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Reviewer: mcamastow (Signed) · Date: January 21, 2010 05:45 PM · On: Bella's Bed
th8s was areally hard chapter to read the confusion in Edwards mind is understanaable but he should not of goneto forks anbd what he did with Emma ws wrong his motive wa not right.
Reviewer: Topazlover (Signed) · Date: January 21, 2010 05:38 PM · On: Too Dirrrty To Clean My Act Up
"Ever shower with a guy? When you’re done, your breasts are the cleanest they’ve ever been in your life." ~twighlit
Haha I managed to laugh so hard I tumbled out of my computer chair, I said the same thing to my fiance not too long ago. Omg that was priceless! I am loving your story!
Author's Response: hahahahaha. i wish i could take full credit, but i cannot tell a lie. its adapted from a sarah silverman standup called "Jesus is Magic" and i just spun it a little. but im so glad youre enjoying!
Reviewer: Bruiser (Signed) · Date: January 21, 2010 05:30 PM · On: Bella's Bed
Aww, I'm so sorry you're blue! I have to admit that the chapter called "Evolve...O" wrenched my heart and I was nervous to read again...but I LOVE the way you write! You can take me wherever you want to go, Momma, I'm happy to come along for the ride.
I think it's sweet that Edward's stuck in this netherworld between Bella and Emma. It would be more heartbreaking if he'd gotten over Bella that easily. It's fun to watch you play out his emotions. (I'd rather Edward be tortured than Bella, lol! But I realize Bella would have as much pain as he would.)
Emma is still perfect - I love her. I hope (nah...I KNOW) she's strong enough to overcome whatever pain her mother and boyfriend can inflict. :-D
I trust you, Momma...give us all you got! I can't wait to see where this Volvo goes!
Author's Response: im so glad youre along for the ride.
buckle up, though, ive been drinking.
Reviewer: mjbabe58 (Signed) · Date: January 21, 2010 05:25 PM · On: Bella's Bed
few people un-favorited and expressed their extreme distaste for my story...
WHO?! Catherine's bout to get violent up in here! LITTLE, SICK BASTARDS! It better not break your heart that some stupid haters left a review on your story flaming off their idiotic thoughts... they are dumb.
Author's Response: hahahahahaha. you are so excellent. thank you for making me laugh, reviews like this keep me writing and remind me that im a little bit good at stuff.
Reviewer: jsjohnson73 (Signed) · Date: January 21, 2010 05:04 PM · On: Bella's Bed
I have to admit that this story disturbs me. It actually really makes my heart hurt. How could Edward do this? I realize we can't really control who we fall in love with, but Bella's daughter?!?!? That is just wrong. And the line "I was unsure who I had just made love to?" Oh my gosh. Edward has some serious issues. I really think he needs to see a professional. He has plenty of money. Let's send him to counseling!
Author's Response: hahaha how do you think a psychologist would respond to his plight? i love a girl when we were both 17... now, shes 40 and im still 17 and i love her 16 year old daughter...? poor vamps dont get any of the benefits of the modern world and they cant even take a valium.
Reviewer: justcurious (Signed) · Date: January 21, 2010 05:04 PM · On: Bella's Bed
i am actually very happy with edward struggling....he should be as he shouldnt just quit loving bella caus he found emma...he shoulda slipped bellas name! kudos 2 you, well done
Author's Response: lol a few people have said that he should have said her name. and thank you, i think our boy needed to suffer a little too.
Reviewer: lilac17 (Signed) · Date: January 21, 2010 04:58 PM · On: Evolve... O
Oh pretty please not Edward and Bella! Emma and Edward should be together!
Author's Response: that makes my heart smile. im glad you said it.
Reviewer: uhsarah (Signed) · Date: January 21, 2010 04:30 PM · On: Bella's Bed
I dont like emma at all. Edward should slip up and say bellas name and edward and bella hook up
Author's Response: unlikey. not impossible, but unlikely. i like emma. she's cast in my own image, so i sort of have to :)
Reviewer: DreaC (Signed) · Date: January 21, 2010 04:23 PM · On: Bella's Bed
omg edward, get a grip on freaking reality! First Bella doesn't know if she can go home to Jake and now Edward is fucking Emma and thinking of Bella. These two are making me angry. It was 22 years ago, it's over, they are different poeple now. I don't know if I like where this is going... please no Bella/Edward crap. It seems to follow me wherever I go lol. I want to read a Bella/Jake they bait me and then the switcharoo, Bella uses Jake and falls for Edward...again. This can't be please. I absolutely hate stories where Jake gets screwed over. I was beginning to like Edward, but you've brought out the completely annoying, whiney, Edward that I hate.
I'm gonna stick with you, b/c you are an awesome writer. I'm not going anywhere or unfavoriting...unless Edward and Bella go running off into the sunlight happily ever after lol
Author's Response: listen baby... its gonna hurt for a while. but you have to trust me... momma knows best :)
Reviewer: KeiraEveMacDonnell (Signed) · Date: January 21, 2010 04:22 PM · On: Blurry
I would think that she would have told her mom something about this guy she had met by now, but I guess I could be wrong.
Reviewer: pdxamy (Signed) · Date: January 21, 2010 04:08 PM · On: Bella's Bed
I hope it was Bella! I hope Emma imprints on some highschool boy and soon. As a mother Edward sexing up Bellas spawn is creeping me out
Reviewer: Rosalyn Burrows (Signed) · Date: January 21, 2010 03:56 PM · On: Bella's Bed
This is fantastic! I missed a class, so I could finish reading it all of this story in one sitting! (God... how pathetic...addicted to Twilight fan fic...) At first I didn't know what to make of the concept behind this, but after all, as you pointed out, there was the whole Jake and Reneesme thing. I'm really surprised by how much I LOVE this story-line! The characters are believable and achingly real. I've been laughing so hard at Emma's verbal vomit and touched by Edward finding an equal that he can enjoy and laugh with. And the scenes with Bella, oh god... Her closing speech before leaving the Cullens broke my heart like a knife in my chest and was EXACTLY what Bella would be like in that situation. This is so fantastically awesome and honest to these characters development if they had been in this situation. I'm dying to know what happens next. This chapter was so painful and strange and emotionally charged. You write Edward's point of view bizarrely well. I wish the whole thing was completed, so I could finish it and have some closure! lol! Thank you so much for these wonderful chapters, re-inventions of SM's characters, and crazy-awesome plot. Keep up the great work : ) (P.S. Loved the TrueBlood reference! Bill and Eric rock my toe-socks)
Author's Response: thank you times one million. this really made me smile... especially the part about writing edward well, i often have a hard time in his head and im glad i was able to get it right.
oh and id sell my soul for eric northman ;)
Reviewer: mmeyer323 (Signed) · Date: January 21, 2010 03:55 PM · On: Bella's Bed
OMG OMG OMG........hmmm very interesting. I liked it. At this point, I'd love to go to the last chapter and see how it comes out......I can't wait for another update.
Author's Response: haha i wish i could see the last chapter too... in the i wish it would get out of my shitty head and onto the page. no such luck yet, but ill keep you posted.
Reviewer: killeen (Signed) · Date: January 21, 2010 03:54 PM · On: Bella's Bed
I'm sorry to hear that people didn't like your story. There's no accounting for the poor taste of the general public - have you ever been to Wal-Mart? Yea, I rest my case. Damn the man, save the empire. :) Love the story!
Author's Response: HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA. marry me?
thank you.
Reviewer: clumsy like bella (Signed) · Date: January 21, 2010 03:54 PM · On: Bella's Bed
Ok I'm not sure this review will make a huge amount of sense so apologies in advance...
Prior to this chapter, I was getting quite upset with this story but found I couldn't stop reading it - I totally bought into SM's Edward and Bella, as unlikely and unrealistic as they are (gotta get a healthy dose of fantasy from somewhere) and don't usually read non-canon pairings.
I was weirdly intrigued by your story though, and the quality and character of your writing kept on reeling me back! And with this chapter, I'm hugely relieved that your Edward isn't a complete tool and seeing Bella again is affecting him
Wherever you decide to take this, I'm going to be reading till the end. Thanks for writing something so interesting to read!
Author's Response: its turning out that i get a lot of that... people love to hate me and hate to love me and theyre caught somewhere in the purgatory therein. ill do my best not to disappoint you.
Reviewer: KeiraEveMacDonnell (Signed) · Date: January 21, 2010 03:52 PM · On: If music be the food of love, play on.
I love the Wayne's World reference, that was excellent! My heart broke for him when she played the lullaby.
Reviewer: ddot (Signed) · Date: January 21, 2010 03:38 PM · On: Scented.
btw miss author
This is a horrible comparison but this story is like an abusive relationship haha...I keep getting beat up but I come back for more cuz it's so interesting and I can't wait to see where you go...don't kill me though LOL.
personally I hope edward rots in hell hahaha...i want emma to imprint on someone else, and i don't want him to get back with bella...i just want him to rot...indeed haha. *evil laughter*
But as a word of encouragement, I know it's easier to look at the negative reviews and let it eat at your passion...but how come the positive ones don't do the opposite and build your passion up? There are alot of people that love the story, please let the good reviews combat against the bad ones and build up your vigor and passion for the telling of this story. Don't give a bad review power by saying if a person doesn't stop with the bad reviews that you fear you won't finish the story. Come on, and be encouraged!!! :) lol Update soon :)
Reviewer: BellaCarolina (Anonymous) · Date: January 21, 2010 03:29 PM · On: Bella's Bed
I find this interesting. There is a reason it's AU, becasue it IS! I understand why people don't like it, heck, I don't like the situation, but that's part of what I love about it, it doesn't fit in the reality of the cookie-cutter wrealm many people associate Twilight with when they write FAnFic. This isn't SM's Edward, or my Edward, this is your Edward. Bella isn't Bella, Alice isn't Alice, but all things are redeemable- you're just gutsy enough to bring it all to the cliff of irredeemable. I know why people are upset, but you kind of have to put your shoe on the other foot to enjoy this- do it and you will, it's an enjoyable anguish, it's very human and physcological. I like the different playing fields and I like the Mind-screwery.
Author's Response: hallelujah, baby girl. thanks for getting it and me. youre great.
Reviewer: ddot (Signed) · Date: January 21, 2010 03:09 PM · On: Bella's Bed
WHOA
I DIDN'T EVEN THINK OF IMPRINTING...NO EMMA HASN'T IMPRINTED ON EDWARD...oh shoot....but neither did jacob imprint on bella...
lol if emma imprints on someone else...serves edward right.
Author's Response: lots of people have been saying that. my edward, evidently, is something of a doucher. sucks for him!
Reviewer: Laine Quinn (Signed) · Date: January 21, 2010 03:08 PM · On: Bella's Bed
I've been reading this story since the beginning. I loved it until you brought Bella and Edward back in the same space. Both are hurting and lashing out at each other. However much I'm not sure I'm fully behind the direction you have taken this, I can't seem to stop reading it. Keep writing becasue you are insightful and enthralling. Thanks.
Author's Response: insightful and enthralling? thank you. its more than i deserve, but thank you. im not sure im fully behind the direction right now either but its something that i think has to be done for the story. i THINK. i could be wrong, of course, and i usually am but im going with my gut on this one. stick with me, you may be surprised :)
Reviewer: stfne (Signed) · Date: January 21, 2010 03:00 PM · On: Bella's Bed
Wow, he thinks he can shag Bella out of his head. Glad he is struggling (but I do love him really!), I'm still team...Bedward lol! Has Emma even imprinted on Edward?
This is great, really different.
Author's Response: thank you, thank you. i know, i still like him too. i think i secretly made him so unlovable so everyone else will hate him and i can have him to myself.
Reviewer: Shonla (Signed) · Date: January 21, 2010 02:58 PM · On: Bella's Bed
Wow! Edward seemed so heartless to me and kinda like he didn't care about Bella at all. And now he's confused. That's good. How could he see Bella and not have those feelings come back. Even if he loves Emma more his feeling for Bella were pretty strong! He has a right to feel a little conflicted!
Author's Response: thats what i was trying to convey... the conflict. but im not so good at emotion so maybe it wasnt done well enough lol.
Reviewer: Rchx (Signed) · Date: January 21, 2010 02:47 PM · On: Bella's Bed
How can folk hate on this story! I loves it! (:
Author's Response: thanks pumpkin, i love you.
Reviewer: Laila Cullen (Signed) · Date: January 21, 2010 02:24 PM · On: Bella's Bed
Oh boy if this goes on he is going to lose Emma. I hope he will get his shit together soon.
Thanks for posting.
Author's Response: its gonna get worse before it gets better, love. buckle up.
Reviewer: fato_profugus (Signed) · Date: January 21, 2010 02:23 PM · On: Bella's Bed
sorry, but that's not even close to cutting it for the misery edward deserves. apparently, dragon's comment stirred the pot, and while i'm not going to drop this story from my faves (i suppose i have more tolerance for being pepertually pissed off by a fic or character), i find i have to agree with the majority of her comment.
first, edward climbing in the window to the same room and bed in which he perpetually expressed his love to the mother of the girl he admits he wants "to fuck," and then actually screwing her. very classy (never mention respectful), edward. second, "anxiety pinged through me. I was comically aware of whose bed this was. I was high off Bella’s scent." so mom made him high and he screws her daughter. surely i am not the only one who sees that this is just plain WRONG?
if dragon were to read this, and i am sure she will not, the only way i could defend this story would be to say that this character is simply not edward. it's the way i swallow what is so obviously straight up betrayal. sm's edward had morals and values; he was respectful and tried his damn best to be fair. likewise, later in the story we find out that the cullens only barely tolerated edward tearing them away from bella, and they certainly never knew that he did his best to destroy her on his way out. my conclusion is that all your cullens, edward included, are so far out of character as to be barely recognizable.
and i pity your bella and jake (who, in case your wondering, i never liked and i still feel sorry for) for they have one wretched teenage daughter.
*le sigh* i'm not holding out much hope for emma's reaction to finding out her fuckbuddy did his best to destroy her own mother; i gather from what you've written that i will be ridiculously disappointed by where her loyalties lie. we shall see.
Author's Response: i completely agree, my edward has no morals.
i'll let you in on a little secret... the author has none either ;)
in the future though, if you find you are disappointed with my story or characters, i simply ask that you stop following it, without telling me that you hate it. when i read stuff like that, my head gets in a bad way and i have a hard time writing... and this story is something that i want to finish, for me if for no one else. i swear i'm not being bitchy or facetious, i mean you no ill will or anything, i'm really making a legitimate request from one consumer of literature to another that you just unfavorite me and let my ship sink in peace.
it's important to me that i complete this story, and the bad juu-juu is a serious monkey on my back.
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