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I registered on Twilighted because I've read so many awesome stories and I'm tired of not being able to review them. I actually write myself and I suppose eventually I'm going to post the stuff I've written on fanfiction up here. Until then I'll just lurk...
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Summary:
Bella Swan has had a tragic and abusive childhood; everyone knew it. But not everyone knew of the bronze-haired boy who visited her in her dreams. He was the only one who knew the true Bella. But Edward wasn't real, was he?

Thank Anne Cullen for the banner :)
Categories: AU, AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Renee
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 11 Completed: No
Word count: 29613
[Report This] Published: February 01, 2009 Updated: January 22, 2010
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Date: March 01, 2009
Title: Chapter 4: Just Keep Digging, I Can't Feel
Ms. Honey? Woah! Matilda flashbacks. Author's Response: Not intentional but.... huh....
Summary:  
Bella is devastated by the loss of her mother and is forced to go live with Charlie, her Mom's best friend, when there is no one else to take her in. She gives up on living, too lost in her own anger to let anyone close to her. Enter Edward, the handsome teenage vampire, and the beginning of a complicated love-hate relationship. Neither can deny the connection between them, but can their love survive the fear that rules her and the secret he hides from her? AU and OOC, Rated NC-17 for language and sexual content.
Categories: Twilight, AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Jessica, Mike, Rosalie
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 47 Completed: Yes
Word count: 292396
[Report This] Published: February 24, 2009 Updated: December 25, 2009
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Date: March 14, 2009
Title: Chapter 12: Shift
the mushy side of me has completely dissolved into a puddle of sentimental goo. the internal awwing is very alien to my character i assure you. though i admit i am some what apprehensive as to the nature of the next chapter. alcohol and deja brew can have unsettling effects on a person. morning after regrets can be extremely poignant after all. i think bella will be horrified at her actions (if she can remember them) and quite possibly conclude that attack is the best form of defense and utterly alienate edward.
of course that's the worst case scenario. personally i'm really hoping that doesn't happen. Author's Response: I'm thinking you've had the whole dejabrew thing and can relate, as I can! Well I'm glad that Edward was able to turn you into a puddle of sentimental goo. He has that effect on me too. I will just say that I enjoyed reading your thoughts but I'm staying mum on the subject of the morning after. You'll have to wait for the next chapter, and perhaps the one after that, and maybe even another, depending on your requirement for depth of satisfaction. And hopefully the alien goo feeling has not permanently scarred you :p Thanks for your comment.
Reviewer: Phantom-writer3739 Signed    
Date: March 16, 2009
Title: Chapter 13: Ignorance
yep, zero recollection of the previous night -or at least the part of it that matters. poor, poor edward. she won't even talk to the poor guy, how's he supposed to work with that?
can't wait to see what happens next! Author's Response: Zero recollection at this point *nods* but Edward will find another opportunity to bring the whole night up with her again. Thanks for your comment. I'm glad you're enjoying the story.
Reviewer: Phantom-writer3739 Signed    
Date: March 18, 2009
Title: Chapter 14: Reminders
joy! they kissed! and she won't be able to blame it on the alcohol this time either! edward was amazingly deilicate when recounting the events of that night. it's amazing the way he goes from puerile manipulation to being a consumate gentleman. Author's Response: Yay! I love your enthusiasm! Nope, no alcohol blaming. I think this Edward has an intuitive side when it comes to Bella. He's very aware of the need to push her to get her to open up while still being cognizant of Bella's limits. I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter and thanks for the comment!
Reviewer: Phantom-writer3739 Signed
Date: March 21, 2009
Title: Chapter 15: Rubicon
I'm not entirely certain as to what I want to do with bella. Half of me wants to smack her head into a wall for being such a cowardly custard. The other wants to applaud her for that little stunt she pulled at the end. Author's Response: I don't think she would like to be smacked in the head, pretty sure anyway ;o) She got out of her own way at the end there so at least she stepped out of her comfort zone ;o) Thanks for your comment!
Reviewer: Phantom-writer3739 Signed
Date: March 22, 2009
Title: Chapter 16: Questions
poor edward.
i think if he just goes to school tomorrow and looks hurt/crushed/defeated/pained bella will pretty much crumble. she just doesn't know how to deal with that without feeling guilty. on the other hand it might make her feel she's incapable of having a relationship without hurting the other party (in this case edward).
oh woeful child. she needs to get a grip and so does the 107 year old baby. it hurts! get over it! i think his problem is that he never really felt enough to feel emotional pain. even losing his parents is more of an abstract concept rather than actual grief if you take bella's inability to clearly recall her pre-change memories as the norm. Author's Response: My original write of that chapter, I ended it with Bella leaving, none of the part with Alice. That was definitely a poor Edward moment. I hope the Alice part made it a little less depressing. Your observations of Bella are spot on. She would crumble if he seems hurt/crushed/defeated, and there's also the same chance that she would internalize it and think herself incapable of having a relationship with Edward without hurting him. Are you in my head? ;o) In this case though, she does neither. (Did I make you curious LOL?
"oh woeful child. she needs to get a grip and so does the 107 year old baby. it hurts! get over it!" - I love your insight. She definitely needs to get a grip and he needs to...well he pretty much needs to keep doing what he's doing ;o) They are definitely mismatched in terms of their emotional pain with regard to losing their parents. You make a very smart point. Thanks for sharing your thoughts. I enjoyed reading them.
Reviewer: Phantom-writer3739 Signed
Date: March 24, 2009
Title: Chapter 17: Metamorphosis
-nods head in satisfaction-
bon! so now edward is being assertive and clearing up some issues. communication is always good. now i just want bella to: take the potatoes out of her ears, not stuff her fingers back in, start listening, actually believe, and communicate back. edward's good but even he can't do everything on his own.
great chapter! Author's Response: Communication is always good. I'm sensing a little bit of irritation with Bella from your side LOL ;o) I promise you that Bella has the potatoes out of her ears in the next chapter, and doesn't stuff her fingers back in. How's that? She listens, believes and communicated in it too! He won't have to do it all on his own. I think you will approve! Your comments always make me laugh. I love your snark! Thanks for sharing it with me and making me smile!
Reviewer: Phantom-writer3739 Signed
Date: March 26, 2009
Title: Chapter 18: Determination
have i ever mentioned how much i love your writing? not the plot line (though that too is highly enjoyable) your actual style of writing. it's very whimsical at times and elegant too. your word choice and turn of phrase is very pleasant to read. it reminds me of myself when i'm in one of my 'moods' and hardly any of my friends can understand me. or when i'm talking to my gran or mum.
my 'animosity towards bella' has, i assure you, decreased exponentially with this chapter. it's always good to hear she can act like a rational human being when she wants to. and the way she turned down mike was especially amusing.
as for edward, i think he's...*sigh* perfect. just perfect. sorry, that was a fangirl moment. i went all mushy inside when i thought of him coming up behind bella and brushing a hand through her hair.
i can appreciate bella's animosity more these days. i have this guy whose mission in life is to annoy me. recently he's taken to asking me out and although at times it's fairly funny it can be REALLY irritating. if bella thought he was only asking her out to make fun of her/make a fool out of her then i completely emphathise.
oh, by the way in your end a/n you wrote stupport. i assume it wasn't intentional. Author's Response: I'm not sure if you've mentioned, but even if you have, it's wonderful to hear all over again! Thank you so much. I enjoy being able to switch view points because I can get my foul potty mouth out with Bella and my nerdy intellectual out with Edward.
Bella needs a bit of time to wrap her head around the whole situation so she can open up further. You'll be even more pleased with her in the upcoming chapter where she continues to take chances with Edward.
Edward turns me into a fangirl too, mush from head to toe. I had that hair scene in the quad in my head for days after I wrote it.
I think we all have someone in our pasts that couldn't take a hint or made an ass of himself. Mine was a Rob not a Mike and I still cringe when I think of him. I suppose this chapter was a reflection of my irritation towards him too LOL.
You assume correctly! Thank you for bringing my attention to my horrible typing. The fingers work faster than the head most days. As always, thnk you for the lovely review! I enjoyed hearing your thoughts.
Reviewer: Phantom-writer3739 Signed
Date: March 27, 2009
Title: Chapter 19: Surrender
if this had to do with alice or rosalie or any of the other cullens...
well. it's a good thing they're vampires. that's all i'm going to say.
and everything was going so well! bella was making concessions, they were compromising, they were getting on...
and then he stands her up. -snarls-
oh i can't wait to hear his excuse... Author's Response: He has a very good excuse, I swear! Bella made a lot of headway in this chapter opening up to Edward. She has proven to him beyond a shadow of a doubt that she cares for him and he will not give her up without a fight. Please don't give up on him yet! As always, I love hearing your thoughts. Thank you for sharing them with me.
Reviewer: Phantom-writer3739 Signed
Date: March 28, 2009
Title: Chapter 20: Antithesis
i love how you ended it with his determination to never let her go. his need for her to respond and react to him was very well portrayed and all the kissing was hot but all in all this chapter was heartbreaking. i can just imagine what bella was thinking and what she thinks of him and of herself for giving in to him.
poor girl. i hope edward explains it better to her or that alice does. without, you know, bringing in the vampire thing. Author's Response: Yes this chapter was a little bit heartbreaking. I suppose I designed it that way to illustrate how fragile Bella is, and how little it takes to get her to give up, or how hard it is for her to trust and believe. It's also important for her character to make up her mind about Edward once and for all, and the next little bit of the story focuses on that. Bella's thought process is pretty simple actually, and the next chapter shows her thoughts and her struggles to cope. As always, thank you for taking the time to share your thoughts. I always enjoy hearing them.
Reviewer: Phantom-writer3739 Signed    
Date: April 02, 2009
Title: Chapter 21: Standstill
ok, so i kinda broke down and cried, especially at the notes. and i don't generally cry when i'm reading. or ever.
i noticed that you made it so that if bella accuses him of lying to her he can point out that he never signed up for the ski trip but he never said he wasn't going. which is exactly why a simple no wouldn't have worked.
skiing is fun except for the whole carrying the skis part. and walking in skiboots? urgh! if edward wanted to talk to her those are always good starting points to make her listen (not as topics of discussion though). i think if she had to do it for long enough she wouldn't even object if he carried her skis for her.
i have absolutely no theories as to the nature of the next chapter. i wait in hope... Author's Response: I'm sorry the chapter made you cry :o( You have my permission to smack me, or Bella, or whichever might make you feel better. You noticed that did you? ;o) Since you noticed that then you have a peek at what is coming...so you can't say you have no theories. ;o) I think you'll like the next chapter, or at least it won't make you cry. Thanks for sharing your thoughts with me. I enjoyed reading them!
Reviewer: Phantom-writer3739 Signed
Date: April 07, 2009
Title: Chapter 22: Rescue
-smiles- i'm happy now. all they have to work past now is the eensey weensey vampire thing.
compared to bella's commitment issues it should be a piece of cake... Author's Response: I'm smiling because you're happy now. Yeah, just the eensy teensy weensy vampire thing. No biggie ;o) Bwahahahaha. I think that is the bestest comment ever about Bella! Very OOC Bella-esque! Well done! Do you think she has commitment issues? ;o) The vampire thing is a ways off. The next part of the story is very Edward and Bella-centric, (not that the entire story hasn't been) just them being happy and getting to know one another. Thank you for all of your support on the story this far! I appreciate it!
Reviewer: Phantom-writer3739 Signed
Date: April 13, 2009
Title: Chapter 23: Turnabout
wow. she can be amazingly mature and perceptive at times...and then completely oblivious at others. just like in the books. kudos to you for getting bella so bella ;)
i suppose alice's visions still haven't gone away. either that or she's 'seen' something else, something worse. now that's a scary thought... Author's Response: I think Bella is always perceptive but she's jaded and controlled by her emotions. Either way I'm glad you like her :o) Alice vision is new. She was short with Bella because she was trying to understand it in regard to the fact that Bella and Edward have finally admitted their feelings. You'll hear about what she sees in the next chapter. Thanks for the comment.
Reviewer: Phantom-writer3739 Signed
Date: April 17, 2009
Title: Chapter 24: Subjugation
oh boy. i'm not sure whether it would have been better if alice had kept that from edward or not. the 'protect' her thing gives me ominous flashbacks to new moon. somehow i don't think this bella would be so forgiving or accepting of something like that. of course it could be in reaction to finding out that the cullens are vampires, most likely if she finds out from someone who isn't edward.
things were going so well! of course now that edward knows about it perhaps he can stop it from coming to pass? -looks hopeful-
oh well. i'll just wait and see. Author's Response: Well now you've got me curious as to which way you would have preferred, for Alice to show Edward the vision or not? I didn't think about the New Moon connotations because I know where the story is going. I agree with you, OOC Bella would not be forgiving or accepting of him leaving. I don't think she'd survive it. I don't have a New Moon scenario planned for this story. I added the vision as a link to something in an upcoming chapter. Hopefully I didn't ruin anything for you by telling you. I just didn't want you to worry. Thanks for the comment!
Reviewer: Phantom-writer3739 Signed
Date: May 13, 2009
Title: Chapter 32: Connection
more convincing? yes please!
there wasn't much i can say about that other than it was very tastefully written and erotic. hopefully if they go on to have actual intercourse bella will be on some form of birth control cause really i don't think any halfling super-fast maturing babies would be a good idea at this point... Author's Response: Couldn't agree more! I'd be wanting all kinds of convincing. I think I'd be the most stubborn I'd ever been in my life to maximize the convincing LOL. *snorts* Check on the halfling super-fast maturing babies. I will definitely keep those out of the story, just for your sake ;o) Thanks for the comment.
Reviewer: Phantom-writer3739 Signed
Date: April 20, 2009
Title: Chapter 25: Spectacle
that was hot!
i'd say more but just a couple of minutes ago your next chapter was put through so i'm going to go read that... Author's Response: Thanks I'm glad you liked it. Yep, you posted just after the new update went up. I hope you enjoyed it. Thanks for the comment.
Reviewer: Phantom-writer3739 Signed
Date: April 20, 2009
Title: Chapter 26: Extracurriculars
-happy sigh-
that was nice. the ending was just a perfect bit of...not fluff; fluff implies it's unimportant. that was very significant. the whole chapter was really. i think that the mike confrontation was very well done and i loved how bella opened herself up and made herself vulnerable to edward. Author's Response: Thank you. Your happy sigh made me sigh happily :o) Yes I agree with you. It's not fluff but I don't know what else to call it LOL. Bella is really starting to open up to Edward. She's feeling all of these things and instead of keeping them to herself she's trying very hard to share them with Edward. I'm pleased that you picked up the bit at the end, because it's a significant change in Bella's thinking. Mike is a tool and as much as I wanted to have Edward hit him, it was more in character for Bella to do it. I'm glad it came off well. Thanks for the comment.
Reviewer: Phantom-writer3739 Signed
Date: April 20, 2009
Title: Chapter 26: Extracurriculars
-happy sigh-
that was nice. the ending was just a perfect bit of...not fluff; fluff implies it's unimportant. that was very significant. the whole chapter was really. i think that the mike confrontation was very well done and i loved how bella opened herself up and made herself vulnerable to edward. Author's Response: I'm curious what you think the part at the end was too, the part you referred to as "a perfect bit of...not fluff." Please tell me if you were right when the next chapter goes up. Thanks again.
Reviewer: Phantom-writer3739 Signed
Date: April 24, 2009
Title: Chapter 27: Intuition
booyah! one secret down, four to go...
i got this as soon as it came out and i was reading it as my parents were giving me the 3rd degree over my studies. multitasking at its fiinest ;)
can't wait to see what happens next Author's Response: I love your response. Obviously I know the big secret but I'm trying to figure out what the other 3 are? *scratches head* Imortality? That he wants to eat her? That he's a vegetarian? That he's an old geezer?;o) That he doesn't have a soul? You'll have to tell me so I make sure I include them. I'm probably just overlooking them but you've definitely got me curious!
Well I suck at multitasking so go you, although I'm thinking you might have been giving them evidence that you need that talk ;o) I'm pulling your leg a bit. Really it's impressive that you could do that and not get caught LOL. Thanks for the comment.
Reviewer: Phantom-writer3739 Signed
Date: April 27, 2009
Title: Chapter 28: Acceptance
the four secrets: mind reading, vampirism, the overwhelming attraction of her blood and les vampires mechants. admittedly the first time i thought it through it was mind reading, clairvoyance (alice), empathy (jasper), vampirism (all of 'em).
i think bella is broken enough to understand edward's self loathing and look past his little blood problem. (yes, i totally had an hp flashback then)
i liked the carlisle/edward interaction. and bringing in the succubi was a good point. i think edward described what they did as 'insane proximity' to the men they love(d). if they can do it why can't he? Author's Response: I got you on the first three, but what do you mean by "vampires mechants?"
Neither Bella nor Edward has realized the other is as broken as they each are. Edward concentrates on his self-loating rather than focus on all of the things about him that Bella has already accepted. Sometimes he needs a smack! And I agree, if the Denali sisters can enjoy physical love with a human, why not Edward? Thanks for the comment and the answers!!!
Reviewer: Phantom-writer3739 Signed
Date: April 30, 2009
Title: Chapter 29: Doubts
knowing edward's curiosity i can appreciate how hard it was for him to stay out of alice's mind.
it must have been embarassing for bella to expose herself like that to alice but it was nice that she feels comfortable enough with her to ask her something like that. and it was great to meet esme and i'm glad that went so well.
but the talk with edward that's going to come up? it had better be in some way, shape or form about vampirism or at least touch upon it because if he sleeps with her first and THEN tells her she'll probably end up seeing it as a betrayal...
oh, vampires mechants means evil vampires in french. sorry, i've been doing a whole load of french oral memorisation and apparently my pronunciation of that phrase wasn't quite right so i had to say it over, and over, and OVER! so much so that it now slips out even when i'm typing. the real kicker is i can hardly remember the rest of the response to that question -laughs hysterically- Author's Response: I agree that it would be hard for Edward to stay out of Alice's mind and not eavesdrop using his hearing, but I wanted to show that he understood how out of character it was for Bella to ask to speak to Alice. He wants to show her that he respects her need for privacy.
I think it was hard for Bella to speak to Alice, not just to be vulnerable but to acknowledge what she wants out loud and make it all the more real and scary.
The talk that is coming up is all about him being a vampire. I can't say too much without spoiling the next chapter but it's from Edward's point of view and you'll see all of his thoughts on the subject.
That's okay. I figured it must not be English and really it was silly of me not to think of French since I took friggen eight or nine years of that crap in school LMAO. Thanks for letting me know and thank you for the comment.
Reviewer: Phantom-writer3739 Signed
Date: May 04, 2009
Title: Chapter 30: Picnic
-sigh-
she just can't make things easy on him can she? perhaps after a period of reflection she'll see that it really is better for him to tell her everything. that change doesn't mean he's going to leave her. that he won't suddenly see how broken she is or how much better than her he is.
or she could continue to see it as a rejection. after all, emotions are often irrational and overpowering. i can't wait to get her perspective next chapter and see what happens when he calls. Author's Response: I'm pretty sure OOC Bella is incapable of making things easy on Edward LOL. Not really...she's just a tiny bit broken, and it's part of her charm :o) I hope the next chapter deliver's Bella's mindset with the power that is intended. It's a big chapter in terms of understanding Bella in general, but in particular how she sees things with Edward. I hope you enjoy it. Thank you for the comment. I really enjoyed reading all of your thoughts.
Reviewer: Phantom-writer3739 Signed
Date: May 07, 2009
Title: Chapter 31: Disclosure
ah. now alice's vision makes sense.
that was a very touching chapter. you managed to convey the depth of her grief without going overboard. i wonder when she'll be ready to hear what edward has to say. Author's Response: *nods* Exactly, *that* was Alice's vision.
I'm glad to hear I didn't go overboard. I was very concerned that I might upset someone who had been through something similar.
That's a great question. I know the answer, but you probably knew that I knew ;o) (One of these days I realize you're going to punch me, just so you know.) Thanks for the comment.
Reviewer: Phantom-writer3739 Signed
Date: May 07, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: Aloneness
i'm not going to punch you ever! it might discourage you from writing or -god forbid- make the quality of your work deteriorate.
perhaps then, you might argue, i should punch you after you've finished writing.
but the sad truth is that unless you write something absolutely atrocious (highly unlikely) i'll probably be too grateful to punch you.
so you see, you are entirely safe from me. Author's Response: I love you. I've been sitting here waiting for a review. You my dear are review number 1000. YAY!
I meant you're going to punch me for teasing you about knowing answers and refusing to answer questions or give too big a hint about things, which I admit that I honestly deserve sometimes LOL. It's too much fun to read eveyrone's thoughts for me, and sometimes I have to fight not to answer things out right and constantly remind myself that I don't want to spoil it for anyone LOL. I'm a goofball.
So that's good if you're not going to punch me, but I give you the right to reserve a punch if you ever feel the need. Thank you for number 1000 Love!!!!
Reviewer: Phantom-writer3739 Signed
Date: May 17, 2009
Title: Chapter 33: Conflicted
"The more prepared I am for what you're going to do, the easier it will be for me to govern the domination."
that line just got to me. 'govern the domination'. sheesh. i guess that's what makes him so edward.
anyway. i very much enjoyed that. i like how bella can be unreasonable and very much the teenager one moment and then mature and logical the next. i might have actually mentioned that before but whatever. Author's Response: I couldn't agree more. He has a way with words. And those words got to me too!
I tried to show more than one side to Bella in the chapter. She is after all, only seventeen and I remember seventeen. I was all over the map. So I tried to write that in to make it seem more realistic. Thank you for the comment.
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