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Reviewer: Maranda (Signed) · Date: February 05, 2012 08:57 PM · On: A Strange Kind of Love
Personally, I hope this DOESN'T end as a Bella/Edward story. I'm really lking Wesley.
Reviewer: pennycocktail (Signed) · Date: July 19, 2011 08:06 PM · On: Black Holes and Revelations
Wow, so much info.... lookin' forward to the next chapter.
Reviewer: mfoxee (Signed) · Date: April 16, 2011 07:28 AM · On: Black Holes and Revelations
Really nice written story with so much twist and turns you just have to hang on to stay with the ride I expect great things from it in the future.
Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to read this and for the wonderful review:) I hope you continue to enjoy the ride;) There are a few more twists and turns on the way.
Reviewer: delilah69 (Signed) · Date: April 14, 2011 08:13 PM · On: Black Holes and Revelations
well, thats a surprise, aros brother... and hes just as much of a nut!
Author's Response: Hopefully it was a good surprise;) Aro is such a great character. I wanted to expand on him a bit...take a slightly different approach as to what makes him tick. Damien gave me the perfect outlet for that. He's been a hoot to develop.
Thank you again for taking the time to read and review:)
Reviewer: claireava (Signed) · Date: April 14, 2011 02:21 PM · On: Black Holes and Revelations
Brilliant xxx
Author's Response: :D Wow! Thank you for the awesome review.
Reviewer: JRParz (Signed) · Date: April 13, 2011 05:48 PM · On: Black Holes and Revelations
Of course, the release of the Eclipse movie and the Bree Tanner book, threw a bit of a monkey wrench into things, at least in regards to my setup of things. Given what we know now of canon, there was in fact more to it.
Let me answer the above first... SM was not canon with that Bree Tanner book, therefore I wouldn't even consider there was more to it. I'm not sure what SM was thinking of when she wrote it - but the inconsistencies were blatant.
This chapter was strong and extremely interesting. The only think I saw as a mistake on your part was how Damien referred to the Cullens as Alice Cullen and Jasper Hale. If not Jasper Cullen, then Jasper Whitlock would have been more appropriate. That Hale name was only used for the humans so Rosalie and Jasper could be seen as the Hale twins. Oh - and your POV of Jasper was spot on.
To wrap... I'm liking the stronger bond that is developing between Wade and the Cullens... and I was thinking (as I was reading) that Damien could actually benefit the Cullens until you played the "Aro is my brother card." :-)
p.s. Your James/Damien/Mary Alice history worked perfectly.
Author's Response: Your review made my day...seriously:) I'm glad you liked the chapter and my take on Jasper. I was really happy with how this one turned out, and was hoping it would generate some interesting feedback (like this:P).
I have to admit...I had a bit of a fit when I first heard about the Bree book. I believe the rant was something along the lines of "sure...SM has enough time to write an entire book about a character that isn't even a blip on the radar...but noooooooo...heaven forbid completing Midnight Sun":P I managed to stay away from it even after I saw the Volturi bits that were shown before the movie came out...thinking maybe that was just CW taking some directing liberties. After the movie, and after hearing people talk about it, curiosity got the best of me and I broke down (mostly because I was paranoid that something, somewhere in there would mess with where I wanted to take things). Not that is should really matter:P Anyhoo...it makes me feel better to hear that someone else thought something was "off" in that book. I thought it was just me.
Along those lines...is it just me...or does Aro in Breaking Dawn contradict Aro in New Moon? I have to admit, I liked New Moon Aro. He was deliciously evil but with a hint of romanticism. Breaking Dawn Aro seemed different to me. Then again, I have issues with parts of Breaking Dawn. From a battle perspective, I would think it's not the best idea to give the opponent time to gather forces (or witnesses) unless you have other motives for delaying things. (I have my ideas on that...and will work it into this later on.)
On the "Cullens" note, you're right. I had it in my head that Damien, being a bit old school and thinking in terms of clans/covens, would refer to them as "The Cullens" or the "Cullen Clan", but Wesley would not have. Thank you for pointing that out:)
I haven't got the new book yet...but am interested to see what SM did to some of the backstories. Like I said, I'm sticking to my guns on where I intended this to go.
Reviewer: Camilla (Signed) · Date: April 04, 2011 11:52 PM · On: A Question of Lust
OK, sequel to the review. I am not against E&B waiting until they are married, far from it. One of the lovelier moments of Eclipse is when he (after the night of tears and her firm choice for him) is prepared to relent on everything (make love now, change her when she wants it and marry her only when she is ready) and she embraces his old fashioned values and says let’s wait until we are married. Like in the famous O’Henry Christmas short story (Hell, if I remember the title) each one is prepared to give up for the other his/her more precious thing. But on one point Bella never changes her mind. Married or not married first, she wants to make love while she is still human, and I agree with her, as I said previously. What does not hold water and is not Victorian/Edwardian, is the concept of heavy petting involving genitalia short of intercourse not being sex. This is very modern and very American, I must say (In Europe we are still laughing our heads off about Clinton maintaining that BJs did not represent having sex…). Victorians were not like that. Either they were really chaste or they did everything, the only consideration being maybe to avoid pregnancies (no pill).
About Wesley: I was interested by him as I have written a multi chaptered story called The Parachutist (I am presently updating its sequel). In it my AU Edward Masen, an American officer, is turned in 1944 while he is in Italy and WWII is raging. He too manages to control his newborn bloodlust and he selectively goes after the enemies he was sent to Italy to kill, namely the Nazis…But, like Canon Edward in his vigilante years, he realizes after some time that what he is doing has nothing to do with the war or with patriotism, it is just gluttony, and he repents, becoming a vegetarian vamp…
Author's Response: You make very valid points when it comes to what would be considered "sex". BJs most definitely fall into that category (we still laugh about that here too). Canon Edward and Bella had a lot of “practice” but in keeping with Edward’s ingrained values, probably didn’t go past mild petting. I would assume that the “scenes they had yet to rehearse”, the ones that they never got to prior to the wedding, were anything that would have involved reaching orgasm. I am probably a victim of a bit of cultural influence (aren’t we also responsible for the base system?), but given the dynamic of how B/E's relationship is changing/progressing in this AU, for me, there's a destinction between the various types of sex. The final act of intercourse is what they've sworn to keep. It's probably silly, given everything else that will undoubtedly transpire before they get to that night, but in my head, it will represent one of the deepest connections they can have, the highest level of intimacy.
Though I have tried to keep with many of the ideals/details of canon, this is ultimately is an AU that does step into OOC territory. I have admittedly taken some liberties. I take into account what happens up to battle in Eclipse, but after that, things change. Jacob never gets hurt, Bella never has her night of tears, and the scene in the meadow that you described above (which I agree is one of the lovlier moments of Eclipse) never happen here. I should probably update my summary to clarify that a bit. (What I think in my head, and what translates in writing, aren't always the same thing.)
The Parachutist is one of the fics on my list to read when I’m done writing ASKOL. I thought your name looked familiar;) I’ve been refraining from reading any stories with WWII subplots or backgrounds to keep my mind clear on my approach with Wesley and Aislin’s history. I can’t say too much without revealing things that come out in the next few chapters, but there was a reason I chose that era for them. I have a ways to go before this is completed, but am looking forward to reading your fic. I like the sound of your Edward. He's definitely more evolved than my Wesley. I’m not sure if Wesley will ever go vegetarian…he doesn't get to that point in this story at least. I liked the idea of him being a bit of an angel of mercy (so to speak). I’m sure they're out there, but I hadn’t come across any stories where a vamp took that approach. Right or wrong…I liked it.
Thank you again for taking the time to comment. I haven’t quite mastered the art of initiating debate, especially in the forums, so reviews like this are a great chance for me to hear what readers are thinking and to explain my thoughts:) I really do appreciate your insight. Like I said, the first few chapters are where I tend to lose readership, so it really does help to hear what people's thought are (good or bad). Part way into this, I had a bit of writer’s remorse for how I set things up with the Jacob conflict...but by that point...there was no going back. If I had to do anything over, I would probably take a different approach for the setup, but I'd stick to my guns on the rest;)
P.S. I forgot to reply to this before, but I will make sure to add a recap if it's been longer than expected since that last update. Thank you for suggesting that:)
Reviewer: Camilla (Signed) · Date: April 04, 2011 09:44 AM · On: Only When I Lose Myself
Hi, I restarted reading yesterday and now I got here. I had tried before – but frankly I did not hold with Bella being still in doubt between E and J. To me the question is resolved with the night of tears, when she finally understands what she is doing (at last) and relinquishes her hold on her human life. I even wrote an O/s about it. But eventually I resumed reading and your plot is rich and intriguing. (On Wesley I might leave another comment), so I plan to continue. If you can’t update frequently, please do add a recap. Readers stop reading a story because sometime they don’t remember well what happened and can’t reconnect.
I have a final comment. To me are very sad those stories where Edward and Bella manage to have intercourse only after she has been turned. It seems a betrayal of the spirit of Twilight and of their love story. A vampire and a human despite all odds. The love he has for her should enable him to make love without damaging her, and the incredible mix of passion and restraint he can find and demonstrate is a great part of the Twilight magic. Otherwise, two vamps make love… so what?. It is your story of course, but I wanted to underline this.
Author's Response:
Thank you for taking time to read/re-read and comment:) It seems like I lose readership within the first several chapters, but as that is time when one is least likely to review, there hasn't been much feedback to that point. Canon AU fanfics (or fics that start out mostly canon) are a risk because there is so much love for the original story. I don’t think I ever would have had the courage to post this had I not accepted the reality that some people may love it, some may hate it, and some may not care either way. It’s been so much fun to write this story and I am truly learning a lot from the experience. It is hoped that you find enjoyment where this story goes from here, but either way, I appreciate the honesty you have shown:)
I imagine the plausibility of Bella's indecision in the beginning of this story is something that other readers have taken issue with as well. The night of tears is undoubtedly a definitive moment for Bella, but for me, it just seemed like it came so quickly after she had finally admitted her true feelings for Jacob. I always wondered how things would have changed (if at all) had she taken a bit more time to come to the conclusion. This was just one way for me to explore an alternate route.
Though I respect and can see your point on the consummation side of E/B’s relationship, I stand by my reasoning. I know Edward’s no saint, but there were parts in Eclipse and Breaking Dawn where I wanted to smack Bella upside the head. Her attitude towards marriage and the easy dismissal of Edward’s concerns in regards to intercourse were a couple of those points. Don't get me wrong, I'm not one to think a piece of paper defines your love, but it was something that was important to Edward. The least she could have done was not grumble about it out loud, try to spare his feelings a bit. As far as the sex, maybe I would feel differently if it wasn’t going to be Edward's first time as well, but for me, it seemed like Bella was only thinking of her needs. I never doubted their love or the strength he had to love her while she was still human, I just wanted to explore an option where they would be able to express their passion unrestrained, and without any morning after regrets.
You have me intrigued now as to what your thoughts are on Wesley;) He was part of the plot bunny that started me on this crazy adventure.
Thank you again for giving this story another chance:)
Reviewer: claireava (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2011 01:58 PM · On: Only When I Lose Myself
really love your story....cant wait to find out whats really going on with Bella and whats gonna happen in Volterra...KEEP GOING xxxxx
Author's Response: Thank you so much for taking time to read and review:) I'm glad you like it! I hope to have the next chapter up for validation this weekend.
I'm still recovering from the slight coronary I had seeing those Breaking Dawn pics that leaked earlier today:P Whew! They are definitely inspiring me to write some lemons!
Reviewer: delilah69 (Signed) · Date: March 29, 2011 02:08 PM · On: Only When I Lose Myself
who was at bellas house? cause i have a feeling that it wasn't anyone good. was charlie right to be nervous? i hope that they stay safe!
Author's Response: Charlie's gut was definitely telling him something. The answer to your questions will be revealed in the next chapter;) If all goes well, it will be up for validation by the weekend:)
Reviewer: crazy4Rob (Signed) · Date: March 22, 2011 01:51 PM · On: A New World
I really like this story. Can't wait until the next update.
Author's Response: Thank you for taking time to comment:) I'm glad you like this! The next chapter will be up for validation shortly.
Reviewer: sapphire_light (Signed) · Date: March 21, 2011 06:56 AM · On: A New World
i'm sorry you haven't been feeling well, glad you're back!! :) i thought you'd given up on this story and i'm glad i was wrong. can't wait to see how you tie this all together in the upcoming chapters. irina had better not have anything to do with this. calm before the storm you say...
Author's Response: Thank you...I'm glad to be back! Trust me, I have no intentions on giving up on this story. I am committed to seeing it through to the end:)
Thank you again for sticking with me. I hope you aren't disappointed with where I take this story;)
Reviewer: MaryMaryMary (Signed) · Date: March 20, 2011 07:22 PM · On: A New World
Well as nice as this all is. I am more than ready for her change. I persoanlly think 3 books was too long. If you decide something you should do it. She was and is so at risk around them and human.
Tanya and Jacob.. that is a hoot.
Author's Response: Since the last attempt at transformation was unsuccessful, they've been a bit hesitant to try again. I don't want to give too much away...so I'll just say that change is coming...and soon.
Tanya gets such a bad rap in fanfiction. She has a lot of potential as a supporting character. I like the idea of her and Jacob. I see them getting into quite a bit of mischief with one another.
Thank you again for commenting, I really do appreciate hearing what people think about this story:)
Reviewer: MaryMaryMary (Signed) · Date: March 20, 2011 06:32 PM · On: Never Let Me Down Again
lol.... edward.
Author's Response: :)
Reviewer: MaryMaryMary (Signed) · Date: March 20, 2011 05:41 PM · On: In Your Eyes
Well let me see, I have not read any plan yet. Victoria wants her to die,Edward to suffer exactly how I am not sure.
Author's Response: The newborn army was supposed to be a sure thing, even against the Cullens. Victoria's game has been thrown off by the failure. Obsessed with revenge, she's not thinking rationally. With Wesley, she sees a new opportunity to cause pain. I know I don't explain the plan in great detail, but hopefully the next few chapters give a little more insight.
Thank you again for commenting:)
Reviewer: MaryMaryMary (Signed) · Date: March 20, 2011 05:27 PM · On: Running up That Hill
You know she needs to be away from him and him away from her. He needs to face life without her. She needs to face it without him. Then they become more special to each other.............if at all.
Author's Response: Eclipse is my favorite book in the series, but the ending seemed a bit rushed to me. I wanted to give B/E just a bit more time to evaluate their feelings. I admit to shamefully using Jacob to aid in that;) I imagine eternity to be a long time to spend with the same person. Better make sure he's "the one".
Thank you for taking time to read and review:)
Reviewer: JValley (Signed) · Date: January 15, 2011 10:36 PM · On: What You Want Me To Do
This is getting hot. I love it. I am sorry it had to end. When is the next installment going to be ready for viewing.
I love it.
Author's Response: Thank you for taking time to comment:) I'm glad you like this story. Between holidays and a nasty case of writer's block, the next chapter is taking a lot longer to pull together than it should. I'm hoping to have the it wrapped up and posted for validation by the end of this week. Thankfully, the chapter after that is ready to roll, so there won't be as long of a wait between those two;)
Thank you for the support:)
Reviewer: chy3 (Signed) · Date: December 10, 2010 06:37 AM · On: A Question of Lust
Hmm... interesting...
Author's Response: I'm sorry...I don't know how I missed your comment. Interesting good or interesting bad? :)
Reviewer: griff1au (Signed) · Date: December 05, 2010 06:41 PM · On: What You Want Me To Do
Legs, hips, ass, shoulders, breasts, thighs, waist ..... women have all the advantages of being a visual fantasy feast. All those soft curves and silky skin just can just bring a guy to a wimpering mess in no time flat. Girls got all the advantages. Sure I bloke can do the same to a woman if he's on his game but a more 'hands on' approch is necessary. At least in my experience.
Author's Response:
I agree that girls have an edge when it comes to visuals, but I wouldn't say we have all the advantages. Never underestimate the power a man's ass, shoulders, arms, thighs, lower abdomen, and even jawline can have on us;)
I am nervous at times writing from a male's point of view, even more so with Edward's during lemons. My husband lets me pick his brain from time to time, but as he's not a fan of the series, he doesn't have a ton of input on how he thinks Edward would or should react to a specific situation. In the end, it's just me getting to play around in the character's head, seeing the world through his eyes, and having a blast doing it. I can only hope I do his character justice in the process;)
In my mind, Bella was always aware of her sexuality, but never truly felt comfortable in it. As she realizes how she affects Edward, her confidence builds, as well as her...cravings. Likewise, Edward is finally learning to see himself as the sexual being that he truly is, and is allowing himself to indulge. As he learns to trust himself, he will let more of his animalistic nature come out to play. It's a slow burn, but they're getting there.
It's rare to get a male's perspective on this...so any comments you have are extremely welcome:) Thank you for taking time to comment and review;)
Reviewer: fourshotchild (Signed) · Date: December 02, 2010 09:44 PM · On: What You Want Me To Do
So, I decided to add this little gem to my favorites! I absoultely love this story! I love how much thought you've put into its creation. It's truly a rare piece of fanfiction. I love the fact that Bella has powers in a human state. I honestly can't wait until she's turned. There is just so much depth! Please update soon! Good luck!
Author's Response: Wow! Thank you:) What an awesome review! This story really is my baby...so it gives me great satisfaction when I hear that others are enjoying it. I really do appreciate the kind words and support:)
Reviewer: twihardacctant (Signed) · Date: November 29, 2010 08:00 AM · On: What You Want Me To Do
Definitely a great chapter...I like our boy losing it a lil. I like that u r building the relationship instead of just puppy love. keep going!!!
Author's Response: E and B have broken the seal to to speak...so there's no stopping now;) Thank you again for the great comments! I appreciate it:)
Reviewer: JRParz (Signed) · Date: November 28, 2010 07:06 PM · On: What You Want Me To Do
Yes, still along for the ride... still enjoying. Obviously, the vampire that was tracked to Bella's house was NOT Wesley, so it appears we have a real threat in the area. I'm sure Edward will detect it soon enough.
Still loving the Tanya and Jacob match up - and I'm growing more and more curious about Bella's developing powers. :-)
Thanks for sharing your talent!!!
Author's Response: Thank you for the wonderful review:) You're definitely on the right track...there is another threat out there. Next chapter...
I'm really glad you're loving the Tanya/Jacob combo:) I just liked the idea of them being together...they create a very energetic couple.
Reviewer: PrincessNerra (Signed) · Date: November 09, 2010 11:07 AM · On: This Twilight Garden
So, we have to wait until she is turned to get a Lemon?! I can't stand all of this teasing.
Author's Response: June is a long ways away....too long. I can't hold out much longer:P All I will say is that it will happen sooner than either one of them thinks... It's about mid-August in the timeline right now. A lot is going to happen that they hadn't anticipated.
Thank you again for taking time to read and review:)
Reviewer: PrincessNerra (Signed) · Date: November 08, 2010 07:58 PM · On: Is It Really So Strange?
Love what you are doing with Bella. I also wandered why SM didn't expand on that with Bella having seen Jacob in his wolf from before he knew.
Author's Response: :) Yay! Thank you. I'm glad you like where I'm taking things. Bella's dreams definitely left a lot open for interpretation.
Thank you for taking time to review:)
Reviewer: twihardacctant (Signed) · Date: November 07, 2010 11:11 AM · On: A Warm Place
Great story so far. Good new characters and backstory...Keep going!!!
Author's Response: Thank you:) I appreciate the compliment! I have some kinks to work out with the next chapter, but those should be taken care of soon. After that...there's a chapter already completed.
Thank you again for your support:)
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