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The Family by wicked angel Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 140]
Summary:

Bella Swan and Jacob Black are right on the doorstep of happily ever after.  But a few seconds spent in the wrong place at the wrong time, and Bella’s in deep.  The gritty underworld of Chicago has its drug lords and its gangs, and then there are the Cullens, a family of elite power and extreme influence.  In the midst of murder, extortion, and various other illegal pastimes, can Bella remain loyal to Jacob and resist the pull of the beautiful and magnetic Edward?


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward, Emmett, Jacob, Jasper
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 10 Completed: No Word count: 69198
[Report This] Published: June 12, 2009 Updated: August 05, 2009


Reviewer: fonsy Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: July 07, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1--Fairy Tale, Interrupted (V)

I'm glued to my seat, waiting for more...I was going to click "next", but found none, lol, can't wait for next chapter...I'm firmly on Team Edward BTW, so  I'm patiently hanging here.



Author's Response:

Your patience will be rewarded!  Much more to come and very soon.  Thanks so much for the review =)

 
Reviewer: fonsy Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: July 09, 2009 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2--Introductions (vjgm)

OMG! They finally met! I love that last part when he told her that it would be a shame if she got herself killed. Waiting patiently for my redemption :)



Author's Response:

Your redemption comes swiftly, friend...thanks for staying with me =)

 
Reviewer: fonsy Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: July 09, 2009 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3--Stakeout (vjgm)

cant't wait for next chapter, it will be sooo goood! Oooh, and Frenchward, got to love Frenchward...Frenchward makes me hot :)



Author's Response:

Okay, I don't think you can actually be human if you don't think Frenchward is hot!  He is molten lava, melt my shoes hot!  Updating very very soon. =)

 
Reviewer: fonsy Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: July 11, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4--Jesse and Antoine (vjgm)

OMG!!! That right there was fucking hot!!!! I figured he was listening to her when Bella said his name, and Jesse said "don't stop", and when Bella wanted him to talk, and he did! OMG I'm telling you, that was H.O.T.! then when he licked her fingers, OMG, I would have died on spot. Some of my fave lines from this chapter: "Oh no, no, no. He did not just talk to me in French!", and "Its Gay, get over it"...I know, simple, but made me laugh. So, to put it in Bella's words "Fucking Brilliant!!! Now, I'm ready FEED ME MORE!!!!! :) 'till then , I'll go back and re read it, it was that hot...I'm telling you Frenchward should come with a warning ;)...BTW, I do not love cliffhangers, LOL.



Author's Response:

What?!  You don't like cliffhangers?!  Oh, you're going to hate me then, because they keep coming.  That's just how I roll, hehe.  But I'm glad I could make you laugh this time, and I'm glad I could heat ya up. =)  The next chapter is in the queue now.  So glad you're enjoying!!

 
Reviewer: fonsy Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: July 11, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4--Jesse and Antoine (vjgm)

Yes, I know...guilty, I read it again...that's how much I liked it (plus I'm a perv, so sue me, LOL) Anyways, just forgot to tell you, as another fan sugested, maybe you could write an out take on this chapter from EPOV. I know that maybe you just thought about writing BPOV, but this would be a mega treat for us.

 
Reviewer: fonsy Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: July 12, 2009 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5--Mergers and Acquisitions (vjgm)

Thanks for the quick update! That was one epic smut, loved it. Love her internal monologue too. What happened to Alice? Can't wait to find more about the other characters. I'm torn about what I want, I mean, I'm Team Edward all the way, so yay, that they hooked up!!!, but I feel kind of sorry for Jake. It sucks to be Bella right now...well except the fact that she had Edward :)



Author's Response:

Epic smut, huh?  Nice!  And I do have to say that I'm quite pleased with your little Edward/Jacob dilemma there =)  That is my intent after all: that bliss that our protagonists had their hott moment, but then that "ugg" feeling when you know that someone has to suffer for it.  So yeah, it sucks to be Bella...or else it rocks because she has two hot boys giving her, um, attention.

And everyone wants to know about Alice...she's around.  That's all I'll say.  Please keep reading.  More to come very soon!

 
Reviewer: fonsy Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: July 16, 2009 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6--Thickening Plot (vjgm)

In true Bella fashion...danger magnet. Now she'll be in the middle of some other dark business run by Sam. Not expecting that at all, so it will be great, adding more tension. I feel so, so torn. Bella's playing them both, well, Edward wanted it. Is the first time, I think, that I see a story where the guy is the one that wants to be on the side, so desperate for love that is willing to share the object of his affection with another man, and that is so deep, so sad, just so no Edwardlike, and I love it for it, for been different. Love triangles are so fucked up (pardon my french), I've been in one, and it takes a lot out of you, so I feel for everyone of them. Is like you know is sooo wrong in sooo many levels, but you can't just stop. And as much as I would like to hate Jake, he is actually the only one not been a cheater, the one kept in the shadow, he does not even know he has competition. I only hope he cheated on Bella at some point before all this happened so I stop feeling bad for him, and say Ha! you got what you deserved, LOL, but I have a feeling that will not be the case, LOL. Mmmm, now I'm thinking about Rageward, will I like him more than Frenchward, mmm, I have to wait and see, but please don't keep me waiting much ;)



Author's Response:

I know a little something about love triangles, I know how screwed up they are, and how everyone gets hurt, no matter what.  I know it's not pretty, but I thrive on the mess.  And I know this site is full of anti-Jake peeps, and if I were smart, I'd say that I made him the good (or at least better) guy on purpose, so he'd get some more love here.  But I didn't really.  That's just how the cards fell this time around.  Thank you so much for your review.  Glad you're still enjoying it!

Oh, and don't fret.  Rageward is on his way!

 
Reviewer: fonsy Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: July 18, 2009 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7--Social Misconduct (vjgm)

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Author's Response:

Ok, the formatting of this review is farily jacked, but I think I got it all, lol.  Yeah, I know some people don't like reviews that aren't totally ass-kissing.  But you're not hurting my feelings at all here dear.  Bella is a selfish, selfish girl in my little story.  She's playing both guys because she's scared to lose either of them...and if she's not careful, she'll lose both.  And yeah, she's a hypocrite.  If either of them were sleeping with someone else, she'd lose her dang mind.  And yet both of these men crave her...<shrug> that is the world we live in.

No, you are not weird at all to love Rageward.  Dear Lord, if that's true, I know I'm in trouble. =)  And I'm so glad that you've stuck with me and enjoyed the twisty plot.  I promise, there is a method to my madness, hehe.

You're awesome, thanks for the review!

 
Reviewer: fonsy Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: July 23, 2009 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8--Taking Sides (vjgm)

Sorry for my last review, somehow I managed to fuck up the text, silly me. And thanks for the replies, you are an awesome writer and great with fans. And yes, charmward indeed. The first text messages were kind of funny, he was so desperate, and then the line "I'd rather be crazy with you than sane with anyone else", can you say "SWOON!" Loved the epic chapter, so much going on, like an action packed movie. And loved how you added the Cullen/Quilete feud, like the Twilight books. What a Cliffy, can't wait for more!



Author's Response:

I'm so glad you love that line.  I totally do too, and it makes me grin every time I read it.  If any man, let alone Edward, said that to me, I'd be a puddle on the floor.

Sorry for the cliffies...I just can't help it =)  And I'm glad you're still loving this, and I'll have more for you soon! <3 

 
Reviewer: fonsy Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: August 05, 2009 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10--Extraction (vjgm)

i can't believe there are only 2 more chapters left! i feel so sad for jake, when he asked her "why", i'm intrigued by edward and his "director title", hope there is more about that.

 
Summary:

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Lt. Edward Platt, a German soldier, has been assigned to the Auschwitz Prison Camp. He learns much more than the horrors of war and falls for a beautiful Jewish girl named Bella. Can Edward save Bella before they both become ashes in the sky?

Rated NC-17, AU/AU, Romance/Angst, Historical, OOC, ExB, HEA

ALL MUST READ:

This story has a backdrop of WWII and the Holocaust. It is a love story between a German soldier and a Jewish prisoner of war. I am Jewish so this setting is something that is a part of my family's history. I would never disrespect the Jewish culture and history nor my family's history.

There's no rape, coercion, etc, of any kind in this story. There is a scene with dominance, but not rape. Rape is a serious crime that should never, ever be confused with dominance. Never at any point in this story, does Edward use his position to force Bella to have sex with him. Bella gives her consent freely and truly wants to love Edward and have him love her in return. Again, it is a love story.

If anything about this story confuses or bothers anyone for any reason, please contact me or visit the thread: http://www.twilighted.net/forum/viewtopic.php?f=44&t=4718. There is no need for harassment, insults or general bashing. I will not hide nor take down any stories solely because some people have chosen to make false accusations that are both hurtful and disrespectful to all those involved. This story is my gift to those who have been following my writing. I am leaving this story up for those who have read and appreciated it. If you don't like this story, then please simply don't read it.

Thank you very much for taking the time to read this note and thank you for reading Ashes in the Sky. I sincerely appreciate those who see the beauty I put into the story.

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Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes Word count: 7932
[Report This] Published: June 15, 2009 Updated: June 20, 2009


Reviewer: fonsy Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: August 06, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Ashes in the Sky

I really don't get why some people made a big deal out of this. To me is a beautiful piece of literature. The part when she says "what if I say no", and then edward saying "then i'll let you go". when did he stated that if was either have sex with me or you die? that was not what he said. Bella agreed, she loved him, it was consensual. Mybe she said that to test him, to see if he was bad like all the others. I loved it. So sorry to hear that you won't be writing for fanfic anymore. I loved your other story "the weed collector". Your stories feel real, not "disney themed" like many others. You write beautifully. I really hope to see more of your writing in the future. Do not listen to ignorant-full of themselves people.

 
Summary:

 Bella Swan is a talented chef who is trapped in her mediocre life. Edward Cullen is a successful lawyer trapped in an engagement he wants out of.

 Their worlds collide when Edward and his family take a cruise through the Indian Ocean. Edward is the impossible guest in Cabin 481 that becomes the thorn in Bella’s side. A heated argument on the ship’s stern one night takes Bella and Edward overboard, forcing them to get along in order to survive on an island in the middle of nowhere. They find themselves caught up in the beauty and passion of the island. It’s not enough to keep them together when they must return to the real world after being rescued.

 When tragedy strikes a year later, will the twosome be able to come to terms with their past or will they allow the storms they face to destroy their only chance at true happiness?

 

tropical storm of passion


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Jessica, Mike, Renee, Rosalie, Tanya
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 12 Completed: No Word count: 65639
[Report This] Published: June 16, 2009 Updated: May 23, 2010


Reviewer: fonsy Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: August 24, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: Edward vs. Wild

i agree, but i love that they argue! and is a given to act like that with everything that's going on....and yay! to the make up sex.



Author's Response:

Thank you! These two are not accustomed to losing control of everything so yeah, the frustration that they feel needs some type of outlet, unfortunately that outlet comes in the form of arguing with each other.

You'll be happy to know that the next chapter is already turned in, so be on the lookout for it in the next day or so. (There may be some make-up sex in it. I can't remember...Hee, Hee)

 

Stacy : ) 

 
Summary:

When his sex fantasy starts following him to class, Edward realizes that sleep deprivation and drug cocktails are not the best way to rid oneself of temptation. He does not remember the first time he saw Bella, only that she was probably on the arm of his lifelong rival, Jasper. He is haunted instead by the figments of her in his bed, on his floor, against the wall of his studio, atop his piano… He is convinced that if he wants to lose the ghost, he needs to seduce the real girl and begins a rather pathetic crusade to win the stranger’s heart.

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Now, the closer Jasper comes to finding out, the closer the truth behind "the feud" threatens to reveal itself and tear their relationship to shreds.

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Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: No Word count: 134153
[Report This] Published: June 18, 2009 Updated: February 05, 2010


Reviewer: fonsy Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: July 29, 2009 Title: Screwing Up

i'm kind of glad more people know about it. at least that way they can be normal around them. so, what is edward's condition?, is he really sick?, or is it just about bella?



Author's Response:

It's about Bella. He's not really insane, not completely. I'm taking a few creative licenses with that.

 
Reviewer: fonsy Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: August 03, 2009 Title: Screwing Up

yay! bring on camera time and maybe a red bow on edward?

 
Summary:

What happens at Charlie's wedding is hot and unforgettable for Bella Swan. Charlie's best man has her moaning and melting everywhere from her father's living room to the coat closet at the rehearsal dinner. But great no-strings-attached sex suddenly becomes complicated. And what will happen when Bella meets someone else who just happens to be the best man's son?

Thanks to Leslie (red delicious) for the awesome banner!

 


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Esme, Jasper
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 19 Completed: Yes Word count: 112144
[Report This] Published: June 19, 2009 Updated: April 21, 2010


Reviewer: fonsy Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: November 29, 2009 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10: Babysitting Edward Cullen

thanks for the update, really missed this story

 
Reviewer: fonsy Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: September 22, 2009 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8: Anticipation

i love your alice, she is freaking funny! and yay edward!, though, carlile is still a hot bitch ;)

 
Reviewer: fonsy Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 08, 2009 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11: The Wedding

happy belated b-day....thanks for the update, loved it

 
Summary:

AH AU When Edward finally gets the chance at getting the girl, he has no idea what to do, so he turns to a message board call The Red Strings of Fate.

This is a story told in e-mails, texts, and message board posts.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Esme
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 15 Completed: No Word count: 32372
[Report This] Published: June 20, 2009 Updated: December 12, 2009


Reviewer: fonsy Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: August 27, 2009 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

your edward is soooo sweet, i can't get enough of him.

 
Summary:

                            

 

Edward, who was once a geek, and Bella secretly crushed on each other since high school. Can their 10 year reunion bring them together?  Is one night enough to squelch a decade old passion or will it fan the flames into an unquenchable fire. Lemmony/Profanity E/B A/J R/E


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 2 Completed: No Word count: 4179
[Report This] Published: June 25, 2009 Updated: August 09, 2009


Reviewer: fonsy Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: July 11, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: She's So High

Can't wait for next chapter. I'm Class of '98, so bring on the wonderful songs of the '90s!



Author's Response:

*High Five*  Class of 98 myself!!!!  If you want to enjoy our playlists here you go:

http://www.playlist.com/playlist/16265520139/standalone

http://www.playlist.com/playlist/16575132427/standalone

 
Reviewer: fonsy Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: August 09, 2009 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 Waiting for Tonight

thanks for the update, can't wait for them to meet again!

 
Summary:

Breaking Edward is my first attempt at an AH story. Edward has severe OCD. He has now been dubbed by my readers on fanfiction.net as OCDward. His world and obsessions are completely turned upside-down when he meets his sister's friend, Bella, for the first time. It harbors around the difficulties of both of them struggling with coming to terms with what they are feeling while dealing with his hang-ups.

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Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 16 Completed: No Word count: 46069
[Report This] Published: June 27, 2009 Updated: December 20, 2009


Reviewer: fonsy Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: July 14, 2009 Title: Chapter 2: I Have Decided to Wage a War Against Myself

poor ocdward, it must be hard to break that habit.



Author's Response:

Near impossible, the poor boy. Hopefully he'll come clean to Bella soon... if it weren't for his damn pride, lol.

 
Summary:

Alice and Bella want what any couple wants, a baby. Bella asks her best friend Edward to contribute to the cause. He agrees but on one condition.  B/A and B/E pairing.  NC-17 for lemons and content.

 

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Thank you christine30974 for this new banner!

 


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 13 Completed: No Word count: 49873
[Report This] Published: June 29, 2009 Updated: February 02, 2010


Reviewer: fonsy Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: August 31, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: I have a favor...

damn! I like this!!!

 
Reviewer: fonsy Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: August 31, 2009 Title: Chapter 2: Bella's Decision

I know that what he's asking bella is f'ed up, if he was just trying the bff thing he would say yes here's my milkshake, or sorry, but no...but i guess he has a hidden agenda? maybe he's so madly inlove with her that he does not see how selfish he is? Either way, i can not see fault in him, i love edward, no matter what, and i love this story too!

 
Reviewer: fonsy Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: August 31, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Unspoken Apology

I think I'm fucked in the head, I was sad that e/b did not hook up again :)

 
Reviewer: fonsy Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: August 31, 2009 Title: Chapter 5: Just Feel

I was feeling sad for alice...who am i kidding, whatever alice, yay E/B!!!! Ok, just a little sad, but now that jazz is in the picture, maybe everyone can have a happy ending!

 




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