What an incredibly well written chapter! Reading it reminded me how much this fic deserves a catrillion Indie Twific Awards! I like that it is up for Best Use of a Parent: This story is something special - it sends a healthy message to *what I can only assume is* a massive fanbase of tweeny boppers. I can tell that you love the characters as much as they do and want what’s best for them (the characters and the fans). Did you notice that Mimiteh is the only finalist that even MENTIONS a parent in its summary?!
Only one complaint: you can’t spell! “Colour” and “favour” have ‘u’s in them, silly!! ;)
I had thought that after Bella’s trip to the ER, news about her motor cycle accident would have gone all around town! *Am I making it obvious that I haven’t quite read New Moon yet?* ;) But they LIED! :O Perhaps Edward thought the same thing when he left the helmet out in plain sight…
To answer the question you’ve asked numerous times, yes I intend to read New Moon, Eclipse and Breaking Dawn. I also intend to watch the movies some day. Perhaps 2D movies will be a novelty by then. ;)
The gift: Bella instantly thinks of Edward! …before she talks herself out of it. Is there a specific reason why she didn’t allow him previously to give her gifts? I know that he gave her a mixed CD… which he stole back! *scandalous!*
<< Now she could add olfactory hallucinations to her growing list of crazy, including auditory and visual hallucinations. Begrudgingly she admitted that it probably wasn't a bad idea that she'd be seeing Nina in a half hour. >>
Hee hee. Visual hallucinations? But she hasn’t actually ‘seen’ Edward! What has she seen?!
<< Jacob must have left the helmet for her. >>
Helping out the competition, ‘ey, Ed? ;)
<< She was surprised he had not taped a note onto it, teasing her with an inside joke like "Foot Brakes = Skull Crackers" or "No horizontal parking allowed". >>
Immature little boy… *beneath the big muscles*
Charlie’s finding an excuse to pay Nina a visit, hey? ;) Some one should warn him that psychologists are bad news. I hear they’re all crazier than their clients!
Throughout the chapter – Charlie is so transparent!!! hee hee;)
<< "Hardly. Why do you think my head hurts so much?" >>
Hee hee. Still not uber keen, huh? She’s extremely co-operative, though. Charlie couldn’t drag her there if she decided against it!
<< "Because Nina's about to shrink it?" >>
<< "Nah, let's go to the diner tonight. Give you a break from cooking, okay? You do too much around here." >>
:) He really does try to be a good dad. I think he should learn to cook. Parents are supposed to cook for their children – for their physical well being! And if he really wants to impress Nina… or any other woman… then he’d better not expect them to do all the cooking all the time!
<< Bella … was vehemently shaking her head. Therapy was difficult enough without Charlie being there to witness the carnage. >>
I don’t blame her! She has a lot more to deal with internally before they start dragging in relationships. Not so easy to be open with dad around either.
<< “...I think the counseling is really helping her." … Bella was too surprised to be angry at him for talking about her like she wasn't there. >>
*slaps him for being condescending, even though unintentionally* I’m sure if HE ever went to counselling, they’d drag up a whole lot of his own issues he needs to deal with.
<< "I'm most interested in hearing how you think therapy is going, Bella." >> << The corners of Nina's eyes crinkled as she smiled genuinely. "It's good to see you too." >>
<< "Sorry about that. He's kind of weird sometimes." >>
Hee hee. What a typical teenage daughter thing to say! ;)
<< Edward halted his pacing and alternating mutters of "You should leave, stalker!" with "But what if Nina tells Bella about me? ">>
Kind of a stressful session for him – will she or won’t she??
<< Like Edward, Charlie was also muttering to himself. "Real smooth, Swan. Way to be a dork." >>
<< How ridiculous that they both liked each other but were not acting on those feelings. >>
Erm *taps Edward politely on the shoulder* *then SLAPS him!* What the bleep do you think YOU (and Bella) are doing, nitwit!
<< Edward closed his eyes, filled with self-hatred. >>
What’s the point in hating yourself without taking action to CHANGE what you hate about yourself?
Edward doesn’t destroy his own happiness! He just leaves the love of his life, to hide a few feet way, so they can both revel in their own self-deprived anguish. Throw in a young, shirtless werewolf…
Do you know which fictional character I feel strongly about? Captain America. Because I’m Awesome.
Don’t be offended by Nina’s thoughts of you, Edward! She hardly knows you.
Edward contemplated suicide when he thought that James had killed Bella??! That’s not cool! Books aimed at teenagers even suggesting that killing yourself if you lose ‘the love of your life’ would amount to an epic romance??! - Edward being the ultimate sensitive, romantic man! *disturbed*
<< To his horror, Edward realized that Bella had begun to cry, and the full weight of his betrayal hit him squarely in the chest. The juxtaposition of him telling Bella that he had contemplated suicide when he thought he had lost her to James, next to him voluntarily leaving her, made him utterly disgusted with himself. >>
That IS quite a contradiction!!!
<< The lure of provoking the Volturi shined like a bright beacon in his mind, seeming almost more appealing now than during the aftermath of James' attack. >> << his self-loathing >>
Edward, grow up! FIX your *self created* problems, don’t wallow in them / try and take the easy *cowardly* way out! >8- l
<< At least Edward knew that Bella was safe this time. Well, she would be safe until she rode that damn motorcycle again. >>
Darn. I thought for a sec that he was going to quit stalking…
<< "No," she cried, sniffing a couple of times, thinking about his superior beauty and grace. "It's not difficult to understand. It's not difficult at all." >>
*throws her hand up in the air* I just don’t know what to do with you two! You need professional he… Oh wait, you’re getting it :)
<< From the little she knew about Edward Cullen, it appeared that he had found his match in Bella Swan, at least in terms of equally low self-esteem. No wonder their relationship had ended. She could imagine that both of them had often misinterpreted each other when perceiving the relationship through a filter of self-deprecation, assuming that neither was good enough for each other. >>
So true! It’s almost as though Nina has read the series…… *suddenly wonders!*
<< What had she been thinking, inviting Edward back in to continue as her client? Now she was even more bound by rules of confidentiality, disallowing her to reveal Edward's concerns about Bella. >>
Brilliant reasoning! ;)
<< "… I fell." … Nina smiled affectionately, recalling Bella's near wipe-out one of the first times she had entered the office. "You do that a lot, don't you? >>
Are there REALLY people who fall over that much in RL?? Maybe she has an inner ear problem…
<< Bella's cheeks blushed and her heart thumped, aware of … the destruction caused by Nina's father's motorcycle accident. >> << She was terrified that Bella might suffer the same fate as her father or Billy from toying with dangerous motorcycles >>
Of course! Bella knows that motorbikes would be a really sensitive topic to raise in a session!
<< Edward's thoughts turned to Jacob. How could he have let Bella ride that infernal bike, knowing what had happened to his own father? >>
<< she was bound not to share how she knew about Bella riding a motorcycle >> << "I'm concerned about you getting hurt, Bella," Nina eventually managed. "You sustained such a bad cut that you needed stitches, yet you won't tell me how it happened." >>
Nice and vague… *well done, Nina!*
That is SOME explanation for why Bella and Nina block Edward out! I liked how Edward, using vampire hyper-speed, flashed through all that he knew about them both. Bella and Nina DO have a lot in common… their history of caring for others…
<< Had Bella and Nina been so externally focused their entire lives, caring for others far more extensively than for themselves, that their internal structures had become underdeveloped and inaccessible? >> Maybe! *mind boggled*
<< Had their combined caring for their emotionally and/or physically needy mothers, set in place from childhood, somehow blocked their ability to care for their own needs? >> This happens all the time!
<< Had they unconsciously constructed a wall around their internal worlds, thwarting others from caring for them? >> Or keeping their inner worlds buried/hidden, while getting on with the task of putting other people first?
Whew! *glad she doesn’t give a STUFF about other people* *hence becoming a lawyer*
<< And why could Edward hear Nina's thoughts when they were self-directed, yet not hear Bella's thoughts at all? >>
Bella’s a more severe case than Nina? Maybe Nina’s developed some self worth over the years. Perhaps she’s had her own counselling – she’s a believer in therapy after all! If that’s the case, then Bella could have one day ALSO (partially) let down her shield… if she didn’t freeze her body at one point in time by becoming a vampire.
<< Nina had to make Bella stop endangering herself. But how could that happen when Bella seemed incapable of considering her own health and safety? >>
Bella’s difficult, Edward! Deal with it. She’s going to have to deal with YOUR weaknesses…. Hopefully Nina can help these two terribly lost individuals find their way back together – this time as whole individuals who can stick together through thick and thin (not duck out of there the next time they feel that the other would be better off without them!) She’s got her work cut out for her!!! ;D
PS One factor that may be causing you to have a disproportionate number of email alerts on the other site in relation to reviews may be that people prefer to review here? (Or because we all know that reviews are evil things, no better than round or symmetrical numbers!) :)
Lovely story, lovely writing, Jen! *sends winning vibes your way* ;)
*dives in to responding to another mega-review* Your support of my Indie Twific nomination has been so stellar! Who cares if I win the category when I get love like that from my cyber friends!
I'd like to start with this comment:
<< How ridiculous that they both liked each other but were not acting on those feelings.
Erm *taps Edward politely on the shoulder* *then SLAPS him!* What the bleep do you think YOU (and Bella) are doing, nitwit!>>
*laughs* I was TOTALLY thinking of you and your likely response when I wrote that line. And I totally expected you to slap Edward for being so freaking OBTUSE! :D
Smut definitely has its place and there are a lot of wonderful NC-17 fics here, but I do enjoy writing a "clean" story. It's more my style, and it feels right when there are so many teenage readers here. Too bad none of them are reading this. HA!
Now that is not very nice BEHAVIOUR to be cracking on my spelling, young lady! Oh goody, I can't wait for you to read the series. Regarding the visual hallucinations, I think I let the movie influence me there. She just heard him in the book I think.
<< Is there a specific reason why she didn’t allow him previously to give her gifts? >>
That stems back to her selflessness and unworthy feelings. Silly girl! He wanted to buy her a gorgeous car!
Did you get the little joke that "horizontal parking" = CRASH? Clever motorcycle humor!
Good idea--let's enroll Charlie in cooking classes. I think it's in Eclipse that he screws up SPAGHETTI. He's hopeless.
<< Edward doesn’t destroy his own happiness! He just leaves the love of his life, to hide a few feet way, so they can both revel in their own self-deprived anguish. Throw in a young, shirtless werewolf… >>
Nice summary. I especially liked the "shirtless" part.
<< *throws her hand up in the air* I just don’t know what to do with you two! You need professional he… Oh wait, you’re getting it :) >>
hee hee. The professional help is taking a while to kick in! Maybe Bella should also see a medical doctor for that inner ear problem . . .
<< So true! It’s almost as though Nina has read the series…… *suddenly wonders!* >>
HA HA! Next to "Life Without Ed" on her bookshelf sits "Breaking Dawn". ;-)
<< Bella’s a more severe case than Nina? Maybe Nina’s developed some self worth over the years. Perhaps she’s had her own counselling – she’s a believer in therapy after all! If that’s the case, then Bella could have one day ALSO (partially) let down her shield… if she didn’t freeze her body at one point in time by becoming a vampire. >>
Without giving too much away, I love what you said here.
<< Or keeping their inner worlds buried/hidden, while getting on with the task of putting other people first? >>
I liked that. I could have a whole counseling practice with caretaking women. They're ubiquitous. But I think Bella has taken it to the extreme.
<< Whew! *glad she doesn’t give a STUFF about other people* *hence becoming a lawyer* >>
*rolls on the floor* Thanks for the laughs!
<< Hopefully Nina can help these two terribly lost individuals find their way back together – this time as whole individuals who can stick together through thick and thin (not duck out of there the next time they feel that the other would be better off without them!) She’s got her work cut out for her!!! ;D >>
*crosses my fingers*
*claps for an amazing review* You're the best, Nixie!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!