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I am a social worker who works with abused kids.


Love TWILIGHTED and rock music. My favorite group is KISS!


I am TEAM EDWARD all the way.


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Reviews by hc4metal
 
Summary:

 

 

 

 

 

We all believe that Edward and Bella are meant to be together...but what if there’s more to that than meets the eye?

 

What if there are forces at work that they don’t understand? How will they cope with events that have no discernable meaning?

 

This story starts out two weeks before Bella and Edward’s wedding. But, right away, things go wrong. They struggle with mishap after mishap, all the while wondering if they’re destined to be at the center of conflict and angst.

 

All the major characters of Twilight appear. Canon couples. Lemons in various chapters. This is a more realistic view of Edward and Bella’s relationship before the wedding. He certainly wouldn’t carry her off to a desert island alone, having never even touched her. They would have experimented a bit.

 

Eventually all characters get their Happily Ever After. I just drag them through hell before we get there. No characters die before their time.

 

And I’ve adhered to canon up until the story starts—Post Eclipse. After that, it diverges from SM’s version. So...no Renesmee. No pregnancy.

 

I’ve poured my heart and soul into this story. It took me over a year to complete. I thought about it constantly. For that hard work and diligence to form, grammar and style, I’d like just one tiny thing from you, the reader.

 

I’d like a review. If you love it, if you hate it, if you’re just indifferent and will never look at it again, I’d like to hear that. It’s not a lot to ask. So...I’ll say thanks in advance for the wonderful reviews you’ll leave after you read each chapter!

 

Maria

twilight gypsy

 

  


Categories: Post-Eclipse Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Embry, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jared, Jasper, Paul, Quil, Renee, Rosalie, Sam, Seth
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 45 Completed: Yes Word count: 178339
[Report This] Published: October 01, 2009 Updated: November 29, 2010


Reviewer: hc4metal Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 25, 2009 Title: Chapter 2: Human Touch

great chapter

some cliffy



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and for your review! I will post ch 3 when it gets back from the Beta Group! This is my first fanfic attempt, and I really need the reviews to let me know if I am proceeding in a way that is interesting to the reader. After 1 day I have over 900 hits but only 24 reviews!

 
Reviewer: hc4metal Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: November 02, 2009 Title: Chapter 3: With a Little Help From My Friends

I liked it

Hope he changes her



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and for your great review. I am glad you liked it, which part did you like? And please tell me your favorite line! I hope he changes her, too. Haven't gotten that far yet!

 
Reviewer: hc4metal Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 09, 2009 Title: Chapter 6: Tell Me Why

love this



Author's Response:

I love your reviews! Brief and to the point! Thanks!

 
Reviewer: hc4metal Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 14, 2009 Title: Chapter 7: Brilliant Disguise

10



Author's Response:

Dearest hc4metal, is this a positive review? I am so hoping that it is a 10, like in gymnastics, which is the perfect, or like Be Derek in the movie with the same name. Can you elabortate a bit? Give me just one favorite line? I LOVE YOU hc4metal!

Maria

 
Reviewer: hc4metal Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 21, 2009 Title: Chapter 8: Fantasy

lol busted

 
Reviewer: hc4metal Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 19, 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Bring on the Wonder

10



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for your excellent review and stars! Thank you for continuing to read and follow the story!

Maria

 
Reviewer: hc4metal Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: February 08, 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Wicked Game

I liked it a lot.

I agree, there should have been some more diaglogue in the book. However, I think she felt more guilt for Jacob then love...he was there just to fill the void...until he imprinted on a baby (shutter).



Author's Response:

Sound like you don't like Jake much either. The game wasn't finished, as it turns out. Next, Edward will talk to her about how difficult it was for him every time she ran off to LaPush.

Thank you so much for your generous review of 5 stars! I really appreciate your continuing with the story! Next chapter is almost finished!

Maria

 
Reviewer: hc4metal Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: February 18, 2010 Title: Chapter 17: The Return of the Grievous Angel

ANOTHER GREAT JOB



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for cont. to read and review and for the very generous 5 stars!

Maria

 
Reviewer: hc4metal Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 08, 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Do You Want to Know a Secret

I really am enjoying this story



Author's Response:

Thank you for your very generous review of 5 stars, and for continuing to read and review! I really appreicate it.

 

Maria

 
Lost by julierae Rated: PG-13 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 18]
Summary:

Three sisters are stolen from their father's farm by three enigmatic, inhuman captors.  As they begin to unravel their kidnappers' tragic past, they learn that there is a dark side to eternal youth and beauty.  Loosely inspired by Twilight and set in an indeterminate past, this creepy little fable explores another side of the Cullen boys.


Categories: AU Characters: None
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Completed: Yes Word count: 7274
[Report This] Published: October 03, 2009 Updated: November 05, 2009


Reviewer: hc4metal Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 29, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

great chapter



Author's Response:

Thanks!  I'm glad you liked it!

 
Summary:

Edward leaves Bella alone in the woods after telling her he didn’t want her any more. As she is lying on the cold forest floor; Bella remembers three important things. Edward made a promise not to leave her, and Edward never broke a promise, and third it was her body, her heart, what right did he have to decide what was good for her? All in all Bella realizes that Edward was covering up his true feeling about her. Bella goes to bring Edward home.

 


Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: Alice, Aro, Bella, Caius, Carlisle, Charlie, Demetri, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Felix, Jacob, Jane, Jasper, Laurent, Marcus, Victoria
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 18 Completed: Yes Word count: 57466
[Report This] Published: October 05, 2009 Updated: September 14, 2011


Reviewer: hc4metal Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9: Living & Forgiveness

Excellant



Author's Response:

Yay! So glad you thought so. I will my best not to disappoint you.

Thanks so much for leaving a review.

TaintedDarkInuShemeeko

 
Reviewer: hc4metal Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: November 22, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: Penance

good story.

I just always find myself screaming someone for the love of God turn her already LOL



Author's Response:

Thank you very much.

Sometimes I do too. LOL

TaintedDarkInuShemeeko

 
Reviewer: hc4metal Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 20, 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13: Trapped

A+++



Author's Response:

LOL. Thanks hc4metal. A few people have been fussing at me today for this chapter. I'm happy to see that you that it deserved a triple A plus. I hope you enjoy Chapter 14.

Thanks so much for the review.

TaintedDarkInuShemeeko

 
Reviewer: hc4metal Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 10, 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6: Choosing to Exist

can't wait for the next chapter



Author's Response:

I'm happy to hear that. I'm hoping the next chapter can excite you as well.

Thank so much for taknig the time to review.

TaintedDarkInuShemeeko

 
Reviewer: hc4metal Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: November 06, 2009 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3: Mirrored Self

love it



Author's Response:

Glad to hear it. THanks for reviewing.

 
Reviewer: hc4metal Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 25, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Dark Abyss

love it



Author's Response:

Glad to hearing you are enjoying it. Thanks you so much for reviewing.

TaintedDarkInuShemeeko

 
Reviewer: hc4metal Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: November 03, 2009 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2: The Sky Won't Fall Forever

looking forward to more



Author's Response:

Glad to hear it and thanks for the review.

TaintedDarkInuShemeeko

 
Reviewer: hc4metal Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 06, 2009 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: Seek and You Shall Find

dying for more



Author's Response:

Wow I'm honored by that but I really don't think my story is worth your life.

Thanks so much for the review it means a lot to me.

TaintedDarkInuShemeeko

 
Reviewer: hc4metal Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 21, 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7: Love the Medicine for the Soul

when will they learn they just need to change her!



Author's Response:

Well the Cullen's in my story won't learn yet. There are still a few thing that need to happen first.

Thank you for sticky with this story and leaving a review.

TaintedDarkInuShemeeko

 
Reviewer: hc4metal Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: February 28, 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8: Even Ground

Excellant job



Author's Response:

Thanks so much for the kind words. And thank you for taking the time to leave a review.

TaintedDarkInuShemeeko 

 
Summary:

Edward and Bella have been best friends for years. But, when Edward is unexpectedly bitten, will their relationship crumble? And what happens when Edward falls in with the "wrong crowd" of the vampire world? AU

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All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the intellectual property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of Stephenie Meyer. No copyright infringement is intended.


Categories: AU Characters: Bella
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: No Word count: 4022
[Report This] Published: October 05, 2009 Updated: October 26, 2009


Reviewer: hc4metal Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 28, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Dirty Dictionary

looking forward to more

 
The Mystery Land by Chloabella Rated: PG-13 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 2]
Summary:

The year is 1927, and Bella, her sisters, Emily, Alice and Rosalie, have just survived a plane crash that could've killed them. The pilot has disappeared and the girls are left to fend for themselves. Can they do it, with some help of some soon-to-be friends, and a certain bronze-haired boy named Edward?

 

 


Categories: AU Characters: Alec
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: No Word count: 1059
[Report This] Published: October 06, 2009 Updated: October 14, 2009


Reviewer: hc4metal Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 15, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: April 1927

I AM INTERESTED

ARE THERE VAMPIRES IN THIS OR IS IT ALL HUMAN



Author's Response:

Thank you very much. I'm sorry, this is an AU story, so everyone is human.

 
Summary:

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What if Victoria found Bella that night after she first hears Edward’s voice in Port Angeles?

 

Victoria doesn’t succeed in killing Bella, but she changes her into something powerful and unknown—a vampire.

Bella, after months of torturing herself trying to forget Edward, finally does, during the transformation when she wakes up and Victoria is there.

With no memory and only a nomad to fall back on Bella gives into her bloodlust for humans, with no memory of how to do things any other way.

Victoria takes Bella under her wing, when it slowly becomes apparent that Victoria has plans of her own, which include building a newborn army and framing Bella, when the Volturi get involved…

Edward, thinking Bella is dead, is on the way to Italy, completely unaware of what he is going to find there.

EXB

 

 


Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: Bella
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: No Word count: 1458
[Report This] Published: October 07, 2009 Updated: October 26, 2009


Reviewer: hc4metal Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 26, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 - The Voice

can't wait for more

 
Summary:

Is it possible that true love can be found on the trains of New York City? Law School student, Bella meets Edward on the D train. This can only go one way. AH, rated M for lemons and language. First Fan Fic.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 7 Completed: No Word count: 23468
[Report This] Published: October 08, 2009 Updated: March 08, 2010


Reviewer: hc4metal Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 26, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Broadway & Lafayette

like the story



Author's Response:

Thanks!  More will come soon. :o)

 
Reviewer: hc4metal Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 28, 2010 Title: Chapter 2: West 4th Street

Dying for more

Hopefully J and E only stay friends



Author's Response:

hehehe.  I'm glad you enjoyed.  Can't say for sure if J&E (wait?  E?  or did you mean Bella?)  ;)  if you want more i have the story up on fanfiction as well (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4916072/1/).  enjoy! and thanks for reading and reviewing! 

 




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