WOW GREAT FIRST CHAPTER

It's been a while between updates but well worth the wait. Can't wait to find out more, the tension and suspense at the end is killing me! Update soon.

i have really enjoyed reading this so far... and i'm praying that everything works out lol

You have a wonderful writing style and i can't wait to read more :)

I was just wondering the other day when this story would be updated again. Its a very unique storyline; I like it. I can't wait to see what happens next.

Okay, that was just as disgusting as you meant it to be. Man, that Sam, though! What a charmer! Can't wait to go visit that guy. He really knows how to welcome guests and make them feel right at home. Maybe I could bring my pets as well.

One reason I'm a wolf girl is because I adore animals and work with animal rescue. Thanks for the head's up, but of course I had to read what that sick son of a bitch was doing to poor Noble. REALLY difficult to read. Then, on top of it all, Nessie never washed off the blood that was dumped all over her. Ewwww! The whole thing was too gross for words. Too bad Nessie didn't vamp out and eat Sam. The fucker deserved it.

I have to say, I find it kind of tough to fathom that civilized people could stand around and watch an innocent young girl be treated like this. Do these people have NO moral standards? It's stomach churning. Seems like someone besides Jacob would find this pretty much beyond the pale.

Can't wait to spend some time with Billy. He and Nessie should be fun to watch. I got the impression that Embry and Quil pretty much knew that Jacob imprinted on Nessie. Guess he never confirmed their suspicions, huh?

So how long can Jake and Nessie hang out at his dad's house? Are Sam's guards going to descend on them there or is there more autonomy within the pack? How high up is Jake in authority? Do alphas constantly look over their shoulders for threats or is it a rare occurrence? How did Sam's family come to power once it was established that Jake's grandfather didn't have any children that could phase? Are there alpha females in your world and if so, do they have any power?

All right, I'm quitting. Your story is just sooo different, I can't help but ask all of these questions. Write a boring story and I'll send you short reviews. ;p  

 

 

 

Wow. This chapter was... epic. And incredibly good. I even got teary-eyed when Nessie was tortured and Noble died (it made me sad. I love animals).
And you're right, I don't like Sam.
I can't wait for the next chapter!!!!

It' too bad I Noble isn't available for autographs... that would've been pretty amazing. =P

Okay, I thought this was a very interesting chapter and brought up some compelling questions. Number 1 is where the hell is Billy and what happened to the direct line of rule? Billy obviously was in power in 4039 because Carlisle talks about Ephraim's son being the king. Then in 4043 there is a new king. Jacob doesn't seem resentful of Sam like he would if Sam killed Billy and grabbed the throne. He seems almost embarrassed by his linage. Did something bad happen that disgraced Billy? Wouldn't Jacob be the next ruler regardless of his age in a monarchy? Or does the king have to be old enough to exert alpha power as well? Even so, seems like when Jake was old enough, he still would become ruler. Hmmm.

I love your concept of the alpha being the only one that imprints. This has been in the back of my mind as well, since in a real wolf pack, only the alpha pair mate. I thought getting that concept through to Paul would just be too difficult, though. ;) Obviously, Sam hasn't imprinted, huh?

What was Sam's original plan for Nessie? Lock her up in solitary and be mean to her? Surely he's had some sort of plan or an agenda there. Is this why Nessie is getting such bad vibes about Sam? Did Jake not know what was in store for Nessie? Now is Sam going to want to rid the earth of Jake's imprint so no one will question his alpha authority? Hmmm.

I also found it fascinating that the citizenry would be so openly hostile to Nessie, someone who did them no harm whatsoever. See what round the clock media can do for you? We wholeheartedly embrace every country we've ever engaged in a war except for North Korea and if they were in any way normal, we'd do anything in the world to help them. The Quileutes are still furious over crimes committed by a few rotten apples 40 years ago? Btw, I know you wouldn't have a story if this had happened, but why didn't Carlisle turn over the rotten apples to the Quileutes in the first place? Couldn't the wolf girls identify them?

Okay, so did I exceed 20 questions? Sorry! Btw, I checked your twitter account last month to find out what branch of the military you were in. (My hubby was in the Air Force.) I saw where you were wondering if I hacked into your notes. Don't worry. I'm such a computer moron, I'd have better luck trying to break into Ft. Knox than I would hacking into a computer. I'm just nosey and interested in your compelling story. Thanks for sharing it with us. Oh, and please continue to post here, will you? I hate FF. Your stuff will get posted here eventually. ;p

 

Author's Response:

Da-yum. First off, THANK YOU!! I am truly in awe of this review, and all the insightful questions you asked. A lot of these touch on issues that we'll be examining in more depth later on in the fic, but let's see what I can tell you now without giving too much away...

-Billy's going to make an appearance really soon here. Ephraim was actually Billy's grandfather. Billy's father, Jeremiah, was the son Carlisle mentioned in his journal in 4039, and also, incidentally, the grandfather that Jacob references in this chapter. And then, you're absolutely right, there was a new king in 4043. But it wasn't anyone in the Black family.

-The thing about the Alpha is that it has to be a Shifter. Age is part of it as well, since people don't gain the ability to shift at will until they're about 16/17, if at all - some never gain that ability. So the Alpha wolf could have several sons, but they could only ascend the throne after him if they show themselves to be Shifters when they come of age.

-Jacob wasn't born yet when the Blacks fell out of power. Just throwing that out there.

-Sam has indeed not imprinted. So he and Leah are still together, hee. <3

-No. 

-Yes. 

-Yes. Also a bunch of other stuff we'll get to later.

-Yes. Sort of.

-Yes. Well... eventually.

-Yeah. The concept of holding grudges like this is sort of foreign to us Americans, but it's not uncommon in older, more tribal or clan-oriented societies, which the wolves surely are. This is a blood feud for them. The fact that the attackers came from another nation only adds to it - it would be one thing for someone to be murdered within their society, but for it to be outsiders? It’s like their entire race is under attack then. I'm not saying it's rational, just that that's the way they see it. And then, there is also another aspect to it - the Cullens *are* vampires, especially in the Quileutes' eyes, even if they claim to be vegetarians. So for them, even a few of them, to return to their vampiric & cannibalistic ways, it sets off alarm bells for the wolves, making them think it was a mistake to allow the Cullens to live so close to them & have dealings with them. Hence the massed army under Ephraim and the move to either destroy the Cullens or drive them back to their Volturi roots in the south.

-Ah yeah, and that's the other thing - the girls were killed, probably eaten, much like the ghost town Nessie & Jake passed through after James and Victoria were done with it. So there is no one to identify them, and, as Carlisle states in his journal, he has no idea who the men were who did it. I'd like to think he would have gladly joined Ephraim in ripping those guys a new one if he could.

Lol, so I don't think that was 20 questions, tho I know I answered more than one at a time in a few of these points... Hehe, don't apologize, I love it! ;D And I have decided to go ahead and keep updating here, though it'll be slow going... The next chapter's in the queue right now, but it's already up on TWCSL (and on FFn, but I know you said you don't like that site ;) ) here: http://www.twcslibrary.com/viewstory.php?sid=2521&chapter=10 You should get on twitter more often, too! I'd love to hear from you more! :D

Anyway, once again, thank you so much for reviewing! I still can't believe how much thought you put into this review... seriously, wow!!

Please keep updating here!

Anyway, great chap... the imprinting bombshell was great, Sam seems far from impressed with that revelation.

Keep up the great work, I love this story.

Author's Response:

Don't worry, after giving it some thought, I've decided to go ahead and keep uploading chapters here. The next one is in the queue right now, but just so you know, you can read it already on FFn and TWCSL:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5425401/10/To_the_Wolves

http://www.twcslibrary.com/viewstory.php?sid=2521&chapter=10

Anyway, thanks for the review! Glad you liked the little twist on imprinting... I've been waiting to drop that one on yall from the very beginning! :D

Man Jake...always the damn martyr. I appreciated the arrival of my other favorite wolfies <3! Whew... just in time... I'm hopefully that Ren has some useful power up her sleeve that she was able to fend off James with...but probably not, huh? that would be too convenient. 

Author's Response:

Lol. He can't help it, he's in loooove! :D

Glad you liked Embry, Quil, and Seth's intros. I've been waiting to get them involved for ages! They are so much fun to write, heheh ;)

Hm, well... the vampires in this story gain their powers (strength & speed, as well as mental/"magical" powers) from consuming flesh and blood. So, as a strict vegetarian, no, Nessie has never been anything more than human. But then... James was killed somehow. I guess how exactly is the question now ;)

Thank you, again, for all your reviews! Seriously. I love them. :D

You dedicated the chapter to me?!?! How cool are you? Thanks, hon!

Normally I adore Sam. (I think it has something to do with Chaske Spencer and his deliciously deep voice...and his laugh...and smile...) You've succeeded in making me despise Sam. I loathe him. I hope all the other wolves go all mutiny on him and knock him on his royal butt. ;)

I was thinking this chapter was the one that had the incident we talked about on Twitter. Imagine my relief. But, I know it's coming. At least I know to expect it and it won't be a complete shock. It'll be easier that way, right?

I loved this chapter! I hope Jacob goes against Sam and sees Nessie anyway. He needs her - and she needs him!

Author's Response:

Hee, you saw the dedication! Yay! :D I really was considering not even updating here anymore, before I talked to you... But now I'm glad I decided to keep on, hehe ;)

Um, Chaske Spencer? Hells yes.

This guy? Not so much. He may have once been the Sam we know and love, but he's older, and much, much more powerful here. Remember, he's a king, not just the leader of a raggedy group of boys. But just like in the canon, he's not about to give up that position easily ;)

Speaking of that twitter discussion... I feel I should let you know the next chapter is already online elsewhere. It in the queue here too, in case you want to keep reading on Twilighted, but it will probably be a week or two before it makes it through the line. So, if you haven't seen it already, and if you don't want to wait:

http://www.twcslibrary.com/viewstory.php?sid=2521&chapter=10

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5425401/10/To_the_Wolves

Enjoy ;)

Whew! I love to dance with Jacob...he could totally be half naked at my party though! Yum.

You did really well with all of the emotion in this chapter and it flowed really well. I think you've gotten more comfortable with the characters.

Micro-pigs...wow...I was thinking NO FREAKING WAY...but there ya go...I had pot belly pigs in my head. Though I am a huge fan of bacon. I'm appreciating the play you have on vegetarianism too, it's a nice touch :)

Author's Response:

Bahaha! Don't worry, he's going to be at least half-naked the whole rest of the fic! lol! ;D

Thank you! Man, looking back at these older chapters almost makes me cringe. Not because I think they're really that bad, but because I am definitely a lot more in tune with the characters than when I started out. And, yeah, every chapter could always be better. Maybe I'll come back and rewrite all of this someday, lol ;)

And yes, micro-pigs. They cost a fortune, but I totally want one, even though I love bacon. In fact, I would probably have it sitting next to me while I ate bacon, just for the lulz. ;D

Thanks for all the reviews! :D

ahhhhhhhhhhh

ugh, not liking sam or his plan, i dont think it will fair well for young nessie. he's hiding something

Author's Response:

Hee, thanks for reviewing! :D

Sam is not the most likable guy right now, is he? Unfortunately, he's even less likable in the next chapter... Which, btw, is already online, on both of these sites:

http://www.twcslibrary.com/viewstory.php?sid=2521&chapter=10

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5425401/10/To_the_Wolves

It's in the validation queue here too, so it'll be up on Twilighted eventually if you want to keep reading here, but probably not for another week or two. So if you don't want to wait... ;)

Thanks again for the review! :D