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Penname: antipyro [ Contact]
Real name: Gina
Status: Member
Member Since: February 19, 2009
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Beta-reader: Yes
Female, older than I look and should know better.
Been reading fan fiction for a few years now, I'm just getting into Twilight stories and am amazed at the calibre and range of authors.
Live in Canada, just north of Toronto, yeah, I know, have many interests - reading, of course, karate, camping, gardening, sports-skiing, swimming, biking, walking, being with my boyfriend, partying,,,,etc.
I really like to give the authors the best review I can to assist them in A) feeling better about their work, B) get my name in print---not really, C) get the next chapter or story up from the author, D) It's too easy just to sit back and let others do it for you, E) I've been a beta reader.
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Summary: What would Twilight have been like if the roles were reversed?
Edward, Emmett and Jasper Swan are humans living in Forks with their dad, Charlie and they all work at the police station under their father.
Bella, Rosalie and Alice Cullen are vampires, sent to Forks by their vampire parents, Carlisle and Esme, as punishment.
Banner by Anne Cullen
Categories: AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Renee, Rosalie
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 19 Completed: Yes
Word count: 65420
[Report This] Published: February 13, 2009 Updated: January 15, 2010
Reviewer: antipyro Signed  
Date: February 26, 2009
Title: Chapter 4: Self Gratification (v)
ICE! I'd just like to see them jump!
Excellent!
You've captured that, male essence of, not really caring about anything except themselves. Author's Response: I'm so glad you found my little story!!
Thank you!
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: February 26, 2009
Title: Chapter 5: Game On (v)
I wonder if Jazz and Em realize the potential that Edward saw in all of them being affected? Em, probably not, Jazz...????
I would think that the three men wouldn't take any caution into mind. If after hearing the 'growl' (LOL), they might use a little caution, or at least be wary, (for the girls, of course).
Wonderful chapter.
Is this like the book where ingesting something is awful to the vampires? Author's Response: Thank you! And yes, that part is like the book.
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: February 26, 2009
Title: Chapter 6: Liquor and Lovin'
CONTROL!!! CONTROL!!!!!
WHAT CONTROL???
That was really hot! I loved the line, "His heart hammered as he lay with his chest pressed to mine, it was almost like I had a heartbeat again". What vampire wouldn't love that???
Please, Please, Please, next chapter...... Author's Response: LMAO!!! Thank you again antipyro! That line is one of my faves because it just made sense to me.
Stay tuned!!
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: March 05, 2009
Title: Chapter 7: Damage Control (v)
Hot! Hot! Hot! for all six of them...
Still trying to wrap my head around the mind-reading processes they all share...whoa! better stop or I'll fall over - dizzy!
Excellent Chapter - just the right bedtime story!!!
Please, Please keep writing. Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad I could provide you with a good bedtime story that will hopefully give you some yummy dreams!!
Thank you again for reading and please stay tuned!!
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: March 10, 2009
Title: Chapter 8: This Can't Be Normal (v)
Great sex scene, and I loved the shredded clothing items - LOL
So now that one is being turned, the others will follow shortly???
I wonder if Alice's thought has anything to do with it???
Great chapter, and good work by yourself and your beta - vjgm. Author's Response: Thank you very much! And my beta IS the bestest is she not?
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: March 19, 2009
Title: Chapter 9: Sketching
So close, yet so far. I like that you're going slowly with these two. I still can't seem to find some plot or background story to add to this fic. You're the author; I'll read it regardless. I really like the mixed up emotions of Edward and Jasper though.
Update when you can, Please. Author's Response: Thank you for reading antipyro, I always look forward to your reviews!
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: March 27, 2009
Title: Chapter 10: Some Questions Answered
...in the hall of happy thoughts, of course!
Nice work breaking it to the other boys. They took it so well, even offering to help in something they didn't understand was so dangerous. I hope Emmett is o.k. after changing.
You know, at first I found this story a little off centre, but now, I'm really into it. I can't wait for what may happen next. I'm glad I stuck with you; your writing is terrific and no or very few typos! Very easy to read. Author's Response: LMAO!!! Thank you so much! It does help to have the most kick-ass beta that ever walked the planet helping me with the typos and whatnot. I'm glad you stuck with me too because I really do enjoy your reviews, you are very honest and I appreciate that so much!
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: April 05, 2009
Title: Chapter 11: Bath Confessions
Umm, you should have spent much more time with the bath scene; not that Emmett isn't worth while, but Edward, naked, wet, and oh, so ready....GAH! Author's Response: LOL! Thank you, I think ;-)
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: April 13, 2009
Title: Chapter 11: Bath Confessions
Ooo, a waiting game for Bella and Edward and Jasper and Alice too. I can see Emmett being a real 'bear' for a while. I guess Rosalie may have to spend more time with him, in seclusion......
Always a good read...
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: April 13, 2009
Title: Chapter 12: Awakening
Ykies!! She did it!! I thought for sure she'd have more restraint. Will she manage to hold Edward down during the burning?? Will he come through it better or worse than Emmett??
Yes, you left us another cliffie.....So, that means the next chapter is soon to be posted?? Right??? Yes??!!!
I like the thoughts you write in italics. That little inner voice helps explain a lot of what the characters are being put through by you. It lets us get our head around what and where you're coming from. Thanks. Author's Response: Thank you so much! My own inner voice is so stinking loud that I can't help but use that element when with my characters when I write.
Please, stay tuned, the next chapter is in the works!
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: April 28, 2009
Title: Chapter 13: Acting Fast
Oh, the sensuous touching of naked bodies, Mmmmm, so good!
Loved the tussle Rose and Emmett had in the woods, LOL, felling a tree!!!
Seems the animal blood is better with a feisty animal, must be the adrenaline boost, if animals have that.
Fantastic chapter. I'd like to know how the guys are gonna' react to not being able to see Charlie again. Can it happen? What conditions?
Love you!!! Author's Response: Thanks you so much babes, I'm glad you likey!
*MMMWAHHH*
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: May 05, 2009
Title: Chapter 14: Brotherly Bond
Hmmmm, what's it mean that Edward changes faster? Does Bella's touching him, to cool him as he changes have anything to do with it?
Will Emmett ever get over his blood lust for Jasper? When will or if Jasper be changed and by whom?
How will the boys see their dad again?
Great chapter full of lots of drama and even funny parts. Hope the next chapter comes soon! Author's Response: So many questions, and every single one of them completly and utterly classified. I could tell you, but then I'd have to kill you and I can't afford to lose any readers.
Thanks, as always for reading babes! *MWAH*
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: May 17, 2009
Title: Chapter 15: Possession
Love the fact that Emmett assisted Bella in Edward's transformation. Too bad Edward didn't see it that way...LOL.
It's interesting to note that Edward's need for closeness and need outweighed his need for craving to his thirst. A sign for things to come???
Nice to see Esme, Rosalie and Carlisle in on the scene too.
Excellent work; love to see the next chapter soon.... Author's Response: Thank you so much bb! *MWAH*
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: June 03, 2009
Title: Chapter 16: Purple
Great new powers - Awesome! Can't wait for them to be used, especially Emmett's shielding powers.
I do hope Charlie understands, as much as possible about his boys. Will they make him a vampire too???
Is there going to be some hot sexy moves coming up for Edward and Bella??? Please?
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: June 03, 2009
Title: Chapter 17: Family Ties
WOW! Great story line about Renee. Loved every word!
Jasper, now, has no inhibitions to the change. Charlie's preparations at work, wouldn't they cause some eye brow raising? I'm sure something can be said to cover it up....?
As usual, Bella and Edward - romping - great scene, especially with Edward's mother causing Bella to be jealous. Will this happen again, later?
Love your little story; please keep posting. Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading, I'm so glad you are enjoying my little fic!
Please, stay tuned!! *MWAH*
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: June 29, 2009
Title: Chapter 18: Reunions
Great re-union! Can't wait for the full story to come out. Author's Response: Thank you so much babes!! *MWAH*MWHA*MWAH*
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: January 17, 2010
Title: Chapter 18: Reunions
A very interesting and novel way of creating 'the family unit'. I would imagine the thing with time being the all important factor may have several meanings. Time to; finish the story, wait for the right moment, selecting the choicest of choices, timing the intervals precisely, aligning the occurrences with that of the human world, and a multitude of other functions. If it's one thing that vampires have, is time, so take what you need. This does contrast with how quickly the boys were turned, but maybe my timeline is slightly askew. I'm thinking this entire story was actually about 6 months long, but I've been wrong before. :)
I thank you for writing and finishing this piece of work. It was fun to read. I've read several of your works and you never disappoint. Thank you, again. Oh, a last chapter....goody... Author's Response: Thank you very much, I'm glad you enjoyed! *MWAH*MWAH*MWAH*
Summary: An entry for *A Twilight Teasing Story Contest*
Bella comes into her room, fresh from the shower, wrapped in only a towel, to find Edward lounging on her bed instead of out hunting like he's supposed to be. Slightly OOC Edward, but not too much.
Categories: Post-Eclipse, Breaking Dawn Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Word count: 4481
[Report This] Published: February 17, 2009 Updated: February 17, 2009
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: March 06, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: Show Me (v)
What towel?????? Who cares about a towel????
I just love these little steps of love Edward and Bella take, it's sooooo HOT!
You had me breathing hard and moaning and rolling in my seat!!! ARRRGH!! Ung.
Yes, I GREATLY appreciated this. Thank you. Author's Response: LOL! Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it!
I am considering continuing this story, so stay tuned!!
Summary:
When you’re young you’re supposed to have fun, law be damned. At least that’s how Bella Swan, Rosalie Hale and Alice Brandon saw it.
Three friends’ hell bent on having as much fun as they can while they are still young. Only problem is, what they find fun normally gets them into trouble with the law.
Now their parents have had enough and have come to a decision to send their teenage daughters to Boot Camp for six months.
Alice, Bella and Rose are certainly not pleased with their parent’s news and vow to make life very interesting for all those at the correctional facility. With the help of three boys, who love causing just as much trouble as the girls, they don’t have a hard time keeping to their unspoken vow.
Banner by JayJayHale
Characters are quite OOC but the couples are the same as always.
Rated because of foul language, there shall be a lot of it. Also underage drinking, law breaking and shenanigans like that.
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 35 Completed: Yes
Word count: 110414
[Report This] Published: February 22, 2009 Updated: October 09, 2009
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: February 26, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 - They Don't Know What's Hit Them
Wonderful beginning. I'm sure you'll get into what had happened before to get them to this state.
Maybe some background into why these three are so 'terrible'?
O.K., I'll keep reading.... Author's Response: Thank you.
Alice.x
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: February 26, 2009
Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 - Drunken Adventures
Great story, and yes, you gave me my background information.
As far as updating, you take your time....make it good, not fast.
Who ratted them out? Author's Response: Thank you.
Oh, it was just one of the residents of La Push. The girls were being loud, haha. It was no one in particular.
Alice.x
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: February 26, 2009
Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 - Behind Bars
One more chapter....please, please, ......I beg you...
I'm from the east side of the continent - Seattle to California ?????? If you're driving straight through, maybe a day and a half? Anybody actually do this??
Nice intonations from the girls about where their being sent - LOL.
Boot camp can be many things. Author's Response: Lol, when I found out how long it would take to drive it I realised that I wouldn't want to dirve from Seattle to California. I guess it just makes the girls even more annoyed at having to sit on a bus for a long period of time, haha.
Alice.x
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: February 26, 2009
Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 - Road Trip
Yes, nothing unusual about the girls trying to get away....but I guess, since they were in the middle of nowhere, they could have climbed abord one of the truck rigs to wherever....Ha, Ha.
Will we find out the names of the guards, or is it not relevant to the story?
Keep writing....yes, I'll put as a favourite and to be notified on updates. Author's Response: Yes, you will find out who the four men are in the next chapter.
Gladness. Lol.
Alice.x
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: March 05, 2009
Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 - Emeralds
I'm spinning!!!
Willpower - the girls downfall??? I'm sure they'll meet up with these three again, and again, and again.....etc.
Very realistic portrayal of rebellion. I can't wait for Bella to get lost looking for her room LOL Author's Response: Haha, they don't have much will power, so they wont be able to control themselves for long.
Bella getting lost will be fun to write I have it all planned haha.
Thank you.
Alice.x
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: March 10, 2009
Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 - Pizza and Boys
I'm definately interested in side stories, like the background of Edward, Emmett and Jasper before they came to the camp; maybe the history of the camp, i.e. no one has ever gotten out?; why the food sucks; punishment details, i.e. painting the walls that boring, sad green colour.
Yes, Bella should have kissed him, regardless of where she was - she is a rebel after all...
Excellent writing. Mike was especially icky - LOL Author's Response: I've got the first chapter of the companion story written, and there will definitely be a chapter on what the boys did to get into the camp.
Haha, she should have, but I'm evil :P.
Thank you.
Alice.x
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: March 11, 2009
Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 - Sinful Teasing
Whatever your favourite kind of cookie is that you like, I'm giving you a whole freshly baked plateful to satiate your hunger and never leave a hanging cliffie like that again!!
Love the snark to Lauren, the bottle-blond!! She's got revenge stamped all over her face! The teacher's a pet - he must have more ways to get difficult kids to do something????...either that or he's a wimp just filling some time before he retires.
Yes, longer chapters Please and soon, or no more cookies! Author's Response: Haha, I might just be swayed with cookies.
There shall be more of Lauren in the story, she ain't going anywhere, haha.
Haha, yes that particular teacher is a bit of a push over.
Thanks for reviewing.
Alice.x
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