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Reviewer: pondering5 (Signed) · Date: September 25, 2008 01:38 PM · On: February 29, 2008
I absolutely love this! It's just as good as your other fanfic, Merger of Two Hearts (which I started reading first). You're a very talented writer and storyteller. Look forward to seeing more chapters!
Reviewer: ECyesplease (Signed) · Date: September 25, 2008 01:30 PM · On: March 22, 2008, part 2
Limona - Awesome chapter. Emmett's reaction to Bella's appearance was hilarious. And his comments about getting some later from Rosalie. The dinner conversation was awkward and perfect. Leave it to Edward to make everything okay. Then at the end when they were talking and drinking wine....it cracked me up when she blurted out that comment about being afraid to be seen in public with him. I can't wait for more! They are already falling for each other. I love it! :)
Author's Response: Thanks :) Emmett's reaction to Bella was important, since no one would know what Bella looks like from her own POV, since she doesn't find herself all that attractive. Glad you liked it!
Reviewer: wish_girl (Signed) · Date: September 25, 2008 01:20 PM · On: March 22, 2008, part 2
OMG I loved this! I wanted her to kiss him though! And I'm DYING to know now what Emmett said to Rosalie to get her to back off of poor Bella. Can't wait for the next bit!
Author's Response: You're the second person to ask what Emmett said to Rosalie... I will try and address it the next time Emmett's POV comes around. Or Rosalie's, if I ever decide to do her POV. Right now I am kind of just liking only have 3 POVs, though I confess there might be an Alice POV coming up. I went back and forth on Bella kissing Edward, and finally decided it was too soon. It's only been a few days!
Reviewer: barbarito (Signed) · Date: September 25, 2008 01:12 PM · On: March 22, 2008, part 2
LOVED the last chapter! Rosalie being her usual bitchy self and Emmett having to reign her in! Loved the interaction between Bella and Edward back at his house over the wine! Can we just say YUMMY!Love the sexual tension between the two of them! Wine my ass!! Wake up Bella!! You are totally into him!
Author's Response: Let poor Bella live in Denial for a little while, won't you? I've heard Denial is lovely this time of year.
Reviewer: EliseT29 (Signed) · Date: September 25, 2008 12:56 PM · On: March 22, 2008, part 2
Great chapter! I can't wait to see what happens next!
Author's Response: Thanks!
Reviewer: frumpy-v (Signed) · Date: September 25, 2008 12:48 PM · On: March 22, 2008, part 2
OHH she should have so kissed him! But I see why she didn't though... will we get Edward's reaction to her running up to her room?
Author's Response: Too early for kisses, it's only been a couple of days. In the name of moving things along, I believe chapter 5 skips to Monday. But we'll be getting Edward-heavy POV, and I am pretty sure he's still thinking a little about Saturday night when the next chapter starts.
Reviewer: Agnus Bimbal (Signed) · Date: September 25, 2008 12:15 PM · On: March 22, 2008, part 2
Was our Edward trying to get Bella drunk? If so that was extremely naughty of him. I was cracking up when she ran away. I have always loved Emmett and think you are doing a great job with his character. This is an exciting story that can go in so many different directions and I can't wait to see where you take us next.
Author's Response: I know you're going to think this is a little funny, b/c we didn't see Edward's POV... but Edward thinks Bella needs to loosen up. And everyone in his circle drinks wine socially, and he just can't comprehend that she doesn't drink it.
Reviewer: amyat (Signed) · Date: September 25, 2008 12:10 PM · On: March 22, 2008, part 2
Yet another awesome chapter. How they are going to keep the charade up is beyond me. It could lead to some rather funny situations. As well as his having money and her not. It can be rather uncomfortable when someone holds all of the power in a relationship, it should be interesting to see where Bella gets some power from, since it seems that Edward holds it all. Good job. Egarly awaiting the next one.
Author's Response: Interesting that you brought up the power issue. That comes up a little in the next chapter, and it will definitely play more of a role at the story continues. Thanks for reviewing.
Reviewer: Kas_Cullen (Signed) · Date: September 25, 2008 11:59 AM · On: March 22, 2008, part 2
I love this story and your writing is excellent. Can't wait to see where this goes!
Author's Response: Thanks!
Reviewer: Sheeijan (Signed) · Date: September 25, 2008 11:42 AM · On: March 22, 2008, part 2
This is a great, original storyline. I had a fun time reading this, can't wait to see what happens next.
Author's Response: Thanks!
Reviewer: Berta Baby (Signed) · Date: September 25, 2008 11:11 AM · On: March 22, 2008, part 2
I like this story.........it has alot of promise! Bella's personality seems a little weak, and I dont mean weak in the sence of the way it is written, but it doen't feel like she has a strong resolve. Someone that would be willing to testify, and go into hiding and risk everything to make a wrong a right, would seem to have a stronger sence of them selves. I know that to stay true to Bella's character she would be written with self doubt. This is just an observation, and I was wondering if you had plans to explain her a little more in detail? I do think that your doing a good job with this story, and you have me hooked. Thanks for writing.
Author's Response: I have Bella character study slated for Chapter 6... that's when it will get into why she's testifying and how everything is impacting her. Right now I think she is a little shell-shocked-- Edward's world is nothing like hers, and he is basically a stranger to her. Bella's character is, essentially, selfless. She is heedless of danger, but is still self-conscious. After chapter 6 goes up, if you still think she is OOC for this story, I would love to talk more about it.
Reviewer: Ambushed (Signed) · Date: September 25, 2008 11:03 AM · On: March 22, 2008, part 2
Almost squealed when I saw this update. this story is so fun to read. To see how they will fool the family and then how they will eventually get together. The best line was this "Yes, ladies and gentlemen, there would be sex tonight!" That was hilarious!
Author's Response: LOL, glad you liked that line. In fact, I'm delighted at the response Emmett has gotten so far in general. When I first planned this story, it was only going to be E & B's POVs. Emmett sort of snuck in there. Is snuck even a word? Oh well, it is now.
Reviewer: shwriteme (Signed) · Date: September 25, 2008 10:28 AM · On: March 22, 2008, part 2
What an interesting story--tangled web and all. There is so much potential here. It is creative and the possibilities are endless. It is impossible to guess where the story will go and that is so rare in fanfiction. Of course we expect a romance between Edward and Bella, but then you have the conflict with the Volturi and Emmett not wanting to let them get close and a jealous and possibly suspicious Rose and Bella is going to have a hard time fooling Alice for very long. The dynamics of the relationship are great. I love it. Would love to see some of Edward's POV at some point. Great stuff.
Author's Response: Thanks! Yes, there is big potential with this story, but it is also a little nerve-wracking. There are so many ways to go, what if I go ways that people don't like and everyone is sorry they bothered reading the story? Yes, I am paranoid like that. Here's hoping people continue to enjoy the story as more things happen. Edward's POV dominates most of the next chapter... I think that is why chapter 5 is being such a monkey. Edward is hard to write.
Reviewer: Ninapolitan (Signed) · Date: September 25, 2008 10:25 AM · On: March 22, 2008, part 2
It was a fantastic chapter, I love Emmett in your story. He has such a good heart, Rosalie being a bit of a shit is spot on as well.
I hate cliffhangers especially when they are good ones like this. Hmpfh. Maybe if you get enough reviews you'll take pity on us and post the next chapter sooner rather than later.
Fingers crossed :)
Author's Response: Glad you liked the chapter. I, too, have a soft spot for Emmett. I am going to try and iron out my first draft of chapter 5 tonight, but we'll see. I'm not feeling quite as sick as I was, but I am still throwing myself a pity party.
Reviewer: mscope (Signed) · Date: September 25, 2008 10:08 AM · On: March 22, 2008, part 2
Those two are going to fall in love ... he's already looking at her differently. I'm wondering how much Esme expects.
Author's Response: Esme is ready for a wedding. Or you mean you wonder how much Esme suspects? I don't think she suspects anything at this point. Edward always kind of did his own thing.
Reviewer: GinnyW (Signed) · Date: September 25, 2008 10:02 AM · On: March 22, 2008, part 2
Sure, sure, Bella. Blame it on the wine. :) Wonderful chapter. I laughed out loud more than once. And I know that this likely sounds odd, but I love that Rosalie instantly seems to hate Bella. It seems fitting for their relationship to begin that way. And here we saw that Edward isn't as much of an ass as he first appeared to be. His interaction with his neice was darling. I loved how protective Emmett is of Bella. That's just too damn sweet. And I'm dying for the next chapter. Just so you know. :)
Author's Response: Thanks! I was pretty edgy about this chapter. I can't tell you how many times I changed it and tweaked it. I was worried people would be mad that Rosalie wasn't immediately nice to Bella, so I'm glad that you liked her as she was. Just because she is one way with her husband and her kids doesn't mean she is that way with everyone. Hopefully I can get the ExB interaction in chapter 5 right sooner rather than later.
Reviewer: Belladonna75 (Signed) · Date: September 25, 2008 10:02 AM · On: March 22, 2008, part 2
whoa...that sucks. lol I'm thinking Edward's having some feelings there too. Even if he doesn't realize it. Great update!
Author's Response: Thanks! Edward is thawing a little. :)
Reviewer: red delicious (Signed) · Date: September 25, 2008 09:54 AM · On: March 22, 2008, part 2
Great chapter!
Author's Response: Thanks!
Reviewer: d2woodworth (Signed) · Date: September 25, 2008 09:50 AM · On: March 22, 2008, part 2
THis is great! I love it! Cant wait to read more!
Author's Response: Thanks!
Reviewer: DazzledMom (Signed) · Date: September 25, 2008 09:42 AM · On: March 22, 2008, part 2
I still cannot get enough of this story and it keeps getting better with each chapter! I hate to come to the end of each chapter and it always leaves me wanting more! Please keep up the good work and post as often as you can.
Author's Response: Thanks! I was really nervous that people wouldn't like this chapter.
Reviewer: marve (Signed) · Date: September 25, 2008 09:34 AM · On: March 22, 2008, part 2
Gah. Edward being good with kids makes my knees weak.
I love Bella having a crush on Emmett. It's cute!
Author's Response: Isn't is cute thinking of him with nieces?
Reviewer: ipunchedawerewolfintheface (Signed) · Date: September 24, 2008 11:49 PM · On: March 22, 2008
Okay, I'm intrigued. I love this fic idea. It's wonderfully original, and is full of all sorts of possible twists, turns, and otherwise awesome plot devices. I also love that I'm not quite sure where this is going to end up (I have a low tolerance for disgustingly predictable fics). I'm excited to see where you take this...it has wonderful potential. I would urge you to update quickly, but I'm sure many already have, and I'd much rather you take your time and be happy with it. I'll be waiting when you're ready. :D
Author's Response: I'm glad you find it unpredictable so far, hopefully it will stay that way. I'm writing this story somewhat unconventionally, in that I'm writing it in whatever order I feel like. So half of chapters 6 and 7 are written, pieces of 8, 9, and 10, are written, and the end (many chapters hence) is written. So I'm never sure when exactly things will be ready. Chapter 4 is pretty much done, but I just want to finish chapter 5 to make sure there isn't anything I want to change. Thanks for your review. :)
Reviewer: jackbauer (Signed) · Date: September 24, 2008 04:59 PM · On: March 22, 2008
Come on we can't wait till Sunday! Its exciting to read a story with different kind of plot.
Reviewer: Peachsilk (Signed) · Date: September 24, 2008 11:43 AM · On: March 22, 2008
What an interesting story - can't wait for the next chapter!
Reviewer: themoose-within (Signed) · Date: September 23, 2008 06:34 PM · On: March 22, 2008
Hey! So, this is my first official review with my new and larger than life account. Go figure, have fun with the priviledge. Great story, I love your style (a hard thing to come by in these realms) and very original idea, well written. It's not predictable, like so many are, because although we all *think* we know the outcome, at least we don't know what's going to happen along the way. Kudo's for all that. Update soon, and thanks for the read.
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! And I dearly hope my fic won't be predictable. Hopefully people will continue to enjoy it as it twists and turns.
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