With all these cliffies you like to leave us with, I am sooo glad you update regularly!! I don't think I could wait a month or more without going nutty!!

If Jacob is pissed about sleep talking, I assume he is going to be livid when he finds out the reason for Bella's dreams.

Emma needs to give Edward a good ass-kickin for this clusterfuck he and Bella created for her.

Can't wait for the next update!!

 

To all the folks who are getting "creeped out" by the relationship stuff - IT'S FICTION, FOLKS!!!!! Purely FANTASY!!!!!

WOMAN!!!!!  You are so evil and you know it!!!!   Please please update soon.  I am dying here lol:)

Pretty good, you wrote Bella perfectly! That being said I'm worried about Emma, I feel like you might be going off the deep end with her character, like you're trying to proove to all those who doubt your mad storytelling skillz that you can make this story into whatever you please, starting with Em. Looking back at the first meeting of Emma I see a lot of difference from this chapter, she was outspoken, but didn't have Screw The World written on her forehead, she was mature, and set herself appart from the yuppie high school crowd, but she did believe in things, she didn't find all of existance to be repulsive and futile- read not worth her time. I feel like I'm loosing her origional playfulness and getting sarcasm and walls in return, that's my only problemo with this story, because I really love Emma too.

"There simply weren't words for how wrong this was."

acknowleging it is the first step ;)

Can't wait to see what's coming next!

Author's Response:

funny, after i read your comment, i reread the chapter from your POV to see if i could get a feel for what you meant about emma's attitude. i certainly didnt make a conscious change in the way i wrote her, but its a definite possibility that it filtered through my current animosity lol. are you brilliant or something?

also, this is sort of the way that i feel my personality is received (bc, if you havent guessed, emma is SO me it hurts but im trying to leave out the bad stuff that makes me terminally unlovable lol) in that people think im funny and edgy and cool in the beginning and after a while are like hey, cool out youre not that much better than everyone. hahaha weird how that works out. perhaps i should be in therapy.

thanks for reviewing!

Firs, let me congratulate you for this very interesting outline that explores possibilities I haven't seen explored before. I was intrigued from the beginning not so much as to where you'll take the story but more so about how you are going to take your characters there. I must say that you are doing a great job in being inventive and thoroughly creative. I only have one slight hesitation about the story - your characters sometimes struck me as very immature. Immaturity is fine with Bella's daughter, because she is immature by definition. But Edward and Bella and Jake and te cullens also sometimes struck me as extremely immature in their emotional reactions. So I was wandering, was this a concious decision  on your part or did the characters just come out like this along the way. Congrats for the story line though, very interesting and creative!

Author's Response:

im not sure if you read my bio, if so you might understand a little bit better. i have a really hard time writing actual and/or appropriate emotions. im sort of a stoic and im very rarely affected by things (some would say cold and incapable of love but thats just semantics) and im trying to... grow, shall we say, as a writer by exploring feelings that im otherwise very much unfamiliar with. dont get me wrong, im not like a sociopath or anything but im just very... detached by nature. im working on it. so youd be completely right in assessing many or all of my characters as emotionally immature or stunted haha, its not something im doing on purpose, in fact im trying very hard to steer myself away from it, but as a general rule, my comfort zone is humor and sex, and the mushy stuff is 6 feet over my head. but im trying :)

and thank you for the compliments, i appreciate them very much.

FUCK ME RUNNING UP A SNOWY HILL SIDEWAYS!!!!!!!! You are evil, and clearly you must be destroyed.

Come on, seriously??? Why not just give the poor dear a massive paper cut and then knock her into a vat of lemon juice? Wow. My mental penis is so rock hard, baby.

I'm random, I'm weird. I love your story. Update or I will cry like a whiny little bitch. I many re-read and re-review (seriously, how lame am I?) just to nag you...

PS: Jake is super bad-ass! LOL I screamed as I read it, literally. My pet bunny (no joke, live dwarf rabbit) was sleeping on my chest as I was reading and I actually scared the shit out of her. Thank God I wasn't holding an elephant. LOL

Author's Response:

well i TOLD you i was an epic cunt.

so glad to hear about your brain-dick! and loving your random weirdness (clearly we dont judge here... have you seen the shit i come up with?)

ive been trying to work jake in a little bit more, im glad you liked him :)

My moody, broody heart starts fluttering and I get all panty when I see you've updated.  I can't believe we're on chapter 20!  Seems like yesterday your little story was just a nubbin.

Thanks for making me laugh and clench and swoon all in the span of 20 minutes (guess pork fat does funny things to a woman, too.)  I have no idea how you're gonna pull these three folks together without breaking them all.  :-D  Or maybe they WILL all be broken...whatever you decide I'm there with ya, Babe.  I just appreciate that you let me tag along. 

Author's Response:

hahahaha thanks for backing me and my nubbin up. and were happy to have you along for the ride.

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Okay, I know I already submitted a review, but I just had a very interesting thought.  Emma wouldn't be menstruating anymore due to her body not changing (as told by Leah in Breaking Dawn) but she wouldn't know that because Jake never knew that.  Is she going to think she's pregnant, but then find out the hard way that she can't be?

That was so good!  I have to admit that I didn't guess before the chapter, but I did guess before you revealed it.  As soon as Jake was moody, I went, "Bella talked in her sleep."  And then as soon as Emma saw the bookcase, I went, "She's gonna find the pictures."  I thought Edward had taken them when he left, but since we never found out exactly what he did with them, it seems to be the author's perogative, although under the floorboards have been a popular choice.  Can't wait til the next update!

Author's Response:

ohh you make me so proud, picking up on my little clues :)

OMG. Well done!

yay! I want Bella + Edward back, PLEASE!!

Arghh DON`T DO THIS!! grrr ;)

Well you are evil! Atleast she hasn't phased yet :)

I cannot wait until the next chapter! SM should read this tbh, it's amazing. ;)

Author's Response:

hahahahahaha i dunno about that, it might make her mormon head explode. but thank you, thats a lovely compliment!