i like the story but it is hight time that you give readers some info about the physiology of your particular vampire brand...
If their venom heals, then it is not venom, what the hell is it? But if it not poisonous , how does one become a vamp? Edward was transformed by Esme, he tells us. how?
And finally, why he is so repentant? It was Alice telling him to save Bella.
So I think you owe some explanation to your readers ...
Author's Response: Thank you for your review! I appreciate every reader who takes the time to leave good feedback.
In regards to your questions...
In every good book I have read there is not when time I have seen the author lay all their cards out on the table in the first few chapters. In my opinion, unanswered questions are what keeps the reader reading and coming back for more. There are some stories I have read that you never even understand the "physiology" of the main characters. I have chosen to do the same. Everything build up to the climax, where everything is answered. My vampire characters are extremely OOC. Should I have posted that in my summary? Yes, but I didn't. That has now been added. I had hoped that people would figure that out on their own since in the very first chapter Bella drank Edwards blood. That is not anything like Stephanie Meyers version, therefore is OOC. Since this is my first fanfiction, I have just learned recently what the "codes" even mean, and I am on chapter 18.
As far as the venom goes, it is poisonous, but you need to continue to read to understand that. I would love to be able to post my chapters on Twilighted quicker than normal but that seems impossible. The truth is you are going to have to wait, but your question will be answered...eventualy. If you would like to venture over to fanfiction.com there is 18 chapters posted and everything is out in the open. I did not go into how Edward was changed by Esme in great detail because this is indeed a story about Edward and Bella. I didn't find it important to the main plot. Edward's blood is killing Bella as was revealed in a much later chapter. Before she finds out about that there needs to be more connection between the two of them.
Edward feels guilty because he chose to heal Bella. He could have very well just taken her to the hospital and have them try and do something. But he did what he felt in his heart was the right thing to do. As much as Alice was screaming at him to help her, it was still his decision. No one can force anyone else to do something they don't want to do. Should he feel bad about her eventualy changing into a vampire? I should hope so. Whether it was to save her life or because she chose it, it is still quite the burden to bare.
Thank you again for your questions, I hope I did a good enough job answering them. Once again, you can find 18 chapters of Blood Lust on fanfiction.net. Just search for my penname, writerinmydreams007, and it will be there! -Amy