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Reviewer: misaki_noa_lawliet (Signed) · Date: July 28, 2010 10:24 PM · On: Chapter Nine: In (P)reparation
I AM!!!! (About the weekend, of course)
It was a fun chapter, I like to see Bella's interactions, well attempts at social interaction XD, I found it amusing. Pardon me.
I also like how the story is progressing, you can see some angst is coming ahead, with Edward all elusive and blushing, and if not, at least a good laugh at his thoughts...:D
-Dione
Reviewer: elle12 (Signed) · Date: July 28, 2010 10:18 PM · On: Chapter 4: Boss from hell
hahahahaha, i like it,
Reviewer: elle12 (Signed) · Date: July 28, 2010 10:03 PM · On: Chapter 2: Baggage
hmmmmmm???
Reviewer: misaki_noa_lawliet (Signed) · Date: July 28, 2010 10:03 PM · On: Chapter Eight: The B Side
awww....well at least I know they're gonna end up together, somehow, sometime...I'm looking forward to see what you've got in my mind.
Sorry, it was really late yesterday, so I stayed in this chapter =3
About the story, the characters, as well as the plot is developing, which is great!
-Misa=D
Reviewer: elle12 (Signed) · Date: July 28, 2010 09:56 PM · On: Chapter 1: Time is money, honey.
uugh bella is a bitch, & i dont see that improving anythime soon, i hate people like that when it comes to the workplace
Reviewer: cullenmother05 (Signed) · Date: July 28, 2010 12:13 PM · On: Chapter Thirty-two: Wetting a line
awww. that was beautiful. i love that Bella is so powerful here. cant wait for more.
Author's Response: Thanks, hon! Just the Epi left, I'm afraid!
Hugs,
Lumedog
Reviewer: lullaby369 (Signed) · Date: July 28, 2010 05:04 AM · On: Chapter 1: Time is money, honey.
Great writing.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I hope this chapter was satisfying!
Hugs,
Lumedog
Reviewer: photogal (Signed) · Date: July 28, 2010 12:30 AM · On: Chapter Thirty-two: Wetting a line
nice
Reviewer: olsson82 (Signed) · Date: July 28, 2010 12:15 AM · On: Chapter Thirty-two: Wetting a line
great chapter
Reviewer: misaki_noa_lawliet (Signed) · Date: July 27, 2010 11:33 PM · On: Chapter Seven: Let's try to get along
EEEEEEEEPP!!! Lol!!! I love the last scene!....=3
Woohoo! I'm gonna miss their banters lol!
I love this chapters complexion, you've ventured with the background description, which as I said, gives a clearer image, therefor, it's smoother!
In all: Nice...(LOL! XD)
-Misaa
Reviewer: misaki_noa_lawliet (Signed) · Date: July 27, 2010 11:15 PM · On: Chapter Six: Damage control
I've decided that you're a girl. So:
I gotta tell you, girl, you had me at "Bella is going to try the whole being human thing - let's see how she does!" ::nods:: yeah, I saw and I loved it!
It's like her walls are being broken one by one, and neither she or Edward knows!! So cute! And the "Am I that bad?" though was classic! LOL!!!
Now, this is my new favorite chapter, the other one was the 3! And I can see huge improvements, so Congrats! :D
-Dione
Author's Response: Yes, I'm a girl. :)
I'm glad you're enjoying my story so far. I try to be descriptive without it taking over the chapter/story. It's a delicate balance of give and take, I find. and I hope as you continue through the story, you'll gather more details that will satisfy you.
Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Lumedog :)
Reviewer: misaki_noa_lawliet (Signed) · Date: July 27, 2010 10:52 PM · On: Chapter Five: Are you kidding me?!
Well, she made a mess, but Dickhead&BithBoss XD
Like this chapter too!, I've seen improvements since Chapter 1, which is great! Congrats!
-Dione
Reviewer: misaki_noa_lawliet (Signed) · Date: July 27, 2010 10:26 PM · On: Chapter 4: Boss from hell
HAHAHAHAHA! Epic!
Well, yes, Edward: Fuck Me-....*.*
I love this perspective, you can see the changes of personality, at Bellas everything's quicker, more precise, at Edwards you can see, he gets the whole image, and all with the same efficiency! I LOVE that!
Misa!
Reviewer: misaki_noa_lawliet (Signed) · Date: July 27, 2010 10:13 PM · On: Chapter Three: First Day
:D, This is my favorite chapter so far! (But I've just read 3 chapters, so...)
And I'm glad to see you made progress!. From Edward's arriving until the end, you were describing his features, and then Bellas hair, which gave a clearer image. :D. But I think you could still give a background one. Like, say, how is Bellas office, the building?, the restaurant they're going over, a brief description would succeed, as I said, it was just an observation! :D
Gomenasai, Misa!
Reviewer: misaki_noa_lawliet (Signed) · Date: July 27, 2010 09:54 PM · On: Chapter 2: Baggage
No time, you said it sister....err, if you're a sister, becuase if you're a bro, well then that could be good too....¬¬, right, sooo...
I understand Bella, I'm studying medicine, I'm a 3 grader, and I still have to do 6 more years, there's no time for man....
LOL!, I love her sense of humor, and the use of the pack was awesome! :D
I include the note I said in the last chapter, and I'm looking forward to see how Edward handles BiatchyBella! =3
See ya,
Misaa
Reviewer: misaki_noa_lawliet (Signed) · Date: July 27, 2010 09:38 PM · On: Chapter 1: Time is money, honey.
mmm....so HI!! ::waves::
I know I'm delayed, but I just though I could review the story as I go! ::smiles::
Notes I want to make, they're not much, actually it's just one: Maybe you should put more information about about characters physique, and at the place they're at. I mean, the story's good as it is, but I think it would be more powerful, you know?....Well that's just my opinion, of course! :D
Onto the next chapter! :3
-Dione
Reviewer: cullenmother05 (Signed) · Date: July 27, 2010 06:15 AM · On: Chapter Twenty-four: Devil in a blue dress
An Edward that can cook. I'm in love. wink. he is so good to her. she is so lucky. its so good right now; makes me worry for them later. really well written.
Author's Response: I know, huh? I love a man who can cook! And she is lucky...not that she sees that. Hold onto your hat, honey. It's gonna get rocky. Thanks for the compliment and thank you for reading and reviewing!
Hugs,
Lumedog
Reviewer: cullenmother05 (Signed) · Date: July 26, 2010 06:50 PM · On: Chapter Twenty-one: Confession
wow, wow, wow. that was hot and all so dirty. go bella. lol.
Reviewer: EBP (Signed) · Date: July 25, 2010 03:51 PM · On: Chapter Thirty-one: Ready or not
OMG...your story owned me today. I've read it from the beginning and it's awesome. With the perfect balance of tension that come together it makes you want to keep on reading. Thank you so much for such a great story. Update soon because I am definitelty looking forward to it.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading! I love to hear from readers like you because it keeps me energized and encouraged - so thank you. Hopefully you saw that I updated last night...last chapter. It's sad and exciting at the same time. I hope you've enjoyed it, and thank you so much for the review. Please come visit me again!!
Hugs,
Lumedog
Reviewer: rgvdoll (Signed) · Date: July 24, 2010 07:24 PM · On: Chapter Twenty-five: All for me
Seriously, Bella gives me whiplash!
Author's Response: I know. She doesn't know which side is up. But that's the beauty of an imperfect character...wouldn't you agree? Don't worry - I promise you she'll figure it out. :)
Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Hugs,
Lumedog
Reviewer: rgvdoll (Signed) · Date: July 23, 2010 11:19 PM · On: Chapter Twenty-one: Confession
I like this happy Bella. She's actually quite adventurous and cute in her seducing attempts. I am enjoying this story very much.
Reviewer: Vanillamochalatte (Signed) · Date: July 21, 2010 12:10 PM · On: Chapter 4: Boss from hell
I love Edward, Carlisle and Jasper :-) Great characters!
Reviewer: Vanillamochalatte (Signed) · Date: July 21, 2010 12:02 PM · On: Chapter Three: First Day
Hey:
I'm not sure I understnd Bella well enough yet, but she has a serious stick up her ass. I don't begrudge her success and willingness to compete with the big dogs but she doesn't let up on anyone and it doesn't quite make sense to me.
For instance, why is she all up Jessica's ass for being late? She could have at least found out why and then told her off.
She seems to draw unnecessary conclusions like she's paranoid or something.
I'll keep reading in hopes that this becomes clear soon.
Thanks
Reviewer: ELLC (Signed) · Date: July 17, 2010 02:27 PM · On: Chapter Thirty-one: Ready or not
What a great chapter! hAAAA, caught Aro in the act - priceless!
I have a feeling that Charlie and Edward are going to be great friends. Too cute! A perfect time for Edward to discuss future plans with Bella perhaps?
Author's Response: That's karma for you, right? It gave me great pleasure writing that chapter. ;) And I think you're right about E and C. Fishing is always a good time to have a man-to-man chat about the woman they both love. :)
Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Hugs,
Lumedog
Reviewer: photogal (Signed) · Date: July 15, 2010 04:02 PM · On: Chapter Thirty-one: Ready or not
funny chapter
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