This is one of the most well written fics I've read in a while.  Good chap.

Hot damn, this is an amazing story. You are a very talented writer. I haven't been captivated like this by a fic in a long time. And, I've never read one on Twilighted. Definitely worth it!!

wow just wow!!!

I love this line: "I love this moment - the moment just before." That moment always gets me, too. I really like the comfortable yet sexy interactions between Bella and Seth.

Argh! Why do we have to be responsible adults!! Cockblocking sucks sometimes. I'm having a great time with the story, though, and I hope to see an update soon :)

Love this Bella. She's smarter, wiser, doesn't seem to be so naive and fall for the BS. I like that. And I like that Mike is her friend.

Well, holy crap! Rocky and Adrian are finally making some progress. It isn't so sad now; it is just plain sweet. Innocently sweet. The fact that he has never had a real relationship or been around girl when he wasn't fucked up or drunk is not lost on me. The booze and dope gave him a blurred sense of reality. Now that he is clean and sober he is really feeling things for the first time, experiencing them for the first time even though he is 27. It fascinates me that he is so tender with her considering the way he treated women before. He is such an endearing soul now.

Hmmm. That's a good hmmm, by the way. It is very sad. I swear I can hear him in my head speaking with a monotone voice. Shy and sad and broken. It is a really refreshing Edward. He is usually a nympho or an asshole in most stories. He is uncomfortably sad in this one. I know I keep using the word "sad" but I'm not in the mood to look in a thesaurus and besides I think sad is what best describes him. I'm off to read the next chapter.

A great chapter! I am happy Edward is so painfully honest with Bella & that she doesn't over react but just accepts. :)

This chapter made me giggle like a silly girl! Words can't describe how much I loved it!

This story is sublime, everything about it is utterly sublime from the small details to the emotional themes to the use of language. With every new chapter, it just gets me how Edward is so surprised every time Bella demonstrates that she cares for him, like he thinks himself so undeserving of the most basic affection. He has so much going on underneath the surface yet these moments of sweetness peek out and it takes your breath away.

I love how Bella and Edward are mostly past the awkwardness and into the quasi-honeymoon stage in which they're merely enjoying their time together. Real life and the real issues will be looming soon enough but right now they're wholly in that sweet spot and it's such a pleasure to read.

 

Thank you for another fabulous chapter, TalulaBlue, and for sharing your unbelievable talent.

I loved this chapter. I love how accurate you write all the feelings. The lust daze, the uncertainty, how saying it without saying it you manage to convey all the emotions of lust. 

The body says one thing, but the mind says another. 

This is clever, you are clever. 

I love the tone and your originality. 

Can't wait to see what happens next. You got me so hooked. 

XOXO, 

SLS

Oh goodness, could these two get any cuter and sweeter!?! I want to marry this story, LOVE LOVE LOOOOVE it! You've written it in such a way that I can actually picture every gesture and look you're describing as I'm reading it.

I love the dialogue the most I think...a lot of time in fanfic, I'll be reading something and think "I don't think anyone would actually say that"...like, written it makes sense, but in a normal conversation, people don't talk like that, know what I mean? In your story, there isn't any of that..it all seems to flow so naturally and it seems "real" so yeah, you totally rock my socks ;) Much love!