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Reviewer: clhtwifan (Signed) · Date: January 01, 2009 04:33 AM · On: February 29, 2008
please please please update soon! I hate unfinished stories that are actually good! Very good plot.
Author's Response: I always update as soon as I can :)
Reviewer: Wordy (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2008 11:41 PM · On: February 29, 2008
I was scared to read this chapter, like I’d seen a spider scared…and I don’t know why.
You would think that with all there wealth, education and knowledge that they would have learnt to argue in sign language………”Sleeping B’s upstairs’ guys!”
I love whiney Edward...
I love hammered Edward….
I love you…..Lady of thus story
I throw you a kiss from across the waters (lips-pressed-to-palm-and-thrown-like-an-infant-kiss)
Author's Response: Just thinking about Emmett yelling at Edward in sign language made laugh.
Thank you.
But Edward's house is big and well-built... Bella wouldn't hear them too loudly.
Reviewer: Sundress (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2008 05:43 PM · On: February 29, 2008
Ommmmmmmmmmmmmmmg
I'm a fan of this on FF.net, I had no idea it was on here, too.
I'll keep my reviews to FF.net but I couldn't help giving you one here. I'll repeat myself: update soon!
Author's Response: Oh yes. I usually post here first. There's even a story thread where I post teasers. Glad you enjoyed the chapter :)
Reviewer: Thefloorhatesme (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2008 04:50 PM · On: May 17 - May 18, 2008
hey i need some sexin and some angst
Author's Response: at least one of those is coming up.
Reviewer: adilsonnnn (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2008 02:38 PM · On: May 17 - May 18, 2008
Well you probably already know that you're an amazing writer so I don't need to tell you that-but this chapter really takes the cake. I love it alot!
Thanks for the update-even though it wasnt specifically for me, I still enjoyed it as a new years gift ;).
Happy Holidays and keep up the great work
Author's Response: Happy New Year's to you, too. thanks for reviewing :)
Reviewer: Queen of Jacob Black (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2008 12:47 PM · On: May 17 - May 18, 2008
Wow...this story is so amazing! (Though, there should definetly be more Jacob in it. ;])
Author's Response: thanks :)
Reviewer: dramagurl82 (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2008 12:15 PM · On: May 17 - May 18, 2008
Limona I love this story... I am so happy that they admitted they enjoyed themselves, and Edward not wanting to take advantage of a drunk Bella. A little insight into Edwards motivation not telling Bella about the deposition... I think he is really starting to like Bella...
Author's Response: thank you :)
yes, Edward is starting to really like Bella. They get a little closer with each week.
Reviewer: stargirl (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2008 10:52 AM · On: May 17 - May 18, 2008
drunk edward and bella are so much more fun....lol
Author's Response: aw. but they're fun sober, too. really. they just don't know it yet.
Reviewer: AppleDarling (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2008 10:10 AM · On: May 17 - May 18, 2008
hooray for updates!!
there are so many things i love about this chapter. How comfortable they are together (even if both of them are drunk, teehee). Nose touching. Drunk Edward. Hot tubs...i could go on and on.
<3333
Author's Response: thanks, Apple :)
Glad you enjoyed it. There is something sweet about noses.
Reviewer: NoMoreThanUsual (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2008 09:41 AM · On: May 17 - May 18, 2008
Awesome chapter! This story is just so compelling! Great work. Love the originality of it all. And I can't wait to find out what happens next. :D
Author's Response: glad you're enjoying it. thanks for taking the time to review! :)
Reviewer: Isabella303 (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2008 09:25 AM · On: May 17 - May 18, 2008
WOW! What a great idea for a story! It's like watching a weekly tv show that you wish was on everyday! This story has so many possibilities, I'm sure it is fun to write. You are on a great track with this so have fun writing and just know you have a lot of interested readers! This is now my guilty reading story; i LOVE it!
Author's Response: ha, I love being your guilty reading story. thanks for taking the time to review.
Reviewer: dolphin62598 (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2008 08:15 AM · On: May 17 - May 18, 2008
Great chapter!! I am glad he didn't give in and have sex with her while they were plastered! She will appreciate that later I'm sure!! Can't wait to read more!
Author's Response: thanks! :)
Reviewer: cullenized (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2008 08:13 AM · On: May 17 - May 18, 2008
weeeee! thanks for updating. i've been waiting for this. happy new year! :D
Author's Response: glad you enjoyed it :)
Reviewer: gordonfan74 (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2008 08:01 AM · On: May 17 - May 18, 2008
I think this chapter may just be my favorite, thus far, simply because in spite of some tension still wafting in the air, Bella and Edward were able to relax and enjoy each other's company. Never mind that their diversion was somewhat alcohol induced. They talked and opened up to each other, and they even shared some laughs. They were in serious need of a drunken night together. I even liked the fact that they didn't sleep together again, yet. Drunken sex would have only served to heighten the tension between them, because Edward would have felt guilty for taking advantage of Bella's state and going against Emmett's wishes for a second time.
The alcohol Bella and Edward ingested served to lossen lips and some pretty heavy admissions were made. Edward revealing his sexual history and Bella conceding that she had jumped off the diving board with Jacob were monumental confessions, in my opinion. They were honest with each other while actually communicating. Bella has wanted this all along and Edward has seemed incapable thus far. Now Bella knows that Edward is capable of opening up and sharing his feelings with her. He showed that much when he asked why she trusted the gardner and not him. If only they can keep this up without the booze. Progress will truly be gained.
I am very intrigued about Bella's history with the Volturi. Why won't she talk to Edward about her work with them? How did Aro know Bella from before? This story is seriously getting better and better with each chapter. I can't wait to see Bella's reaction when Emmett tells her the deposition date is looming. Further more I can't wait to see Edward's reaction. Will he be there for her, because I have a feeling she's going to be so stressed out, or will he return to his assiness and avoid the emotion?
You are doing a fantastic job with the writing and your creativity never ceases to amaze me. I hope you are able to update again soon.
Author's Response: Your favorite? Really? I never know what will resonate. They did open up some, and it was sorely needed. We'll get more insight into Bella and the Volturi as the story moves along.
thanks, as always, for your thoughtful review. Happy New Year!
limona
Reviewer: sedrax (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2008 07:33 AM · On: May 17 - May 18, 2008
That was freaking PERFECT!!!! absolutely LOVED it! It's a good thing Edward said no, Emmett wouldn't have been happy to walk in on them naked, and tangled up in the sheets.... Still, it's deffinetly gonna have repercussions... So Aro knew bella when she was little? that's really creepy. I'm getting anxious for the deposition, but it's nice to know Edward cares. XD!!
Author's Response: Thanks! Everything has repercussions... if I think about it long enough, I get overwhelmed by all the possible repercussions of everything in this story.
Happy New Year :)
Reviewer: crf720 (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2008 07:31 AM · On: May 17 - May 18, 2008
Thanks for the update! i love this story!
Author's Response: you're welcome :)
Reviewer: rainpuddle13 (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2008 06:07 AM · On: May 17 - May 18, 2008
I think I like drunk Edward and Bella - they are able to let down their walls and be honest with one another. I giggled when their game of truth or dare turned to sex (doesn't it always?). They are both so into each other that it was only nature. I like coy, daring Bella. It suits her, and it definitely suits Edward. I'm just sorry that Edward came to his senses before he could give into Bella's hinting. She wants him, and wants him bad. Damn him for being (ultimately) an upstanding guy!
Of course, Emmett would arrive to throw a wet blanket on all of Bella's progress. I guess it's easy to forget about the outside world with Edward around. The looming deposition date is going to set her back, I just know it. That date is like an impending date with her executioner. Bah.
All of it leaves me wanting more. I can't wait until your next chapter!
Author's Response: Yes. How dare Edward pick now to be a gentleman! Of course, if he weren't a gentleman, I would start getting hate mail for him again.
thanks so much for reviewing. Happy New Year!
Reviewer: pandagirl1001 (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2008 05:59 AM · On: May 17 - May 18, 2008
This was a great chapter, so many new developments! Again I loved getting to see more of Bella's past with the Volturi. I'm really curious as to when Aro and Marie/Bella met before. Whenever it was, it was probably for some sinister reason. Becuase the Volturi are just evil like that. haha.
Edward and Bella drinking together was hilarious. I love that Bella's dare to Edward was for him to get as tipsy as her, and somehow from that they both end up smashed. I wonder if either of them will ever answer the 'truth' questions that they successfully avoided? I guess I'll have to wait and see. I love that they were playing Truth or Dare in the first place. When Edward was telling her about how peaceful the ocean can be, I was thinking "take her there!" the whole time. Haha. I wonder if a roadtrip to the beach might be in the cards for a later chapter? Bella thinking she's cursed because she was the 13th person that Edward slept with was great. Of course her mind would automatically go to the bad rep that the number 13 has earned, but she didn't think about how a lot of people consider 13 a lucky number. ;) I'm willing to bet that in this case 13 will be lucky. The hot tub scene was great and in a way I'm glad they didn't have sex, it will make it more special if the next time they sleep together they remember it. Haha.
The Emmett/Edward scene at the end was probably my favorite of the chapter. I LOVED Edward telling Emmett that he knew her better and that she didn't need the added stress of worrying about the deposition. Unfortunately, I kind of agree with Emmett that she needs to be told about it, but it's very sweet of Edward to want to want to shield her from the anxiety for as long as possible.
I loved this chapter as always and thank you so much for updating in a timely manner. It makes me love this story even more knowing that I can count on you to update within a decent amount of time. :) I am so exicted to see what happens next. I wonder if Edward will let Emmett tell her? If he doesn't stop him, I wonder how Bella will react? Oh so many questions. haha. Fabulous job. Have a happy New Year!
-Christy
Author's Response: Christy,
Thanks for another thoughtful review. The Aro bit will be revealed later.
As for Bella being 13th, let's just say that 13 is my personal lucky number. So maybe it won't be as bad as Bella thinks.
Emmett and Edward's dynamic is rapidly becoming a favorite of mine. They're both intelligent men who mean well, they're just at opposite ends of the spectrum.
I update as often as I can, but these chapters always take longer than I think they will. I think I spend almost as long editing as I do writing... something I did not do with my other story.
Happy New Year!
Christina
Reviewer: dollegirl (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2008 05:21 AM · On: May 17 - May 18, 2008
LIMONA BB...I HAVE LOVED THE LAST FEW CHAPTERS...SNEAKY PEEKS INTO BELLA'S PAST...THE SCHOLARSHIP AND HER INTRO TO BOTH VOLTERRA AND ARO...PIECING TOGETHER IN LITTLE SNIPPETS...
WHAT'S THE DEAL WITH EDWARD NOT LIKING HIS B-DAY & SCHEDULING THEIR "WEDDING" THAT DAY?
THE PUNCH FROM EMMETT TO EDWARD...SWIMMING LESSONS...THE LITTLE TOUCHES THAT ARE MORE OF A RULE THAN AN EXCEPTION....THE COMFORT THAT SEEMS TO HAVE BEEN ESTABLISHED BETWEEN THEM AND LITTLE MOMENTS OF MORE OPEN COMMUNICATION THAT COME THROUGH....I LOVE THAT SHE IS WORKING FOR THE FOUNDATION...GETTING OUT AND PARTICIPATING IN SOMETHING....I AM EXCITED TO SEE THAT SHE IS COMING OUT OF HERSELF A BIT MORE AND HAPPIER...AND THAT EDWARD SEES THIS...
THE DRUNKEN TRUTH OR DARE WAS GREAT...SEXY...AND SWEET....ALMOST FEELS LIKE WE ARE GOING BACK TO BELLA BEING THE FORBIDDEN FRUIT...ALTHOUGH EDWARD WANTING HER WITH MORE EMOTIONS TIED IN IS MUCH BETTER...
LOVED THE NOSE TAPPING BTW...IT MADE MY HEART FLUTTER...
AS ALWAYS...LOVE IT BB!!
Author's Response: Dolle :)
Thanks for stopping by, chica. Long story about Edward. We can chat later. And am super glad you appreciated the nose tapping... I thought it was sweet.
Happy New Year, BB!
Reviewer: wants_an_edward86 (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2008 05:12 AM · On: May 17 - May 18, 2008
UGH! That was simply amazing!! So close in that hot tub, so close...i really like how they're becoming more and more comfortable with each other as well as becoming more like a real couple. They care about each other and are now having real discussions, even if it includes tequila haha. The wait was long for this chapter but you most certainly did deliver a great one! Can't wait til the next chapter :)
Author's Response: You know, writing all these scenes, I've decided I really need a balcony with a hot tub. Glad you enjoyed this chapter. :)
Reviewer: booksgalore (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2008 05:02 AM · On: May 17 - May 18, 2008
Limona,
I absolutely love what you did with this chapter. She was so vulnerable and so refreshing and to see the evolving intimacy between them in the way that you have characterized it - wow just wow. Call me crazy but I really liked that you didn't have them have sex in this chapter while drunk. I liked that he wanted to wait for the right moment. I liked that you had them in the hot tub being honest and intimate and vulnerable.I also liked that you showed them having to reap the consequences of their behavior (waking up with a hangover). :)
Two feather pillows on a silver platter from the Isle of Esme for you. :)
Books
Author's Response: Books,
Thanks so much for those feather pillows (intact, even!). I will bronze them for my trophy collection. Glad you enjoyed this chapter-- you know it gave me fits. I had a terrible time trying to make Edward drunk, he's so not the type of person to ever lose control. They weren't even supposed to end up in the hot tub, but the mom (and lifeguard) in me was worried someone would get hurt out at the pool.
limona
Reviewer: truthis2rare (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2008 04:59 AM · On: May 17 - May 18, 2008
amazing. he needs to just sleep with her again. if i were her my feelings would be hurt even though he's giving her "reasons" why they can't sleep with each other. she's right. no one knows how much time they have.
Author's Response: they're both right. and we'll see how Bella's feelings are next chapter. :)
Reviewer: lucky_chica85 (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2008 04:56 AM · On: May 17 - May 18, 2008
I completely loved Edward in this chapter! So sweet, caring and loving... I don't think I would have been able to keep my hands off him! :)
I can't wait for the next chapter.
Author's Response: I was a little bit surprised Bella kept her hands to herself, but I think she was sobering up there toward the end.
thanks for reviewing :)
Reviewer: ekimmuh (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2008 04:27 AM · On: May 17 - May 18, 2008
Hm. Interesting flashback. I wonder how Aro knows her from the past?
Loved the rest of the chapter though. The chemistry between Bella and Edward durring Truth or Dare was fantastic. I knew sex was probibly a little must to hope for so soon after his promise to Emmett but with the tension I was kind of hoping for at least a passionate kiss before he came to his senses. *sighs* Oh well. I'm sure you'll make it up to us. :)
I know Edward is right about Bella's reaction to Emmett's news. I just hope Edward's able to find some "creative" ways to make her want to live life again.
Author's Response: A lot of people were hoping for a kiss. You weren't alone. But they did tap noses. Does that not count for anything?
Edward and Emmett both have valid points.
Thank you for your thoughtful review. :)
Reviewer: gallantcorkscrews (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2008 04:17 AM · On: May 17 - May 18, 2008
The tub scene put me in a tizzy.
This: It did feel good. "This does feel good." I sounded like an idiot. was freaking hysterical. For subtle plastered Edward. I love your plastered Edward- he was obviously very drunk, but still more in control of himself than most. Amazing. And hot.
Edward seems to be more drawn to Bella than Bella to Edward. Maybe because Bella's guard is up (rightfully so) and Edward is in a slightly more convenient position to like her. I'm just... not feeling it from Bella's end as much as I did before they had sex. Also, if a guy thinks about a girl, it means a lot more, because guys are thought to be "less sensitive". So if Edward thinks one line of text about Bella, it means more to me than Bella thinking one line of text about Edward.
I do love your Bella. She feels very realistic to me, and she's charismatic in her own way. Great Chapter.
Author's Response: The tub scene wasn't supposed to happen, and yet, I could not stop it. Funny how that works.
I'm glad you thought Edward was drunk enough. You know, I agonized over that. My Edward doesn't quote Streetcar or his favorite songs, but he has his own little quirks.
We haven't really had that much of Bella and Edward in Bella's POV since the sex, but your point on men vs. women is well taken. I am really, really, trying to take Bella away from the mopey place that is no fun to read or write about.
Thanks for reviewing :)
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