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Reviewer: surpriseending (Signed) · Date: July 11, 2009 03:44 AM · On: Chapter 48
Great story! More!
Author's Response: Thanks!
Reviewer: alaskangirl (Signed) · Date: July 06, 2009 11:01 PM · On: Chapter 48
ahhhh beautifully done. i cant wait to read the next chapter...loving this so.
Author's Response: Thank you!!! I'm glad you're enjoying it and there should be more soon.
Reviewer: twilightdiheart (Signed) · Date: July 06, 2009 07:25 PM · On: Chapter 3
What the...
Author's Response: Not really sure what that means ... er, keep reading? :-) Chapter 4 will make it a bit clearer.
Reviewer: The Old One (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2009 08:25 PM · On: Chapter 48
Hallelujah!
Author's Response: Hee!
Reviewer: none (Signed) · Date: July 03, 2009 07:00 PM · On: Chapter 48
Edward finally lost his V-card ... and it was sweet for her ad explosive for him, a 109 yera old 17 yr old. Very good lemon meringue pie! Congrats on nom. Jeanna M.
Author's Response: Thank you!
Reviewer: caperves1979 (Signed) · Date: July 02, 2009 12:19 PM · On: Chapter 48
This was a great chapter. Thank you.
my favorite line - "I'm better than a vibrator"
Author's Response: Thanks!!
Reviewer: barbarito (Signed) · Date: July 01, 2009 08:37 PM · On: Chapter 44
Your writing is amazing and that chapter was so beautifully done! LOVED it
Author's Response: Thank you!
Reviewer: RowanMoon (Signed) · Date: July 01, 2009 04:43 PM · On: Chapter 48
The imagery in this chapter is amazing.
"The scent of blood and lust curls around him like smoke" I adore the Fire imagery, you temper his burning need for her,whether it be to love her or keep from killing her, with the opposite elements of water and air. Water for describing her orgasm and pleasure that he is so proud and longing to finally give her. Air to clear his bloodlust and keep her safe.
The reference in her body performing for him like music was very nicely done;
"He holds his breath and watches her reach, reach, reach, reach . . . swelling like an orchestra on the edge of fortissimo."
I loved this chapter Katie. So. Worth. The. Wait.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm really glad that the imagery worked. Especially the music reference. It just seemed very ... Edward!
Reviewer: PerfectMeadow (Signed) · Date: July 01, 2009 07:49 AM · On: Chapter 48
Whoa. Did Edward just lose his v-card in probably the hottest scene ever??
Why yes, yes he did. I'm blushing over here.
The banter between the boys was so on point exactly what you would expect between brothers, "you're a loser for not doing it sooner but come to us if you need any help." Gah, so great.
Also, Esme melting into a big ball of mush once she knew that Bella was going to stick by Edward and being able to let her guard down and just enjoy her family. *tear*
I'm a little surprised that Jasper still wrestles with the biting? Did he have a problem when he took her to the airport? Maybe I need to go back and reread that chapter.
Anyway back to the important stuff: I love that parts of Edward's narrative during the lemons is so clinical, I'm glad he doesn't fall into some harlequin romance dialogue with himself because it just wouldn't be *this* Edward. It's hard to stay in character during scenes like that and I've been snapped out of a reading when an innocent virginal Bella suddenly sounds like a porn star. Just doesn't make sense, so yay! for having a definite hold on your characters.
A+
Author's Response: Thank you! And I really, really wanted Edward's language to reflect EDWARD, not just some random guy.
On Jasper ... the issue wasn't so much being around Bella, but leaning down to give her a hug that put his face close to her neck. He's find being around her, but he tends to keep a few feet of distance -- normal "personal space" distance.
And yes, on Esme. She seemed to accept Bella early on very readily because she made Edward happy, so I think her rejection of Edward (making him unhappy) would land her on Esme's bad list. Once she let Edward in -- and made him happy again -- Esme would warm right back up to her. It was always about Edward, not Bella. :-)
Reviewer: Mom of 2 in WI (Signed) · Date: June 30, 2009 01:34 PM · On: Chapter 48
Wow! Lemony fresh! Hot chapter and long time in "coming". Sorry, couldn't help it. Go Edward! Bout time he got some lovin'!
Author's Response: LOL! I love puns. :-D
Reviewer: JRbtsn (Signed) · Date: June 29, 2009 05:24 PM · On: Chapter 48
Wow, that was great! Thanks! I think I'll go have a cigarette. Oh, that's right... I don't smoke. LOL Very VERY nice!
Joan
Um this deserves a 10+++++
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so glad you've enjoyed it! And yeah, I'm afraid now you have to wait, but at least you got to read a big chunk at once! It's about 3/4s finished.
Reviewer: JRbtsn (Signed) · Date: June 29, 2009 04:35 PM · On: Chapter 47
I can't imagine anyone being that picky about what you add to your story. It IS your story and your characters don't have to be exactly like that in the movie or the book. Obviously, they aren't so... I wanted to tell you that I am thoroughly enjoying it and I want to spit nails that I only have one more chapter before I have to wait for more. *pouts big time*
Thanks,
Joan
Reviewer: divagils (Signed) · Date: June 29, 2009 03:58 PM · On: Chapter 48
YAY! They finally take that step to truly being together as man and wife. And how beautifully written it was!
I am so glad that they waited until they were both ready and both 100% sure of their feelings for each other. While their still unsure of some things, their communication has gotten to be excellent. It is so refreshing!
I can't wait to see where else you take us on Edward & Bella's journey!!!
Author's Response: Thank you! And yes, I think they're finally really ready for each other in a way they haven't been before. :-)
Reviewer: JRbtsn (Signed) · Date: June 29, 2009 12:55 PM · On: Chapter 41
I haven't commented after each chapter but I have loved your entire story so far. I like that Rose is more a friend to Bella than what she is in SM's books. Even in BD, you never really saw a kinship between Bella and Rose and she went to Rose to help her with her pregnancy. There should've been more interaction there, in my opinion. Anyway, I'm going to hate to get to the end and wait for more chapters like every one else. : )
Joan
Author's Response: Thanks! And I'm glad you like the Rose-Bella friendship. That's actually be rather *fun* to write.
Reviewer: JRbtsn (Signed) · Date: June 29, 2009 12:03 PM · On: Chapter 40
This was a really nice chapter. Great writing! I love your Edward and Bella just fine. I can't wait to see what's next.
Joan
Author's Response: Thank you!
Reviewer: katstrat (Signed) · Date: June 29, 2009 08:57 AM · On: Chapter 48
I've been reading this story for a few weeks now, but unfortunately I never got to write a review so far. So at first I just have to tell you that I really think you're a brilliant writer...and you've been brave by choosing this subject for your story... Actually I've never read a lovestory that involved people with disabilites before. But you're honestly doing such a great job here! Because the centre of attention is not Bellas handicap, but her feelings as a normal human being and Edwards and her love for each other. So this story really helps to look at people who are disabled from a different perspective... to just see them as equals with equal rights, feelings and needs as everyone else has!
By the way, this chapter was great, tool! ;o) I really liked the way you described their first time... it wasn't too technical, - your description was just realistic and necessary for the plot, but you really captured Edwards and Bellas emotions aswell!
Love your story, please update soon! :-)
Author's Response: Thank you! And yes, I think it can be REALLY tempting to let the disability become the story instead of just part of the person like, say, being born in England but living in the US. That's why I also set the accident in Bella's past. I didn't want her to be facing new restrictions at every turn. This is something she's been living with a while and she's come to terms with it. So it figures into the story (it wouldn't be the same story if she could walk, nor would she be the same person), but it's not THE story, if that makes sense?
Anyway, I hope you continue to enjoy it!
Reviewer: SinAndShame (Signed) · Date: June 29, 2009 08:44 AM · On: Chapter 48
That was so beautiful.
Author's Response: Thank you!
Reviewer: DevineZ (Signed) · Date: June 29, 2009 04:26 AM · On: Chapter 48
whoa.. this chapter.. was... beautiful......
just..
I'm stunned into speechlessness. There are no words.
*I am not worthy* I am not worthy*
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so flattered! I'm glad you liked it!
Reviewer: tina_cullen (Signed) · Date: June 29, 2009 02:54 AM · On: Chapter 48
"He must look ridiculous, his vampire-white ass throwing rainbows and his cock still rigid and sparkling. At least he can breathe, and he drinks down the fresh air holding his wet hand away from him."
I can't get rid of this mental picture and I don't want to.
You know by know that I absolutely love you story and adore the characters. This was all sensual, and didn't feel sexual, but very erotic. I bet that Edward would agree. I'ms o glad that his first time could be like that, he had to wait long enough. I'm even more glad that they were all alone. After what Emmett taunted about their last night, I'm note sure Edward would have gone there, if he knew someone was listening in, even if it was for Bella's benefit.
Author's Response: I'm really glad the emotion came through. That's exactly what I was aiming for, all the technicalities aside. And even though it was dangerous for them to be doing that alone, for the first time, it mattered. Or at least, it mattered that Edward thought they were alone. In my own head, I imagine Alice keeping a close eye on it.
Reviewer: latinabeauty70 (Signed) · Date: June 28, 2009 08:50 PM · On: Chapter 48
Just simply amazing writing!
Author's Response: Thank you!
Reviewer: antipyro (Signed) · Date: June 28, 2009 08:36 PM · On: Chapter 48
Amazing! I'm relieved just to read it...and smiling too....
All that work was definately worth it!
I'm much awaiting the next chapter and hope it doesn't take THAT long, but if it does, I know it'll probably make me scream!
Author's Response: I hope you like it when it does come out. I usually update once a week, or sometimes once in two weeks. With next weekend being the holiday, it may slow me down. :p
Reviewer: TwilightMommy (Anonymous) · Date: June 28, 2009 06:07 PM · On: Chapter 48
YAY!!!!!!!!!!!!! OH MY GOD, JUST....YAY! Awesome. Worth the wait, beautiful, and I loved seeing Edward handle making love for the first time. Some really awesome lines in this chapter:
"...the fact that he is a vampire and she is a paraplegic matters a lot less than the fact he's Edward and she's Bella. It's perfect. Because it's imperfect." - That's lovely!
"She's all around him, embracing him, containing him, and however broken and fragile she might be, in that moment, he feels weak while she's strong." - That is also lovely!
"He must look ridiculous, his vampire-white ass throwing rainbows and his cock still rigid and sparkling." - That is laugh out loud funny. Seriously.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so glad you liked it, and felt that it fit for Edward's first time. I really wanted to keep the emotion, despite the technical aspects of how this could work. :-)
Reviewer: JRbtsn (Signed) · Date: June 28, 2009 04:58 PM · On: Chapter 24
Thanks for the tip on Lush. My daugher lives in Atlanta and took me to Lennox Mall when we visited her! I have to email her to go into Lush and check it out! She's been there for 10 yr now so maybe she knows and is keeping it a big secret. ; ) Love the story. I hope Bella can sift through her feelings and eventually find the spark that was Edward's.
Joan :)
Author's Response: Thank you! And yes, she MUST go to the Lush store and check it out.
Reviewer: chrom (Signed) · Date: June 28, 2009 03:02 PM · On: Chapter 48
so many wonderful things in this chapter :-) but honestly - while writing i have this feeling i keep repeating myself :-) it has to be soo boring reading how much everybody loves this story and the way you lead the characters ;-))))
Yay that Edward finally notices the difference between having an orgasm "inside" and "outside" :P
and of course, my dear - FINALLY we DO KNOW IT SPARKLES!!!!!!!!!!! ;-)
Author's Response: HEEE! Yes, it sparkles. (Well, of course, if the rest of him does. But it's just too funny, you know.)
Reviewer: aciepey (Signed) · Date: June 28, 2009 02:34 PM · On: Chapter 16
I love the reference to"Orion!" It is a song I often think of when I am outside walking my dogs at night. I learned it back in 1983...6th grade music class with Mr. Cox. It was a shitty year for me, but I adored music and band classes...they helped me escape. I'll be sure to check out the link!
Loving the story. It's nice that they're all growing up.
Author's Response: Thank you. My sister taught the song to me. Ha.
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