Oh man, Victoria's in trouble! I just hope he finds Bella first (or vice versa). Then he won't try to kill himself after Victoria. Please udpate again soon!

~Jazz~

wow that was great

Wow, so she's all alone now. Poor Bella. I hope the Cullens find her soon!

~Jazz~

Interesting that Victoria chose to make her immortal, I thought it had been a mistake.

Author's Response:

Yeah, Victoria chose to make her immortal. When Bella told her that Edward had refused to make her a vampire, and had left, Victoria's attempt to upset Edward had was ruined. Why kill Bella, if Edward didn't care any more? So Victoria chose to do the one thing she thought might piss of Edward, and turned Bella into a vampire. 

I just found this story, and read each chapter that you have posted.  Sorry I didn't review each one, but I am enjoying your story very much, and wanted to read everything you had written so far.  I hope you don't take too long to update, because it will be really hard to wait.

It's hard to believe this is your first fic.  It's really good.  :)  If I have anything to complain about, it's that I wish your chapters were longer.  I come to the end of one, and want more.  I was lucky having four chapters to read at once, but even now, I want more.  Go figure!  :)

I have to say, I'm very glad that Victoria found Bella when she did -- and bit her instead of killing her, of course.  I am not a Jacob hater, but Jake and Bella were never meant to be more than friends.  Edward and Bella have to be together forever, and the timing was really close.  Plus, Bella was always meant to be a vampire.  And it sounds like Bella is not unhappy with her fate at the moment either.  She does need to find Edward, though, or any of the Cullens so that she can reunite with Edward.  I want her to search them out, and not think she needs to stay away from them, because Edward doesn't want her.  She has to get past what he told her in the woods and look for him.

Speaking of Edward, how long has it been since Bella was bitten when Edward finds her gone, and can hardly even detect her scent?  And why didn't Alice see that Victoria turned Bella, instead of killing her?  It seems, if she were seeing Victoria at all, she would have seen her decide to change Bella.  I would have much prefered that  Alice tell Edward she saw Bella changed, because then he would look for her, and not take off for Italy.  Of course, I don't know that's what you intend to have him do, but thinking Bella dead, he would want to end his own life, and going to provoke the Volturi is his only choice of how to do it.  *I* want him to detect both Bella's *and* Victoria's scent, or at least Victoria's, and follow it.  I would also like for him to find the place where Bella burned and follow her scent to find her.  One way or another, he *has* to find her -- or she him.  They *have* to reconnect.  And he has to get a new phone in case Alice sees Bella as a vampire.  I am really curious as to why Alice could see Victoria finding Bella, and not see Bella being changed instead of dying.

I'm sure my queries will be answered in future chapters, but patience is not one of my virtues, so I hope you post again fast, though I know it takes a while with Twilighted after you submit each chapter.  :)  Thanks for sharing this story.  It's a great read!  :)

can't wait for more

 

I am so glad they listened to her! Where'd Victoria go, though? And what is Edward going to do? Please update again soon!

~Jazz~

Go Bella! Amazing control. Can't wait to read more-definately got my attention

Go Bella! She rocks. Great control and trying to be a human vampire, much like her family, the Cullens. Great! Loved it!

I loved this :D 

i really like this and all of the detail is great!! keep writting i want to read more!!!!

love the idea behind this and how its written!!!!!!!!

wtm