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Reviewer: Jaydee (Signed) · Date: December 20, 2008 03:40 AM · On: May 4 - May 15, 2008

amazing - that is precisely what you are! you really have a knack for writing. keep you the fantastic work :)

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Reviewer: Cresent Moon (Signed) · Date: December 20, 2008 03:39 AM · On: May 4 - May 15, 2008

loved it

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Reviewer: kristyn926 (Signed) · Date: December 20, 2008 03:27 AM · On: May 4 - May 15, 2008

apart from the glad its not awkward between them, and they are actually getting to know eachother.

Author's Response:

me too :)

Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Kdb9mm (Signed) · Date: December 20, 2008 03:25 AM · On: May 4 - May 15, 2008

Very Good!! I can't wait for the next update!!

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Reviewer: Nashi (Signed) · Date: December 20, 2008 03:13 AM · On: May 4 - May 15, 2008

I like seeing things from Bella in this chapter, and that the two are growing closer. Really the only thing standing in their way is Emmett and Edward probibly thinking that she couldn't really like him...

Love the story and happy holidays.

Author's Response:

I wouldn't say Emmett is the only thing standing in their way... just the biggest thing right now.

Reviewer: kcullen (Signed) · Date: December 20, 2008 03:07 AM · On: May 4 - May 15, 2008

Yay! They are finally getting closer! Can't wait until they get really close!

Author's Response:

they are getting closer :)

Reviewer: nofangsallowed (Signed) · Date: December 20, 2008 02:57 AM · On: May 4 - May 15, 2008

I hope they get together.  I'm sure they will, but I'm anxiously waiting.

Author's Response:

thanks for reviewing :)

Reviewer: hhawkes (Signed) · Date: December 20, 2008 02:44 AM · On: May 4 - May 15, 2008

Well its good that Bella found something a little more exciting to occupy her days. She should talk to Edward about the sex thing, I am sure he wouldn't mind continuing it, no matter what Emmett says.

Author's Response:

lol. You're not the only one who thinks she should talk to Edward. Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: jilburfm (Signed) · Date: December 20, 2008 02:44 AM · On: May 4 - May 15, 2008

"And again.  And again.  And again."  Here here, Bella:-) 

"Nothing of consequence" - I wonder if it goes beyond getting the information from Emmett about the deposition?  Maybe he was extra swamped because he started making some contingency plans for security purposes? 

The fake wedding a year from this June 20th, right? 

I absolutely love that Bella is feeling more comfortable with Edward.  I loved her banter on the phone, in his office and in the pool - even if they touched on a sensitive topic.  At least when said sensitive topic came up, neither one bolted - that's some major progress!  Edward even took the initiative to try to talk more.   Baby steps, but big for these two!

Author's Response:

So perceptive you are, jilbur... but I can't say anything really.

Yeah, the fake wedding is 6/20. Long story.

They seemed like such small steps as I was writing, but when I went back and read it then they almost seemed too big. They have a serious history of non-communication, though they have only known each other a month and a half or so. Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: lucky_chica85 (Signed) · Date: December 20, 2008 02:42 AM · On: May 4 - May 15, 2008

I think Edward enjoys defining Emmett! :)

Great chapter! I love that bella will be working at the Cullen Foundation! Hopefully that means more time with Edward!

Please keep writing! I'll be waiting for your next update. Happy Holidays!

Author's Response:

Happy holidays! :)

Glad you liked the chapter.

Reviewer: mandalynn (Signed) · Date: December 20, 2008 02:42 AM · On: May 4 - May 15, 2008

I really hope Edward doesn't always listen and do what Emmett tells him to do! I need more Edward and Bella action!

Author's Response:

I think we all do.

Reviewer: falconcranelove (Signed) · Date: December 20, 2008 02:30 AM · On: May 4 - May 15, 2008

Somehow missed chapter 12 being updated, so I just now read both of these chapters. Loved them! Sorry for not going into details about what I liked the most, it's late, I'm tired and there's a lot of stuff in these two chapters. I loved it all though. :)

Great job!

Author's Response:

Sleep is good. And yes, there was a lot in both those chapters. Glad you got a double chapter treat! :)

Reviewer: notmyself (Signed) · Date: December 20, 2008 02:24 AM · On: May 4 - May 15, 2008

And thank goodness he doesn't always do what Emmett says. This story would be far more vanilla flavored if he did. I adore this story. Every tense, angsty, uncertain, fearful and lusty bit of it. It is far too easy to be addicted to your turn of phrase.



Author's Response:

Mia, thanks so much for your review. I can only aspire to keep the story tense, angsty, uncertain, fearful, and lusty as it continues on.

Reviewer: Babette (Signed) · Date: December 20, 2008 02:21 AM · On: May 4 - May 15, 2008

It's so nice to have you back!  The chapter just flew by.  I can't wait until the next one, and to hear Bella's reaction to the upcoming deposition, along with Edward's plan for keeping her safe.

Author's Response:

I know. It was a shorter chapter than some of the past ones. Glad you enjoyed it. It's good to be back!

Reviewer: Killerbunys (Signed) · Date: December 20, 2008 02:20 AM · On: May 4 - May 15, 2008

Please keep writing this.  This is such a great story and you are a wonderful writer.  I'm so glad to see an update.

As always, can't wait for more!

Author's Response:

thanks so much, KB :)

Reviewer: lobsters4ever (Signed) · Date: December 20, 2008 02:13 AM · On: May 4 - May 15, 2008

Ahh, and yet another amazing update.  This story never goes where I think it will.  So pleasantly surprised!! :)  It is great to see their relationship developing even more.

I am eager to see what happens when Bella finds out about the depo.  Did Edward not tell her to protect her?!? hmmm

Looking forward to what happens next!! 

Reviewer: growlatme (Signed) · Date: December 20, 2008 02:10 AM · On: May 4 - May 15, 2008

agh!  this chapter drove me crazy.  i wanted edward and bella to kiss SO BADLY!!!  good job :)

Author's Response:

Thanks! :)

Reviewer: sedrax (Signed) · Date: December 20, 2008 02:07 AM · On: May 4 - May 15, 2008

mmmm.... interesting. incrimentally increasing the earthworm population to improve soil quality? some how I don't think that was his motive when he was four.... LOL. but that was still freaking hilarious. And the fact that bella wants to do it again.

and again.

and again....

loving it!

Author's Response:

You have no idea how hard it was to come up with a childhood anecdote for Edward. NO IDEA. Earthworms was the best I could do. Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: GinnyW (Signed) · Date: December 20, 2008 02:06 AM · On: May 4 - May 15, 2008

Gah!!! That was a fantastic chapter!!!! I love that their swimming lessons have become such a safe, quiet reprieve for them to be themselves with each other. I absolutely loved this, it was wonderful! Esme is so very sweet. Honestly, I'm glad that you gave us a bit more of the building/strengthening of Edward & Bella's quasi-relationship/friendship before you throw them into the line of fire.

Wonderful chapter. I absolutely loved it. Thank you for helping to make my night! :D

Author's Response:

Aw, Ginny, thanks so much for the review. Believe me, one of my big motivators to post was so that I would be able to read your next chapter... I am looking forward to it so much it is crazy.

Reviewer: booksgalore (Signed) · Date: December 20, 2008 02:00 AM · On: May 4 - May 15, 2008

You and Oxy posted on the same day. I swear it's like the holidays arrived early. Limona, I just love what you are doing with this story. You are showing us the slowly evolving characters and giving us little peeks and glimpses of them at a time. My heart just broke in that last conversation when she tells him that she can't tell him much because she needs to keep him safe. Well done!

Author's Response:

Well, Oxy posted an 11k masterpiece that I haven't had time to read yet because I wanted to get this chapter up... I am seriously rushing through my replies so I can get to her chapter.

Glad you liked this one :)

Reviewer: NicoleRea (Signed) · Date: December 20, 2008 01:57 AM · On: May 4 - May 15, 2008

I'm glad you were able to post a new chapter and hope you're doing better.  I'm glad to see that Edward and Bella are getting closer.  Looking forward to the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing :)

Reviewer: mscope (Signed) · Date: December 20, 2008 01:41 AM · On: May 4 - May 15, 2008

Really like that Bella is spending more time witjh Edward and enjoying it.  Also like that she is spending time with Esme.

As always I am hungry for more!  But that's okay ... enjoy your holidays.  May they be filled with nothing but the best for you and yours!


Author's Response:

Thanks so much for your sweet review. Happy holidays!

Reviewer: wants_an_edward86 (Signed) · Date: December 20, 2008 01:40 AM · On: May 4 - May 15, 2008

OK...that chapter was fabulous! Well worth the wait!!! I like how they're getting to know each other and can't believe he'd schedule his fake wedding on the day of his birthday?! wtf! They are so close to doing it again i can taste it...and i think i'm on to something b/c ur Chapter End Notes said:

"And before I get a whole slew of reviews telling me about how the deposition wasn't mentioned, that is because Bella doesn't know it was scheduled. Emmett told Edward to tell Bella, but Edward doesn't always do what his brother tells him to do."

AHHHHH please please please let there be more sex! or at least making out cuz the angst and sexual tension is KILLING me!! haha Other than that, great chapter and am eagerly awaiting to read the deposition!

Author's Response:

Thanks so much for your review :)

Yeah, well, that birthday/wedding thing is a long story. I might address that on the forum at some point.

And lol at you quoting the end notes to me.

Reviewer: AppleDarling (Signed) · Date: December 20, 2008 01:38 AM · On: May 4 - May 15, 2008

yay for edward turning into Soft Serve Ice Cream Edward rather than -40 Snow and Ice Edward. =] LOVING this story, continue continue continue!

Author's Response:

Okay, your review made me laugh out loud. And then I got worried. There is nothing soft about Edward... I'm going to have to think on this.

Reviewer: be_my_escape (Signed) · Date: December 20, 2008 01:37 AM · On: May 4 - May 15, 2008

i like how edward and bella's relationship has developed. its nice that thewy dont have all the awkwardness they used to have.

keep writing,


Author's Response:

Glad you're enjoying the BxE. thanks for reviewing :)

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