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Penname: antipyro [ Contact]
Real name: Gina
Status: Member
Member Since: February 19, 2009
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Beta-reader: Yes
Female, older than I look and should know better.
Been reading fan fiction for a few years now, I'm just getting into Twilight stories and am amazed at the calibre and range of authors.
Live in Canada, just north of Toronto, yeah, I know, have many interests - reading, of course, karate, camping, gardening, sports-skiing, swimming, biking, walking, being with my boyfriend, partying,,,,etc.
I really like to give the authors the best review I can to assist them in A) feeling better about their work, B) get my name in print---not really, C) get the next chapter or story up from the author, D) It's too easy just to sit back and let others do it for you, E) I've been a beta reader.
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Summary: 
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When Alice's visions reveal the Volturi's horrfying plans to descend upon the Cullen family, armed with Irina's testimony of an immortal child sighted in their care, she enlists Jasper's aid in seeking out the one hope that may spare all of their lives... if they return alive.
This story serves to fill in Alice and Jasper's adventures away from the Cullen family during Breaking Dawn, and is second in an intended series based strongly in existing canon. That said, it is highly recommended that the first story in the series, Down The Rabbit Hole, be read, as parts of the created canon/backstory for Alice Cullen will become relevant down the road in this story as well. As with DTRH, this story draws on allusions to Alice's Adventures In Wonderland and Through The Looking-Glass, And What Alice Found There by Lewis Carroll.
Rated NC-17 for violence, language and a dash of lemons. This story will occassionally contain dialogue and text from Breaking Dawn by Stephenie Meyer for clarity and continuity; no infringement is intended and all chapters will be noted accordingly in that instance.
Note (May 13/09): The White Rabbit series now has its own blip.fm account, complete with ever-growing playlist of songs that influence the stories for you to stream. Check it out here: blip.fm/aliceswhiterabbit
July 2009:
Indie TwiFic Awards Finalist: Best Canon (WIP)
Indie TwiFic Awards Nominee: Best Characterizations (non Edward/Bella) (WIP)
Categories: Breaking Dawn Characters: Alice, Alistair, Aro, Bella, Caius, Carlisle, Charlotte, Chelsea, Demetri, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Irina, Jacob, Jane, Jasper, Kachiri, Marcus, Nessie, Peter, Renesmee, Rosalie, Senna, Zafrina
Challenges: Series: The White Rabbit series, Eternal Hope: The Alice and Jasper Archive
Chapters: 23 Completed: Yes
Word count: 81239
[Report This] Published: January 30, 2009 Updated: October 01, 2010
Reviewer: antipyro Signed 
Date: September 15, 2009
Title: Chapter 13: Pinned
Marvelous telling of the creatures of the canopy...almost sinister....but not.
So glad Alice found the other hybrid...now just to convince him to come. Excellent integration of one side with the other, the Araza fruit tree reference and the fruit on it.
So waiting for you to get unblocked and write more of this amazing fic..er not fictitious but surely inspiring.
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: October 05, 2009
Title: Chapter 14: Underpromotion
*C-R-A-C-K*, as I take another long throw of my bull-whip....readying for another blow....
I have both of your other fics on my list and am reading TLMM, excellent story too!...but I really would like you to wrap this up, as I can feel you're near the ending???
It must have been like hell to write this chapter, what with all those unfamiliar names and who's a relative of whom and what happened to the other sister/brother?? IDK, but I'm through it and now....wait for more! Author's Response: We actually have about 8 chapters to go! I have plans... This is actually the best part of the fic for me; it's where I get to be original. Beyond everyone making it to Forks eventually... big empty canvass.
Let's just say this: for every time people have asked me, "Why did you bring up this?" or "why are we flashing back now OMG what's next?" my answer has been, "I have reasons." Beginning with chapter 16, those reasons become VERY apparent.
Thank you so much for reading <3 I love the familiar reviewer names.
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: October 26, 2009
Title: Chapter 15: Hypermodernism
Fantastic chapter....glad that Alice and Jaspers timing to find the hybrid witness allowed them plenty of time to return, although it strained those back at home.
Great waterfall scene; I guess pirahana's wouldn't do anything to them, eh? Maybe chip a tooth - LOL!
I'm reading 'Tattoos' as well. Glad it got a nomination - very well written AH, but finish this one first if you have to choose. Please???
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: March 15, 2010
Title: Chapter 16: Discovered Attack
I welcome any and all updates you give us, as long as the fic isn't abadonned, and you won't do that.
This chapter is completely worth the wait anyways. The introduction of Alejandro and Maria causing uncertainty in my mind as to Jasper's safety. Oooo, I'm tingling with anticipation....please don't make me wait as long.....
Summary: Bella has given up her whole life for those around her. What will she do, who will she be, where will she go with no one and nothing holding her back anymore? AH/AU, canon pairings eventually - NON-canon pairings initially.
Categories: AU-Human Characters: None
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 28 Completed: Yes
Word count: 134201
[Report This] Published: February 13, 2009 Updated: July 02, 2010
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: February 28, 2009
Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5
This story is really great! Exploring the new 'you' in many different ways...how very refreshing.
Love the details and that you're not skimping on anything.
I'll be writing reviews every chapter I can.
Amazing!! Author's Response: Thanks so much for this kind review! I am glad you're enjoying the story and I hope you continue to enjoy it :)
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: March 03, 2009
Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6
Great chapter! Loved the doorway kiss sequence - I thought Bella was joking at first - LOL At least they can stay as friends, that's terrific!
The lunch date should be interesting.... Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! I am glad you are enjoying it so far, and I hope you continued to enjoy it :)
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: March 04, 2009
Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7
Wow, I bet that 'bank' gave really good interest rates.....LOL
Great rendition of the before time for Edward. Beautiful work! Author's Response: Thanks so much! I am glad you enjoyed the chapter :) Edward pays a little.. visit to the bank later in the story, too ;) heheh.
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: March 04, 2009
Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8
Is this anything like Carnal sex???? Oh, that was soooo HOT!! It brings back some very intimate memories, and a list of firsts!! Author's Response: I am glad you enjoyed the chapter :) So happy you're still enjoying the story, too!
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: March 04, 2009
Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9
What a schedule of events!! I'm excited for Bella and Jasper, but wonder about Edward and Tanya chances. Very unique initial pairings. Author's Response: Thanks; glad you're still liking it! I think you will like how it all pans out -- at least, I hope so! :)
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: March 04, 2009
Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10
I really didn't think she'd go through with it - GAH!! My real fantasy come true....
Your explanations were magnificent!!! Author's Response: aw, thanks! I am so glad you liked it :) And, yeah, she went through with it.. hehe.
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: March 04, 2009
Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11
Beautiful transition - I was rolling on the floor with the Tanya/Kate fiasco!!
Loved Edwards assessment of Bella's tradgedies..“So, you just told them to be together? You just stepped aside, the same afternoon you were basically publicly humiliated and, well, outed to the entire floor?” ROTFLOL Author's Response: haha, thanks for the review! :) I am glad that you loved Edward's recap.
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: March 04, 2009
Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12
That was soooo well done ----- not even in my imagination would it go so well.
"friend of an ex, of an ex." LOL Author's Response: aw, thank you so much! I am glad I was able to do it in a way that you appreciated :)
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: March 04, 2009
Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13
Real for who? Bella's still figuring herself out and yes, it looks like she's falling into the date routine, she'll deny it.
SB = Save Bella? Author's Response: Nope, it's not save bella :) Thanks for the review, I hope you keep enjoying! She's about to get some wise advice from Edward and Emmett, if it wasn't in 13 already.. I forget which it is in, sorry, but I think it's 14.
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: March 04, 2009
Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14
SB=Scone Boy?
I LOVE YOU!!!!
I'm smiling wide with this one, Ahhhhhhhh....... Author's Response: You got SB in one try, excellent!
I am so glad that you love the chapter, and me, and that you're smiling wide :) Thanks for the reviews!
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: March 04, 2009
Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15
I can empathize with the emotional release of Bella finally letting go of her past hurts and pains and realizing a new beginning with Edward.
I think we all go through the same thing, with friends, loved ones, family, significant others.....it all means the same....we're human.
You, and your mentors, have so eloquently captured a true, precious moment.
I thank you all. Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! My mentors?
I am glad you're loving the story still.
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: March 04, 2009
Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16
It better be Saturday really soon.
I've been meaning to mention that I really love the way you include a bit of the last chapter at the beginning to remind the reader and give the overall setting.
YES! Wonderful Kiss!!! Too bad the flirting will slow down now... ;-(
I'm overwhelmed with all the emotions you so meticuously tortured us with. It brings you right back to earth. Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review.. what makes you think they won't flirt as much! Trust me, they will ;)
So glad you're overwhelmed.. means I am doing my job :)
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: March 27, 2009
Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17
As if that wasn't a tease already! So unbearably hot, I just want to scream! Oh, and Edward, so mindful (I hope that won't turn into anything) yet so romantic and loving....sigh..
Fantastic, wonderful, you're the most awesome author, I grovel for my treat. Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! :)
Here is your teaser:
I climbed onto the bed just as naked as I had left it. Edward and I sat facing each other, knees touching. The first box he opened was the crème brulee. I put my hands on his knees and ran them up his thighs as he looked into the disposable foil pot curiously.
His eyes flicked from the pot to mine and then back as my hands continued on their path. When I reached his waist, I uncrossed my legs and climbed into his lap. I adjusted myself and wrapped my legs around him, pulling myself a little closer.
“You're gonna share, right?” I raised an eyebrow.
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: May 05, 2009
Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18
Good thing to clear up that stuff with Jake, if he's telling the truth.
I just love that easy going, fun to be with feeling between Bella and Edward, very well done! What surprises is Edward planning for the first day of school? I just get that feeling.....
Amazing story, one of the best I've read for story line, content, canon and typo errors. You and beta's rock! Author's Response: Thank you so much for this review! I really appreciate all of your comments, compliments and thoughts :)
As promised, here is your teaser:
My feet somehow carried me out of the dorm room and down the hall. I couldn't stop long enough to answer Alice's frantic questions as I ran, I just had to go and explain later. I didn't want to get sick in our room bathroom, I wanted to maintain some level of privacy while I indulged myself in the unscheduled nervous breakdown.
The bathroom door flew open when my palm smacked against it. I found the nearest toilet and got straight to business. I was sobbing, heaving my body towards the white porcelain bowl that most college kids seemed to worship for vastly different reasons than I was right now. I heard the door open and close behind me, but once my stomach was empty, I just sat there. I let all of my previously held hopes and dreams out in the form of tears, for what felt like hours.
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: May 09, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
I am so totally honoured by this...I didn't even know it was included with my review. GAH!!
Thank you very much!! It's reasons like this that you really rock! Author's Response: aw, you're makin' me blush. Thanks so much!!
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: May 12, 2009
Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19
You wrote Edward helping Bella crash through her breakdown, and it was so believable and so loving, I'm gonna' print that part out and give it to my BF, so when the next breakdown comes along.....or maybe I'll just suggest this as a precurser to sex....Hey.....there's an idea ---- Great thinking!!! I almost cried it was so good.
Edward is a saint; having to get Bella through something he's not even sure what it is. His saint-hood isn't even marred by that devilish grin he develops when he entices Bella to stay. Sounds nice tho', St. Edward, healer of hearts and minds; giver of love and heart pounding sex! LOL
So cute both of them getting tested together....an 'Awwww' moment.
Loved the details - Alice checking on Bella, calling Edward, getting the towels and new clothes, keeping out others from the washroom to give Bella some peace....Can you come over and organize my office?????? Author's Response: Thanks for the review; I am glad you enjoyed the chapter :)
Don't worry; Edward is poking me in the brain, demanding that I explain to everyone why he's a good boyfriend. He wasn't always. St Edward, I totes giggled at that. I'll send Alice over to help with the office, okay!? :) Return her in original condition when finished, please!
Here is your promised teaser:
“Well, you two seem perfect together, the very little bit I've seen,” I said, emphasizing the last part.
“I know, we've just be shut in at his place. He has a great apartment. His parents have money, so they rent this beautiful place for him. He has a nice area setup to work on homework, and he's just the best kisser ever,” she sighed.
“I would beg to differ, but it's kinda gross to talk about the way your cousin kisses, I imagine.”
I flopped on the bed next to her, my body facing the opposite direction.
“You love him, Rose?”
“Oh yeah. Totally. Do you love Edward?”
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: June 03, 2009
Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20
Loved it! I just love the way you write, it seems to flow so effortlessly. There's no mistaking who's talking or where the conversation is leading, not that you give things away. Some authors tend to skip around in their brains and write that way, thus losing the reader - but you don't. Brilliant!
Great line, "“Do they study you and teach other guys how to be perfect boyfriends, too?”"
Terrific sex scene. Every little tidbit, perfectly in order and so meaningful, never trivialized. You don't skimp on anything. I really appreciate that. Author's Response: Thank you so much for this awesome review :) I am so flattered at all of your comments and complements -- thank you :)
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: June 15, 2009
Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21
Is Anna going to play another role later in the story? or is this just a mention of what Edward has lost? Would they go visit her gravesite on the anniversary or her birthday? Just asking...
Ya, it does seem like they're living together, doesn't it, eh? *nudge, nudge, wink, wink* Is Bella's feeling for a girl's night together one way she can start to separate from them towards Edward? It might seem a bit too soon, I think.
Great story; it's everything (except the vampire bit -LOL) that should go into a story. The part of the dental dam was funny as it was erotic! Excellent work! Author's Response: Anna won't play a role later, but we will find out more about her I suspect. Visiting her gravesite? That's an excellent question, and I'll be honest -- I am not sure!
Yes, the girl's night is def. because she is feeling a little too rushed with Edward. I think she's conflicted, like we all are when we get swept away in that new love, you know? Like, oh crap I can't get enough of this person, but at the same time, you don't want to lose yourself..
Thank you so much for the high praise and complements. I am so glad you're enjoying the story so far!
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: June 16, 2010
Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21
My, my....finally returning to catch up on my reading of this fantastic story, I'm sorry I was away for that long. This chapter brought in all the things I love about it, and the 'Discovery List' is an amazing idea!
I'm wondering how soon Bella will be moving in with Edward, but also realizing she still needed her time to do her own thing with the girls. I hope she develops the same 'sister-hood' with Rosalie and Alice that Edward has.
I feel sorry for Tanya, having Kate leave her again. I'm wondering how strongly Bella felt that they could have worked out.
Many thanks to your betas, prereaders, muses and supporters for bringing another fine example of your writing. Author's Response: Thank you so much for this review. :) Glad that you're getting caught up, and that you still find the story enjoyable. I was very worried about that when it came back.
Summary: What would Twilight have been like if the roles were reversed?
Edward, Emmett and Jasper Swan are humans living in Forks with their dad, Charlie and they all work at the police station under their father.
Bella, Rosalie and Alice Cullen are vampires, sent to Forks by their vampire parents, Carlisle and Esme, as punishment.
Banner by Anne Cullen
Categories: AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Renee, Rosalie
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 19 Completed: Yes
Word count: 65420
[Report This] Published: February 13, 2009 Updated: January 15, 2010
Reviewer: antipyro Signed 
Date: February 26, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: The Beginning
This is great! Having the three boys checking out a 'ruckus', I can only imagine EPOV.
Please, carry on. Author's Response: Thanks for reading!!
Reviewer: antipyro Signed
Date: February 26, 2009
Title: Chapter 2: Setting the Scene (v)
Very nicely done! Great intro's. I'm just thinking that one of the boys should realize that they should be somewhat careful, all may not be as it seems.
O.k., I'll just read some more..... Author's Response: Thank you antipyro! I'm glad you are enjoying it!
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