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Reviewer: SueBob (Signed) · Date: October 29, 2009 04:16 AM · On: Chapter 7
I love the flow and cadence of the story. I feel like your words are lulling me into a sense of calm. I am really enjoying the awkwardness of their relationship, the lack of the perfect conversationalists that they seem to be in so many other stories. Beautifully written!
Author's Response: I consider dialogue more difficult to write than anything else (I assume I'm not alone in this). Right now, the difficulty - for me - lies in finding the balance between how people really speak and what's comfortable to read on the page. Thanks for your response!
Reviewer: Capricorn75 (Signed) · Date: October 22, 2009 09:05 AM · On: Chapter 6
That was really hard to read. No one wants to reconcile sweet, wonderful Edward that we fantasize about with the animal who treated someone like the coke-lady.
Reviewer: Capricorn75 (Signed) · Date: October 22, 2009 08:45 AM · On: Chapter 5
I have missed this story. I have had extremely limited access to Twilighted since Oct 1. I managed to get on for a little while today and this is the first story I looked up. Glad to see it's still freaking awesome.
Reviewer: hollygoeslightly (Signed) · Date: October 20, 2009 06:27 PM · On: Chapter 6
just rediscovered this story - it was lying buried in my pile of unread updates for weeks, meanwhile i was frantically searching for this awesome story i'd started forever ago that involved bella hanging out with mike newton in boston. i'm glad edward's in the picture now! :)
Reviewer: insecret (Signed) · Date: October 20, 2009 09:49 AM · On: Chapter 6
i like it. i wanted to write an edward is a coke head story too, it just fits, you know? good writing. excited to see where this can go..
Reviewer: jantanamo (Signed) · Date: October 15, 2009 07:37 PM · On: Chapter 6
These six chapters have been such an enjoyable read. The pacing is perfect - a slow burn that progresses and leaves me wanting more.
You've also done a great job making Bella's and Edward's voices so distinctive. Bella's able to give the story some levity, while Edward reminds us of the realities for a recovering addict. Having the two together makes for a nice balance.
I'm really enjoying the chemistry between the two, especially now that Edward's actually seen Bella and remembers her. I can't wait to see more of their dynamic and how Jasper handles the situation as well.
Thanks for sharing and I'm looking forward to the next update!
Reviewer: SpikeIsHotter (Signed) · Date: October 14, 2009 07:12 PM · On: Chapter 6
This chapter was particularly interesting because we got to see old Edward and new Edward "together," in a sense. As he narrated the encounter with the woman, I was struck by how easy it was for me to forgive him because he is just so damn contrite. It's hard to be mad at a guy who's crying his guts out because he's so sorry. Of course, if that woman had been my sister or cousin, I likely would have felt differently, but still.
Loved the tension in the conversation between E and J. At first, I felt pretty defensive of E after J suggested that Bella would make a good friend. But then I thought about it and realized that I would encourage the same thing. E is definitely not home free and has a long way to go before he can be in a real relationship with anyone. I'm just hoping J eventually warms up to the idea.
Hopin' for more E/B interaction next time!
Reviewer: butterflykisses81 (Signed) · Date: October 14, 2009 12:34 PM · On: Chapter 6
i never really leave reviews but in this case, i feel compelled to do so. in fact, this is the first review i've ever posted and i've read a ton of stories in the fanfiction world.
your story is very intriguing and i am absolutely hooked. i love your characterizations of edward and bella. so heartbreaking and charming at the same time! i cannot wait to see this story how this story progresses. you truly are talented, so keep up the good work!
Reviewer: Elizabeth Masen (Signed) · Date: October 14, 2009 11:18 AM · On: Chapter 6
Sounds like Edward needs a little more of something in his life. I'm concerned that his boredom and lack of fulfillment will lead him back to drugging.
Will he and Bella become friends anytime soon?
--Rondell
Reviewer: AJ04 (Signed) · Date: October 13, 2009 12:49 AM · On: Chapter 6
Hmm seems like Edward has alot of demons to work with... listening to his story was heartbreaking but couldn't help but feel that he is on the road to recovery. That in itself is beautiful to read. Can't wait to read more.
Reviewer: AJ04 (Signed) · Date: October 13, 2009 12:28 AM · On: Chapter 5
So know Bella knows...sure hope Edward doens't clam up and run and hide. It does seem pretty shocking that Jasper would hide such a thing from Bella but listening to his reasoning...well can't blame him. I think it's great that Jasper is Edward's sponsor, it really is a great match. I wonder where you will take this and curiuos for more.
Reviewer: AJ04 (Signed) · Date: October 12, 2009 11:59 PM · On: Chapter 4
Wow Edward really has a fucked up life but it seems like he is slowly trying to come out of it. I find it funny that it took him 3 months to finally wake up and see Bella. Hmmm should be interesting now that is brain is catchin up...
Reviewer: Browns (Signed) · Date: October 12, 2009 07:24 PM · On: Chapter 6
Wow...I have only read one other story on here that is so puzzling and revetting to me. Unfortunately it was removed before it even got halfway.
I love you story. Your ability to show us Edward's struggle to get over his addiction with such detail is fascinating. Each chapter answers a question, still leaving many a mystery, both the old and new.
Can't wait for an update.
Reviewer: Browns (Signed) · Date: October 12, 2009 02:07 PM · On: Chapter 3
Crap is he ever going to notice her?
Reviewer: SkyBel (Signed) · Date: October 12, 2009 01:43 AM · On: Chapter 6
Edward's tale during rehab was heart-wrenching. And he's so sad I just want to give him a cuddle.
Reviewer: SkyBel (Signed) · Date: October 12, 2009 01:09 AM · On: Chapter 5
"Jasper's my sponser."
Wow, I didn't see that coming at all.
Oh, but now you have Edward going all shy and awkward again! No!
Reviewer: SkyBel (Signed) · Date: October 12, 2009 12:32 AM · On: Chapter 4
I can't believe you managed to get me to read all seven of those days - just changing each paragraph enough to keep the interest up. Damn.
I love Edwards first recall of meeting Bella, his experience with his memory and the way you wrote Bella's anger.
Great job.
Reviewer: AJ04 (Signed) · Date: October 11, 2009 11:37 PM · On: Chapter 2
Well Holy Hale and then some...Bella and Seth...an interesting twist
Reviewer: snowgood (Signed) · Date: October 11, 2009 11:13 PM · On: Chapter 6
So, Edward's life seems to have turned into one of dismal monotony, regrets, and limited expectations of anything better turning up. It's a wonder that he is still able to stay sober! I hope that someone can help him feel a lust for life again!
Reviewer: SkyBel (Signed) · Date: October 11, 2009 11:07 PM · On: Chapter 3
Argh, another Bella chapter. I was really hoping for Edward. But enjoyable nevertheless.
Oooo, poor Jas was in an accident and lost his chance at college and his sporting career? Sad.
Reviewer: AJ04 (Signed) · Date: October 11, 2009 11:07 PM · On: Chapter 1
Well just found this story and can't help but be intrigued....
Reviewer: SkyBel (Signed) · Date: October 11, 2009 11:06 PM · On: Chapter 2
I've enjoyed your intro to Bella. And I really love Mike and the friendship as you've portrayed it. I'm a bit disappointed that she has to leave him!
Reviewer: ksgeo (Signed) · Date: October 11, 2009 09:37 PM · On: Chapter 6
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I don’t know how to explain how this story has gripped me. It just seems so raw and real. Yes Edward and Bella are attractive, but they are flawed and interesting and searching…As much as I look forward to their eventual (I hope) falling in love and developing a relationship, it will be that much more appreciated for their having really worked through the issues they will face to make it happen.
You write like someone who has some personal experience with addiction, whether your own or someone close to you. If that is indeed the case I thank you for writing something that may cause you pain. If not, then you deserve an award for researching and capturing the tediousness, the loneliness, the self-loathing, and myriad other emotions of recovery that you convey in this story. In either case, thank you and please continue.
Reviewer: elizabethmn (Signed) · Date: October 11, 2009 07:21 PM · On: Chapter 6
I like this - usually when I read fiction that deals with addiction and sobriety, it reads like a lot of DARE/after-school special crap. This feels honest, and frankly, reminds me of when I got sober myself. Keep it up.
Author's Response: "This feels honest..." That's really the highest compliment I could possibly ask for. Thank you for that.
Reviewer: lal08 (Signed) · Date: October 11, 2009 02:05 PM · On: Chapter 6
Everytime I see an update on this story, I get excited and you never cease to amaze me. I understand the build-up in this chapter, it was very intense. Nevertheless, I was sorry that there was no Bella.
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