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Reviewer: jilburfm (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2008 04:49 PM · On: April 27 - May 5, 2008

No hot tub scene... but I'll take a swimming lesson with Edward any day!

Author's Response: I'll keep that in mind. ;)

Reviewer: iheartnj (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2008 04:27 PM · On: April 27 - May 5, 2008

This story is a GLORIOUS TORTURE! Beautifully written... Any more words on my part would do this chapter an injustice!! But I LOVED IT!!!

Author's Response: Thank you.

Reviewer: starcrossdlover (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2008 02:51 PM · On: April 27 - May 5, 2008

aaahhh...i was so excited when i saw there was an update...i was literally hopping up and down in my chair! I love love LOVE it so much and I can't wait to read more. You are awesome! :)

Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you're loving the story! :)

Reviewer: eclipse13 (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2008 01:26 PM · On: April 27 - May 5, 2008

great chapter but i am a bit confused, did edward enjoy it or not?

Author's Response: He enjoyed it.

Reviewer: withthevampsofcourse (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2008 07:35 AM · On: April 27 - May 5, 2008

wonderful, as always.

Author's Response: thank you :)

Reviewer: mllesinistre (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2008 07:31 AM · On: April 27 - May 5, 2008

Ugh, I hate that it looks like nothing has changed between the two of them. It's almost as if the sex never even happened. These two can't communicate to save their lives. I'm mad at both of them. And I'm mad at Emmett as well. Sure Edward is a player but he doesn't know about Bella's bucket list so punching Edward was a little out of line.

Can't wait for more!

Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing :)

And the sex definitely happened. We didn't see that much reaction to it in this chapter, but we only got a little snippet of ExB this time.  

Reviewer: lucky_chica85 (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2008 07:16 AM · On: April 27 - May 5, 2008

I love Emmett so it was great to see you write in his POV... Great chapter and great plot!

Author's Response: Thanks! :)

Reviewer: EandBforever (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2008 06:44 AM · On: April 27 - May 5, 2008

I can't believe they didn't talk about what happened.  When will they learn.  As always, great chapter.

Author's Response: Thanks :)

Reviewer: Ambushed (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2008 06:44 AM · On: April 27 - May 5, 2008

I always squeal with delight when I see there is an update.

I think Edward is so smitten for Bella. It's funny that he has no idea how bad he has is for her. I really want Bella to realize it and use it to her advantage!

Emmett is the great protector. I love that he was trying to protect Bella's honor. He is a good guy.

Now I'm off to see what wonderful in-sites you have given us on the thread.... 


Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing :)

Reviewer: Dulcinea21bella (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2008 06:39 AM · On: April 27 - May 5, 2008

Okay, so I normally don't read the AH stories but a friend of mine has been raving about this one so I thought I would give it a go..... W.O.W.  This is freaking phenomenol.  I LOVE IT!  The sexual chemistry is fantastic!!!!  You officially have a new fan.  I can't WAIT to read the next chapter- I have been spoiled being able to read all of these in one night.  It is going to be torture to have to wait in between!!!!  Great job!!!!

Author's Response: Glad to hear you're enjoying the story! Thank you smuch for taking the time to review! :)

Reviewer: wants_an_edward86 (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2008 06:37 AM · On: April 27 - May 5, 2008

ahh...oh no the deposition soon! omg i'm so nervous!!  On another note, tat was CRAZINESS when Emmett punched Edward, but i liked it--caused more drama.  And i love how Edward isn't backing down either, what they did together totally means something, the question is, when are they gonna get it on again--you KNOW she's dying for some more sexin' with Edward, haha.  Looking forward to the next chapter :)!

Author's Response:

I know. It is lucky Edward had abs of steel and could take a punch.

thanks for reviewing :) 

Reviewer: Shug (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2008 06:19 AM · On: April 27 - May 5, 2008

This story just gets better and better.  I love the way you're weaving this tale.  Fabulous!

Author's Response: thank you :)

Reviewer: sarawthouttheh (Anonymous) · Date: November 30, 2008 05:56 AM · On: April 27 - May 5, 2008

ZOMG.  I'm too excited about the posting of this chapter and how it ended to write a coherent review.

I freaking love you and your story.

Author's Response: thank you! :)

Reviewer: Nashi (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2008 05:32 AM · On: April 27 - May 5, 2008

Hmm, Edward seems like he maybe starting to warm up to his feelings... I so want to know what Bella's thinking after their one night together. Awaiting the next update.

Author's Response: thanks for reviewing! We may or may not get Bella's morning after feelings... I'm still working out what is happening next chapter.

Reviewer: dramagurl82 (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2008 05:07 AM · On: April 27 - May 5, 2008

Oh I love Emmett... I'm glad he puched him.  I can't wait till the next chapter is posted.  Thanks for posting early!!!

Author's Response: glad you liked the chapter. thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: pipergirl (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2008 04:57 AM · On: April 27 - May 5, 2008

I can't even find the words to describe how much fun I've had reading this story.  You've got an incredible talent, and I'm glad you decided to share it with us readers :)

I've a feeling that there's a lot more turbulence to be felt between Bella and Edward (that includes more smoochies, of course ;)

Can't wait for the next update!!

Author's Response:

Yes. This chapter barely scratched the BxE surface. But we'll get there. :)

Thank you! 

Reviewer: pixieyow (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2008 04:52 AM · On: April 27 - May 5, 2008

oooo now im nervous about the deposition....and i noticed the small little mention of James ;)

Author's Response: we'll have to see what happens. :)

Reviewer: jbluvs2sing (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2008 03:46 AM · On: April 27 - May 5, 2008

This story never disappoints. I liked hearing Emmett's POV! Great job!

Author's Response: thanks :)   

Reviewer: mandalynn (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2008 03:40 AM · On: April 27 - May 5, 2008

I loved the hot tub juicy stuff, don't get me wrong, but now I feel like the story is getting deep! Now I think is the time for Edward to really come out and show his true colors. Show that he can be everything and have everything that Emmett has as well. He will be her knight and shinning armor. I love love love this story and the depth you put into it. Finally here is someone who knows how to write a real story and have it mean something. Great Job Limona!!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for your kind review; I really appreciate it. And yes, the story is deepening. If the story were broken up into different Acts, then this chapter was the beginning of Act II.


Reviewer: Belladonna75 (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2008 03:10 AM · On: April 27 - May 5, 2008

Ooooo.  He likes her?  Yeah baby!  He better not screw this up in the end.  I'm sure he's got a few more things to screw up before then.  LOL  Awesome update!

Author's Response: lol, what kind of story would this be if no one screwed anything up?

Reviewer: sedrax (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2008 02:35 AM · On: April 27 - May 5, 2008

ooooh! I really liked that one. Emmett's POV was a really good way to write that part of the chapter. Edward should sooo acommpany bella to Portland. That would be cool, especially if they got into trouble with voultri people. he could protect her!!! (sorry, but I love Edward-in-shining-armor!) things are still real awkward b/t them, but those swimming lessons are progress.

Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing :)

Yes, the swimming lessons are Edward's way of reaching out to Bella. 

Reviewer: anovelgirl (Anonymous) · Date: November 30, 2008 02:25 AM · On: April 27 - May 5, 2008

I love this story, but I feel danger coming, that makes me love it even more. Great job!

Author's Response: thank you :)

Reviewer: barbarito (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2008 02:24 AM · On: April 27 - May 5, 2008

Hey Limoa!! Left a review over at ff. LOVED the last chapter. edwards confusion as to how to react to Bella the morning after the deed was great. Love how he taught her how to swim and how he is really beginning to question the depth of his feelings for Bella. Love how Emmett got all pissed at Edward for sleeping with Bella. Cannot wait to see what happens during the depositon and how Bella and Edwards relationship progresses!

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! :)

Reviewer: Jfly (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2008 02:17 AM · On: April 27 - May 5, 2008


i LOVE edward being punched in the face.

your writing is enngaging, and this story is fabulous. thank you

Author's Response:

You know, I really thought some people would be upset that Edward got hit. Twice.

But no. Only two people so far have been mad. Everyone else seemed to feel like Edward had it coming in some respects, even though Bella was the one campaigning for the sexing.

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. :) 

Reviewer: AmoreTwilight (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2008 01:55 AM · On: April 27 - May 5, 2008

Limona~this is beyond excellent.  I feel like I am watching a movie as I read. The Emmett and Edward scenes were so powerful.  And I love that Edward is teaching Bella to swim...I'm wondering if that is a skill she is going to need later on to stay alive?  Plus it is giving them a reason to build a friendship and a bond.  You are weaving together an incredible story. 

Author's Response:

AT - You always ask questions that I can't answer.

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. :)  

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