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Reviewer: profmom (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2009 10:23 AM · On: Chapter 7
That was a lovely chapter. Their tension is palpable, but in a good way. When they agreed to a movie, my heard did a flip. Thank you.
Reviewer: ECyesplease (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2009 10:20 AM · On: Chapter 11
I'm just in awe right now. I had 3 texts msgs when I woke up this morning alerting me to your update. I literally wanted to lock myself in the bathroom with my iphone so I could read in peace.
I love how Edward said "I'm kind of in Forks." hahahahah. And Bella didn't believe him. So funny. I really enjoy their convesations, even with the awkward and tense moments. You can just feel the pull between them.
The kissesssssssss and touches. That was the hottest make out scene I've ever read. It was more than just their first kiss. It was practically the first time they've touched. The lingering sweetness and want between them...gah! I can only imagine what was going through Edwards mind. I'm sure he's never experienced anything like that before.
Fantastic chapter, TB! I absolutley loved it. Thank you for the update. :)
xxoo
Annie
Reviewer: Iwant2sparkle (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2009 10:14 AM · On: Chapter 11
Yes. This is what they need. Slow and easy does it. Wonderful chapter. Your words are owning me.
Reviewer: LizzieMac09 (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2009 10:05 AM · On: Chapter 1
This is certainly an excellent first chapter and really makes me want to read more and to find out what put Edward on this path of self-destruction, from which he is now attempting to extricate himself.
Reviewer: Twilight_Girl_Ox (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2009 09:29 AM · On: Chapter 11
YAY!!!!!!!!!! THEY KISSED! THEY FUCKING KISSED!
sorry.. got too happy there. thank you! i loved the chapter.
update soon.
xx
Reviewer: Vega80 (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2009 08:57 AM · On: Chapter 11
Beautiful!! I wondered how their first lemon peel would go and this was just perfect. My favorite thing about it was the things they said to each other - So simple and sweet and innocent! Reminds me of my very first makeout sessin :') I loved how their first physical encounter with each other wasn't over the top (like a lot of other fics tend to do) - it was timid and slow and careful. Just perfect! Well done!
~Jen
Reviewer: mjinaspen (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2009 08:56 AM · On: Chapter 11
Just when i think I might know what will happen, you give me a pleasant surprise. I had a feeling when he called and said he was driving around that he might come to see her, but the way you laid it out wasn't at all contrived. And the kissing/making out was so easy and pretty and sensual. Loved it. Did not expect it, as a matter of fact, I thought, "Man, I'd love them to kiss, but I just don't see how they'll get from brownies to kissing!" But you did it. And it felt right.
I'm wondering how this affects Edward. Is he reveling in the intensity, feeling everything, going through all of the emotions? Or is he feeling impatient and or stifled? This slow, natural progression has to be so hard for him, but it's so good for him, too!
Thanks for writing!
Reviewer: 2angels_mama (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2009 08:49 AM · On: Chapter 1
Wow. I'm speechless, really. Wow.
Reviewer: khytruckle (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2009 08:46 AM · On: Chapter 11
Very nice chapter. I really like the relationship between E&B.
Reviewer: feathers_mmmm (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2009 08:45 AM · On: Chapter 11
there is something about the way you write these two, i cant quite put my finger on it...but i sure would like to
you are capturing perfectly the little excitements and the nervousness you always feel at the beginning of something, and it is making me giggly
i know we are in for it now, i am afeared...
alice
xoxoxoxoxoxo
Reviewer: snowgood (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2009 08:39 AM · On: Chapter 11
Do you know how many crazy women are doing cartwheels in their living rooms now? That was one hell of a first kiss! You nailed all the awkward emotions leading up to it, the sexual tension, the inability to make smooth conversation, the hesitancy to touch each other! Just beautiful!
Reviewer: kim1974a (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2009 08:37 AM · On: Chapter 11
They kissed, they kissed and it was perfect, perfect and beautiful.
Thank you.
Reviewer: charityasmom (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2009 08:29 AM · On: Chapter 11
I love the details in this story. It seems as if I get more from reading about the little touches, and nervous twitches then I do from the dialogue. Thank you for sharing this story it is amazing.
Reviewer: wishfulthinking (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2009 08:24 AM · On: Chapter 11
Amazing. I was so not expecting that to happen!!! And so glad that it did!!!!! You are such a terrific writer - I'm so glad you decided to write this story!
Reviewer: lola_pop (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2009 08:19 AM · On: Chapter 1
Saw this rec'd on the boards and had to check it out. Really amazing first chapter! As someone who went through a long period of hard partying, I felt all of these emotions right along with him. Great job. Looking forward to spending some time with this story.
Reviewer: onoimatwitard2 (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2009 08:19 AM · On: Chapter 11
It absolutely blows me away how sweet this story is, especially in contrast to how raw the first chapter was.
It's feels weird to say, but I'm proud of both of them for just enjoying the kisses, enjoying the moment, not rushing into sex when they're still getting to know each other.
Reviewer: profmom (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2009 08:07 AM · On: Chapter 4
I don't even know how to express how much I loved this chapter. The beginning was powerful and ingenious. The monotony and the sense of emptiness to strong. A part of the process.
Reviewer: profmom (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2009 07:54 AM · On: Chapter 3
Everyone's been talking, and I'm sucked in now. I really like the characterization, the descriptions, the overall voice. I need to tear myself away soon so I may not get caught up today, but I am really enjoying what I'm reading.
Reviewer: songirl (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2009 07:47 AM · On: Chapter 11
Quiet and erotic.
Perfect.
xox
songirl
Reviewer: tarin22 (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2009 07:46 AM · On: Chapter 1
Sweet. I'm really enjoying this story. Thanks for writing!
Reviewer: lady jane (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2009 07:44 AM · On: Chapter 11
AMAZING!!!!!!! thats all I have to say on that!!!!!
Reviewer: shortcake1505 (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2009 07:32 AM · On: Chapter 5
i'm really likin this story!
Reviewer: shortcake1505 (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2009 07:31 AM · On: Chapter 5
i'm really likin this story!
Reviewer: btvsna (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2009 07:25 AM · On: Chapter 11
Guh. That was...damn. They didn't even really do anything (though for them, kissing is a lot), and her I am, panting like an idiot and counting down the hours till my husband gets home. hehe
Reviewer: Twilightedaddict (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2009 07:21 AM · On: Chapter 11
Sigh.
That was delicious. The entire chapter was so sweet and at the same time, absoutely thick with sexual tension. It was such a relief to when he broke that tension. I like that things didn't go too far, that he was so gentle with her. I'm curious now how their relationship will change. Will they talk about? Will they date? Can't wait to see. That was seriously, one of the sweetest kissing scenes I've read.
Can't wait to hear Edward's thoughts. And I wonder what Jasper will think?
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