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Reviewer: mscullen10159 (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 09:38 PM · On: March 22, 2008, part 2
Dame Bella don't run.
Reviewer: lislar (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 09:32 PM · On: June 14 - June 20, 2008
That was so great! I wish that I could see how this is going to end. I must be a pessimist because I just can't imagine how it is going to work out. But I desparately want it to work out! I can't wait for the next update!!!! Thank you for the great story. I really do like your Edward.
Just a thought that keeps flitting through my mind:
One of the things that I really loved about Twilight is that even though Edward and Bella are opposites and from different worlds, Edward's love for Bella equalizes them. I loved this aspect of the story - despite their economic differences, their age differences, their upbringing, their basic biology, they are soul mates, and equal in love.
In your story the tension seems to come from the inequality. Bella is not only poorer, less sophisticated, and less experienced, but she is literally indebted to Edward for all her shelter, food, and ultimate protection. At first, I was very uncomfortable with this unbalance. It is a typical situation for a story - the women are almost always at the mercy of the strong, handsome man that they pine over.
However, when this scenerio works out and the man realizes his woman's value - it is irresistibly satisfying. I am so happy that it is working out this way in your story.
Oh - I am so sorry for the rambling - I absolutely should be paying attention to my own life and my family. But I so much would rather be reading your story. Thanks again for the great story - I so can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: I, too, want it to work out. I'm glad you like Edward.
Yes, this is a typical set-up for a story... I picked it for just that reason. But yes, I am very aware of the imbalances between them-- and I am a firm believer of lovers being equals.
Thanks so much for your thoughtful review.
limona
Reviewer: twibrarian88 (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 09:26 PM · On: June 14 - June 20, 2008
I LOVED this chapter! Please, please don't let anything permanent happen to Bella....I'm becoming as invested in their relationship as I was in the original books!
Of course Jason is going to make trouble.....
How long until we find out what Bella knows about the Volturi?
Author's Response: Thank you so much for this review :)
I can't answer your question about Bella, though, since it will unfold in the text.
Reviewer: ecoholic (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 09:26 PM · On: June 14 - June 20, 2008
SQUEEE!
I literally smiled hard core there at the end. Adorable. Loved this chapter and the lovin' and sexin' between bella and edward. the parts were you described the pool lessons with excessive groping really balanced out the heavy stuff. Same hear at the end with the news about the trila, jason jenks and then alice going into labour. Perfect.
Author's Response: glad it was squee-worthy!! thanks for reading!
Reviewer: lalinda1236 (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 09:19 PM · On: June 14 - June 20, 2008
OMG THIS CHAPTER WAS AMAZING AND I WAS SCREAMING like a 3 yr old when i saw that it had been updated.. like usual.. i hope the next chapter is up soon!!! i know i know you have a life outside twilighted but i'm absolutely in love with this story lol
Author's Response: thank you!!
Reviewer: mscullen10159 (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 09:12 PM · On: March 22, 2008
God I love Alice. I hope Edward is happy with the new Bella.
Reviewer: apricot (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 09:06 PM · On: June 14 - June 20, 2008
weeeeh!!! that was so exciting.. i mean the last part when they said i love you's... sort of made it a cliffie.. oMG!! i can't believe it.. i can't wait for the next update.. i find it sweet of edward to not rush bella into having sex. but omg omg omg... they said i love you's!!! i hope both of them wouldn't think that they are just acting in front of the family. i hope they know each of them meant what was said... thanks for updating and please update sooooon!!! =)
Author's Response: They did say "I love you," and I'm glad it made you happy. Thanks for reading!
Reviewer: cheriann (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 09:05 PM · On: June 14 - June 20, 2008
This was an awesome chapter I read it while on the edge of my seat. I am so worried about Bella, waiting for the axe to fall. What will Jason Jenks part be in this, and what is Edward doing late nights. Give me more pleeeessse. Soon.
Thank you Limona
Author's Response: So glad you enjoyed it! :)
Reviewer: wandering-home (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 09:05 PM · On: June 14 - June 20, 2008
Hahah I love that, "oops, was that out-loud?" cute. Loved the extra long chapter, made waiting worth it ;)
Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad it was worth waiting for :)
Reviewer: lavishone (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 09:03 PM · On: June 14 - June 20, 2008
Very, very satisfying!
Author's Response: thank you!
Reviewer: lueree (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 08:58 PM · On: June 14 - June 20, 2008
This story is awesome!! please update soon...
Author's Response: thank you, I'll try!
Reviewer: mscullen10159 (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 08:52 PM · On: Thursday, March 20, 2008
I see drama with Jacob in the future. And I think Edward is getting a little jealous.
Reviewer: 01dani (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 08:49 PM · On: June 14 - June 20, 2008
I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT
Author's Response: thank you!!
Reviewer: kellyam (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 08:49 PM · On: June 14 - June 20, 2008
oooooh I am soo glad that Alice had the baby. And I lurve the fact that you used the word 'lurve' in your story, it made me giggle. The ending was amazing. Great chapter :)
Author's Response: Alice is just the type of person to use "lurve" in everyday conversation. Glad you enjoyed this chapter!
Reviewer: wants_an_edward86 (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 08:49 PM · On: June 14 - June 20, 2008
This chapter was simply fantastic!!!!! So much happened, i don't even know where to start. First, damn that Alice for interrupting E/B time haha...I'm really glad Edward and Bella are really becoming more of a couple really in love than one just for show. Like how he wants to wait to do things the right way w/ her because it's important to their relationship, not just spur of the moment wants and needs.
Yeah, i didn't think Jake was gonna change his views on Edward---and I don't like how he was always away doing stuff, maybe getting away from that Occhi stuff (which i can't wait to find out about that, more of what Edward's hiding) and WTF is w/ Jason Jenks??!!! I don't like how he thinks he knows Bella...i smell trouble and it's spelled V-O-L-T-E-R-R-A! I'm so happy Alice had her baby and that Edward and Bella were there to see it :D Especially since they've now said 'I Love You' to each other!!!!!!! I'm not so happy about having a trial date :(
Can't wait for the next chapter:D
Author's Response: WAE86-- So glad you enjoyed this one. Yes, there was a lot in this chapter. To be fair to Alice, she didn't know how little sexy time ExB had spent together in the past.
We didn't get to see Edward and Bella react to the trial date, but that is coming.
Thanks for reviewing!
Reviewer: shelly8721 (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 08:49 PM · On: June 14 - June 20, 2008
That was wonderful!! Thanks.
Author's Response: thank you :)
Reviewer: ablissfulday (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 08:47 PM · On: June 14 - June 20, 2008
Thanks for the update. I love that they love each other! : )
Author's Response: me too :)
thanks for reading!
Reviewer: Lizabeths (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 08:47 PM · On: June 14 - June 20, 2008
Please update soon.....I love this story!!!
Author's Response: I will try! thanks :)
Reviewer: Kalle (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 08:42 PM · On: June 14 - June 20, 2008
Extra long chapter and an I love you from Edward...sooo worth the wait. Now they can start figuring real life out.
Author's Response: I'm glad you think it was worth the wait :)
Reviewer: mkd (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 08:42 PM · On: June 14 - June 20, 2008
that was an awesome chapter i cant wait to see what happens next
Author's Response: thank you!
Reviewer: Natsu2 (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 08:41 PM · On: June 14 - June 20, 2008
I'm on cloud 9, Limona! That was an AWESOME chapter! Nothing melts my heart like a grown man holding a newborn baby. So so sweet!
So, where did he go on those late nights? Occhi meetings? hmmmm.
I'm really scared for Bella now! Jason Jenks is on to her and who knows if he still has ties with the Volturi! Emmett needs to step up his game now!
I'm so excited for the next chapter!!
xoxo
Natsu
Author's Response: I'm so glad you're on cloud nine! This chapter was a struggle to write, but I have been pleased with the response so far. Thanks you for sticking with the story, Natsu. :)
Reviewer: Danger_Magnet (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 08:39 PM · On: June 14 - June 20, 2008
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHhh they confessed their love!!!! eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
plz update as soon as possible!!! PLEASE!!! hehehehehe
Author's Response: I'll update as soon as I can!
Reviewer: StoryPainter (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 08:29 PM · On: June 14 - June 20, 2008
This was my favorite chapter so far!!!
Thanks for updating. I love this story!
Author's Response: Thank you!
Reviewer: jennde (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 08:29 PM · On: June 14 - June 20, 2008
Thank Limona, what a great breakthrough chapter for Edward and Bella. 8 months until the trial, but maybe they won't make it until then, since Aro and company now know she's alive. I can't imagine they won't try to find her.
The growing feelings between E&B are very sweet and well done without being too sweet or over the top, if you know what I mean. It feels real.
I'm sure you'll hear this a mllion times, but J Jenks worries me. I assume she met him when she worked for Volturi.
I think Edward is leaving at night to be with the Occhi so he can see what they're up to. Love this story Limona, thanks for writing.
Author's Response: So glad you think the growing feelings between them are "real"-- that is something I have worked for.
And yes, 8 mos is a long time. And a J. Jenks showed up in one of the earlier flashback scenes.
Reviewer: ingenue77 (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 08:29 PM · On: June 14 - June 20, 2008
omg...I was sooooo happy that you finally posted a new chapter...and you did not disappoint...
Author's Response: thank you!
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