I am so glad you updated!  I can't wait to see what happens next with the Duke!

yea!

I just read the last chapter posted on fanfiction.net, but I don't know how to post a review there ~ so, I'm doing it here. This is about chapter 18: 'Moving on'.

Ok, Edward had his chance to 'explain' himself. I can't say that I understand him. But I liked that Bella did not jump to his bed again. She is a strong character, I adore her. She deserves so much better!... Let her find another man, have greeeeeat sex, 'forget' him a little and, since this is a E&B story, put them together again.

He, otoh, I despise. From the beginning. He is egocentric, selfish and a pervert. He invites minors to pose nude for him. He let one of them give him a handjob, cause he was having a 'dry spell'? (well, 3 months is not really a 'dry spell'; and even if so, he is not an irracional fucking animal, or is he?). He was about to have sex with Bella once in her bedroom, when her mother came back home, and the selfish guy was all of a sudden in a bad mood because he was gonna have 'blue balls'??? If he could not be more disgusting, and selfish than that... He also fucked his ex, wallbanging her in a public bathroom, while on a date with someone else. And she SAW him!...

But I'm glad you did not quit the story ~ and I hope you won't. You wrote a great chapter and you should be proud. Your story hooks us ~ and leads us to great discussions. Eventhough I hate the main character, I love the story. Make him suffer a little. A real 'dry spell', due to his new feelings for her might help. Let the guy show his good side, if he has any... Let him atone.

Don't leave us! I hope RL goes easier on you. Take care. And thanks.

xoxo

Hey! Sorry it's taken me so long to review/read the update, but like you said... life just happens that way.:P

Really glad she punched him *giggles*, and hope they can sit down somehow and really talk about it, calmly. Not loving Edward right now, but hope more of his reasonings change my mind. It's sweet that he is manically painting her, too! :D

He is not painting Renee!!! OMG!

dumb dumb dumb. shoulda kept the letter

I enjoyed the art show chapter. Liked that other people were introduced into the story and that Alice spilled a little on Edward. ;)

 Helooo Pervward and no so innocent Bella. But truthfully, she'll be 18 and what if they were at college? it'd be no biggie. Looking forward to seeing where this goes. ;)

Honestly? The best thing she said to him was: 'Grow up'. That is exactly what he needs to do. And alone.

I'm kind of sick of man-whore Edwards and virgin Bellas in fanfics... Really, why don't you now give your Bella a chance to find a nice guy, have another sexual experience, fall for the guy a little and realize that 'Edward' is NOT the only sex God on earth? Give the girl some great sex with another man! She totally deserves it! I understand this is a 'E & B' story, and that they will be together at the end, but why does she have to accept all his shit allrightly? No, this is not fair with her. If I was writing this story, she would have a great guy waiting for her at the corner, Edward would grow up and (maybe...) they would go back again to each other. Torture him a little, please... he really needs it. Maybe a nice 'impotent' (and I mean, 'erectile dysfunction') period would help him... just saying...

OTOH, your Bella is a strong girl. I know he was not officially her 'BF', but she was his date, and he was at least disrespectful with her. And there is no excuse for that. I don't know how she did not trow up right there and/or ripped his throat (or dick)!

He needs to grow up. And she needs some more sexual experiences with, at least, another man (a great guy...). I hope you are not a female chauvinist and you don't make your strong Bella swallow his shit just like this. Please, make it good.

And do not take too long for an update, please.

Thanks. Great story and great discussions...

xoxo (forgive my mistakes in English ~ Portuguese is my language)

 

 

Bella should have read the note....  burning it up was no solution either....

I hope we'll get some answers soon..

awww everything is sooo fucked up i dont know who i feel worse for i love this story truly i cant wait for more doll cant wait to see what is gonna happen next i love you haha till next time :D brilliant hun

poor girl, she feels so used right now

Wow this is so intense. Im addicted. Update soon please.