer.  Not something he can just snap back from quickly. Your pace makes me think this will be a veeeeery long story, which makes me  perfectly happy.

I was thinking that an added comfort of his being in Bella's guestroom is that her smell is likely all over everything in there, including the bed!

I was also thinking that of all the people for Edw... I mean ;) this abused vampire to fear, Bella should be the most frightening.  If he can't read her mind (I'm assuming that's the case here), the mystery of her intentions should make him the most uneasy.  I find it hard to believe he would fear Carlisle's thoughts because wouldn't he see his positive motivations, and those of all the Cullen's?  But, I'm willing to suspend that complaint to find out what he's suffered, possibly at the hands of someone he trusted????



Author's Response:

hmm, we shall see :)

I have explanation after explanation for why he allows bella near him cooked up, and they'll come out in due course.

Whether you personally accept then I can't say just yet, but know that there are reasons behind it! :D

As for the rest -- I'm so glad you're liking it! Yes, it's slow and painful, but I think it would cheapen the story if it were to go unnaturally quickly.

Thanks so much for reviewing

- Michelle

 
Reviewer: sb7 Signed
Date: May 05, 2009 Title: Chapter 15: The River

"Your...." kind?  Humans?  Was he captured by some "freak" hating humans, trying to reform the bloodsucker by making him repulsed by blood?  Will he and the Cullens be recruited into the X-men???

 
Reviewer: sb7 Signed
Date: June 19, 2009 Title: Chapter 19: The Visit

I don't think an attack kiss is a good idea....Bella might want to wait until they're calmly in his room.

This chapter completely absorbed my attention!  Really good job describing everything! 

And I was totally right....humans trying to eliminate vampires, I so guessed that a few chapters back :):):):):)

 
Summary:

Bella takes a vacation to Hilton Head Island in South Carolina to meet Alice's new boyfriend, Jasper. Rosalie and Emmett come along, too, just in case Bella didn't feel like enough of a fifth wheel. With Jasper's roommate out of town, Bella has his nice big bed all to herself. Until Edward comes home in the middle of the night...

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Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Jacob, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: Always Human , SMUT - Best of the Best - Edward and Bella
Chapters: 36 Completed: Yes Word count: 163211
[Report This] Published: March 01, 2009 Updated: December 21, 2011


Reviewer: sb7 Signed
Date: May 29, 2010 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31 Jasper's Outtake: Family Lost & Found

I thought it was very sweet and heart warming!  Thank you for a little more insight.

 
Reviewer: sb7 Signed
Date: September 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33 Missionary Man

This story is always a pleasure to come back to!  It doesn't seem to matter how long it takes for each chapter to be finished, they flow so well together.  I really enjoy the world you've created and I'm almost as excited for Bella and Edward and Rosalie and Emmett to be in Hilton Head as Bella and Edward are!





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