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Reviewer: amandasaurus (Signed) · Date: November 19, 2008 12:30 AM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008
Oh... My... GOD! I was so sure that it was going to be all awkward after how cold they were to each other, and the drinking and the nervousness, but wow! You did fantastic! The best part was that you made him Edward the MAN not Edward the BOY like a lot of stories make him. Favorite part was the last part. Loved it! Only one request. Any more Volturi actions/warnings/scares? I really would love to see that. I'll probably be frantically checking every day to see if you've updated and my day will always be ruined when I see you haven't updated... *hint hint*
Author's Response: Edward is 29 in this story. I tried very hard to make him manly, and I'm glad you saw him that way. Emmett is up next, so we will hear more about what is happening on the trial front.
Reviewer: LoveEqualsEDWARD (Signed) · Date: November 19, 2008 12:19 AM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008
Oooh, the anticipation for the secks scene was almost as good as the actual secksin. I must say that your description of the awkwardness of a first encounter was very well done. I loved how Edward was Bella's teacher in addition to her lover, but of course, the best part was the end when he admitted to watching her strip before entering the tub.
Author's Response: I was striving for awkward but sweet. Not sure how close I made it, but I definitely seem to have nailed awkward. I don't see how it could have been unawkard, though, given the givens. Glad you liked it.
Reviewer: elana (Signed) · Date: November 19, 2008 12:11 AM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008
Great one! The best lines? "Edward?" "Yes, Bella?" "Did you really close your eyes when I stepped out of my robe?" "No." Now....more drama...
Reviewer: xsecretxkeeperx (Signed) · Date: November 19, 2008 12:11 AM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008
I really really liked that! I was afraid it was going to be ackward city and then they started drinking and I was like no! They are going to regret it even more than they should if they are drunk(ps. I don;t want them to regret it.)! I thought it was very nicely done! So does Edward still think that Jake and Bella went behind his back? I hope it gets cleared up soon if he does. I love the way you are handling all of the characters. Very realistic. Again, a fantastic chapter! I can't wait for more!
Author's Response: We don't know what Edward thinks yet. :)
Reviewer: red delicious (Signed) · Date: November 19, 2008 12:09 AM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008
This chapter was SO awesome!! I LOVED it! So hot :) Thank you thank you thank you for the double chapter and for not leaving us hanging without any sexin'. Your fan, ~L
Reviewer: lobsters4ever (Signed) · Date: November 19, 2008 12:07 AM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008
First, thanks so much for the update!! (I actually squealed when I saw this chapter was finally up.) :) Second, so wow -- so many questions! Setting a date, hmmm? Didn't see the Jake thing coming? Why does Edward have to become so distant? Can't he and Bella just talk? Also, I LOVED that she hid her bra and panties in her dress! Brilliant! (i do that at the dr office) ;) And then she thinks, I may have been a little tipsy, but my logical skills were superlative -- and then walks into his closet...GENIUS!! Great love scene and I CAN'T wait to see where is story goes next. Possible Edward's POV!! (please) :);)
Author's Response: there is a possibility of some EPOV, but I think it will be Emmett's POV.
Reviewer: Tima83 (Signed) · Date: November 18, 2008 11:59 PM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008
fantastic as always! I'm hungry for more!
Reviewer: NicoleRea (Signed) · Date: November 18, 2008 11:58 PM · On: February 29, 2008
Can't wait to see what happens next!
Reviewer: ipunchedawerewolfintheface (Signed) · Date: November 18, 2008 11:52 PM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008
Oh yay! Ohyayohyayohyayohyay!!! This chapter had me up and down on a roller coaster! I felt sad and annoyed when Edward kept avoiding Bella again, but that last night made up for it. What a way to lose your virginity! Le sigh. It was wonderfully written and wasn't gratuitous. Not that I mind gratuitous sex or anything ;) but you made it feel like it was so much more than just a deal they struck (and I'm definitely hoping it really was so much more!). It was...tasteful, I think is the word I'm looking for. Very well done. But oh, they still have issues they need to hash out. They make quite a pair, both avoiding each other when it's clear that things need to be discussed... Great job! I love this story more and more with each chapter you crank out. *internethugs*
Reviewer: KacS (Signed) · Date: November 18, 2008 11:50 PM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008
Best. Sex scene. Ever. I mean that. I don't know why. Just perfect.
Reviewer: crf720 (Signed) · Date: November 18, 2008 11:49 PM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008
already ready for the next chapter!!!!! =) LOVE it!
Reviewer: espeinaz (Signed) · Date: November 18, 2008 11:43 PM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008
Loved it loved it loved it! That was awesome!
Reviewer: Goodygurl (Signed) · Date: November 18, 2008 11:40 PM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008
That was kinda funny! I liked this story! Update soon!!
Reviewer: themoose-within (Signed) · Date: November 18, 2008 11:36 PM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008
AAAAAH! Finally! I kind of thought you'd torture us more, and Edward would back out or something like that. I'm so glad he didn't ^^ Love love love the double chapter. I felt like squealing when I read that. What a great start to the week.
Reviewer: Kdb9mm (Signed) · Date: November 18, 2008 11:36 PM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008
Oh this was perfect, I loved it!! I was hoping that Bella would tell Edward that he was being rude when he told his parents about hers being dead. I can't wait for the next chapter!!!!
Reviewer: kristyn926 (Signed) · Date: November 18, 2008 11:29 PM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008
i loved it!
Reviewer: melferd (Signed) · Date: November 18, 2008 11:27 PM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008
That was the perfect way to end that scene. "Did you keep your eyes shut?" Hee!! He's a man, sweetie, of course he didn't!! Even perfect Vamp!Eddie would have looked!! Awesomely well done, thanks for the more!
Reviewer: Morrigan728 (Anonymous) · Date: November 18, 2008 11:24 PM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008
MAAAHHVELOUS Darling!! PERFECTION!
Reviewer: metronomeradio (Signed) · Date: November 18, 2008 11:22 PM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008
I absolutely love this fic. Your writing, your pacing, is pitch perfect.
Reviewer: jacqueline3508 (Signed) · Date: November 18, 2008 11:22 PM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008
Your lemon was just right now i am hot and bothered.
Reviewer: sahara512 (Signed) · Date: November 18, 2008 11:21 PM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008
I LOVED it! This was fantastic--each chapter just keeps getting better and better. I'm so intrigued to see what happens next. You totally keep me guessing. Great job!
Reviewer: nofangsallowed (Signed) · Date: November 18, 2008 11:20 PM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008
He was very good to her. I hope they get together now.
Reviewer: AmoreTwilight (Signed) · Date: November 18, 2008 11:12 PM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008
Oh, Oh, Oh...Limona...now that I have regained coherent thought and my hands have stopped shaking...I can write this review! Now that is a first time for a girl to remember! So thoughtful, sensitive, caring, loving! Edward was perfect...absolutely perfect and beautiful. That sex scene was the best! HOT! What a way to lose your virginity...so delicate and tender. All young men should read as a guide to first times for the woman. Loved the last few words they shared before going to sleep. Now they need to stop avoiding each other and really start talking and enjoying one another. I love WWEFD...very cute. Thank you for this extra long chapter. I enjoyed every word as I always do with your stories.
Author's Response: Yeah, well, I hope I didn't over-glamorize the virginity losing, but it is fiction, and it is Edward. So I tried to make it good. :)
Reviewer: sedrax (Signed) · Date: November 18, 2008 11:12 PM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008
hmmmm... that was certainly interesting. Not like most typical e/b first time sex scenes, but the awkwardness really worked. The fics where they have love at first sight, even when they are both human, and get together immediately can be quite hackneyed. Yours deffinetly isn't. Not only do you have an original angle, you throw in the tension and dynamics to make the relationship realistic.
Reviewer: kerri03nwc (Signed) · Date: November 18, 2008 11:11 PM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008
Oh, Edward is so bad! I wonder when Edward is going to bring up the Jake situation.
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