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Reviewer: ddcdragonfly (Signed)
April 11, 2010 09:13 AM · On:
too funny ... the ending I mean ... love the comment Bella made to Tanya
enjoyed the meeting between Edward and Charlie ... good feelings of embarassment ... that's what dads are for
Author's Response: I'm really happy you enjoyed it, thank you very much!
Reviewer: GoSpikey (Signed)
April 11, 2010 09:12 AM · On:
“Something about that woman, Victoria. I don’t know, I didn’t hear much. Edward freaked out and took off, and I decided to just stay out of it. Dad seemed pretty upset.”
Hmm, I heard before, I think, that Victoria was in the fic, but then again Elizabeth is Edward's 'mother' in the fic, the one James was with, right? Now, James went to jail, but we don't know what happened to Elizabeth (nut house?). What's Vicky got to do with this, then? In Twi, Victoria and James were a couple. Are we to make the same connection between them in here? Has James been released yet? I don't think we've an idea of how long he's been in jail, and still has to stay there. Long, I hope. Maybe Victoria was his birth mom, not Elizabeth, and James dragged him over with him to Elizabeth because something happened to Victoria? Perhaps she's James' sister, or family? We don't know, I think. We'll see. :-)
“Don’t tell me he’s the reason you just gave me the brush-off?” He eyed Edward briefly, before letting out a snort of dismissal, and turned back to me. “Really, I would’ve thought you’d be aiming a bit higher than that.”
Wha? Oh, Edward, just hit him. *grin* I already know that he's going to do it. :P
Next! Oh, and I saw the update. ^^
Reviewer: FanNan46 (Signed)
April 11, 2010 08:44 AM · On:
ROTFLMAO......chop chop indeed!!! :) Glad to see Edward be able to have a normal interaction with a non family member (Charlie). So brave of him to follow through with this date. Aww....loved the flower! :) I'm enjoying your story - you are a good writer Nilla!
Author's Response: Aww, thank you so much! :)
Reviewer: yellowdandylions (Signed)
April 11, 2010 08:41 AM · On:
Reviewer: HopeStreet (Signed)
April 11, 2010 08:27 AM · On:
Bella rocks! Don't mess with her man! LOL!! Edward has a lot to learn about when it comes to women (normal ones, I mean). I got really excited yesterday to receive your review reply because I knew the next chapter would be available soon!
Author's Response: *lol* Well I usually respond to the reviews as soon as I've posted the next chapter, but I kinda fell behind this time, since the chap is already up. :) Anyway, thank you so much for your review!
Reviewer: jujubakiller (Signed)
April 11, 2010 08:20 AM · On:
Charlie was great!
And I wonder what Edward thought about bella calling him honey. Lol.
Author's Response: You'll find out what he thinks in next chap. :) Thanks for your review!
Reviewer: cyndilu32 (Signed)
April 11, 2010 08:07 AM · On:
go Bella....CHOP CHOP....lol
Author's Response: Will do, and thanks for reviewing.
Reviewer: Fesh (Signed)
April 11, 2010 08:06 AM · On:
LMFAO. Oh Bella is just priceless. "take it up with your pimp" ahahahaha.
I'm so relieved Edward and Charlie's meeting went well and the flower thing was so sweet...-sigh-
lovely chapter - can't w8 4 the rest of the date! Ty 4 update xo
Author's Response: YW, and thanks for the review. I'm glad you liked that line, so did I. *lol*
Reviewer: 1twifan4evr (Signed)
April 11, 2010 08:01 AM · On:
I cant see why Bella has not put two and two together. I think he keeps giving her hints that he was sexually abused, but she does not pick up on it. I wonder when it will all come together for her. I think that introductions was awesome between Edward and Charlie. Charlie was polite and Edward didnt seem too rigid about it once he realized how playful Charlie could be. I was glad that Edward even smiled at what charlie said about Bella being a klutz. Amazing chapter!!!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm happy you enjoyed the chap.
Reviewer: sochain is solas (Signed)
April 11, 2010 07:59 AM · On:
great chapter! charlie & edward's introduction went better than i expected. the flower bit was just too precious and oh my god i loved bella's ballsy response to tanya!!! can't wait to see what happens next!
Author's Response: Thank you, I'm so glad you liked the chapter. :)
Reviewer: seeker (Signed)
April 11, 2010 07:43 AM · On:
thanks a good chapter damn bella have some balls
Author's Response: She sure has. :) Thanks for your review!
Reviewer: lovesam66 (Signed)
April 11, 2010 07:42 AM · On:
Hehe that was wondrful!!! And u didn't make up wait for some of the date, that is greatly appriciated. I cant wait for more on the date?
Author's Response: More is up, hope you'll like what's coming. Thanks for leaving a review!
Reviewer: readergoof (Signed)
April 11, 2010 07:41 AM · On:
Gotta love the Charlie
Author's Response: He's a sweetie. :) Thanks for the review.
Reviewer: oliveU (Signed)
April 11, 2010 07:35 AM · On:
All the big build up for Charlie's reaction and he was fine. But Bella doesn't know that it's not smart to be rude to the people who deliver your food. Especially when that person is Tanya, she's tricky.
Author's Response: Never insult the person bringing you food, a rule to live by. *lol* Thanks for your review!
Reviewer: wazzoes (Signed)
April 11, 2010 07:34 AM · On:
it just keeps getting better
Author's Response: Thank you! :)
Reviewer: lillinna (Signed)
April 11, 2010 07:16 AM · On:
Awesome chapter, i really liked the way Bella spoke to Tanya, that she had the guts to say somthing like that. Please update soon, i cant wait to find out what else is gonna happen on the date. :)
Author's Response: The next chapter is up, hope you'll enjoy. :) Thanks for reviewing!
Reviewer: BellaLeigh2009 (Signed)
April 11, 2010 07:12 AM · On:
I love the scene with Charlie, Bella and Edward. I remember those embarrassing moments.
and the one with Tanya. Yay! Thanks for not making her from Edward's past. I was wondering how she was going to be introduced.
Author's Response: So happy you liked it, thank you!
Reviewer: Eddieluv (Signed)
April 11, 2010 07:07 AM · On:
Author's Response: Thanks!
Reviewer: GoSpikey (Signed)
April 10, 2010 05:11 PM · On:
Instead I found myself nodding in agreement. “Okay.”
Oh, go Eddie! *claps*
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing again! :)
Reviewer: GoSpikey (Signed)
April 10, 2010 04:38 PM · On:
Hello again. :-D
A part of me wanted to hate them, simply for their ability to love, to be capable of feeling something other than shame and self-loathing.
Because I wanted that, too. I wanted it so badly it tore me apart.
Poor, poor boy. I think I read somewhere, don't ask me where, silly reading the updates and not have all the knowledge of the previous chapters, that he wouldn't be able to deal with the part where he is not a bad boy, but that it was all a lie. We've seen him say or agree with James that he was bad, and that the rape was the punishment for that, in a way. Poor thing is brainwashed. And it needs to come out, even if he doesn't want to. And it's going to hurt, badly. I hope that he's by then confided in Bella what happened to him (though perhaps she should have figured stuff out on her own by now?), so that she can be the support he needs, crying himself through that fase. She's already saying how ridiculous it sounds that he calls himself bad. But he can't deal, so like in the beginning of this chapter, running it is.
About the conversation Carlisle has with him, asking for his permission to tell Alice and Emmett... I think it was said that Edward arrived over there when he was 11, and that's the first convo they have, right? Aren't Alice and Emmett about the same age? I mean, you can't tell 11-12 year olds that they've a new brother who's been not only hit, but raped as well, not at that age... Well, I did see that Edward asked him not to, so perhaps they're only told a few years later on... Okay, I can live with that.
the fact that it haven’t been your choice to come here
perhaps it's better to use 'wasn't your choice'?
I can't wait for the part where he'll let his guard down enough to lay down next to her on a bed, or wherever. He'll need to do his crying over there... :-(
See ya soon.
Author's Response: Hi! :) Maybe 'wasn't' is more accurate, thanks for pointing it out. I love long reviews and you have a lot of good points. There will be another chapter up soon, hope you'll enjoy. Thanks for reviewing!
Reviewer: delilah69 (Signed)
April 10, 2010 02:03 PM · On:
emmet can be human!? who woud've guessed!? im so happy for them. i hope that bella can really help edward and that he can be cool with emmet! and esme and carlisle. nothing bad is gonna happen to bella, resulting in edward freaking out is there?!
Author's Response: Let's hope not. ;) Thank you very much for reviewing!
Reviewer: delilah69 (Signed)
April 10, 2010 12:04 PM · On:
i love th story so far and i was listening to some of my music, have you ever heard of secondhand serenade? and their song a twist in my story? it was a perfect match to your story! check it out, amazing job!
Author's Response: Don't think I've heard that song, but I'll definitely check it out. Thanks for the tip! Also, thanks for reviewing! :)
Reviewer: GoSpikey (Signed)
April 09, 2010 05:30 PM · On:
Poor Edward, being told he was bad. :-(
Oh, little remark that I hope will get fixed on its own in later chapters:
well do you know the Cullen’s?”
1 Cullen, 2 Cullens.
Plural in English is an -s attached to the word. ;-)
Author's Response: I've actually wondered about this (English is not my first language). But since my validation beta has never mentioned it, I just assumed it was okay. I'll try to go back and change it when I get the time, it's in a lot of chapters. Thank you!
Reviewer: wolf lover (Signed)
April 09, 2010 11:07 AM · On:
I know I am a bit late reponding to you comments, but here goes. I agree with the length of the chapters. The relationship is a tough one and too long of chapters would be painful. The kids need to go slow and they are. The story is a sad but good one and I am hoping for a HEA of some sort. Don't let the gripers bring you down. They should write their own fic and do it how they see fit. I need to climb down from the soapbox now (sheepishly). Thanks. Nancy
Author's Response: Thank you, I'm happy you like the story, as well as the length of the chapters. And I promise there will be a HEA. .)
Reviewer: pugsmomma (Signed)
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April 09, 2010 10:36 AM · On:
I literally stumbled across this story while looking for something else. So glad I settled in to read it last night. Your characters are amazing, and real, and so incredibly well written.
I love that you aren't looking for an easy, instant fix to the issues everyone is experiencing. I always prefer a happily ever after, and desperately hope this story has one, but I'm so glad you're being realistic with the timeline of how things have to progress.
I also think you're doing an amazing job with an incredibly sensitive, delicate subject. You're telling us what we need to know without being overly graphic.
Also - the chapter length is just fine. Can't wait to read more!
Author's Response: I'm so happy to hear you're enjoying my story so far. There will be a HEA, I promise. ;) Thank you so much for leaving me a review, and I hope you'll like what's to come.
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