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Reviewer: lskmom (Signed) · Date: August 15, 2009 12:27 PM · On: Chapter 64
Oh ack...I am so rivited to this story right now (OK, so I am not sure how to spell that word and too lazy to check but well, you will get the point). Gosh, I hope someone especially Edward remembers about her spinal issue soon and tries whatever his plan is to fix her up there...it is worrying me that they are changing her without addressing that issue.
I can not wait to see what happens next! MORE SOON please!
Reviewer: Capricorn75 (Signed) · Date: August 15, 2009 12:02 PM · On: Chapter 64
Oh my gosh, am I really getting my wish? Are they really changing her??!!!?! Why didn't Rose warn Charlie that Bella may be already dead or have to change her? I thought Rose was supposed to warn him? Can Jake run around the area so that his wolf scent covers Bella's scent?
I can't believe it's really happening!!!
Author's Response: Esme is supposed to warn him. :-) And she will.
Reviewer: Dragon81 (Signed) · Date: August 15, 2009 12:01 PM · On: Chapter 64
Thank you for posting this chapter so quickly after the end of the last one. You are totally awesome! Thank goodness they were able to save her, or at least I'm hopeing that the Change will take effect, it may be too much to ask that Bella be able to walk again but I'd love to see it, I totally understand if you don't decide to go that way though.
Looking forward to more.
Reviewer: Dragon81 (Signed) · Date: August 15, 2009 11:59 AM · On: Chapter 63
Oh wow, I never would have thought that when they saw Bella dead it would be through her own actions, I thought for sure that Brady would beat her to death or something like that. I hope the Cullens are able to find her and change her in time.
Looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Ha, yes. I wanted it to be BELLA who (accidentally) killed herself, although certainly it's Brady's fault for putting her in that position.
Reviewer: JRbtsn (Signed) · Date: August 15, 2009 11:32 AM · On: Chapter 64
You draw the reader in and they get totally lost in the story. I hate when I get to the end of each chapter and have to wait. Not complaining though!! Sunday is only tomorrow. ; ) I'm glad Jacob realized how much Bella wanted to be with Edward and that it wasn't Edward's decision. Poor Rose... all of that time and never drinking and then when she has to do it, it's Bella and the taste is too much to ignore. Good thing Emmett was there to pull her off and back to her senses. Great chapter, as they all are.
Joan
Reviewer: JRbtsn (Signed) · Date: August 15, 2009 10:40 AM · On: Chapter 63
Wow, that was excrutiating! I was offline for a couple of days so it's like Christmas with the story updates! Thank you!! Now, on to 64!
Reviewer: jordynnem (Signed) · Date: August 15, 2009 10:34 AM · On: Chapter 64
Wow - you are an amazing writer with the ability to make the reader feel as though they are write there with the characters. Emotionally jarring!!
Reviewer: twilightfan1969 (Signed) · Date: August 15, 2009 10:07 AM · On: Chapter 64
Wow! that was intense!
Reviewer: hermeyb (Signed) · Date: August 15, 2009 09:37 AM · On: Chapter 48
so so so hot .. . and sweet at the same time
Reviewer: princesspeach (Signed) · Date: August 15, 2009 09:09 AM · On: Chapter 1
All I keep thinking is that I hope Bella will be able to walk -- and the police will find that monster Brady Jones and put him away for good -- and the Volturi will stay the hell in Italy!
Reviewer: ashleyr2305 (Signed) · Date: August 15, 2009 08:48 AM · On: Chapter 64
Great addition! I even liked your allusion to Weltschmerz, well-played!
Hang in there, Bella!
Reviewer: earelen (Signed) · Date: August 15, 2009 08:30 AM · On: Chapter 64
Thank you so much for posting these two parts quickly. Poor Bella. I'm so glad that she got herself out, although I am very sad that she was so badly wounded. Just a side note, when I've seen a patient intubated, the CRNA goes through the mouth, not the nose. I am so glad that the Cullens were in time to change Bella--I just hope that it works and that she is able to walk. I can't wait to see what happens next. Thanks for another fantastic chapter!!
Author's Response: Ha, thanks, I'll fix that. Like I said, not a doctor, nor do I play one on TV. :-D
Reviewer: wendeline (Signed) · Date: August 15, 2009 08:08 AM · On: Chapter 64
more please. its so good.
Reviewer: latinabeauty70 (Signed) · Date: August 15, 2009 07:56 AM · On: Chapter 64
What an amazing chapter but you are killing me with the cliffghangers. Amazing writing.
Reviewer: Mom of 2 in WI (Signed) · Date: August 15, 2009 07:07 AM · On: Chapter 64
Wow. Intense cahpter. Question, why do you tell us what is going to happen in the chapter during the author's notes in the beginnning. I'd rather just read and find out. Could maybe you suspend those types of notes? Just my opinion as a reader who likes the suspense.
Author's Response: You mean the warning for gore? I have to put those in, or some readers get very upset. :-) The other is just a chapter summary that a number of readers suggested, so I think it's a matter of reader preferences. Some really like them/want them, some don't.
Reviewer: katydid13 (Signed) · Date: August 15, 2009 06:56 AM · On: Chapter 64
Another wonderfully written chapter!
Reviewer: Gelsamina (Signed) · Date: August 15, 2009 06:34 AM · On: Chapter 64
Wow! I'm glad Jake understands.
I still hope something bad happens to Clayton
Reviewer: jilburfm (Signed) · Date: August 15, 2009 06:32 AM · On: Chapter 64
AHHHHH!!!
You are soooo good at writing actiony, suspenseful scenes. I think that's really rare in fic! My heart is beating faster and I'm inching on the edge of me seat and then it ends. I'm like, "poop".
If it all works - and hopefully it does, at least Charlie & Martha will still get to see her. Eventually.
Normally, the "fake body" stuff doesn't really interest me b/c it's usually glossed over so quickly in fic, but I have a feeling you're going to make it interesting. :-)
Reviewer: twilight_lamb (Signed) · Date: August 15, 2009 06:32 AM · On: Chapter 64
Why did rose change bella, and not edward..I would think edward would do it..... But love the chapter.... How is charlie going to take it...
Author's Response: Edward is too busy breathing for her and watching that. Rose has a medical degree, but she's never practiced, so it's safer to let Carlisle and Edward handle the medical proceedures.
Reviewer: bells123 (Signed) · Date: August 15, 2009 06:29 AM · On: Chapter 64
Wow... what a nail-biter!! Bella's even deader than she was in Breaking Dawn. I love all of your detail - how you explain each step of all that's going on and it makes sense. This fic is the perfect combination of brains and heart.
I've never mentioned this before, but your Emmett is one of my favorite characterizations of him. He was wonderful in this chapter.
Reviewer: crazycoffeemom (Anonymous) · Date: August 15, 2009 06:23 AM · On: Chapter 64
you have to hurry. that was awesome. i cant wait. hurry
Reviewer: Elizabethan (Signed) · Date: August 15, 2009 06:17 AM · On: Chapter 64
You surprised me again. The prevailing sentiment in fanfiction world is to have Edward's venom change her, but you put a twist on it by having Rose do it. I'm trying to follow your thought pattern here - I'm guessing it's because Edward was 1) needed to help as a doctor, and 2) wouldn't have been able to stop; and also a strong woman theme in this story, so have Bella turned by Rose, whom she is quite close to. Also I was surprised that Carlisle brought blood - you've been holding out of us with that bit of information.
I actually expected Edward to be more panicked than he was, although he was quite anguished. Carlisle kept him under control by reminding him of his medical training. Powerful imagery of Emmett sobbing and patting Jake's fur.
Yes, the explanations should be interesting, and now I am trying to guess where they will take Bella while she changes. I wondered if the fact that Edward used the name "Masen" and ID badge photos are so horrible anyway, that it might not hit the radar of the Volturi right away. This Edward has never been to Volterra (as far as we know) and that could work in his favor. But based on your clues, I know they will make an appearance at some point.
Great chapter, and anxious for the next one!
Author's Response: The Volturri WILL make an appearance, yes. And as you suspected, Carlisle did push Edward past his panic/grief by throwing him into ER mode. It helps him stay on autopilot and not freak out. And yes, Alice has been telling all of them slightly different things.
Reviewer: jilburfm (Signed) · Date: August 15, 2009 06:15 AM · On: Chapter 63
GAH!!! Thank gd the next chapter is ready!!!
Blood out of her mouth? Yeah, she's not going to last long.
Reviewer: krisandrob (Signed) · Date: August 15, 2009 06:05 AM · On: Chapter 64
Well hopefully the change will heal everything even her spinal injury!
Reviewer: JAustenlover (Signed) · Date: August 15, 2009 06:04 AM · On: Chapter 64
Well, typing through tears again. I started sobbing when Alice told Rose what she would need to be prepared for. The pace of this chapter sprirals out of control. Until they find her.
The vultures told the story. I have this image of Edward in the field. Desolate. Desperate. Ready to rip Bella's abductor limb from limb. Cooler logic prevails. I knew Carlisle would play a role in this when he accompanied them.
Thanks for leaving us in a better place. She will be 'reborn.' Were they in time? Did the lack of oxygen damage her brain functions? Perhaps the biggest outstanding question that has been on the tip of our tongues for so so long...will she wake with a spine that has regenerated itself and repaired the prior 'healed' break?
I was thrilled to read your your A/N. Thank you for keeping this pace on updates.
And thank you for the incredible story. I have loved it from the beginning.
*air kisses*
JA
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