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Reviewer: irishash (Signed) · Date: March 09, 2010 01:53 PM · On: Avoidance and Disappointment
men are just so f-ing clueless sometimes...... great story so far, i can totally picture the guys beefed up in swat t-shirts and its hot as hell.
Reviewer: AlliYoyo (Signed) · Date: March 09, 2010 02:51 AM · On: Outtake: The Third Summer: June 2004
I swear I felt like slapping Edward upside the head half the time when I read this! He was being an idiot! But then, we knew he was at this point in his life. The poor guy still has so many hang-ups about his mother.
Can't wait to read more!
Reviewer: EdwardCullenlovely (Signed) · Date: March 08, 2010 11:05 PM · On: Outtake: The Third Summer: June 2004
AMAZING!!! That was so great, I like their confused angst because it so real for them. Cant wait for the next outtake! :)
Reviewer: branlc (Signed) · Date: March 08, 2010 08:21 PM · On: Outtake: The Third Summer: June 2004
That one didn't hurt as bad. :)
Reviewer: LilCullen454 (Signed) · Date: March 08, 2010 11:32 AM · On: Outtake: The Third Summer: June 2004
These are painful, however knowing the whole story and knowing that they are together forever is helpful!
Keep them coming!
Reviewer: twimomof4girls (Signed) · Date: March 08, 2010 11:10 AM · On: Outtake: The Third Summer: June 2004
Great chapter! I love, love, love the Ataris - so glad you put them in here! The Don Henley version was good, but the Ataris rocked it hard.
Reviewer: Bella Quinn (Signed) · Date: March 08, 2010 09:44 AM · On: Outtake: The Second Summer, June 2003
The flash backs are so worth it! I love reading them.
Reviewer: Sapphireeyes16 (Signed) · Date: March 08, 2010 08:28 AM · On: Enjoying the Dreams and Facing the Nightmares
" the slight contusion causing copious amounts of blood to stain his shirt and mat his hair."
I know you're not a medical expert, but you do have medical people beta-ing this for you. for the most part, you have taken some liberties, but they've been relevant to the story. this is minor, but it shows a lack of attention to medicine. a contusion is basically a bad bruise--it is a closed injury. it wouldn't be bleeding.
Reviewer: My Friend Alice (Signed) · Date: March 07, 2010 07:32 PM · On: Pressure
I was so obsessed with this story when I first started reading it that I had to step away for a little while. I am back and ready to finish the last few chapters. Great story!
Reviewer: Sapphireeyes16 (Signed) · Date: March 06, 2010 10:07 AM · On: The Day From Hell
hmmm... my nursey mind is thinking Ethan is being abused.
Reviewer: weezieh42 (Signed) · Date: March 05, 2010 08:46 PM · On: Outtake: The Second Summer, June 2003
awww snotty little Heidi. Just got done reading this whole story. Took me about a week but I absolutely loved it. I loved the Bella and Emmett story very much and how you potrayed them. as Brother and Sister. Also really did like this Bella and Edward. Thank you for a great great story
Author's Response: Thank you. We still have nine outtakes to go before they are all up here...so keep your eyes peeled :) Thanks for the review
Reviewer: Genevieve Blanc (Signed) · Date: March 05, 2010 08:45 AM · On: Outtake: The Second Summer, June 2003
Arg! It's very hard to sit by and watch that happen to anyone. I remember my teenage years unfortunatley. Seems I like them together more LOL. Great insight though.
Reviewer: Genevieve Blanc (Signed) · Date: March 05, 2010 06:52 AM · On: Outtake: The First Summer, June 2002
this was very enlighteneing. nice to see the spark from the begining. I loved it, brought me back to the begining.
Reviewer: monica1981 (Signed) · Date: March 04, 2010 07:02 PM · On: Outtake: The Second Summer, June 2003
No wonder Heidi had an issue with her. Even though they were both being emo, I enjoyed it.
Reviewer: branlc (Signed) · Date: March 04, 2010 06:19 PM · On: Outtake: The Second Summer, June 2003
I made through! :) I just kept telling myself they end up together. Yep both were pretty stupid.
Reviewer: piperann_25 (Signed) · Date: March 04, 2010 07:34 AM · On: Outtake: The Second Summer, June 2003
I say yes I say dorks, but to look at it bella is under 18 and edward is 21 so I say good for him in trying to act like the adult. Love these outtakes but I love the story.
Reviewer: LisaF29 (Signed) · Date: March 04, 2010 06:50 AM · On: Outtake: The Second Summer, June 2003
Great chapter! Well, we all know it's not all going to be sunshine and roses. We know they don't get together for a while, and that they both admitted to having these feelings for a long time. It's hard to read because you just want to shake them both, but at the same time, it's nice getting to see what was going through their heads back then. Can't wait for more!!
Reviewer: AlliYoyo (Signed) · Date: March 04, 2010 02:08 AM · On: Outtake: The Second Summer, June 2003
Hmm, you mean there was another reason for her griping?
Yes, Edward and Bella were both morons in this chapter/outtake. But then again, it's understandable given their mindset at that point in time. After all, we all know the general story.
Can't wait to read more outtakes!
Reviewer: EdwardCullenlovely (Signed) · Date: March 03, 2010 11:34 PM · On: Outtake: The Second Summer, June 2003
Amazing!! It sucks how both of them were feeling so bad, but its so real. Loved it!!
Reviewer: goddessofbirth (Signed) · Date: March 03, 2010 10:14 PM · On: Outtake: The Second Summer, June 2003
I'm all good with a little angst as long as I know the ending;)
Reviewer: goddessofbirth (Signed) · Date: March 03, 2010 10:11 PM · On: Outtake: The Second Summer, June 2003
I'm all good with a little angst as long as I know the ending;)
Reviewer: kas90 (Signed) · Date: March 03, 2010 05:25 AM · On: New Heat and Old Flames
loved this chapter :) i love how their relationship is progressing
Reviewer: JuDo (Signed) · Date: March 02, 2010 10:19 PM · On: Epilogue: Fifteen Years Later
So, I just read the whole story and I gotta say I LOVED IT! You did a wonderful job and I really enjoyed reading the story. I'm looking forward to reading more of your stuff...
JuDo
Reviewer: Bella Quinn (Signed) · Date: March 02, 2010 11:02 AM · On: Outtake: The First Summer, June 2002
Awe! I loved it. It was different to see another side to both of them.
Reviewer: dinkadot (Signed) · Date: March 01, 2010 11:40 PM · On: Outtake: The First Summer, June 2002
AWWW I loved this, I really hope that you continue to write these. I also hope that you will start another story going into great detail as u did with FDKK, that story was amazing, having me feeling every gamet of emotion that there was to feel while reading it. I will be looking for more.
Brandi
Author's Response: I actually have a large collection of stories, but just not on Twilighted due to the lengthy validation process and the fact that you can only have one chapter in queue at a time. If you'd don't mind going elsewhere, you can find most of them at http://twcslibrary.com/viewuser.php?uid=1534 This is a direct link to my author's page, which has almost all of my works with the exception of my first two which are still only on fanfiction.net. At any rate, I'd love it if you dropped in and checked them out.
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