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Reviewer: shesellseashells (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2009 11:50 AM · On: Chapter Four: Invites and Moldy Peaches

The characters leave an insatiable thirst for the plot. Definitely love where the story is headed.



Author's Response:

We hope you continue reading 'cause the journey is going to be interesting :D

Reviewer: akoronka (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2009 11:32 AM · On: Chapter Four: Invites and Moldy Peaches

Seriously entertaining!!! 



Author's Response:

Michelle and I are happy to have entertained!! Thanks for reading and reviewing :D

Reviewer: mscope (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2009 11:28 AM · On: Chapter One: Blow Jobs and Hearses

And Yes!  OMG!  The Hat!  Love The Hat! 



Author's Response:

Ahaahhaha! The hat makes the woman ;)

Reviewer: mscope (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2009 11:24 AM · On: Chapter One: Blow Jobs and Hearses

For whatever reason I did not review this chapter.  Hmpfh.

This is a great first chapter.  You've introduced your main character and they are all so very believeable.

I loved Renee.  I am sorry she is gone but I loved her.  If she were a real person I would have liked her.  She would have been my friend.  The way she brought Jazz into their lives showed she was loving and caring but it was her free spirit that drew me to her the most.  It is sad she died as she did.  The continuing need to be free spirit lives on in Bella and Jazz and I find their quirky charms to be endearing. 

Charlie doesn't know what has hit him.  I love that Bella stood her ground and he realizes that she and JAsper are a package deal.  Having read forward a couple of chapter I can't help but wonder if we will hear more from him.

Edward's POV in this chapter has me very excited.  We get the general idea that he is a player but what does he have to play with.  Certainly nothing fun or exciting.  Hell he isn't even overly joyed about a blow job and that just is not typical of a teenage boy.  His world is about to be turned on it's ear. 

Esme is Tanya Denali?!!!!  That is too wonderful!  This means Tanya will not be the cause of angst between Edward and Bella, thank you, thank you.  What I like most her is her relationship with her sons...what you write could be what I have with my own sons.  She is so filled with love and, well, she too is a free spirit of sorts.

Once this review is submitted I will favorite this story.   Do you two have a posting schedule?  

Sandra



Author's Response:

Michelle and I thought that there were enough obstacles for Bella and Edward that we didn't need to throw any other bodies between them. There is enough angst and uncertainty there.

We don't really have a posting schedule pre se. We try to have a chapter started and one in the editing process at the same time, but it really depends on our schedules.

Reviewer: Twilight_Girl_Ox (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2009 10:29 AM · On: Chapter Four: Invites and Moldy Peaches

jealous shaggy is fun!

lovedd the chapter!

update soon.

xxx



Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing! We lurve jealous Shaggy, and baked Bella! Our next chapter is almost finished so it shouldn't be too long.

Reviewer: mscope (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2009 10:22 AM · On: Chapter Four: Invites and Moldy Peaches

This story.  What can I say.  It is fresh.  It is charming.  It makes me laugh.  I LOVE IT!


Where do I begin with this chapter review?  Esme.  I'll say a few words about her.  I have sons...two of them...three years apart.   Esme's relationship with her sons mirrors mine on many levels.  So naturally I love her.  But most of all I love her open mind and love of life.


Yes.  More Bella/Jazz interaction.  They are so much fun together and make me smile.  I wondered how you would bring Alice into the story and in all honesty I don't know that I have ever felt more giddy with and introduction.  Looks like there is another pea for the pod.  But Leah?  Just how she will be drawn in further is a curiosity for me.  And of course you mentioned "The Rez" so Jake should be forthcoming.


The lunchroom incident was highly entertaining.  Way to go Bella!  I found her mad skillz and commentary with the camera quite amusing....As did one Edward Cullen.  Emmett must have seen it too as he did not hesitate to help Edward cover his tracks when all eyes were on him.   His hesitancy to break away from the "crowd" at this time tells us he is not ready for Bella yet.  


Rosalie is coniving.  She sees Edwards infatuation and she is going to use it to her advantage.  I could be wrong.  A part of me hopes that I am.  If anyone can hold their own against the slut patrol it will be Bella.  If not I hope that Edward will come to her defense.  Will he be able to do that yet?  Yes, well I am sure Emmett will have no trouble with it should a back up plan be necessary.


The inuendos, the snark, Edward's occassional thoughts ... everything about the playful interaction in English class was so true to life.  The invitation has been extended and the phone numbers exchanged.  We've met the key characters of the story so the party is the next logica step and I for one plan to be there.


Bella and Jazz - The Stepfords - Gothic Gert - Pixie Adams - The Moldy Peaches.  The two of you have blended so well to create this world of fresh ideas and I am so happy to be a part of the experience.  Do you have a thread for your story?  Would you like one? 


Sandra



Author's Response:

I <3 Esme and the way Michelle has created the relationship between her and Edward. I wish Esme was my mum!

Jazz and Bella are super awesome together. They are twin souls, best friends, peas in a pod. They strengthen each other. It will be interesting to see how things change when Alice comes into the picture.

We don't have a thread for the story, but if you wanted to start one we would certainly come and play!

Reviewer: amygsotuk (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2009 09:47 AM · On: Chapter One: Blow Jobs and Hearses

this is crackalackin



Author's Response:

Glad you are diggin' the story!!

Reviewer: Tsumi (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2009 09:40 AM · On: Chapter Four: Invites and Moldy Peaches

edward being a manwhore is really gross, its one thing to have sex but the way you've written him doesnt make that pimp aspect believable, he's just a douche, i dont really like him, bella could do better, she's much more interesting, i'm literally in love with her character, shes so fucking awesome its ridiculous great job cant wait for more



Author's Response:

Edward is a man-whore and a douche... but will he change his disgusting ways? We will see!

The next chapter is almost finished so you shouldn't have to wait long :)

Reviewer: steflynno (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2009 08:31 AM · On: Chapter Four: Invites and Moldy Peaches

awesome chapter. i'm nervous about what rosalie has planned for the party because i know its going to be horrific. i'm sure bella and jazz will be able to pull something off though. love how you introduced alice in the story. i was wondering about that. i just love, love, love a jealousward. update soon!!! also love the long chapter.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing!! Rosalie will earn her nickname, that's for sure! We're both glad you loved the long chapter. We really wondered how readers would like that. The next chapter is just a little bit longer than this one - and we are almost finished writing it!

 

Reviewer: mscope (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2009 07:54 AM · On: Chapter Three: Shaggy and the Scoobes

Since I am from a small town I can certainly appreciate the picture of acceptance that you created.  It is a long time since I have been to high school but your image is so accurate.  Anyone who dares to be different is cast out therefore one must make every attempt to comply and fit in.  The funny thing is that had Bella walked in a clone of everyone there she would have still been an outcast in the eyes of the girls.  

Despite Emmett's "leadership" role I find him to be accepting of the new kids.  I have to believe it is Esme's influence.  I will talk more about her when I go back and review chapter 1.  He certainly project an ability to accept those that appear different.

Edward.  Now here is a kid with a mind waiting to open, or not.  He is not overly excited with his lot in life in this small and mundane environment.  He goes with the flow because it is all he really knows of fitting in.  He is naturally drawn to Bella.  She is different.  She has a aura that draws him in.  Just how subtle will the changes be as he is drawn into her world?  Hmmmm.  I find it quite interesting that he has the need to be "sick" for a couple of days.   He is going to need some time to process the effect she has on him.  Well the physical is obvious.  But what about the mental?

Sandra



Author's Response:

It's difficult moving into a new place, and especially for Bella and Jazz who lived a very unique lifestyle with Rene. They truly would have been outcasts regardless of how they dressed or acted - almost doomed before they started.

Emmett is a softy but impressionable. He is all about the experience. Emmett is our existentialist.

Edward isn't going to know what hit him ... and that's how we like it :D

Reviewer: loss4words (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2009 07:47 AM · On: Chapter One: Blow Jobs and Hearses

This story is beyond fun.  I love love love your character development and all of Bella's quirky euphemisms are entirely hilarious.  I am greatly looking forward to reading more!



Author's Response:

Thanks for taking the time to review. Michelle and I have wicked fun writing this fic. We spend most of our time laughing and giggling. We are both stoked that you like it and hope you keep reading :D

Reviewer: mscope (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2009 06:34 AM · On: Chapter Two: Myrtle and Orange

This story is goint to be great.  The Bella/Jazz relationship is wonderful.   First impressions are lasting aren't they?

Charlie's was classic.   He may enforce the law but it is pretty obvious that nothing has prepared him for two teenagers who's free spirits have been nurtured while growing up.  This can turn out very bad or very good depending on how open he can become.  Actually I think they have started out pretty good considering they are virtual strangers and total opposites.

I love the free spirit of this Bella and Jasper.  They flow with the life at hand but do not compromise their quirky individuality.  

I am excited to experience this story as it unfolds as they adjust to life in Forks.  But with a smile I can't help but wonder if the people of Forks are ready for them?

Sandra



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Michelle and I wanted to write something different, somthing on the quirky side, something so far out of the usual that it would be amusing and entertaining. What we found is that we started to love the relationships and the energy between characters.

I think Forks will learn a lot from Bella and Jasper ... not that any of them will be ready for it.

Reviewer: miniego (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2009 04:25 AM · On: Chapter Four: Invites and Moldy Peaches

This is my new favorite fic. The words that spew from Bella's mouth is priceless. She's awesome. I like how you have Leah and Alice as outcasts. I have to say its a weird combo, but suprisingly it somehow works in this quirky fic.

I can't wait for the party. Rosalie being the conniving beotch that she is, must have devised a plan of torture for Bella. Hopefully, Bella and Jazz escape unscathed. Edward is seriously adorable. Maybe Bella and Edward can learn a thing or two from each other. It's a pairing I wouldn't mind reading about more often.

GREAT FIC!!! :)



Author's Response:

I really have a fun time writing Bella. Most of the time I'm giggling as I type.

Michelle and I wanted to shake up the original groups. Why can't Alice and Leah be friends?

We are very close to finishing the party chapter ... OOOO... so good!! Michelle and I read what we have and get excited to read more and then remember that we are the ones writing the fic. (We can be such losers sometimes)

Thank you for reviewing!! It makes us grin like buffoons.

Reviewer: Ash88 (Signed) · Date: November 17, 2009 09:50 PM · On: Chapter Three: Shaggy and the Scoobes


Reviewer: MizUnderstood (Signed) · Date: November 17, 2009 12:25 PM · On: Chapter Three: Shaggy and the Scoobes

love it! can't wait to read what bella thinks of edward, i love the way she talks its HILARIOUS XD, and especially the fact that shes different and talks the way she talks no matter what. Can't wait to read more!!



Author's Response:

Michelle and I are glad you are still lovin' the story. We are editing the next chapter and should have it up soon!

Reviewer: Twilight_Girl_Ox (Signed) · Date: November 12, 2009 12:55 PM · On: Chapter Three: Shaggy and the Scoobes

thanks for the update guys!

i love your edward and bella. they are totally funny.

i was laughin so loud when bella called edward 'shaggy'

keep up your excellent work.

update soon :D

xx



Author's Response:

Hey! Thanks for reading and reviewing :) Michelle and I are glad you are enjoying the story as much as we are writing it.

Reviewer: Jane123 (Signed) · Date: November 12, 2009 05:11 AM · On: Chapter Three: Shaggy and the Scoobes

I am seriously loving your Bella!



Author's Response:

Ahahah! Thanks! She is a pretty crazy kid. Michelle and I have fun playing with her :D

Reviewer: Almis (Signed) · Date: November 12, 2009 05:10 AM · On: Chapter Three: Shaggy and the Scoobes

This is amazing, I love this story!

Alice.x



Author's Response:

Michelle and I are glad you are still enjoying the story!! Thanks for reading and sending us some love :D

Reviewer: B-RizzleDizzle (Signed) · Date: November 12, 2009 02:39 AM · On: Chapter Three: Shaggy and the Scoobes

Yes! That was a fuckawesome chapter. Keep up the great work.

I really do love your take on Bella. And Edward getting a boner from her words. haha...that shit was priceless.



Author's Response:

Poor Edward won't know what hit him!!

Thanks for diggin' the chapter and reviewing. I dunno what's better .... reviews or rpattz (I think Michelle would say rpattz).

Reviewer: Sakkosekk (Signed) · Date: November 12, 2009 01:21 AM · On: Chapter Three: Shaggy and the Scoobes

I like Edward Cullen doing jealousy! Keep him like that! Untill he and Bella finally get together, but with lots of trouble since she and Jazz has a connection.. If Alice is invited, I hope she will come after Bella and Edward get together :p Update soon



Author's Response:

I bet he'd be the green eyed monster if he knew what Bella and Jazz were doing before school. Hooooo yeah! It's hard to break the friends with benefits connection ... on both sides. Just wait and see :D

Reviewer: Tsumi (Signed) · Date: November 11, 2009 08:12 PM · On: Chapter Three: Shaggy and the Scoobes

so fuck awesome i love weirdella vs jockward, keep bringing the smiles :D :D :D



Author's Response:

I think  you will love them more and more as the story progresses!!!

Reviewer: overthetoplessness (Signed) · Date: November 11, 2009 06:40 PM · On: Chapter Three: Shaggy and the Scoobes

i like it, bella made her statement, pretty smoothed considering she was fried



Author's Response:

Amazing what one can do when they are baked! We are glad you liked the chapter ... hope to have the next one up soon :D

Reviewer: dylansmommy06 (Signed) · Date: November 11, 2009 06:32 PM · On: Chapter Three: Shaggy and the Scoobes

I feel like a pathetic addict to this story! i'm constantly checking my shit just to see if you have updated! Do ya'll have a schedule or is it just whenever .lol!  ANYWAYS another great chapter I would bitch slap Rosalie I just hate her with a passion ! ;)



Author's Response:

We try to update as quick as possible. Co-authoring takes a wee bit more time and we want to make sure the next chapter is always as fuckawesome as the last.

We hate Rosalie too. In fact, I'd like to jump into the story just to punch her in the face!

Thanks for reading and sending us feedback! Feedback is our sweet crack.

Reviewer: steflynno (Signed) · Date: November 11, 2009 06:13 PM · On: Chapter Three: Shaggy and the Scoobes

Absolutely loved it. Actually read certain parts a few times because couldn't get enough of it.  Laughed so hard with Bella's speech and her writing on a chinese menu. Priceless. Poor Edward.



Author's Response:

We are glad you loved it!! We both laughed our asses off writting the interaction between Shaggy and Bells-a-bub! We both hope you keep reading and reviewing :D

Reviewer: Crista Irene (Signed) · Date: November 11, 2009 05:15 PM · On: Chapter Three: Shaggy and the Scoobes

This is really good! I'm enjoying Bella's unique character! It's so refreshing to read about Bella in a different light. Keep up the good work!



Author's Response:

Michelle and I are glad that you like our wee little tale!! We have fun writing it and are glad that peeps are loving it.

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