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Reviews For Dark Matter: Edward's Eclipse

Reviewer: Sarahmol (Signed) · Date: February 11, 2013 06:38 AM · On: Chapter 15- Preferences

Thank you so, sooo much for writing this! I've been waiting and searching a long time, and finally i found it ! You've done such a better job than others! I think your writing style is perfect and looks just like Stephenies ! And I understand you've been very busy lately and that it is very hard to write such a book, but I really hope the next chapter wil be ready soon!! I can't wait for the proposal part!

Reviewer: urfan (Signed) · Date: October 18, 2012 11:45 AM · On: Chapter 2-Prophecies and Ploys

loved it a lot!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

You are good at this! For the bigger part of time I actually believe this is wath SM would write.

Reviewer: Katiekat12321 (Signed) · Date: January 01, 2012 10:08 AM · On: Chapter 15- Preferences

I love your work! You capture Edward so well! Do you know when you'll have the next chapter up??

Reviewer: twmmy58 (Signed) · Date: December 04, 2011 12:50 AM · On: Prologue/Chapter 1-Provocation

I hope sometime you will continue this book, and a girl can hope, the BD. I love, love your Edward. His thoughts. I always thought , SM underestimated her own character. You made him justice all along the two stories... Please, please...

Reviewer: gransili (Signed) · Date: June 16, 2011 08:56 PM · On: Chapter 15- Preferences

I haven't surfaced in a while. So busy with my RL stuff, as you well know. I am excited about your next chapter. It could be 20k words long, and it wouldn't be long enough for me, and many others, I imagine.

Don't pay attention to those critics. Pay attention to those who read, and reread (...and reread) your work. You are an excellent writer. You know what I mean by that from past conversations. The voice you give to Edward's thoughts leave us all breathless.

Good luck! Here's to another absolutely awesome chapter from an absolutely awesom writer!!!!

Reviewer: GeezerWench (Signed) · Date: June 07, 2011 04:48 AM · On: Prologue/Chapter 1-Provocation

Hon, don't worry too much about the haters.

I resisted reading Twilight because I don't like horror, monsters, vampires, etc. But an online buddy convinced me to try it. So I bought the mass market paper backs. I figured it was really only a few bucks (relatively speaking) and if I didn't like them, it was okay.

I've spent more money on other things I didn't like or were "stupid" or whatever.

But then I was hooked. Totally and completely. Captured and captivated. Enthralled. I've since spent more money on Twilight stuff than... well, at my age, it's a *little* embarrassing. But ya know, I really don't care.

With some of the stuff that's been going on, the Twilight universe takes me away. It's a mind vacation. For a little while I can leave behind some of the *stuff*. And sometimes I really need to get away, without being incapacitated. I don't drink or do drugs so it works well for me.

I only wish I'd discovered it sooner. (I needed something else to fill in between reading Harry Potter over and over.)

I was quite pleased to stumble upon Twilighted.

So don't listen to the whiners. I, and apparently many others, appreciate you and your work. You've enriched the Twilight Universe for me.

Reviewer: transitory_moment (Signed) · Date: June 06, 2011 09:06 PM · On: Chapter 9-Puzzles

for some reason I find it sexy whenever Edward curses...lol Maybe because he hardly ever does.

Reviewer: klynn (Signed) · Date: June 05, 2011 12:12 PM · On: Chapter 4-Penitence

I'm loving this! I truly love your Edward "voice". He's totally in character. You've done such an awesome job so far. I can't wait to read the rest. I particularly liked your take on the almost-fight between Paul and Emmett when they were chasing Victoria. It always bothered me in the book that the wolves were more focused on keeping the Cullens off their land, than trying to get rid of Victoria. I thought you nailed it when you had Edward think to himself, "that her (Bella's) traitorous friends had chosen to put her life at risk by allowing Victoria to escape". That is exactly what they did and it emphasized the difference between the Cullens and the wolf pack. The Cullens would do anything for Bella, even put up with the wolves' hypocrisy and insults. But the wolf pack would always put themselves first.

Obviously the Cullens weren't out to get the wolves or they would have done so already. They had several years to do so. It was complete idiocy on the part of the wolves to not work with the Cullens in that moment to get rid of the immediate threat and then deal with the "breaking" of the treaty later. But then again we are talking about the wolves, so idiocy is nothing new....... ;)

Again, great job!

Author's Response: Thank you!! I'm so glad you found my story and you like it so far. As you know, one of the reasons I decided to write this story was because I felt like Edward was portrayed unfairly in Eclipse as a control freak. We only see him through the filter of Bella's (and by extension SM's) eyes and there were a lot of things I thought she didn't seem to understand about his thoughts and feelings. Midnight Sun was such an eye opener for me, and after that I started to appreciate how traumatic it must have been for him to think she was dead in New Moon. I felt like that had a lot to do with his protective behavior in Eclipse. Anyway, I don't want to write too long of a reply here. You know from some of our conversations on the threads that I could go on and on forever about unfair treatment toward Edward.

Reviewer: GeezerWench (Signed) · Date: May 23, 2011 03:05 PM · On: Chapter 15- Preferences

Can't wait to read what you have next!

Author's Response: Thank you. I know it's been awhile since I updated but at lady my writers block has passed and the new chapter is 7,000 words long right now. Its he proposal chapter so I'm really hoping people will think it WA worth the wait. I want it to be perfect.

Reviewer: GeezerWench (Signed) · Date: May 23, 2011 02:22 PM · On: Chapter 14 Partnership

Don't apologize for the length of the chapter. The longer the better!

Author's Response: Thank you. I felt like it was a bit much but I just couldn't figure out a way to split it up. I had some complaints about my chapter length from a fan fictions group that was considering reviewing it on their fic rec site. Needless to say they hated the whole thing and didn't pick it. I was upset about some of the stuff they said at first but honestly I could care less now.

Reviewer: GeezerWench (Signed) · Date: May 23, 2011 08:28 AM · On: Chapter 11 Proclamation

I'm a year behind, but still... I encourage you to keep writing. I have really enjoyed your intepretation of Edward.

You've done a good job with Jasper's story.

Author's Response: Thank you. I really enjoyed writing Jasper's story and filling in some of the blanks on Carlisle's conversation with Tanya. I am still wiring on this story and I'm 7,000 words into chapter 16. I've had some writers block and it's been difficult for me to write this lately. But it's coming along well now.

Reviewer: GeezerWench (Signed) · Date: May 22, 2011 09:48 PM · On: Chapter 6-Possibilities

I enjoyed this one quite a lot.

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. :)

Reviewer: GeezerWench (Signed) · Date: May 22, 2011 08:18 PM · On: Chapter 4-Penitence

"Count Jerkula" - LMAO

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked that!! I'm sure you can tell I'm not a fan of Jacob's but I've tried to portray him accurately. He does have his funny moments. He's not clever like Edward, but I think Jacob loves to antagonize him.

Reviewer: GeezerWench (Signed) · Date: May 22, 2011 07:09 PM · On: Chapter 3-Perceptions

I like how you threw that “Sookie Stackhouse” quip in there! LOL!

Enjoy your writing so much.

Reviewer: GeezerWench (Signed) · Date: May 21, 2011 07:45 PM · On: Chapter 2-Prophecies and Ploys

Charlei and Bella's "birds and bees" talk is missing! I hope that was just a copy and paste error.

Otherwise, love it!

Author's Response: Thanks so much. I apologize for the delay in my response to your review. I just now relapsed I haven't been getting review notifications from twi. You aren't the first person to mention the missing conversation between Chsrlie and Bella from EPOV. I decided to omit it because I felt like that while Edward was amused by the idea of Harlie having a sex talk with Bella, I figured he wouldn't want to embarrass her further by listening in. He might see it as disrespectful. I know Edward has noproblems eavesdropping in most cases, but he has a lot of old fashioned ideas about sex after all.

Reviewer: Shazarabbit (Signed) · Date: May 20, 2011 12:23 AM · On: Chapter 15- Preferences

Firstly,

You have blown me away. This is absolutely amazing, these are the stories that make me wish Stephenie would release these books from Edwards point of view. He is a complex character, and I love seeing things through his eyes. I have yet to read Event Horizon but I am about to start it.

I am also hoping (given the time) you would do Breaking Dawn. I think you would do it more than justive. Especially since the book for me was a little under par.

I cannot wait for an update, but when you do I'll be reading it as soon as possible. Take Care.

xo

Author's Response: Thank you very much! I'm really glad you're enjoying the story. To me, Ive done a better job at this one than EH. It was my first fic and there are some things I might like to fix on it at some point, especially since I don't have a beta for any of my work. I apologize for the long wait between updates. I have a busy job and a young child. But I don't typically go this long without updating. I've had some writers block that it took some time to work through, but I have 7,000 words of the next chapter written and edited.

Reviewer: benemac (Signed) · Date: May 19, 2011 04:21 AM · On: Chapter 14 Partnership

I have thoroughly enjoyed reading your version of Edward's POV and can't wait for the next chapter. I'm happy that I discovered the twilight serious as late as I did. I didn't have to wait for any new books. But I now know why so many anticipated the release of the next movie or book because I feel the same way about your next chapter. I know you're busy. For myself, I have the patience to wait, but hope you continue into Breaking Dawn. I love your writing!

Reviewer: transitory_moment (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2011 10:38 PM · On: Chapter 5 Panic

I know sometimes Edward seems paranoid about Bella hanging out with werewolves but I thought it was sweet how he was so relieved that she came home safe. The part about how he would've cried if he could was really sweet.

Reviewer: transitory_moment (Signed) · Date: May 10, 2011 10:23 AM · On: Chapter 2-Prophecies and Ploys

I was hoping I'd find out what was going through Charlie's mind during "the talk". It would've been hilarious! But good, as usual.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I appreciate it. I'm sorry I've been slow about answering reviews but for some reason two hasn't been notifying me when I get one. The reason I decided not of include "the talk" from EPOV is I decided it wasn't something he'd want to hear. Edward has some very old fashioned views about sex in spite of everything he does hear about it on a daily basis. I felt like he wouldn't want to embarrass Bella further by listening in. I guess it would have been funny to hear though.

Reviewer: sunshine2b (Signed) · Date: April 20, 2011 08:28 PM · On: Chapter 15- Preferences

I just finished Event Horizon, and I loved it!!

I just have to say I'm a little leery startin a story that I don't will be finished. However, I am looking forward to it.

I hope that in stress, or writer's block doesn't attack and hope to see updates soon.

Keep up the good work!

~Sunny~

Author's Response: Thank you so much for taking the time to review. I can't rising understand why you would be reluctant to start this story since it takes me so long to update but I will finish and I am 2/3 of the way through the next chapter. It's been slow going side I have a demanding job and a young child on top of the writers block I faced for awhile but it's coming along.

Reviewer: transitory_moment (Signed) · Date: March 14, 2011 10:36 PM · On: Prologue/Chapter 1-Provocation

oh this will be quite interesting :P especially later like chapter 20 LOL I'm looking forward to reading more.

Author's Response:
Thank you so much, I'm getting back into writing this now so hopefully the proposal chapter soon.

Reviewer: gransili (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2011 07:41 PM · On: Prologue/Chapter 1-Provocation

Not trying to rush you. Just wanted you to know that I hope all is going well for you and that your story is coming together to be all that you want it to be.

....I am patiently waiting to do my next round of cart wheels :)

Author's Response:
Thank you for your continued support. I've had a little bit of stress induced writers block but I'm getting through it.

Reviewer: jct2004 (Signed) · Date: February 28, 2011 08:07 PM · On: Chapter 6-Possibilities

Loved it! I have enjoyed every chapter so far. Please forgive me that this is the first review I've taken the time to write.

I love the way you expose Edward's vulnerabilities, his insecurities, and his jealousy. And, I absolutely LOVED the way he defended himself to his family when they were all angry with him for being willing to break the treaty.

The reunion scene was quite, quite nice. I enjoyed his perspective on it. From Bella's POV he always seems so well in control. Even though we know that's not the case when we read her POV, it's still sexy to read it from Edward's viewpoint and see a glimpse into what may be going through his mind when Bella is throwing herself at him at every opportunity.

Great job! Keep up the good work. I can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: Thank you very much. Writing Edward has been a great experience for me. I thought he got such a raw deal in Eflipse that I wanted to try to show him in what felt like would be a more accurate light. He struggles so much with his own wants and needs versus what he thinks is right. To him what he wants and what he should do seem to be at odds a lot. Bella has him on this pedastal that he doesn't want to be on and so we don't see his insecurities in Eclipse until Bella finally sees the damamge her relationship with Jacob caused. I'm working on the Proposal chapter. If you think he had a hard time with temptation before, just wait...

Reviewer: fritzy5 (Signed) · Date: February 22, 2011 10:46 PM · On: Chapter 15- Preferences

amazing story! please keep the chapters coming. when do you think you will be posting more? i cant wait. thanks

Author's Response: Thank you very much for reading and reviewing. I am working on the new chapter. Hopefully it will be up soon. My RL demands make it hard for me to write as regularly as I'd like to and since this next chapter is so important I've been taking my time with it. I had a brief case of writers block brought on by something that happened to me in the fandom a few weeks ago but I'm back at it. Hopefully I'll have something within a week.

Reviewer: redsock (Signed) · Date: February 21, 2011 09:06 AM · On: Chapter 15- Preferences

"Had she watched some kind of strange horror film with Emmett recently? " NOT w/ Emmett... but yes, Edward, she did -
"What if she didn’t choose me?" Poor E, this question breaks my heart a little... he does deserve her even if he left!
“The imprinting compulsion is one of the strangest things I’ve ever witnessed in my life, and I’ve seen some strange things.” It CERTAINLY is, and just wait til he finds out who Jake's target really is! [Aside, why didn't it ever occur to anyone that Jake simply does NOT imprint on Bella? Wouldn't it have been a nagging thought in the back of her mind if she had gotten involved with him? She bears such sympathy for Leah -]
"I itched to hit him with something; a boulder, a tree, a rolled up newspaper..." Hahahaha -
Your depictions of Edward's intimate thoughts help craft a far more intelligent and satisfying version of Eclipse. It's a statement I repeat over and over in reviews, but it is a truth which threads consistently through your fics... thank you so much!
Having watched the film [several times I'll admit], it's wonderful to be able to visualize the scenes as you have written them. How I wish we could take DM and film IT as a [superior!] comparison... ;)
I love hearing how fascinated Edward is about the culture of the wolves. His thoughts do mirror my own... while I don't wish Jake for Bella [nor Renesmee for that matter], the collective thoughts are curious fodder.
We're set for a very romantic interlude - perhaps one of the most pivotal in the entire Saga. While I eagerly anticipate your writing, I want to affirm that this chapter was every bit as enlightening and entertaining. You have lost NONE of my enthusiasm as a reader, despite my lapse in reading your update. RL really can distract us from our fanfiction at times, dagnabit!
Thank you for continuing to share your writing, AMuse. Your talent is humbling -
red xx

Author's Response:
Thank you so much. I really appreciate your support and patience with my slow updates.

I know the proposal in Eclipse felt pretty spontaneous but Edward is not really a spontaneous person by nature and I couldn't believe that he just decided to ask her to marry him again without giving it some thought. So a lot of what happened in this chapter was about setting the stage for the big one coming up. As far as the wolves go, I don't think Bella ever gave a lot of thought to Jacob imprinting because she was in deep denial about her feelings for him, which I still don't understand how Jacob was ever a viable option for her.

Edward still feels all this guilt about leaving and it something he's going to have to work through by the end of the story. He'll be thinking more about the imprinting compulsion during the tent scene, and we all know his wishes for Jacob to imprint on someone else will come back to haunt him later. *shudders.*

The idea of some of my story embellishments making their way into a movie makes me smile. :) I have also watched the DVD several times. I love the fight training scene, even though I really don't like the part where Carlisle gets the uppper hand on Edward. Oh, and I don't like the whole thing where Riley and Victoria get the best of him either. Did you watch Stephenie's commentary? Some of the things she said about Edawrd sort of made me feel like I had the right idea about Edward's fears for her safety around Jacob.

I always appreciate your well thought out reviews and unwavering support. I really need it right now as I have struggled a bit lately. I got some pretty unpleasant negative feedback from a popular website that reviews underrated fics recently. I won't get into the details but it took about 3 weeks before I felt up to writing at all. But, fortunately, I realized I need to develop a thicker skin and I'm fine now.

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