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Reviewer: gamesmen (Signed) · Date: November 25, 2009 08:18 AM · On: Chapter 10 - Halloween

i liked this chapter a lot. good story. I wonder whats gona happen next. Jacob? Edward? fight? xx 

Reviewer: belward (Signed) · Date: November 16, 2009 10:57 AM · On: Chapter 10 - Halloween

Oh thank god I thought it would never happen! So when is she gonna break up with Jacob he was sweet but now he's starting to sound like a douche.

Reviewer: Burntcore (Signed) · Date: November 15, 2009 02:10 PM · On: Chapter 10 - Halloween

Wow... Bella gave in and didn't think of Jacob at all!  Now I'm all Team Edward but dayum...  Bella's a'cheatin!

Reviewer: venus308 (Signed) · Date: November 14, 2009 02:39 PM · On: Chapter 10 - Halloween

Well its about time things start to heat up. LOL

Reviewer: anabanana219 (Signed) · Date: November 14, 2009 01:15 PM · On: Chapter 10 - Halloween

yaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaay!! :) I LOoooooove that they kissed!! Edward IS quite slick! :) xx

Reviewer: cummingsismyhomeboy (Signed) · Date: November 14, 2009 12:55 PM · On: Chapter 10 - Halloween

Really liking this Edward, though unsure how Bella will feel about herself come morning, hangovers and jacob. of course, she should just break up with him... though how to deal with the bulemia herself, and tell edward?

 

more kissing, with clean hair! and surely edward's campaign to woo her could include more dates and less drunken snogging?

Reviewer: Sunfeathers (Signed) · Date: November 14, 2009 06:53 AM · On: Chapter 10 - Halloween

Well, I want to be very happy this happened - I was missing the E/B interaction - but I'm a little leery at the same time! Edward was high and Bella was drunk (and apparently not concerned at all she's still technically w/Jake lol!) so what will this hookup mean in the morning? And although I do like Edward, and I do think he really likes Bella, I'm still afraid he might be a player (keep thinking about that girl he had in his room). And this Bree - just a friendly neighbor or more?

So I hope he's genuine and I hope Bella makes some moves to end things w/Jake and give Edward a real chance. I liked it that Garrett called Bella "Edward's" - I like to think he's let people know how he feels. :)

Great update, amp23 ~ I'll be looking forward to more! 

Reviewer: fonsy (Signed) · Date: November 13, 2009 09:12 PM · On: Chapter 10 - Halloween

love the interaction between them, i was missing it, bella should call him out about that girl who was with him in his room, the other day thaat his friend thought it was bella, not that he did something wrong, he is single.

Reviewer: youaremyvienna (Signed) · Date: November 13, 2009 08:17 PM · On: Chapter 10 - Halloween

awwwww soooooooooooooo cute!!

Reviewer: Alexis Danaan (Signed) · Date: November 13, 2009 06:27 PM · On: Chapter 10 - Halloween

Uh oh!!! Seems like Bella kinda forgot about Jake! Hahaha sucker! 

Sorry...I'm a Jacob hater. 

Great update!

Reviewer: RoseArcadia (Signed) · Date: November 13, 2009 06:11 PM · On: Chapter 10 - Halloween

Why do I have the feeling that Edward is gonna start ignoring her once he's sober?

Reviewer: BellasMommy (Signed) · Date: November 13, 2009 05:50 PM · On: Chapter 10 - Halloween

okay, so is she still with jake or did i just forget they broke up?

he wasn't mentioned in this chapter and im liking that too much (:

Reviewer: Cindy0510 (Signed) · Date: November 13, 2009 05:15 PM · On: Chapter 10 - Halloween

Wow, now were getting somewhere. Be still my beating heart!

Reviewer: jlugo (Signed) · Date: November 13, 2009 05:05 PM · On: Chapter 10 - Halloween

This kind of sucks for Jacob, but honestly I'm glad Edward and Bella kissed, even if they were completely drunk.

 

P.S. I really like your story

Reviewer: Drea (Signed) · Date: November 02, 2009 04:48 PM · On: Chapter 9 - Slipping and Falling

What is up with Jake leaving her on the floor in the bathroom.  When my roommates boyfriend refused to take care of her myself and my other roommates kindly escorted him out the door.   the vert same thing would have happened to Jake

Reviewer: fonsy (Signed) · Date: November 02, 2009 05:30 AM · On: Chapter 9 - Slipping and Falling

can't wait for next chapter. edward confuses me, i mean, does he want bella for a quick wham bam thank you mam, or friends with benefits, or does he really cares enough to pursue a relationship with her? i don't get mad if he's sleeping with someone else right now, bella has a boyfriend, he does not owe her anything 

Reviewer: youaremyvienna (Signed) · Date: November 02, 2009 05:10 AM · On: Chapter 9 - Slipping and Falling

I knew Bella had an eating disorder.  I really cannot believe Jake just left her on the bathroom floor!  What a jackass!  And who the heck was Edward with?

Reviewer: janna479 (Signed) · Date: November 01, 2009 03:18 PM · On: Chapter 9 - Slipping and Falling

less jake and more edward in the future?

good chapter



Author's Response:

Hee hee.  don't worry.  Edward is back in the next chapter in a big way.

Reviewer: Burntcore (Signed) · Date: November 01, 2009 01:41 PM · On: Chapter 9 - Slipping and Falling

I like the fact that your Bella has an eating disorder.  This is the first fanfic that I've read that has one.  It definitely brings to light some of the issues that young women (and men) have.  Can't wait for the next chapter.

Reviewer: Sunfeathers (Signed) · Date: November 01, 2009 01:30 PM · On: Chapter 9 - Slipping and Falling

Wow, you did post the second half fast! :)

I feel so bad for Bella, for everything she's going through. I am also trying to get a handle on what she's really feeling/wanting re Jake/Edward - it seems right now like she truly does prefer Jake and she's kind of annoyed with Edward. And it seems now like Edward has moved on (with a girl in his room as Josh hinted). And to be honest, not that I blame Jake for being aggravated she got so drunk, but he pissed me off with the way he treated her. I wish she could get some good support and work through things somehow.

Great updates - really can't wait for more. Hope to hear more about what Edward is thinking at some point. :)

Reviewer: Sunfeathers (Signed) · Date: November 01, 2009 07:28 AM · On: Chapter 8 - Running Away

Poor Bella, she's in such a muddle - with Jake, with her food issues, with Edward. I can see that she does not like to be out of control and controlling her diet probably feeds that need. I really wished for some Edward interaction this chapter - was he avoiding her like Bella thought? Did he go back to his playboy ways, forgetting about her? I'd like to think he's trying to give her time and space ... waiting for her to realize she des have feelings for him. Feelings she does not have for Jake. Even better, I'd like to think he was watching her from a distance (I kept thinking he was nearby when she was walking with Drew ...).

Looking forward to next chapter!

Reviewer: Burntcore (Signed) · Date: October 31, 2009 09:29 PM · On: Chapter 8 - Running Away

Interesting turn of events.... what is up with this playboy version of Edward?  Look forward to the next chapter!

Reviewer: mcnavy (Signed) · Date: October 31, 2009 07:09 PM · On: Chapter 8 - Running Away

What's with the eating disorder?

Reviewer: Jynxx (Signed) · Date: October 31, 2009 05:09 PM · On: Chapter 8 - Running Away

I like the story, but not really sure what this chapter is meant to convey.  But, since you said it was only the first part, I'm sure the relevance will be more apparent in the second part.

Reviewer: Cindy0510 (Signed) · Date: October 31, 2009 04:44 PM · On: Chapter 8 - Running Away

I am hooked, thanks for updating.

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