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Reviewer: Themslovebug90 (Signed) · Date: June 23, 2011 07:52 PM · On: Surprise
stupid jacob...doesnt he know that this is a cullen/swan only trip?
Reviewer: Themslovebug90 (Signed) · Date: June 23, 2011 07:45 PM · On: I Can't Handle It!
who is it? oh look there is a little button above the comment box that says 'next'. Shall we go find out?
Reviewer: Themslovebug90 (Signed) · Date: June 23, 2011 07:37 PM · On: Twist
awww poor EJ please tell me he changes his mind
Reviewer: Themslovebug90 (Signed) · Date: June 23, 2011 07:28 PM · On: North Dakota?
yay for the hunting trip
Reviewer: Themslovebug90 (Signed) · Date: June 23, 2011 07:19 PM · On: Going away?
ej seems sweet i like him...
Reviewer: Themslovebug90 (Signed) · Date: June 23, 2011 07:07 PM · On: Hunting
I like it so far, can't wait to read more!
Reviewer: kycee (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2011 10:17 AM · On: Epilogue- 10 years later
I enjoyed your story, thanks for sharing.
Reviewer: supervamp1234 (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2011 03:49 AM · On: Epilogue- 6 months later
aaaaaaaaawwww
Reviewer: Mezylan (Signed) · Date: May 10, 2011 09:35 PM · On: Epilogue- 10 years later
awesome! fantastic story dude. amazing what you came up with. what with so many babies and stuff. get well soon yeah?
Reviewer: Mezylan (Signed) · Date: May 10, 2011 09:00 PM · On: New Faces to Meet
haha LOVE that it was arianna who imprinted on ej! i've been wanting that from the start! it's so awesome!
Reviewer: Mezylan (Signed) · Date: May 10, 2011 08:48 PM · On: Joined forces
Hey! Hope you're feeling better!
umm, I realise I might be one of those annoying reviewers who like to give a lot of criticism, but although I like how the fight is turning out, the descriptions are kinda boring. such that i'm skipping through again. nice bit about the humans coming along!
Reviewer: Mezylan (Signed) · Date: May 10, 2011 08:40 PM · On: And so it begins
Hey think you made a mistake in the previous chapter. it was FELIX who joined right? not demetri. also, uh. the part where you put Alec's p.ov. , it kinda sounds the same as every other character's personality.
can't wait to read the fight scene!
Reviewer: Mezylan (Signed) · Date: May 10, 2011 06:36 PM · On: Tribal Unity
Hello again!
Emmett's personality seems really weird right now. Just wanted to ask if you've intentionally altered his personality a little? or is it that you're trying to follow the personality that Meyer introduced to us but are kinda not getting a hang of it?
:D I was thinking that if that was the case, maybe you could try putting yourself into their shoes, really slip into their 'bodies' and plan the conversations?
keep up the good work!
Reviewer: Mezylan (Signed) · Date: May 10, 2011 05:12 PM · On: Back Home
no offence. but it started off good. but I got really bored and just skipped through a few paragraphs. Your writing is becoming very...robotic. It's predictable and there aren't enough descriptive words. You need more boundaries. Like, a place setting which people could visualize upon reading your words. Take a look at Steph Meyer's style and pick some ideas from there! :D
I'm becoming a fan of your story! so please, continue to amaze us :)
Reviewer: supervamp1234 (Signed) · Date: May 10, 2011 10:57 AM · On: New Faces to Meet
no
only kidding ya
Reviewer: Mezylan (Signed) · Date: May 09, 2011 08:45 PM · On: Arrival
i think i awnt arrianna to imprint on EJ. but that's just too predictable!
maybe it could be that EJ finds someoen in the volturi? maybe a full vampire? it would be a VERY nice change to the predictable stuff!
also, i love your writing! but the whole shifting of perspectives is a little too much for me even though I love knowing about what the rest were thinking during that time. Maybe you could bring in more of Alice ? sorry she's my fav vamp. hahaha.
Reviewer: supervamp1234 (Signed) · Date: May 09, 2011 08:32 AM · On: Falling into place
arainna
Reviewer: supervamp1234 (Signed) · Date: May 08, 2011 06:35 AM · On: A look into Alec
ccccccccccccccccccooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooollllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllll
Reviewer: supervamp1234 (Signed) · Date: May 08, 2011 06:27 AM · On: Tribal Unity
arainna imprints on ej
Reviewer: supervamp1234 (Signed) · Date: May 07, 2011 02:25 AM · On: Doubts?
don don don
Reviewer: supervamp1234 (Signed) · Date: May 07, 2011 12:48 AM · On: Fateful Meeting
aaaaaaaaaaaaawwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww
Reviewer: supervamp1234 (Signed) · Date: May 07, 2011 12:27 AM · On: Which Way to Volterra?
i no how he feels
Reviewer: supervamp1234 (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2011 11:38 PM · On: Intriguing Smell
e.j and her
Reviewer: supervamp1234 (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2011 11:14 PM · On: Surprise
Poor EJ.
Reviewer: supervamp1234 (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2011 11:04 PM · On: I Can't Handle It!
was it jake
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