very nice.  amazing to see how different edward acts.  i'm happy for him everything won't be so monotone anymore  :)

Delighted to have found your latest chapter...thanks

their so cute together

I LOVED this chapter!! It was filled with one of my favorite things you do so damn well - AWKWARD CONVERSATION!!! It's so well written that I feel like I'm witnessing it in my mind's eye and I feel what Edward's feeling. Several time during their conversation at the dinner, I found myself getting second hand embrassment from their awkward silences, found myself squealing at certain points, feeling relieved when the conversation was flowing. I think everyone has been in Edward's position - unable to stop themselves from saying things they don't exactly want to say. But it's one of those things that you only think about subtley or in passing as you do it - I loved how you made it part of their conversation. You're like Jerry Seinfield or some shit, pointing out the little nuances and idiocynrasies that everyone does but no one really stops to think about. I think that's why I love your writing so much - nothing about it is fairytale-like. It's real and thoughtful and just honest (like another commenter said awhile ago).

My favorite thing about this chapter (besides the awkward comversation) was the part where Bella got pissed at Edward for littering. I LOVED that she got pissed and that she called Edward on it.

Also, I would just like to point out that during the whole time I was reading, my eyes kept glancing at the side bar to see how much I had left. I got sad when I was reaching the end.

As always, thank you for updating! I'm really looking forward to their quasi movie date.

~Jen

Author's Response:

"...nothing about it is fairytale-like."  Thank you. There's nothing wrong with fairytales (I read Twilight, obviously), but that's not what I'm working for here. Glad to know it reads realistic (at least for you).

Writing that dialogue was a bitch and a half, so getting a positive response from people helps. =)

Thank you for your response, as always...

i saw it all...played out in my mind, perfectly...

and it was beautiful...took my breath away...

when i cried with edward during the last chapter, this week i smiled.

its soon turing into my favourite story...


excellent work!

The Edward in this chapter is adorable (I know it's pretty weird to call an ex-drug addict that but that's how I feel, can't help it). I wish though there was some Bella competition between the guys...

Please keep writing - I'm really fascinated by the story, and I want your Edward to find his life back

This story has been on my favorites ever since I first encountered it.  But now the site needs to make a new category:  “Favorite Favorites.”  I’m as addicted to this story as Edward is to smoking.

Edward's confession in the meeting was very touching. He's seeing now what he's done to people and it bothers him, as it should. It shows how much he wants to changes despite how difficult it is, and we know he has some ambition as well since he doesn't want to stay in his job forever.

I liked how Jasper nudged him towards Bella, she's a good friend. Friends are good during recovery, but starting new relationships can be difficult (so I am told).

Again, a great chapter.

Edward is really in a daze. I loved how you portrayed the monotony of his life in this first few chapters (Note: He really needs to smoke less).

I loved Bella's reaction, the absolute disbelief that he could think it was her first day when she has his schedule memorised. I thought it was funny. The last part was very interesting, poor boy's sexualising a stranger because she has soft lips, dark hair and nice eyes. If he doesn't watch out, she'll become his new addiction.

Loved this chapter, especially the end. Bella's inexplicable attraction to Edward-the ways she watches and sniffs him covertly-is just so sweet? I guess. It's amusing to read and I think most people, if not all, can identifiy with her in that moment.

I am intrigued by the tidbit about Jasper, and I am guessing (I might be wrong) that it might have something to do with why they haven't left Port Angeles.

Great stuff. Keep up the great work.

I really enjoyed this last chapter. The much anticipated meet up! The awkwardness was totally endearing and relatable. I can't wait to see where this goes! Post faster.

ok that was sooooo sweet and akward and just perfect!  Amazing chapter!

This was my favorite chapter so far. Thanks for the update!

Author's Response:

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it.