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Reviews by Wallace
 
Summary:

 

Bella Swan spent the first two years of her life in Forks developing a friendship with Jacob Black that finally turned into something more.  As she begins her senior year of high school, a new family moves to town and Bella slowly begins to question the path she thought her life would follow.  Sometimes there is a difference between what you think you need and what you never knew you wanted.  Takes place during the timeframe of New Moon and Eclipse.  J/B at first, but eventually E/B. 

 

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Categories: AU Characters: Bella, Edward, Jacob
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 35 Completed: No Word count: 170230
[Report This] Published: July 16, 2008 Updated: July 19, 2009


Reviewer: Wallace Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: August 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 2: First Day

Great job with the first day of school.  I like your version of Bella.

 
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Date: August 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Bonfire

I think it's great the adults in this story are aware of what is going on with the Cullen's moving into town.  Of course, fanfiction readers know Harry and Billy's reaction is a result of the Cullen's presence.

 
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Date: August 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Break

Darn it if you didn't use Bella's clumsiness against her.  I can't wait to see how this works out.

 
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Date: August 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Terminal

I am enjoying your writing. I like your timeline with this story.  Showing us Bella would have survived the van and other things without Edward.  Well done.

 
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Date: August 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Missing

Great job stepping up the timeline.  I loved Bella and Charlie's conversation.  I am enjoying your writing style.  I already know that you have stopped writing this story.  I really appreciate that you didn't pull it.  It is well written.

 
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Date: August 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 9: College

I loved this chapter.  You may have noticed that I commented about Bella's insecurity about going to a big University a couple of chapters ago.  I am trying to catch up on reviews.  I read the story at work and couldn't leave reviews.  I feel this story deserves more reviews and attention.  Be Well.  This chapter hit too close to home for me. :)

 
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Date: August 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Interview

I love this ramp up to Bella's rebellion.

 
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Date: August 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Birthday Girl

Great job working through Bella's birthday.  I love the way to took the details and made them work with this story.  Nicely done.  I am in Bella's camp.  I don't like the celebrate my birthday in a big way. 

 
Reviewer: Wallace Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: August 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 12: The Lodge

Jacob made a huge mistake.  I see this as the beginning of the end for Bella and Jacob.  Jacob's description of Bella is going to bite him in the booty very soon.

 
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Date: August 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Irresponsible

Thank you for not playing up the party and focusing on Bella.  You could have written Bella so differently. Thanks for the Edward save.

 
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Date: August 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Giddy

Great drunk Bella.  Love your stalking Edward.  The banter was fun to read.  It is time for Jacob to meet the competition. 

 
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Date: August 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Half Truths

I loved drunk Bella finding her voice and telling Jacob what she needs.  We see how young Jacob is in this chapter.  Poor kid...he can't hold on the Bella much longer.

 
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Date: August 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Acquaintances

Thanks for bringing Emmett and Jasper to the store.  I know that they were just checking out Bella.  I was so happy when Edward invited Bella to eat at his table.  Yes!!!

 
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Date: August 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Friends

Great dialogue.  It was needed to change the relationship between Edward and Bella. Nice touches with Jessica and Alice

 
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Date: August 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Pumpkins

Great job using Jessica.  Jessica's enthusiasm for Mike is what Bella needed.  She needed to realize that she is in a safe relationship with Jacob. Sure there is some chemistry but not passion.  That is what Bella needs.  Three cheers for Oxymoronic8!

 
Reviewer: Wallace Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: August 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Hallowed

Wow, that was a pretty revealing chapter.  Great job with Leah.  You described her pain perfectly.  The scene between her friend and Sam was intense.  So much to comment on but I want to keep reading.  Thanks for the new pumpkin.

 
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Date: August 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Unrequited

Great chapter it was nice to see Alice again.

 
Reviewer: Wallace Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: August 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Sparks

3300 reviews!  Thank you for this Bella and Edward!  I can't believe I waited so long to read this story. It has been rec'd to me so many times.  Thank you for writing a reasonable Bella. :)

 
Reviewer: Wallace Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: August 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 22: Crushed

Wow that chapter was packed full of good stuff. Thanks for the AN about Billy.

 
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Date: August 04, 2010 Title: Chapter 24: Truth

Thank you for writing a thoughtful story.  It really is well written and full of life chapter after chapter.  Using Leah as a vehicle for Bella to learn about the vampires is well played.

 
Reviewer: Wallace Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: August 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 33: Sixty Seconds

I have already read the completed chapters for this story.  I feel you deserve the reviews even in epic fail.  I can understand why you would want to to walk away from this angsty story.  ;)   I enjoyed Alice and Bella.  It doesn't seem like a one sided friendship.  Even Edward and Bella's banter is refreshing. :)

 
Reviewer: Wallace Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: August 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 34: Tightrope

Such a great chapter.  No WTF or AFT for me.  Bella is hurting and is hurt.  I enjoyed the mental and physical battle Bella is fighting.  I am moved by Bella's fear of Jacob.  I loved the build up to the kiss. 

 
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Date: August 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 35: Kissed

"His kiss ruined me for all other." Caused heart fail.  It was almost to much to bear. :)  That is how the first kiss should have been written for Bella and Edward. 

You know...you could edit the author notes and repost completed.  You could leave your readers to decide their future.  I love reading this fan fiction.  Your use of SM characters was fresh.  I haven't ready anything like it.  And yes, I have read many high school fics. 

Can you believe the fandom is still rec'ing your fic? I can.  You can leave me here but If you felt the urge...I would read more.  THANK YOU for not pulling this fic.  Other reader and writers need to read well written fan fiction.  Be well.  Thanks for sharing your fic.

 

 
Going for the Gold by bethaboo Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 701]
Summary:

Edward Cullen, an Olympic swimming star, goes to Beijing with winning gold medals on his mind, but is distracted by the beautiful but clumsy reporter he meets on his way. All Human AU.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 21 Completed: Yes Word count: 86569
[Report This] Published: August 18, 2008 Updated: May 09, 2009


Reviewer: Wallace Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: July 10, 2009 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

Emmett gives the best advice.

 
Reviewer: Wallace Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: July 10, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I just started getting to my reading list.  I am enjoying this human story. 

 




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