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Reviewer: IngenueFatale (Anonymous) · Date: November 29, 2008 10:11 PM · On: February 29, 2008

Oh that was horrible English on my part.  I meant he was putting a hold on the Edward/Bella love that I enjoy in the story.  Wow, you'd think for someone who works in publishing that I'd know how to write things out.  -facepalm-

Reviewer: Sheeijan (Signed) · Date: November 29, 2008 10:04 PM · On: April 27 - May 5, 2008

Hmm, I'm dying to know better what is going through Edward's head at this point.  He's like a freaking robot from Emmett's POV.  Even when he woke up from the morning after and it was his POV, he was more like concentrating on the moment and not thinking about anything else.  Of course Bella's POV is interesting too but I have a safe guess on what is going through her mind.  What with Edward being all business-like and all... honestly at this point Edward's feelings just don't seem that deep except for having inclinations of protectiveness. 

Author's Response: I'm going to try and fit in more Edward next chapter, but it will be tight because we're also going to have a Bella flashback to pick up more of her backstory.

Reviewer: dolphin62598 (Signed) · Date: November 29, 2008 09:58 PM · On: April 27 - May 5, 2008

Great chapter!!  I am glad Edward sort of admitted that he liked Bella!!  I have a feeling he's going to find a way to go to Portland with her!  Can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! You're right, we have not heard the end on the Portland issue between Emmett and Edward.

Reviewer: IngenueFatale (Anonymous) · Date: November 29, 2008 09:52 PM · On: April 27 - May 5, 2008

I understand Emmett's anger, but gah, he's putting a damper on my love of Edward and Bella in this story.  I find now fault in not having a hot tub scene (or anything else sexual) for the mere fact that I love how you're moving this forward.  I wonder what else Edward will attempt to help her with from her list and oh, I hope things will go as planned with the case!

Author's Response:

He's putting a damper on your love of Edward and Bella? Why? I'm not sure what you mean.

Thanks so much for reviewing. And I'm glad you're enjoying the plot moving forward (it had to start happening sometime!).  

Reviewer: EliseT29 (Signed) · Date: November 29, 2008 09:46 PM · On: April 27 - May 5, 2008

Great chapter! I can't wait to see what happens next!

I think I like the first banner better...

Author's Response:

lol, a lot of people do. This banner is going to be here for a little while because me a while. But I haven't necessarily retired the other one. I'm just trying this one on for a few chapters to see how I like it. 

Glad you enjoyed the chapter. :) 

Reviewer: GinnyW (Signed) · Date: November 29, 2008 09:44 PM · On: April 27 - May 5, 2008

GUH! I loved this!!! Edward is so completely smitten with her and she seems to be even more imbeded under his skin now than before. I can't help but wonder what's going through her head.

And loved, loved, loved Emmett. 

"Sweetheart, of course I miss them, they're pieces of my heart," I murmured against her neck. "But you, you're the reason my heart keeps beating."

And that line was pure gold. My favourite one from this chapter.

I can hardly wait for more. :)

Author's Response:

Thanks so much, Ginny. I was really worried that no one would like this one because it was the unlucky chapter to follow the hot tub scene.

And that line was a last minute addition. :)

As I wrote this chapter, I kept wishing I could stick in a Bella POV, but we'll catch up with her next chapter. 

Reviewer: lover32 (Signed) · Date: November 28, 2008 07:22 PM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008

great chapter. Can't wait to find out what happens next. =)

Reviewer: letsplaytwister (Signed) · Date: November 28, 2008 02:12 AM · On: February 29, 2008

please update soon ! i'm dying to know what happens next . : D

Reviewer: starcrossdlover (Signed) · Date: November 26, 2008 05:59 PM · On: February 29, 2008

i forgot to give a rating. but this story definitely deserves an A+, so here it is. ps. did i mention wow?

Reviewer: starcrossdlover (Signed) · Date: November 26, 2008 05:58 PM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008

um. yeah. more. pretty, pretty please. soon. if possible, of course :) this story is amazingly good and i am in awe at your talented writing :) great great great job!

Reviewer: starcrossdlover (Signed) · Date: November 26, 2008 03:23 PM · On: February 29, 2008

all i can say is....YAY! :)

Reviewer: Amers1980 (Signed) · Date: November 26, 2008 07:19 AM · On: February 29, 2008

So, being that I lurk.... A LOT I felt I had to come out and share with you my thoughts. (if you want them :) ) 

First, I love Edward. Yes he is a womanizer but I am sure there are reasons behind it. I dont think he woke up one day and said "Hey I think I will just sleep with every girl I meet". We really havent seen that deeply into Edward, there is a reason behind everything. I cant wait to see what that reason is. We know he has an attraction to Bella and I can only hope that he opens up to her.  Next, yes the boy runs, A LOT but she doesnt confront her feelings either and that is what makes them great, frustrating but great! I also dont think he told his parents or Alice all of those details to hurt Bella, but so they would have an understanding.  He seems to know that she needs someone and he cant give her the familial (i am not sure that is a word) that she so desperatly needs. Maybe he thinks Esme can give her that, and if she knows a little something about her it will help them all bond. I think Bella is so un-trusting due to the situation at hand that on some level she feels threatened by him telling them details. She is a private person, the Cullens are not! I think that is where you get so close to the book characters. Bella is Charlie, closed off and suffers in silence, the Cullen family shares everything.

 This story is beautifully written and I love your take on the two characters. It makes them human and real! I cant wait for the next part!

Author's Response:

I am so glad that you get that Bella is a "private" person... whereas the Cullens share most everything between each other. You put it very well. And no, we haven't seen all there is to see of Edward yet. I'm waffling on whether it is better to let it unfold through Bella's POV or put up Edward's POV. Also you are correct, he was not trying to hurt Bella. Nothing he does is geared toward hurting Bella. 

Thanks so much for reviewing.


Reviewer: lasrnr (Signed) · Date: November 26, 2008 07:12 AM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008

I really liked this story and I hope you continue updating as often as you have been. I cannot wait until it gets updated again. Hoping for more Edward and Bella moments!

Reviewer: HopelessRomantic (Signed) · Date: November 26, 2008 03:28 AM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008

I love the new banner! it's great. and I can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: tazotease (Signed) · Date: November 26, 2008 03:21 AM · On: February 29, 2008

Gawd. I can die happy. You made my day when I read this last chapter.

I loved your fresh take on everything B/E with the whole premise of your story, and you just upped the ante with that last bit.

LOOOOOVED IT. So hot. Yummy. Slurp. My long time fantasies about hot tubs just got gooier. Thanks much. 

I don't want to put any undue pressure on you, but I srsly CAN'T WAIT for the next tidbit of deliciousness. Even if there's not more sex for a little, that's fine. I really love all the characters and everything that you make them do. 


Author's Response: Thanks so much :)

Reviewer: TwilightFan2010 (Signed) · Date: November 26, 2008 01:44 AM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008

Love the new banner! R u gonna update soon? Is there gonna be a teaser???

 can't wait! love it too much!

Reviewer: Nashi (Signed) · Date: November 25, 2008 08:35 AM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008

Like the story, can't wait for them to accually deep with all their shit though. So many issues and denials, hiding from eachother; I hope they accaully talk at least a little after this.

Reviewer: jonquilemm (Signed) · Date: November 25, 2008 03:31 AM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008

This is a great story!  You've got a knack for the characters' voices for sure, and I love the plotline.  Can't wait for more!

Author's Response: thanks :)

Reviewer: Salanna (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2008 07:24 PM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008

Great job, definitively the best chapter so far! I'm absolutely fascinated by your version of Edward, I keep trying to get into his head but his thoughts remain hidden to me. Would you mind helping me out? Some Edward POV would be welcome!

The dinner scene, the hot tub and the sex were fantastic, it was hot and erotic and sensual, I think partly because none of them has admitted their feelings for each other and they expressed it through lovemaking instead. Nonetheless they have a long way to go before becoming a "real" couple.

Edward didn't actually tell Alice he was planning on having sex with Bella on Saturday, did he? I hope he just hinted on some romantic dinner or such, telling her would make him such a jerk!

Author's Response:

We may have EPOV next chapter. I am waffling.

Glad you enjoyed the hot tub scene-- I worked hard on that one. 

Um, no, Edward was not boasting to Alice about having sex, lol. He just said they had special plans. Alice assumed that meant sex. Edward was trying to make Alice feel better.

Reviewer: pandagirl1001 (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2008 12:57 AM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008

Wow! This chapter was so good I don't even know where to begin! First of all, the attraction at the very beginning with Bella only being able to focus on the fact that Edward's leg was touching hers was fabulous. I can totally see the characters you have created feeling such a strong pull for one another. I feel bad for Edward because he has no idea that he is hurting her feelings when he shares things from her real life with the people from her fake life. I can understand why Bella is upset, because to she doesn't want this imaginary world to take away from the real world that she used to live in, but I think if she's going to be mad at Edward for not respecting that then she at least needs to tell him to stop doing it. The poor guy is painfully unaware that she feels this way. Haha. I guess that's one of the issues they'll need to work on in the future.

Edward getting all touchy over Bella's gardener comment was funny. I get the feeling that he's really angry at himself because he doesn't want it to bother him and that's why he reacted so rudely. And then Jake kissed her...what are we going to do with him? The boy obviously has no respect for his boss. Haha. Just because Bella and Edward aren't really engaged doesn't mean that Jake can just kiss her after Edward fired him for doing just that. I feel like a close eye needs to be kept on Jake. People with broken hearts and bruised egos often do crazy things. I worry a little about that new job he has....

All of the errands that Edward sent Bella on were pretty funny. I'm sure if I had been sent out on such random and pointless errands I wouldn't be too happy about it, but it was funny to read about it. :-) The whole love scene was well done and I loved Edward's comment at the very end about not closing his eyes. LOL! He's so tricky. hehe.

Overall this chapter was wonderful. I loved it and I think you did an excellent job with portraying their human qualities throughout. I thought that the way they are having some major communication issues was perfect because technically they aren't even in a relationship. They don't know each other all that well and yet they have been put into this situation where they have to coexist and battle their attractions at the same time. I think the chapter was extraordinarily well written and it left me dying to read more. I hope you have a great thanksgiving and good luck with the next chapter!


Author's Response:

Thank you so much, Christy. I thought this chapter was one of my better efforts.

And yeah, Jake is 22 with little respect for his rich, very privileged boss. 

I'm glad you enjoyed the errands. I tried to think of ridiculously mundane things that it would seem silly for Edward to need someone to do. I don't think it occurred to Edward that Bella might climb on the table precariously, though.

Again, thanks for taking the time and the effort to review. I really appreciate it.

Happy Thanksgiving!


Reviewer: WheresMyEdward (Signed) · Date: November 23, 2008 09:13 PM · On: February 29, 2008

LOVE IT!!! So sweet! Can't wait for the next chap. When's it coming? it's been a week already :(

Author's Response:

It hasn't been a week. I didn't post chapter 11 until Tuesday. I'm a little behind since Thanksgiving is coming.

Reviewer: jdsk (Signed) · Date: November 23, 2008 09:12 PM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008

Um, yes.  This is very good.  Very good. 

Cannot form coherent thought. 

 Okay, perhaps I can.  I want her to explain the garden interaction with Jacob.  And I really want more interaction with them.- Edward and Bella that is.  Not Jake.  No more.  I want Edward to be more open with her.  Let her in just a bit.  He is so guarded- and she needs him.  He is the one that got her to sleep peacefully, and eat and laugh.  I want them to connect more - especially now that they slept together.  And I hope they fall into bed a lot more.  I just want more.   What can I say.  ;)

Author's Response:

Thank you for forming a coherent thought and reviewing. :)

Glad you liked the chapter! 

Reviewer: Fate_of_Gabriel (Signed) · Date: November 22, 2008 11:34 PM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008


Damn RL things delaying me from reading this chapter IMMEDIATELY!!!!!  Because...


 So, I totally thought, even during the fancy-schmancy dinner, that something was going to happen to delay teh sex!  I'm so happy it didn't because it was oh wow! good.  Sex (especially first-time sex) is so hard to write and yet it was believeable and yummy and just...enviable.  That's the word to describe this entire story.  Enviable. 

I certainly envy your ability to write at such a high, keeps me hooked level and still bring the hotness.

But what really is great about this chapter is that after they said Saturday is The Day of Sex, I kinda forgot because I was all kinds of wrapped up in the characterizations of Carlisle, Esme, Alice, Jake, and Edward being so moody and willing to tell ALICE that he and Bella were gonna do it on Saturday. 

I loved that part.  I would have thrown something at Edward and still I was like, hee hee.  Edward can't help but tell everybdoy he's gonna get LAID. 

Also, Edward not talking about the whole Jake incident = love.  I love how hard he fights not to care and yet he gets all pissy and refuses to come home. 

 Like in the movie (which I still haven't seen) his mood swings are giving Bella whiplash.  They are also giving me a case of the fangirls  :)

I know you were worried about this chapter, but it is amazing.  One of the best (yet).  And I can't even guess what's going to happen next because I don't care!  I'll enjoy it if they continue to sex each other over, if they have some horribly awkward convo, if they fight, even if they decide to hula naked to the beach boys.  I'm in this for the long haul, so thank you for writing it!

Author's Response:

A lot of people were surprised the sex happened. You, though, YOU should have known. Didn't I tell you? Maybe not. Or maybe you thought I chickened out.

You are the only person to think it was outrageous that Edward told Alice. And it was outrageous. Thank you for noticing.

Thank you, FoG, for your ever-so-thoughtful review.  

Reviewer: CarolinaBella (Signed) · Date: November 22, 2008 05:57 PM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008

I love this story!! and even more now that I found out that they are supposedly getting married on MY wedding date :)  I hope they go through with it!!!!

Author's Response:

So you were a June bride. :)

Glad you're enjoying the story!

Reviewer: alice_laughed (Signed) · Date: November 22, 2008 01:45 AM · On: February 29, 2008

well I'm hooked

Author's Response: thanks :)

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