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Penname: antipyro [ Contact]
Real name: Gina
Status: Member
Member Since: February 19, 2009
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Beta-reader: Yes
Female, older than I look and should know better.
Been reading fan fiction for a few years now, I'm just getting into Twilight stories and am amazed at the calibre and range of authors.
Live in Canada, just north of Toronto, yeah, I know, have many interests - reading, of course, karate, camping, gardening, sports-skiing, swimming, biking, walking, being with my boyfriend, partying,,,,etc.
I really like to give the authors the best review I can to assist them in A) feeling better about their work, B) get my name in print---not really, C) get the next chapter or story up from the author, D) It's too easy just to sit back and let others do it for you, E) I've been a beta reader.
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Summary:
When you’re young you’re supposed to have fun, law be damned. At least that’s how Bella Swan, Rosalie Hale and Alice Brandon saw it.
Three friends’ hell bent on having as much fun as they can while they are still young. Only problem is, what they find fun normally gets them into trouble with the law.
Now their parents have had enough and have come to a decision to send their teenage daughters to Boot Camp for six months.
Alice, Bella and Rose are certainly not pleased with their parent’s news and vow to make life very interesting for all those at the correctional facility. With the help of three boys, who love causing just as much trouble as the girls, they don’t have a hard time keeping to their unspoken vow.
Banner by JayJayHale
Characters are quite OOC but the couples are the same as always.
Rated because of foul language, there shall be a lot of it. Also underage drinking, law breaking and shenanigans like that.
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 35 Completed: Yes
Word count: 110414
[Report This] Published: February 22, 2009 Updated: October 09, 2009
Reviewer: antipyro Signed 
Date: September 28, 2009
Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34 - Forks Is No Longer Home
Ya, I kinda missed the total - boys coming for a visit part....I wanted to see how lonely they were!
Apartment? Where would Bella get the money? A job?!?! That would be responsible!
For one of the final chapters, doowee's order sounds really fine, but I had that several chapters ago - Watch out! Very filling and rich!!!!
I'm talking about all three men, dressed in formal tuxes, with red rose boutonnieres and a heavenly cologne/aftershave - smell that'd make me devour all three. Whipped cream on the side. Author's Response: They all have money put away, but, yes, they'll need to get jobs. Edward's got quite a bit of money lying about in his trust fund, as do Alice and Rose. They'll manage it though, I have a plan. =D
Thank you.
Alice.x
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: October 13, 2009
Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35 - A New Place to Stay
A truly amazing story line that kept me suctioned to my email to know when a new chapter had been posted. It was all that 'sauciness, teasing, fun, flirting, dirty-play, adventure, consequences and retaliation' that kept me coming for more. You made your characters so life-like, I was sure I was reading someone's diary, never mind my own past exploits. ha ha ha
I will miss my chapter treats and look forward to your next story, "The Family". I send you much love (to hurry and write faster) and anything chocolate covered on your fantasy choice. Thank you so much for this. Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed reading Boot Camp. It means a lot to hear that it seemed real.
Thanks for leaving me all the amazing reviews, you never failed to make me smile.
Alice.x
Summary: Bellas been burnt in her past, so to get over it she pours herself into her work as a chef. Shes gotten her own show and Edward, the worst cook, is set to be her cohost. Bella's not looking for love, but she just cant resist the heat Edward has caused in her kitchen.
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 17 Completed: No
Word count: 65394
[Report This] Published: February 24, 2009 Updated: May 06, 2009
Reviewer: antipyro Signed 
Date: February 26, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: How to Boil Water
Holy shit!, you can spell paradigm, and you used it properly too. I'm yours, gah!
Amazingly expert writing, I bet English was your favourite subject??
I just hope that Edward wasn't a part of Bella's past horror story of life. Great use of Alice in a hair & make-up role. I'm confused as to why she left? Didn't she have to stick around to touch up, if required? Does she also do Edward???? How can you improve on beauty?
Yes, you're my favourite author and this is my favourite story. Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review, you totally made my night!
No worries about Edward, he's golden. Chapter 5 will tell you who the past "flame" was. hehe
Alice left to go get Edward ready, but you were right about not having much too do. I would imagine she had to get away to tell her brother his soul mate is in the next room. Or something along those lines. ^_^
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: February 26, 2009
Title: Chapter 2: Shoot Me
I can tell you are really into cooking.
So glad that the photo-shoots broke the ice for them, and that hug! GAWD! Where's my flour bin????? Get me messy, ya, I'll do it, pick me!
Clearly you're very comfortable around cooking and t.v. filming sets. It makes it soooo much more real. I can just imagine the still photographer shouting out those commands -Ya, work with me, baby!!!
Please, more, soon.
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: March 01, 2009
Title: Chapter 3: Lunch
Wonderful!
I'm sure Bella will give Edward some fine tips to operate efficiently ^^.
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: March 02, 2009
Title: Chapter 4: Red Hot
Yes, this chapter is much more involved and detailed, I like it!
Is Bella playing prudish or will she allow the kiss????? Go for the kiss BELLA!
Just like the wine, it will make her calm down and then the real story can happen.
Great work, please continue...
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: March 05, 2009
Title: Chapter 5: Twilight
Mmm, Mmm, Mmm! I love the first kiss routine, it's so melty, you just want to sigh the whole night!!!
I can just imagine the melodic sounds of Edward playing, the piano. I'm surprised Bella didn't start to fall asleep.
Wonderful - Author! Author!! Author's Response: You're gonna love chapter eight then, that is ... especially melty ... but not totally melted yet haha.
Thank you for the review!
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: March 05, 2009
Title: Chapter 6: Cougar
I'm glad Bella found herself in the kitchen, getting drunk. It seemed to be the perfect epitome of herself.
I'm surprised that you didn't explain Bella's dress/outfit more. I'm sure it was quite fetching.
Poor Edvart, Irrreeena more than likely slobbered over him leaving stains on his shirt. LMFAO!!
Please write fast....I'm going to the forum to check out the previews and your magnificent banner. Don't know how to do those, maybe I'll try???? (Who am I kidding???) Author's Response: Bella didn't really care about the outfit, and Edward was on her mind. He will describe it for you next chapter though. Chapter 7 is an EPOV btw. I just posted a preview on the boards for you.
The chapter is actually done ... just waiting for the twilighted beta to validate it.
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: March 10, 2009
Title: Chapter 7: Help?
Ya! I'd be confused too if I were Edward!!! Yes! No! Yes! No! Yes! No!
Loved the EPOV, it was beautifully done! I thought the piggy back ride was funny! If Edward's back is sore the next day, will Bella give him a massage??
I'm sure Bella will wake up with a headache, nevermind if Edward was with her or not!
Love it! Love it! Oh, and love your beta's too, Ksangi + JustJo94! Great work. Author's Response: I'm happy you liked my EPOV, it was alot of fun to write. I especially enjoyed the piggy back ride as well ... that will make a brief comeback in chapter 8.
Thank you for the review! Next chapter will be up tomorrow hopefully.
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: March 12, 2009
Title: Chapter 8: Delicious
Definately! I want to stay here forever, reading more chapters...
This was soooo sweet, and not too icky sweet that it hurts.
I was sure when Bella felt the floating that Edward was moving her to her bedroom, to be more comfortable, of course. And who ever turns off their furnace during the day? Get a programmable thermostat!
Visiting on the forums, sneeking a peek..... Many big hugs for you and betas. Author's Response: Thank you for the continuiosly awesome reviews! ^_^
Edward was planning on taking her to the bed until she protested. They camped out on the couch because a bed well ... I dunno, implies something more. Also, couches are better for upclose snuggling. lol
Just posted the peek for you on the forums!
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: March 18, 2009
Title: Chapter 9: Chopsticks
I laughed when I read about the two large crashes in the kitchen - What was he doing???? It's not like he was getting out some buried serving dishes.... Maybe he was just trying to make it sound like he was 'cooking', to cover up the phone call to the Take-out place....LOL
I love the subtle gestures you put in....it makes it more believable. Author's Response: Good guess! He was teasing her, making her think he was cooking while biding his time until the take out arrived. ^_^. I'm happy you liked the chapter.
Thank you for the review!
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: March 27, 2009
Title: Chapter 10: Confess
Yeah, getting used isn't nice, especially when he admitted it!!! (fill in your own degrading term)!
So, what was between James and Laurent? Did they become lovers?? Maybe with Victoria on the side?? HA HA HA!
You did a remarkable job, and made a nice long chapter, Ahhhh.
Please, Please, update soon. Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! Sorry it took so long to get back to you I was on vacation. :)
Next update is soon! Hopefully late monday or tuesday.
James and Laurent weren't lovers, but I wouldnt but it below him to try something like that. Laurent is a real slime ball. He used his pull with Bella and Victoria to get on his friendly side, but thats about it.
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: May 13, 2009
Title: Chapter 17: OUT TAKE: Creme Puff's
If 'perv' describes the smutty fiction that I just read and squirmed through, I applaud your 'over active imagination' and encourage you to 'vent' any time you want to, pretty please?!?!
That Bella had never even imagined finishing off a guy and the unusual, but tart and tangy taste of hot ejaculate being purged into her throat as being sexy, I find incredibly funny. It would be like pulling up at the last minute and instead of a 10, only getting a 7 or 8. So I'm really thrilled for Edward!!! No weirdo's here. Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! :) haha well, we just may have some future venting posted since the reponse has been very positive so far.
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: April 06, 2009
Title: Chapter 11: Late
Having others know about the relationship hopefully will aid Bella in forgetting past mistakes *Laurent* and move on to more productive prospects *Edward*.
I do hope you're going to write about their meeting 'tonight, at Bella's', right?
I so love this fic, hopefully it will run a long time with those nice long chapters. Author's Response: Thank you for the review! :)
Of course I'm gonna write about their meeting!! haha
It may not come up until chapter 13 though, so theres a little bit of a wait. :( We'll see though.
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: April 14, 2009
Title: Chapter 12: Gossip
I'm hoping the crowd will like the 'cameraderie' between Bella and Edward. Please????
I like that Edward was able to introduce the second action sequence and actually use the correct terms.
Fantastic job! You Rock!
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: April 14, 2009
Title: Chapter 13: Chemistry
Loved the Irina put off! I vaandar iv she'll get try and get herr hooks into Edvard again????
I would think that Tyler would encourage the teasing, but develop it gradually, to entice the audience more, rather than just jump into the relationship. What would happen if Bella and Edward would be arguing??
Fun Stuff, love all of it! Author's Response: lol love the accent!! :)
We might find out later on what happens when there is trouble in paradise and how that will affect the show. Not for ahwile though.
Thank you so much for the review, I always enjoy your comments and questions! :)
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: April 25, 2009
Title: Chapter 14: Lemon Meringue
Mmmm, my fave too, lemon merangue....lickety, lickety
Too, too good, all that passion waiting to just fall out....ooops! there it goes... Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! Goodness, sorry it took me so long to respond! ^_^ I'm happy you liked desert!
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: April 25, 2009
Title: Chapter 15: Resemblance
Just reading this fic is making me hungry for all the good food Bella serves up. Edward serves a good dish too.... Author's Response: Thank you so much for the reviews! :) I'm so happy you're still enjoying the chapter. I agree it makes me hungry too! *glares at my can of soup I'm about to eat*
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: May 05, 2009
Title: Chapter 16: Intuition
Like Emmett, I'm always hungry for seconds, especially dessert! I was hoping that the cream puffs would show up here, but alas, I'll have to wait for the side story.
I got a big laugh at Emmett doing wrestling moves with the women - LOL - I can just see these dolled up women, in heels and tight dresses being taken down like a UFC beginner! Nice way to get close, but, boy they would look foolish!!!
So amazed at the way Rosalie handled herself at the party - just waiting, on the sides, looking over the 'merchandise' on display, playing coy....
I do hope Bella learns to 'do herself up' properly.
Excellent chapter. Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I'm so happy you liked the chapter. Emmett was so much fun to write. I've learned from from experience that being put into wrestling moves is uhm ... not fun. Weird people that do that voluntarily, let me tell yah.
Summary: 
Bella takes a vacation to Hilton Head Island in South Carolina to meet Alice's new boyfriend, Jasper. Rosalie and Emmett come along, too, just in case Bella didn't feel like enough of a fifth wheel. With Jasper's roommate out of town, Bella has his nice big bed all to herself. Until Edward comes home in the middle of the night...
Beautiful banner by the awesome achelle131
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Jacob, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges: Series: Always Human , SMUT - Best of the Best - Edward and Bella
Chapters: 36 Completed: Yes
Word count: 163211
[Report This] Published: March 01, 2009 Updated: December 21, 2011
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: September 19, 2011
Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14 Relations & Revelations (V)
Hmm, you driving across country; Bella and Edward (were) driving along dark country roads at night.....Oh WOW! What an imagination you got there....(tongue in cheek lol)!!
Well, it works for me anyways.....consecrating a volvo....is there a prayer for that?
Great chapter on the lives behind the characters. It makes it all seem more real, really! Is Edward fooling himself? From what Jasper said to him, it seems like Edward's head is not in it's usual place (metaphorically, girls!). Too easy might be right.
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: September 28, 2011
Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26 Sorry the Hard Way
Ooooo, make up sex! The best!
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: September 28, 2011
Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25 Several Ways to Lose Your Lover
Duh - Duh - Duhnnnnnnn
"I need you in the sense that I would be miserable without you in my life. " I hope Edward catches this line ...... soon. I can't see him beating up James, maybe just put on a pretense.
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: September 07, 2011
Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 What Got Left Behind (V)
Ohhhhhhhh......I knew you had to have a good reason.....Emily? How obvious can you get? And what about this, 'Getting back at her' stuff??? Clearly, he's delusional and has convinced Emily of that too. Weirdo!
Ah yes, letting the mind trip over to Edward....the things he said, did and left her with...that good, good feeling.
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: September 08, 2011
Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9 Bella in Her Element (V)
O.k. now, you gotta' play this up.....can't wait to read what's next!
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: September 07, 2011
Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 Sweet Tea & the Southern Inquisition (V)
You're kidding, right? Too fast? Too soon??? Nuh-huh, no way....this had to happen, now, this night, or forever hold your peace. There'd be no way for them to get back together if this didn't happen. This erases all faults, perceived or not.
Don't you just hate when that gritty sand gets in where it's not wanted??
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