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Reviewer: ECyesplease (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2008 04:44 PM · On: April 7 - April 11, 2008

I knew it was Alice!! I cannot belive that cliffhanger. Bella now has to tell Alice the truth or she has to tell Edward about her 'lose my virginity' plan. Anyone would understand that. I do. And as much as I want Edward and Bella together it doesn't bother me that she chose Jake.  She trusts him, there is no way she would ask Edward to do her that kind of favor. Great chapter Limona! Looking forward to Sunday! :)

Author's Response:

You were totally right. You were the first one to guess it right.

And thanks for liking this chapter... I did work hard on it, even if most people disliked it. 

Reviewer: wants_an_edward86 (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2008 04:41 PM · On: April 7 - April 11, 2008

I understood that this chapter had to be posted, even tho i completely do not agree with her trying to have sex with Jake appropriate...she should wait to get drunk off wine with Edward and make her move than.

i am tho DYING to read the teaser and the next chapter...i wrote more on the forum of how i really felt, haha

Reviewer: jilburfm (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2008 04:33 PM · On: April 7 - April 11, 2008

Holy crap balls! 

Kudos to Bella for saying to heck with it and going for it with Jake.  I would have done the same thing:-)  But to go for it in Edward's house???  Oh Bella... this isn't going to end well...

Reviewer: Lady Saffir (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2008 04:19 PM · On: April 7 - April 11, 2008

Ouch.  I'm sure there will be quite the scene when Edward gets home.  Does Bella explain why exactly this was happening?  Please post soon!

Author's Response: Aw, I can't answer that. But I will post chapter 8 as soon as I can.

Reviewer: Agnus Bimbal (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2008 04:15 PM · On: April 7 - April 11, 2008

I don't even know what to say about this chapter.  I liked the list idea, but I have mentally taken Jacob to the vets office and have scheduled him to be neutered!!

Alice and Bella how sad :(

Author's Response: Your neuter comment made me laugh. I'm not sure what that says about me. This story will not end tragically because I am kind of a sucker for a happy ending, so keep that in mind.

Reviewer: OCD_indeed (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2008 04:07 PM · On: April 7 - April 11, 2008

Up to date now!

I left my love on your thread, but DAMN girl this is a great story!  You have captured the characters essence from the books.  (that sound corny, but I don't know how else to word it.)

I love it!  I am so happy -le jen- recommended your story!  I can't wait to see how it all pans out.

Getting caught kissing TOTALLY through m for a loop!  Never saw that coming!

Reviewer: Chupacabra (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2008 03:55 PM · On: April 7 - April 11, 2008

So, I think that Bella's decision with Jake is perfect.

Some people might call it "out of character" for her to want to have sex in Edward's house, after everything he's done, but...

It's realistic- AND I LOVE IT. Outside of fanfic world, people are dynamic. They don't act the same all the time. They are spontaneous. Especially when they live in a pressure cooker like Bella is. SO GO YOU.

Author's Response: Bless you. I will frame this revivew.

Reviewer: nofangsallowed (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2008 03:52 PM · On: April 7 - April 11, 2008

How could you?  OMG!  I cannot stand Jake, and this could so screw up things between Bella and Edward!  I'm so upset with you.  You should update soon and make this right!

Reviewer: jackbauer (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2008 03:44 PM · On: April 7 - April 11, 2008

oh my goodness.  this is crazy.  stupid man whore Jacob. 

Reviewer: lucky_chica85 (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2008 03:40 PM · On: April 7 - April 11, 2008

This chapter was amazing! I am so glad that Jake isn't an asshole in this story. I am shocked by the ending, but I still loved it... This is going to be very interesting. I wonder how long until Alice finds out about Bella... Edward is going to be pissed, but hopefully he will see what he is missing and fight for her... I have a feeling Jake is going to be fired :( Keep updating... this is my favorite story I'm currently reading!!! :) 

Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing :)

Yes, Edward will be pissed. He comes back next chapter. 

Reviewer: gallantcorkscrews (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2008 03:39 PM · On: April 7 - April 11, 2008

so, who went to their computer when they woke up cause they knew there would be an update? yeah, i know. PATHETIC. anyway.

"what if i die after meeting the love of my life? i hate to force that sort of wish on hypothetical him"

bella's wish to lose her virginity- so realistic.

the buildup to the incident with jake was great. very convincing, didn't feel contrived at all. sometimes, you can tell writers just want something to happen and throw it in there. you made this work. it was beautiful.

i am not mad at bella at all. this is a horrible situation for her to be in. AND I LOVE EDWARD and usually hiss when i see jake. now, i'm mad at alice for calling her a slut. she better learn that bella's a witness. GOOD SHOW.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review. After all the reviews telling me Bella is OOC, I'm grateful you thought I built it up okay. This chapter will definitely make the next chapters more interesting, so hopefully people will realize that at some point.

Reviewer: jbluvs2sing (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2008 03:34 PM · On: April 7 - April 11, 2008

Bella is soooo stupid! Oh my goodness! Cliffy isn't even a strong enough word to describe what this was!

Reviewer: kam11 (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2008 03:34 PM · On: April 7 - April 11, 2008

Ooooohhhh, Bella is in trouble now! I cannot wait to read Edward's reaction. Is he gonna be all "what about the reputation" or "how could you do this to me?!" or both.

Reviewer: twilightgab (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2008 03:30 PM · On: April 7 - April 11, 2008

PLEASE TELL US THIS IS A DREAM!!!! YOUR KILL ME HERE!!! I LOVE YOUR STORY TO MUCH! FOR THE: HEY LETS JUST CROSS MY "V" off this list in the house of the guy thats been more then helpful keeping me alive!!!! because i just can't see Bella doing that!! sorry!!!! I DO LOVE THIS STORY!!!! BUT COME ON!!!

Reviewer: -le jen- (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2008 03:23 PM · On: April 7 - April 11, 2008

I love the kissing.

And good lord.


I didn't know that it would be taken that far dude.

like if Alice didn't walk in. Holy fack.


Christina. <3



Author's Response: Hey, if you're gonna do something, you can't do it by halves.

Reviewer: spiky_black_do (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2008 03:08 PM · On: April 7 - April 11, 2008

what are you doing!!!


okay, i love you for giving us this story but please explain this properly soon...


i only have so much faith in this...


big fan hanging on a by just a thread X

Author's Response: Edward will be back in the next chapter. Hopefully you'll enjoy that more.

Reviewer: YouAreNotLeavingMe (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2008 03:06 PM · On: April 7 - April 11, 2008

OH MY FREAKING GOD! Gah! I just NEED to know what happens next. And this is really awesome, love it to no end. Please Please Please update sooooon! Pleasse!!



Reviewer: erinmiyu (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2008 03:01 PM · On: February 29, 2008

ohnoes! on the edge of my seat for the next update!

Reviewer: Dramatic (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2008 02:54 PM · On: April 7 - April 11, 2008


I just wanted to say that I'm loving this story!Great concept!

I find Alice to be a tad mean though, not just in this chapter but the others as well. I supose it could be because shes pregnant, lol, i know women arent themseleves in that condition. I guess I'll give her a pass on this one, I'm just very protective of Bella! I know that once she finds out why Bella was with Jacob she'll be different. I love the way your writing Edward to, so hot and incontrol!

So keep up the good work!I look forward to reading the next chapter! Thanks :)

Author's Response: Alice would obviously be a LOT nicer if she knew Bella's real back story. Right now she feels like Edward rescued Bella from a bad situation (abusive, stalking ex-boyfriend) and Bella is repaying him by making out with the gardener while he's away. Remember, Alice thinks Edward loves Bella.

Reviewer: dawntwilight000 (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2008 02:38 PM · On: April 7 - April 11, 2008

I hate cliffies! I can't wait for the update. This story is so good and well written. Thank you!

Reviewer: wmlaw (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2008 02:15 PM · On: April 7 - April 11, 2008

Uh ho!! Stupid Jake!!! He ruins all the fun!

Reviewer: Kelly (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2008 02:07 PM · On: April 7 - April 11, 2008

Ahhh, I'm so torn.  Yes, Jake is helping her heal and live a little, but Edward is, well Edward.  I'm glad she and Jake didn't hit the ole home run.  Geesh!  Alice needs to know the whole story.  Bella needs a femaie confedant. :)

Great story, can't wait for more!

Author's Response: Yes, she does need a female confidant.

Reviewer: helena_handbasket (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2008 02:06 PM · On: April 7 - April 11, 2008

Oh no.  Bad, stupid Bella.

Reviewer: twijinx (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2008 02:00 PM · On: April 7 - April 11, 2008

I have enjoyed this story...until this chapter.  And it doesn't have to do with Jacob, though I admit to not being a big fan of the character - either in the books or in practically every fanfiction I've read.  It is more that you didn't really sell Bella's motivation for deciding to get busy with him.  I went from feeling sorry for Bella, to hoping that Edward throws her ass out.  And seriously "This isn't what you think"?  Unless they weren't just about to help Bella cross off "lose my virginity" off her list, then was exactly what Alice was thinking.

Reviewer: marve (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2008 01:51 PM · On: April 7 - April 11, 2008

Oh noes!  Poor Alice!  And poor Bella! 


This is where Edward comes back and they fall in love right?  Because I want that.

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