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Reviewer: Dena (Signed) · Date: February 01, 2009 04:57 AM · On: March 24-27, 2008

Love the pool hall scene...I could totally picture Edward standing behind her blocking the other guys' views!

Reviewer: Dena (Signed) · Date: February 01, 2009 04:23 AM · On: March 22, 2008

Love the WWEFD!

Reviewer: kelsey_jim (Signed) · Date: January 30, 2009 04:56 PM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

This story is great.

Reviewer: minimac (Signed) · Date: January 29, 2009 11:42 AM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

Oh ma gawd! I HEART THIS STORY!

You're handling the storylines really well - I like the flashbacks to when Bella worked for the "vamp mob." The sexual tension is KILLING MEH! More, more, more!



Author's Response:

more coming in a few days. :)

 

thanks!

Reviewer: Evenstar (Signed) · Date: January 29, 2009 02:15 AM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

I just read through this entire story in one morning! It is probably some of the best writing I've seen around here so far! Can't wait for the next chapter! I love your story!

Reviewer: Foxtrot (Signed) · Date: January 28, 2009 06:36 PM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

Jasper isn't being targeted by the Volturi, is he? I really hope not. That would just be bad. I like that the story is heating up and the day of the trial and deposition draw ever closer. It's exciting!



Author's Response:

I can't answer if Jasper is being targeted... but thanks for reviewing :)

Reviewer: LikeToRead (Signed) · Date: January 28, 2009 08:34 AM · On: February 29, 2008

I love love love this story.  Keep 'em comin' and I'll keep reading.

Reviewer: makovitza (Signed) · Date: January 27, 2009 04:11 AM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

Hey. Just letting you know I love your story, and I'm waiting anxiously for updates! :-)

Reviewer: Hopeful Wager (Anonymous) · Date: January 26, 2009 08:19 PM · On: February 29, 2008

I learned of your story from the "Temptations" podcast. I think you had me at hello. I'm loving this so far. I'm impressed how you're able to keep them so well in character even though your fic in AH.

 One lost opportunity I saw I thought I'd suggest. In your first Edward section, after "She was still wearing my robe and she didn't have shoes on. She slammed the door behind her." it would be a real good place to add something like "Damn. I really liked that robe."

 

I look forward to reading and reviewing more of the story as time allows me the chance. thanks for the entertainment.

Reviewer: MoGanHannah (Signed) · Date: January 26, 2009 07:40 PM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

dun dun dunnnn.
what will alice uncover when she stays with edward and bella?
to find out, stay tuned!!

aahh! silly bella. she speaks before she thinks.
i'm anxious to see where this gooess. :]



Author's Response:

There is no telling what Alice might uncover!

Reviewer: ashlee87 (Signed) · Date: January 26, 2009 07:38 PM · On: February 29, 2008

Love.Love.Love this story. It is truly amazing. I check daily for updates (hehe) I am so sadly addicted.

 

But keep up the great work! I can't wait to see how the rest of the story plays out!

Reviewer: breakthefloor22 (Signed) · Date: January 26, 2009 03:42 PM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

This is me finally taking the time to review in order to encourage you to update. I probably should have reviewed earlier (like maybe when I first read the chapter but whatever. As always, I thoroughly enjoyed that. I wonder how edward is gonna react to his surprise party... Probably just like Bella in New Moon. Anyway, update soon!

Author's Response:

I am trying to get time to update... I am just crazy busy right now. But the update should be in a few days. :)

Reviewer: Kenzerr (Signed) · Date: January 26, 2009 01:47 PM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

This is an incredible story. I'm completely in love with it, to be honest haha.

More soon? [:

Reviewer: Oohlalalar (Signed) · Date: January 25, 2009 10:36 AM · On: April 15 - April 18, 2008

So I love the Rose you have in this story more than Stephanie's. She is hysterical. Keep it comin :p

Reviewer: devadasi7 (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2009 03:07 PM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

i love it that bella started beating up emmett.  that totally made my day!

ok, they must talk bella out of testifying.  it's the only way this will work and not have a tragic ending.  please?



Author's Response:

don't you think people would be just a little disappointed if Bella didn't testify?

Reviewer: devadasi7 (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2009 03:06 PM · On: May 17 - May 18, 2008

ok, he is totally falling in love with her, isn't he?

i love getting some of the back story on bella's job.  i'm wondering why the volturi chose her.......did they kill her dad????

normally, i avoid the truth or dare stories like the plague.  thank you for making this one a wonderful plot device and not some stupid high school thing.

Reviewer: devadasi7 (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2009 03:03 PM · On: May 4 - May 15, 2008

i love your esme.  i really do.

this story is so compelling.....i can't leave long reviews, i have to run to the next chapter!!

Reviewer: NicoleRea (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2009 12:21 PM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

Good chapter.  :)  Wonder what'll happen at the party.

Reviewer: AmoreTwilight (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2009 09:32 AM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

Go Bella...loved how she gave it to Emmett!  And our Edward definitely has feelings for Bella!!!  Of course Emmett's thoughts are so disturbing...wonder how this will unfold?

I loved that Alice made Bella hand address those envelopes...Bella needs to practice a few dance steps prior to the party.  Maybe she could put that on her bucket list for Edward to teach her. So June is a very busy month...deposition, Jasper away, Edward's party and Alice's baby due...hhmmmm!

Love this story!



Author's Response:

AT, I think I responded to this on the forum... but yes, June is very busy!

Reviewer: Salanna (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2009 06:34 AM · On: May 18 - May 20, 2008

You keep throwing in small glimpses of Bella's early connections with the Volturi, and it makes me more and more curious about the background. Why her? Why the funding, why the job and why the special treatment?

Liked the way Bella smacked Emmett and basically told him to mind his own business, ie her security and not her personal life. She's picked up some confidence, the old Bella of some months back would never have had the guts to do that. I do understand Emmett's concern about them becoming a real couple, I hadn't actually considered the fact that after the trial Bella would have to go back into Witness Protection and disappear again. And the sorrow this will cause his family - I'm very intrigued about where you will take the story!

Great job once again, update soon!



Author's Response:

Salanna,

Thanks for taking the time to review so thoughtfully. I can't answer your questions about the Volturi... they will answer themselves in text as the story unfolds.

Reviewer: devadasi7 (Signed) · Date: January 23, 2009 07:25 PM · On: April 27 - May 5, 2008

oh noes!!!!  reality comes crashing back.....

Reviewer: devadasi7 (Signed) · Date: January 23, 2009 07:11 PM · On: April 19 - April 26, 2008

i love you for that "no" at the end.  i just do.

Reviewer: devadasi7 (Signed) · Date: January 23, 2009 06:42 PM · On: April 17 - 19, 2008

::runs desperately to the next chapter::

this one was fuckgood, bb!

Reviewer: devadasi7 (Signed) · Date: January 23, 2009 06:26 PM · On: April 15 - April 18, 2008

i love rosalie.  i just do.

i'm so glad she brought up the whole tanya thing.....i'm still irked about that double standard!!!

Reviewer: devadasi7 (Signed) · Date: January 23, 2009 06:07 PM · On: April 13 - April 14, 2008

ok, i was so into this story that i completely forgot to leave a review at the end of the last chapter.

let's just suffice it to say that this entire story is EPIC WIN!!!!

and as much as i don't like jake, edward is a hypocritical ass.  i hope bella sets him straight.....right after she comes.....

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