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Reviewer: angelvamp (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2009 01:01 AM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

Another great chapter!

Reviewer: elizabeth2323 (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2009 12:59 AM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

at first I thought---booo if Alice stays with them then there will be continued no action on the B and E front but then I thought that could be good b/c Alice would expect them to share a bedroom so they would be forced into the same bed again.  Let see where you take this---Truly this is my favorite story--I can't wait for the next update!

Reviewer: wants_an_edward86 (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2009 12:57 AM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

Wow, that was way intense in the beginning..i love how Emmett can't see her all innocent any more, haha.  I hope everything can work out between Edward and her, and if Alice is staying with them, they are TOTALLY gonna have to act as a real couple...kisses and well *wink* *wink* everything! haha Great worries on the time, it's always such a treat to when it's finally posted :)

Reviewer: Clancy67 (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2009 12:54 AM · On: February 29, 2008

Wow - this chapter was fantastic. I just found it today and I can't wait to keep reading...its very intriguing.

Reviewer: SuburbanSun (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2009 12:48 AM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

Another excellent chapter!

First off, I love your characterization of Emmett. I think it's spot on and a pleasure to read. I enjoy the relationship he has with your Edward, and how even though they're adults with their own lives, that brotherly sense of competition is still strong.

"I used more weight when I did bicep curls, but that was irrelevant right now." Hee. Love it.

Additionally, the concerns Emmett has about Bella and Edward are very interesting-- they'd never occurred to me before as I read the story. It was easy to think that Emmett just didn't think his Bruce Wayne playboy of a brother was good for Bella, but it makes complete sense that he's worried about the whole family as well. Very legitimate concerns.

Ooh, and I can't wait to see what happens when Alice stays with Bella and Edward and they're forced to act even more couply than they already do! So much potential for hilarity and intriguing developments... I'm excited.

Reviewer: Lei-C (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2009 12:44 AM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

man i love your story!

i wonder what situations alice staying with E&B will bring..

can't wait for the next update!!


Reviewer: Capricorn75 (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2009 12:39 AM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

It's kind of rediculous how excited I get when this story updates!

Author's Response:

or maybe kind of awesome.

Reviewer: mayams (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2009 12:38 AM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

I had never considered what Emmett was thinking, it is a big risk for everyone. That is scarry, and honestly makes the story even better, unfortunatelly it also shows the option of a not so happy ending, but makes the story better and picks at my curiosity, what is going to happen? with the deposition, the party, the trial, Edward's and Bella's relationship, how everyone in the familiy is falling for her. Wow so many questions. Please update soon!!!! can't wait for whatever is coming next.

Reviewer: twitilated (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2009 12:34 AM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

You know, when I win the lottery, I swear I would love to hire you to finish this story! I am so intrigued with the plot line, character development and the exploration of Bella and the Volturi.  You really could turn this into a novel.  Thank you for another great read.

Author's Response:

you're welcome :)

Reviewer: mscope (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2009 12:34 AM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

Oh limona, loved spending time with Alice and Bella.  I'm still smirking that Alice will spend time with Bella and Edward while Jasper is out of town.  This truly is a wonderful story!

Reviewer: gordonfan74 (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2009 12:34 AM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

I hope things are okay with you.  You sounded a little troubled in the opening notes.  The chapter was great.  You made me laugh by envisioning Bella slapping around on big ol' Emmett.  When he caught a sneek peak of her boobs I laughed too.  It was almost as if he was grossed out by it, because it was like being flashed by his sister.  That is sweet and endearing. 

This chapter enlightened me a bit.  I, much like Emmett, hadn't really thought of the far reaching repercussions of having Bella stay with Edward.  The facade they have created will affect all of Emmett's family, and potentially not a in a good way as far as the Volturi are concerned.  Emmett is just now coming to this realization and it will be a heavy burden to bear alone.  I feel sorry for Emmett.  He knows that something terrible could happen to Bella, not matter how well he does his job of protecting her, and now he knows that something bad could happen to Edward, Rose, his children and everyone else.  Plus, add in the knowledge that no matter what Edward and Bella can't feasibly be together long term because of the circumstances and you have some heavy duty baggage for old Em to be luggin' around. 

The chapter turned out great, in spite of your concerns otherwise.  You are doing an awesome job and this story just gets better and better with each chapter.  The characterizations continue to evolve and the plot is develping quite nicely.  I can't wait for the deposition.  I feel like that will be a major turning point in the story.  Also, I am excited to see how Bella and Edward manage with Alice staying in the house.  No separate bedrooms during that period of time.  Alice is very astute and that would not slip by her. 

Take care and I hope things get better for you.

Reviewer: Tiggrmommi (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2009 12:34 AM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

Limona! Incredible as always! And as always waiting for more more more!!

Reviewer: Mrs Jasper Hale (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2009 12:32 AM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

Really great chapter.  So since Alice is going to be staying over does that mean Bella and Edward will be sharing a room...

Can't wait for more updates.

Reviewer: pwtf (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2009 12:32 AM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

So glad the chapter got up tonight...and what a chapter it was!!!

It's SO Bella for her to be more upset about Emmett interfering in her relations with Edward than the news of the deposition. And I love that she stood up against Emmett and hit him. And that Edward finally admitted to someone besides himself that Bella is special.

That description of Rose's overnight french toast cracked me up...because I tried to make it once with a friend, but we were out of the right kind of bread, so we decided to make our own bread. An hour later, we'd finally managed to make the dough...another half hour later it still wasn't rising...we finally just cooked it, and by then it'd been so long that we didn't even end up making the french toast. I can never think about it the same way again.

I thought it was so cute and so funny that Emmett corrected Libby's grammar.

I love that Bella is trying to keep herself from worrying about the deposition and that, even though she's upset with Emmett, she still trusts him to keep her safe.

The Bella/Alice interactions were awesome! I'm so glad that they're bonding a bit. Bella's adamance against inviting Jessica, Lauren, and Tanya was priceless, but Alice would never understand since she only knows the surface lie...

And you HAD to mention chocolate cake didn't you? I've been fantasizing about cake on another thread...especially luscious chocolate cake. 9:20 too late to run to the store to buy a cake?

Alice shall be staying with Edward and Bella, hmm...a lot can happen there...I won't bore you with all my predictions of thoughts of potential...

Oh, and we came SO close to finding out more about the Volturi...I didn't want that section to end where it did!

I can't wait to see what the next chapter shall bring!!!!!

Reviewer: dawntwilight000 (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2009 12:31 AM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

Great chapter and Bella even beat up Emmett! Update again soon!

Reviewer: hhawkes (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2009 12:30 AM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

Hmm...if Bella wants to get anywhere with Edward then maybe having Alice over isn't the best idea. Of course, it would force them to sleep in the same room, so maybe it will actually help things along...isn't the deposition during that time though?

Author's Response:

deposition is june 9. although you're making me paranoid because I was too tired to double-check my dates....

Reviewer: jtab04 (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2009 12:30 AM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

Great chapter!

Reviewer: kamce (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2009 12:28 AM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

Alice....staying with Edward and Bella.....there is going to have to be some room rearranging isn't there!! Closets being switched, Beds being switched!! Interesting!!

As Always, Limona, Great Chapter!

Can't wait for the next one....please, please, please don't keep me waiting toooo long.

Reviewer: moonwitche (Anonymous) · Date: January 19, 2009 12:24 AM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

I liked Bella's reaction. I didn't like Emmett's thoughts about the future. Although, all that means is badass Edward (maybe with a little help from Emmett) must take down the volturi. Each and every single one. Then he and Bella can join the others in white picket-fence-land. And thanks bunches for mentioning us!

Author's Response:

I told you, I loved that podcast.

Reviewer: ekimmuh (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2009 12:24 AM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

Another great chapter. I loved Emmetts POV and then when Bella told him he was to appologize to Loved it!

I didn't think about what would happen after the trial if Edward and Bella became a couple. I know Emmett thinks Edward wouldn't or couldn't walk away from his life but I think he would.

Alice gave Bella some great advice. She's going to have to grow a backbone to live in Edward's world.

Reviewer: McQueen (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2009 12:23 AM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

Ugh! The growing tension! When is it going to pop? As was a pleasure!

Reviewer: christine30974 (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2009 12:21 AM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

Oh I was so excited to see that you had an update for us.  Thank you so much!  Keep up the great work.  I look forward to your next update.  :)

Reviewer: Missa (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2009 12:12 AM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

Another grat chapter. Bellla's getting herself all enterqined with the family, which may make things harder for her as things progress. And why do I have teh feeling that Edward won't be happy about Alice staying with them? :D

Reviewer: Kathryn Mason-Sykes (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2009 12:12 AM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

Excellent chapter! It feels like everything might soon be coming to a head. I'm concerned that Alice is going to be staying with them during that particular timeframe given her current condition, and it's somewhat irksome that Edward is still being so distant. But Emmett makes some valid points...Bella is a wanted woman. After the Volturi know that she's still alive, her and anyone else she associates with are moving targets - that puts his entire family in the line of fire if the Volturi make the association. And Edward can't leave his family and his life behind to enter protective hiding with Bella...or could he? Would he need to? These are the questions I can't wait to learn the answers to!

Author's Response:

and hopefully you know I can't answer those questions :)

Reviewer: Syndie (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2009 12:12 AM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

really enjoyed this

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